高中三年級(jí)全學(xué)期英語(yǔ)《讀后續(xù)寫語(yǔ)言1》教學(xué)課件

年級(jí)：高中一年級(jí)學(xué)科：英語(yǔ)課題：讀后續(xù)寫--語(yǔ)言（一）

(2016年10月浙江卷)OneweekendinJuly,

Jane

andherhusband,

Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbya

lake

intheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom.“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”and

walked

away.

Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehad

climbed

toahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落）somewhere

atadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundto

astream.

Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.

Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janehearda

helicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffher

yellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.standardsfullscore25，7levels評(píng)分檔次描

述（22-25分）

①logicplots②detaileddescription,variedsentencepatterns③properconnectionsOnepossibleversion:Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

Jane

hadtostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnight.Shefeltalittlesad,andfearful.Shethoughtabout

Tom.“Hemusthavecalledforthosehelicopters.Maybehewasinoneofthemandwillcomebackagain!Ihavetoguidehimtomorrow.”ShefellasleepanddreamedofseeingTom.Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.

Sheatesomeberriesandthenwalkedalongthe

stream.Shehopedtofindasuitableplacetoguidethehelicopter.Shesawarockinanopenarea

atadistance.Sherushedtotherock,climbedontoitandwaited.

Thehelicopterappearedagain.Itdidn’tmissJaneanditlandedslowly.TomjumpedoffthehelicopterandrantowardsJane.Shecriedloudly.

Howmanyscoreswillyougive?Problems:1.Therearealmostnodetaileddescriptionsofemotion,action,appearance,environment;2.Therearealmostnovariedsentencepatterns;3.Therearealmostnoeffectiveconnectors.LearningobjectivesBytheendofthisperiod,we’llbeableto:1.enrichthedetailsbyaddingdescriptionsofemotion;2.enrichthedetailsoftheface,eyes,head,feetbyaddingdescriptionsofactions.HowmightJanefeelatthebeginning,thebuild-up,theclimaxandtheend?sadfearfulhopelesshopefulexcitedhappyShewassad.Shewasfearful.Shewashopeless....Show,don'ttell.一、情感好詞：喜樂①Thesmileonherfaceshonelikea

diamond.②Asimileofunderstandingflashedacrosshis

face.③Arippleofexcitementranthrough

them.④Laughterlingeredaroundthe

room.⑤Hiseyestwinkledwith

pleasure.⑥Awildjoytookholdof

her.⑦Unforgettablewerehereyesthatshonelikediamonds

andlipsheldinasteady

smile.⑧Iwaswildwith

joy.⑨Iwaspleasedbeyond

description.⑩Sheworeashiningsmileonher

face.?

Hersmilelitupthewholeroom.?

Sheshedtearsofjoy.?

Hereyesweresparklinglikediamonds.?

Shewasoverflowingwithhappiness.?

Herflushedfacewasshiningwithexcitement.?

Joywelledupinsideher.?

Iwasfloatingonair.?

Amusementgleamedinhiseyes.憤怒：①Iwasseizedby

anger.②Hewasfumingwith

rage.③Hisangerboiled

over.④Hecouldhardly/scarcelycontainhis

rage.⑤Hewasbreathingfireand

fury.⑥Hisvoicetrembledwith

anger.⑦Hegavemealookofburning

anger.⑧Heglaredatmewithburning

eyes.⑨Heflaredupatthe

word.⑩Hisfacecloudedwith

anger.悲傷煩惱①Hestoodsilently,tearsrollingdownhis

cheeks.②IfeellikeIamfloatinginanoceanof

sadness.③Herhandswereshaking.Shewasonthevergeof

tears.④Hearingthenews,sodesperatewashethathedrownedsadnessin

wine.⑤Sheburstintotearsandranoutofthe

room.⑥Shesobbed,hidingherfaceinher

hands.⑦Itriedtofightbacktears./Myeyeswerefilledwith

tears.⑧

Afrown（皺眉）now

stood

on

his

face.⑨Theysattherewithglumlooksontheir

faces.⑩Thenewscastacloudofgloomoverhis

face.?

Hebrimmedoverwithsorrowwhen...?

Theywereimmersedinsorrow.?

