人教版江西省中考英語(yǔ)專(zhuān)題復(fù)習(xí)之書(shū)面表達(dá)課件

Writing書(shū)面表達(dá)專(zhuān)題復(fù)習(xí)LearningGoals學(xué)習(xí)目標(biāo)1.能理解、分析題目，正確審題并根據(jù)題目要求列出作文提綱。

2.能了解過(guò)程性寫(xiě)作的各個(gè)環(huán)節(jié)及關(guān)注點(diǎn)。5.能描述自己對(duì)未來(lái)的規(guī)劃，了解應(yīng)該怎樣自我提升，為祖國(guó)的發(fā)展貢獻(xiàn)一份力量。3.能辨識(shí)語(yǔ)篇中的銜接手段，并能將合適的銜接詞運(yùn)用在語(yǔ)篇寫(xiě)作中。4.能按照評(píng)價(jià)表，評(píng)價(jià)自己或他人生成的語(yǔ)篇，并說(shuō)明理由。在課件中會(huì)閃出魔法棒，請(qǐng)數(shù)一數(shù)有多少個(gè)？明確書(shū)面表達(dá)要求

新課標(biāo)三級(jí)語(yǔ)言技能對(duì)九年級(jí)學(xué)生寫(xiě)的能力做了以下要求:1.根據(jù)寫(xiě)作要求，收集、準(zhǔn)備素材，獨(dú)立起草、修改和完成語(yǔ)篇；2.為所給圖表或自己創(chuàng)作的圖片寫(xiě)出簡(jiǎn)單的說(shuō)明；3.圍繞相關(guān)主題，用所學(xué)語(yǔ)言，以書(shū)面語(yǔ)篇的形式描述和介紹身邊的人和事物，表達(dá)情感、態(tài)度和觀點(diǎn)；4.在書(shū)面表達(dá)中使用常見(jiàn)的連接詞表示順序和邏輯關(guān)系，連接信息，做到意義連貫;5.在書(shū)面表達(dá)中進(jìn)行適當(dāng)?shù)淖晕倚拚谜Z(yǔ)得當(dāng)，溝通與交流得體、有效。審題布局生成秘訣一

審題（examinethetopic）審人稱(chēng)、審時(shí)態(tài)、審要點(diǎn)2023年江西初中學(xué)業(yè)水平考試英語(yǔ)作文

學(xué)校決定開(kāi)展向航天女英雄王亞平學(xué)習(xí)的英文演講活動(dòng)，請(qǐng)你按下面表格要求寫(xiě)一篇演講稿。先簡(jiǎn)單介紹王亞平的個(gè)人信息，再談?wù)勀銖谋揪硗晷翁羁誃篇中感受到的她的優(yōu)秀品質(zhì)（personality），最后說(shuō)說(shuō)你打算如何向她學(xué)習(xí)。人稱(chēng)時(shí)態(tài)要點(diǎn)sheI一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)一般將來(lái)時(shí)1.介紹王亞平的個(gè)人信息(年齡、出生地、愛(ài)好)；2.描述她的優(yōu)秀品質(zhì)；3.談?wù)撃愕挠?jì)劃。寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)具體內(nèi)容1.Personalinformation●Age:42●Birthplace:asmallvillageinShandongProvince●Hobby:sports2.Personality根據(jù)完形填空B篇概括（不得照搬原文）3.Yourplans①__________②__________

…1.按點(diǎn)分段內(nèi)容包括：1.介紹王亞平的個(gè)人信息；2.描述她的優(yōu)秀品質(zhì)；3.你的打算。Hello,everyone!It’smyhonortointroduceanastronauthero—WangYaping.Thankyou.

Personalinformation第二段：介紹個(gè)人信息Personality第三段：描述優(yōu)秀品質(zhì)Yourplans第四段：

談?wù)撚?jì)劃秘訣二

布局（decidethelayout）Howtointroducepersonalinformation?QuestionsaboutwritingHowtodescribethepersonality?Howtotalkabouttheplan?2.詞-句-段-篇秘訣二

