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自我1.雙膝跪地 2.匆匆下樓3.屏住呼吸 4.站起身5.瞥了某人一眼 6.相視一笑7.擁抱某人 8.站著/坐著一動(dòng)不動(dòng)fall/sink/droptoone’skneesfalltothegroundonone’skneesrace/rush/teardownthestairsholdone’sbreathrisetoone’sfeetshoot/throw/castaglanceatsbexchangesmileshugsb/givesbahug/throwone’sarmsaroundsb/foldsbinone’sarmsstand/sitstillReview人物的動(dòng)作描寫：1.放聲大哭 2.吃驚地瞪大眼睛3.（嚇得）心提到了嗓子眼4.強(qiáng)忍住淚水burstintotearsbewide-eyedwithshock/withone’seyeswideopeninshockone’sheartisinone’smouth/haveone’sheartinone’smouthhold/fightbackone’stearsReview人物的情緒描寫【拓展】tearsroll/run/stream/flowdownsb’scheeks潸然淚下tearswellupinsb’seyes淚如泉涌sb’sheartis/waspounding.某人的心砰砰直跳。sb’sbrainisblank.

某人的頭腦一片空白。Awaveoffearsweptoverme.一陣恐懼傳遍我的全身。Review人物的情緒描寫Step1readaboutthepassagepart1reading重難點(diǎn)梳理：解決重難點(diǎn)詞匯、句式，真正讀懂文章。Pumpkin(南瓜)carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.WevisitalocalfarmeveryOctober.Inthepumpkinfield,Icompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkin.Mydadhasarulethatwehavetocarryourpumpkinsbackhome,andastheeldestchildIhaveanadvantage—Icarriedan85-pounderbacklastyear.part1reading［輸出詞塊］找出；找到［合成詞］-pounder：重……磅的東西Para1介紹萬圣節(jié)的家庭傳統(tǒng)Thisyear,itwashardtotellwhethermyprizeortheonechosenbymy14-year-oldbrother,Jason,wasthewinner.Unfortunatelyweforgottoweighthembeforetakingouttheirinsides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint.Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmymomfilmingtheannualevent.I’munsurenowwhyIthoughtforcingmyheadinsidethepumpkinwouldsettlethematter,butitseemedtomakeperfectsenseatthetime.part1readingWith

復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)，表示伴隨［動(dòng)作描寫］把頭硬塞進(jìn)南瓜里［輸出詞塊］完全合理Para2講述今年的比賽過程Withthepumpkinrestingonthetable,holeuppermost,Ibentoverandpressedmyheadagainsttheopening.AtfirstIgotjammedjustabovemyeyesandthen,asIwentonwithmytask,unwillingtoquit,mynosebrieflypreventedentry.FinallyImanagedtoputmywholeheadintoit,likeacork(軟木塞)forcedintoabottle.Iwasabletostraightenupwiththehugepumpkinrestingonmyshoulders.part1reading［動(dòng)作描寫］彎下腰［動(dòng)作描寫］把頭靠在洞口［動(dòng)作描寫］卡?。蹌?dòng)作描寫］直起身來Para3講述“我”為了證明自己的南瓜最大，把頭硬塞進(jìn)南瓜的過程Myexcitementwasshort-lived.Thepumpkinwasheavy.“I’mgoingtosetitdown,now,”Isaid,andwithJasonhelpingtosupportitsweight,Ibentbackoverthetabletogiveitsomewheretorest.ItwasonlywhenItriedtoremovemyheadthatIrealizedgettingoutwasgoingtobelessstraightforwardthangettingin.WhenIpulledhard,mynosegotintheway.IgotintoapanicasIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle,butitwasnouse.“Ican’tgetitout!”Ishouted,myvoicesoundingunnaturallyloudintheenclosedspace.part1readingPara4頭被卡住拔不出來［合成詞］adj