Thesedayshewasinlowspirits.害怕：①Heturnedtome,withhiseyesfullof

horror.②Fearslowlycreepsupon

her.③Shewasstruckwithhorror

when...④Shewaschokedby

fear.⑤Herfaceturnedpaleandstoodthere

tongue-tied.⑥Afloodoffearwelledupinhim./Fearfloodedover

him.⑦Her

heart

beatso

violently

that

she

feltnearly

suffocated（窒息）.⑧Sheshookallover,feelinglikesittingonpinsand

needles.感動(dòng)：①Toucheddeeply/immensely,

we…②Tearsfillinghereyes,sheofferedherheartfelt

gratitude.③Withtearsstreamingdownherface,

sheburstout...WhatmightJanedoatthebeginning,thebuild-up,theclimaxandtheend?throwbackone'sheadandroarwithlaughter仰起頭大笑bobone'shead點(diǎn)頭thrashone'sheadfromsidetoside頭搖的像撥浪鼓一樣drop/lowerone'sheadinsorrow/inprayer低頭悲傷/祈禱craneone‘sneck伸長(zhǎng)脖子actionsabouttheheadone'sfacepalewithfear/fright臉唰白o(hù)ne'sfacetwistwithanger/pain由于生氣/疼痛臉變形one'sface/voiceharden臉陰沉下來，聲音變得嚴(yán)厲起來pinktingeone'sface臉紅colorrush/flood/risetoone'scheeks臉紅actionsaboutthefacestare/gazeat...blankly/indisbelief/horror/surprise茫然/由于不相信/恐懼/驚訝而盯著glanceat=take/shoot/cast/flash/flickaglanceat撇一眼exchange/tradeaglanceat互相撇一眼dartaterrified/impatientlook/glanceat撇一眼actionsabouttheeyeblowone'snose擰鼻子wipeone'snoseonthesleeve用衣袖擦鼻子wrinkleone'snose(indisbelief/atthesmell)由于厭惡/聞到氣味）皺起鼻子actionsaboutthenosewringone'shands焦慮緊張等絞扭雙手throwupone'shands(inhorror/dismay/disgust)驚恐/沮喪/反感揚(yáng)起雙手hugone'sknees/legs=drawone'sknees/legsintoone'schest因?yàn)楹ε挛鼰o聊等抱住自己的膝蓋/腿flutter/waveone'shands揮舞雙手twine/hookone'sarmsarounone'sneck把手勾住某人脖子one'shandsdigdeepintothepocket把手插進(jìn)褲兜shrugandspreadone'shands聳肩攤手表示不知道actionsaboutthehandhurry/hasten/rush/dash/dart/storm/scoot/sprint/gallopinto/outof快速走scuttle/scurry/skitter小碎步疾走sailpast飄過hurtleto猛沖，飛馳strideacross大踏步走scamper蹦蹦跳跳走lungeat猛撲（尤為襲擊）actionsaboutthefeetbumblealong笨手笨腳跌跌撞撞的走stagger/totter/stumblearound蹣跚搖搖晃晃的走shuffleforward拖著腳步走scuffone'sfeet因疲憊懶散等拖著腳走dragoneselfto費(fèi)力的走creep/crawlalong爬著走tiptoe踮著腳尖走h(yuǎn)obble/limpoutof一瘸一拐的走trudge/plod/trampacross因疲勞負(fù)重吃力的走actionsaboutthefeetBasedonthechangesofdifferentemotions,whatdetailsofthebodycanbeadded?sadfearfulhopelesshopefulexcitedhappydrop/lowerone'sheadinsorrowwipeone'snoseonthesleeveone'sfacepalewithfeargazeat...inhorrorcraneone'sneckthrowone'shandsindismayhugone'skneesflutterone'shandsRewritethepassagewiththechangesofemotionanddetailsofdifferentpartsofthebodyParagraph1:

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

Jane

hadtostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnight.Sheloweredherheadinsorrowandtearsrolleddownonhercheeks.Evensomenoisesmadeherfacepale.

Slowlyfearcreptuponher,andshehuggedherkneesunderatree.Shethoughtabout

Tom.“Hemusthavecalledforthosehelicopters.Maybehewasinoneofthemandwouldcomeback