布局Howtowriteagoodcomposition?vocabularysentenceparagraphpassageWangYapingPersonalinformationAgeBirthplaceHobby42bebornininasmallvillageinShandongProvincesports(exercise)artping-pong/basketball...dokungfudrawgobikeridingPersonalityYourplanvocabularysingplaytheguitar/piano...readingdance...豐富性Howtowriteagoodcomposition?vocabularysentence

paragraphpassage語(yǔ)言的豐富性---句式多樣性策略Sheis42.Sheis42yearsold.Sheisa42-year-oldastronaut.Sheisanastronautof42.Sheisattheageof42.sentenceHowtowriteagoodcomposition?vocabularysentence

paragraphpassage豐富性多樣性

WangYapingisa42-year-oldastronaut.HerbirthplaceisinasmallvillageinShandongProvince.Herhobbyisdoingsportssuchasplayingping-pongandgoingbikeriding.第二段：介紹個(gè)人信息introducepersonalinformation連詞成句：主語(yǔ)+謂語(yǔ)+其他(一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)）sentenceHowtointroducepersonalinformation?QuestionsaboutwritingHowtodescribethepersonality?WangYapingisanastronaut.In2013,shebecamethesecondChinesewomantotraveltospace.Sheisalsofamousforaphysicsclasstelevisedformorethan60millionpeople.Wangtrainedveryhardformanyyearstobeanastronaut.Thehardestpartwasdeserttraining.Wearingaspacesuitandcarryingspecialandheavyequipment(裝備),shewalkedseveralkilometersthroughthehotandsandydesert.“Sometimesitwassowindyanddusty(布滿(mǎn)灰塵的),”shesays,“thatwecouldn’tseeeachothereventhoughwewerejustafewmetersaway.”Wanglovesherjob.SherememberswatchingthefirstChineseastronautgointospace.“Iwassoproudandalsoveryexcited.ButwhenIwatchedit,athoughtcameintomymind:Wehavemen

pilotsandwomenpilots,andthenamanastronaut.Whenwilltherebeawomanastronaut?Andtoday,it’smebecomingoneofthefirstfew.”Findoutthepersonalityaccordingtothethingsshedoes.loveherjobovercomethedifficultiesnevergiveupfacetheproblemsbeproudofChinaloveourmotherlandtrainhardconfidentvocabulary2.詞-句-段-篇describethepersonality第三段：描述優(yōu)秀品質(zhì)?連詞成句：主語(yǔ)+謂語(yǔ)+其他(一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)）sentenceWatchyouractions,theybecomeyourhabits;

行為決定習(xí)慣Watchyourhabits,theybecomeyourvalues;

習(xí)慣決定性格Watchyourvalues,theybecomeyourdestiny.

性格決定命運(yùn)

---美國(guó)哲學(xué)家、心理學(xué)家威廉·詹姆士《習(xí)慣論》Howtotalkabouttheplan?1.Whatdoyouwanttodo/bewhenyougrowup?2.Howareyougoingtodothat?Dreams/JobsActionsvocabulary2.詞-句-段-篇Howtotalkabouttheplan?sentence連詞成句：主語(yǔ)+謂語(yǔ)+其他

Iwanttodo...Iplantodo...Iamgoingtodo...Iwilldo...

WangYapingisa42-year-oldastronaut.HerbirthplaceisinasmallvillageinShandongProvince.Herhobbyisdoingsportssuchasplayingping-pongandgoingbikeriding.WangYapingisveryconfident.SheisproudofChinaandlovesourmotherlandverymuch.Shealwaysfacestheproblemsandovercomesthedifficultiesintrainingandnevergivesup.

Inthefuture,IamgoingtobeconfidentandIwanttobeadoctortomakemycontributiontoourcountry.Iwillmakeaweeklyplanandstudyhard.Iwillalsoeathealthilyanddomoreexercise.I’llsticktomydreamandnevergiveup.paragraphWangYapingisa42-year-oldastronautwhoisborninasmallvillageinShandongProvince.Herhobbyisdoingsportssuchasplayingping-pongandgoingbikeriding.Asweallknow,WangYapingisquiteconfident.SheisproudofChinaandlovesourmotherlandverymuch.Toachieveherastronautdream,shealwaysfacestheproblemsandovercomesthedifficultiesintrainingandnevergivesup.Inthefuture,IamgoingtobeconfidentandIwanttobeadoctorlikeZhongNanshantomakemycontributiontoourcountry.Iwillmakeaweeklyplanandstudyhard.Iwillalsoeathealthilyanddomoreexercise.What’smore,nomatterhowharditis,I’llsticktomydreamandnevergiveup.FindoutthedifferencesParagraph1Paragraph2Underline