短暫的［動(dòng)作描寫］支撐它的重量［動(dòng)作描寫］把頭取出來［動(dòng)作描寫］使勁拔［動(dòng)作描寫］用力地抵?。蹌?dòng)作描寫］把頭轉(zhuǎn)來轉(zhuǎn)去獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)Step2梳理情節(jié)part1reading圈出關(guān)鍵信息找出情節(jié)線索分析人物情感變化把握文章主旨圈出關(guān)鍵信息（5W+1H）where/whenathomeadayinOctoberbeforeHalloweenwhoI,dad,mom,threebrothers(includingJason),sisterwhatMyheadwasstuckinsideapumpkin,andIwastryingtopullitout.why/howWeforgottoweighourpumpkins.Toprovemypumpkinwasbigger,Iforcedmyheadinsideit.Icompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkin...Unfortunatelyweforgottoweighthembeforetakingouttheirinsides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint…Step2梳理情節(jié)Thesearetheclue1我和兄弟姐妹們比賽找最大的南瓜,卻忘了在去瓤前稱重。我想證明自己的南瓜最大。IthoughtforcingmyheadinsidethepumpkinwouldsettlethematterFinallyImanagedtoputmywholeheadintoitStep2梳理情節(jié)Thesearetheclue2我認(rèn)為把頭伸進(jìn)南瓜里能解決問題。經(jīng)過一番努力，我成功把頭塞進(jìn)了南瓜?！癐can’tgetitout!”Step2梳理情節(jié)Thesearetheclue3當(dāng)我想把頭拔出來時(shí)，卻發(fā)現(xiàn)頭卡住了。Thisyear,itwashardtotellwhethermyprizeortheonechosenbymy14-year-oldbrother,Jason,wasthewinner.Unfortunatelyweforgottoweighthembeforetakingouttheirinsides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint.Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmymomfilmingtheannualevent.I’munsurenowwhyIthoughtforcingmyheadinsidethepumpkinwouldsettlethematter,butitseemedtomakeperfectsenseatthetime.Withthepumpkinrestingonthetable,holeuppermost,Ibentoverandpressedmyheadagainsttheopening.AtfirstIgotjammedjustabovemyeyesandthen,asIwentonwithmytask,unwillingtoquit,mynosebrieflypreventedentry.Step2梳理情節(jié)I：competitiveMyexcitementwasshort-lived.Thepumpkinwasheavy.“I’mgoingtosetitdown,now,”Isaid,andwithJasonhelpingtosupportitsweight,Ibentbackoverthetabletogiveitsomewheretorest.ItwasonlywhenItriedtoremovemyheadthatIrealizedgettingoutwasgoingtobelessstraightforwardthangettingin.WhenIpulledhard,mynosegotintheway.IgotintoapanicasIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle,butitwasnouse.“Ican’tgetitout!”Ishouted,myvoicesoundingunnaturallyloudintheenclosedspace.Step2梳理情節(jié)I：excitement→panicPart2

Writingpart1readingPara1：Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.

閱讀續(xù)寫兩段開頭，你能得到什么信息？Para2：ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween.細(xì)讀首句

“我”的內(nèi)心十分焦急、恐慌

家人把“我”頭卡南瓜的過程錄了下來，并傳到了網(wǎng)上構(gòu)思情節(jié)把握續(xù)寫原則：Conflict—Solution（找出問題或沖突，構(gòu)思解決辦法）

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Response（根據(jù)人物言行，推斷其他人的反應(yīng)）Negative

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（結(jié)合情感線索，突出人物的情感變化）Para1：Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.

Para2：ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween.ConflictSolutionWithJasonhelpingtosupportitsweight,Ibentbackoverthetable…（Para4）Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmymomfilmingtheannualevent.（Para2）

“Ican’tgetitout!”Ishouted.（Para4）WhatdidJasondonext?→tokeeptrying？→toaskforhelp？→……Momfilmedmysillybehaviorandposteditonline.HowdidIgetouteventually?→cutthepumpkininhalf構(gòu)思情節(jié)伏筆1：伏筆2：伏筆3：……女孩傷心極了，再也抑制不住悲傷，眼淚順著臉頰流了下來。

Thegirlwassoheartbrokenthatshecouldnolongerholdbackhersorrow,hertearsrunning/streaming/flowingdownhercheeks.參考句式：Hewaslyingonthegrass,hishandscrossedunderhishead.他躺在草地上，雙手交叉枕在頭下。獨(dú)立結(jié)構(gòu)作狀語獨(dú)立結(jié)構(gòu)作狀語so...that寫作素材2.經(jīng)過幾次嘗試，他們終于成功地將南瓜從我的頭上拽下來，露出了我凌亂的頭發(fā)和滿臉的驚恐。Islippedontheglassyfloorandbrokemyarm.句式升級(jí)：現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語Islippedontheglassyfloor,breakingmyarm.【示例】2.經(jīng)過幾次嘗試，他們終于成功地將南瓜從我的頭上拽下來，露出了我凌亂的頭發(fā)和滿臉的驚恐。Afterseveralattempts,theyfinallysucceededinpullingthepumpkinoffmyhead,revealingmymessyhairandhorrifiedexpression.現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語succeedindoingsth成功做某事3.我尷尬地看了他倆一眼，他們對(duì)視了一下，大笑起來。Ishotaglanceatbothofthemembarrassedly,whoexchangedlooksandburstintolaughter.參考句式：非限制性定語從句主旨升華Downdeepinmyheart,itwasthehappiesttimeIhadeverhad.在我內(nèi)心深處，那是我曾有過的最快樂的時(shí)光。Ifeltluckytobeapartofthismischievousyetlovingfamily.我很幸運(yùn)能成為這個(gè)喜歡惡作劇但充滿愛的家庭的一員。Thingswillworkout.船到橋頭自然直。

Lookbeforeyouleap.三思而后行。Liveandlearn./

Afallintothepit,againinyourwit.吃一塹，長(zhǎng)一智。Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.Feelingmorepanic,Iburstintotears.Fortunately,hearingmecrying,Dadrushedtohelpedmelaymyheadonthetab