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paragraphParagraph1Paragraph2WangYapingisa42-year-oldastronaut.HerbirthplaceisinasmallvillageinShandongProvince.WangYapingisveryconfident.WangYapingisa42-year-oldastronautwhoisborninasmallvillageinShandongProvince.Asweallknow,WangYapingisquiteconfident.Shealwaysfacestheproblemsandovercomesthedifficultiesintrainingandnevergivesup.Iwanttobeadoctortomakemycontributiontoourcountry.I’llsticktomydreamandnevergiveup.Toachieveherastronautdream,shealwaysfacestheproblemsandovercomesthedifficultiesintrainingandnevergivesup.IwanttobeadoctorlikeZhongNanshantomakemycontributiontoourcountry.◆adverb◆example◆clause◆conjunction◆…Whichoneisbetter?What’smore,nomatterhowharditis,I’llsticktomydreamandnevergiveup.◆infinitive表順序first,second,then,next,finally

firstly,secondly,thirdly,finally

ontheonehand,ontheotherhand

foronething,foranotherthing表轉(zhuǎn)折but,however,though表列舉forexample,suchas表遞進(jìn)what’smore,besides,notonly..butalso表因果so,therefore,asaresult,thanksto,because表觀點(diǎn)inmyopinion,asfarasIknow表總結(jié)inaword,inshort,inconclusion,allinall常見(jiàn)的連接詞：

練一練：BeautifytheparagraphHowtowriteagoodcomposition?vocabularysentence

paragraphpassage豐富性多樣性連和美WangYapingisa42-year-oldastronautwhoisborninasmallvillageinShandongProvince.Herhobbyisdoingsportssuchasplayingping-pongandgoingbikeriding.Asweallknow,WangYapingisquiteconfident.SheisproudofChinaandlovesourmotherlandverymuch.Toachieveherastronautdream,shealwaysfacestheproblemsandovercomesthedifficultiesintrainingandnevergivesup.Inthefuture,IamgoingtobeconfidentandIwanttobeadoctorlikeZhongNanshantomakemycontributiontoourcountry.Iwillmakeaweeklyplanandstudyhard.Iwillalsoeathealthilyanddomoreexercise.What’smore,nomatterhowharditis,I’llsticktomydreamandnevergiveup.passageHead

BodyTailWangYapingisa42-year-oldastronautwhoisborninasmallvillageinShandongProvince.WangYapingisa42-year-oldastronautwhoisborninasmallvillageinShandongProvince.Herhobbyisdoingsportssuchasplayingping-pongandgoingbikeriding.Asweallknow,WangYapingisquiteconfident.SheisproudofChinaandlovesourmotherlandverymuch.Toachieveherastronautdream,shealwaysfacestheproblemsandovercomesthedifficultiesintrainingandnevergivesup.Inthefuture,IamgoingtobeconfidentandIwanttobeadoctorlikeZhongNanshantomakemycontributiontoourcountry.Iwillmakeaweeklyplanandstudyhard.Iwillalsoeathealthilyanddomoreexercise.What’smore,nomatterhowharditis,I’llsticktomydreamandnevergiveup.AddagoodbeginningandagoodendingtofinishthecompositionpassageBeginningEnding請(qǐng)結(jié)合內(nèi)容主題連線導(dǎo)出句和結(jié)尾句Hello,everyone!It’smyhonortointroduceanastronauthero—WangYaping.IhavelearnedalotfromWangYaping.I’msurethatIwillachievemydreamandbeausefulpersonlikeher.

WangYapingisanexampletousall.IbelieveIcanbringoutthebestinmebylearningfromher.DoyouknowourastronautheroWangYaping?Letmetellyousomethingabouther.Howtowriteagoodcomposition?vocabularysentence

paragraphpassage豐富性多樣性連和美有始終Hello,everyone!It’smyhonortointroduceanastronauthero—WangYaping.WangYapingisa42-year-oldastronautwhoisborninasmallvillageinShandongProvince.Herhobbyisdoingsportssuchasplayingping-pongandgoingbikeriding.Asweallknow,WangYapingisquiteconfident.SheisproudofChinaandlovesourmotherlandverymuch.Toachieveherastronautdream,shealwaysfacestheproblemsandovercomesthedifficultiesintrainingandnevergivesup.Inthefuture,IamgoingtobeconfidentandIwanttobeadoctorlikeZhongNanshantomakemycontributiontoourcountry.Iwillmakeaweeklyplanandstudyhard.Iwillalsoeathealthilyanddomoreexercise.What’smore,nomatterhowharditis,I’llsticktomydreamandnevergiveup.WangYapingisanexampletousall.IbelieveIcanbringoutthebestinmebylearningfromher.Thankyou.秘訣三

生成introducepersonalinformationdescribethepersonality查要點(diǎn)，查語(yǔ)言(拼寫(xiě)，時(shí)態(tài)，語(yǔ)句邏輯)wasborntalkabouttheplan(Generatethepassage)

江西省中考作文評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)第一檔（13-15分）

信息完整，表達(dá)流暢，無(wú)語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤或基本無(wú)語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。第二檔（10-12分）

信息基本完整，表達(dá)較流暢，有少量語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤，但不影響意思表達(dá)。第三檔（7-9分）

能傳達(dá)部分信息，表達(dá)不夠流暢，語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤較多，但句子基本可讀。第四檔（4-6分）

只能傳達(dá)少量信息，表達(dá)不流暢，語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤多，只有少量句子可讀。第五檔（1-3分）

只能傳達(dá)個(gè)別信息，表達(dá)不清楚，只有個(gè)別句子可讀。Pleaseexchangeyourwritingsandmakethembetter.Peer-assessment(同伴互評(píng)）yesno1.結(jié)構(gòu)清晰Didhe/shehaveaclearstructure?2.分段寫(xiě)Didhe/shewrite3or4paragraphs?3.情感豐富Didhe/sheexpressrichfeelings?4.好詞好句Didhe/sheusegoodwordsandsentences?5.行文連貫Didhe/sheuselinkingwords?6.書(shū)寫(xiě)美觀Didhe/shewritebeautifully?7.80詞以上Didhe/shewriteover80words?秘訣一

審題1.審人稱(chēng)

2.審時(shí)態(tài)

3.審要點(diǎn)秘訣二

布局1.按點(diǎn)分段2.詞-句-段-篇秘訣三

生成查要點(diǎn)，查語(yǔ)言(拼寫(xiě)，時(shí)態(tài)，語(yǔ)句邏輯)詞---豐富性句---多樣性段---連和美篇---有始終Summary總結(jié)審認(rèn)真審題，確認(rèn)文體、人稱(chēng)、時(shí)態(tài)和要點(diǎn)。列確認(rèn)文章結(jié)構(gòu)，用簡(jiǎn)單的句子或短語(yǔ)列出文章要點(diǎn)。美適當(dāng)使用一些短語(yǔ)或通過(guò)改變句式來(lái)美化文章。連恰當(dāng)運(yùn)用關(guān)聯(lián)詞語(yǔ)，使其層次清晰，銜接自然。加加首尾，使結(jié)構(gòu)完整。開(kāi)頭結(jié)尾句子要簡(jiǎn)潔。查查拼寫(xiě)、標(biāo)點(diǎn)、語(yǔ)法、邏輯、完整度。Great(20分)Good(10分)Tryharder（5分）Icananalysethetaskandexaminethetopic.Icanwritethepassagewithfoursteps(vocabulary,sentence,paragragh,passage).Icanusethelinkingwordstomakemypassagemorelogical.Icanmakethestructureofmypassagemoreclearbyparagraphingandaddingthebeginningandtheending.Icantalkaboutmyplansforthefutureandknowhowtoimprovemyself.Self-assessment(自評(píng)）Let'sdoit!

2024年11月29日，神州十五號(hào)成功發(fā)射。本次乘組航天員之一的江西籍航天員鄧清明為了實(shí)現(xiàn)他的飛天夢(mèng)，堅(jiān)守了近25年從未放棄。寧可備而無(wú)用，不可用而無(wú)備，9000多個(gè)日夜堅(jiān)持不懈的訓(xùn)練只愿為祖國(guó)的載人航天事業(yè)奮斗終身。假如你是李華，請(qǐng)給凱旋歸來(lái)的鄧清明寫(xiě)一封信，包括以下內(nèi)容：1.談?wù)勀銓?duì)鄧清明的了解；2.說(shuō)說(shuō)你打算如何向他學(xué)習(xí)；3.向他表達(dá)祝福，期待他的凱旋。要求：1.短文應(yīng)包含以上所有寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)，條理清楚，行文連貫，書(shū)寫(xiě)工整，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；2.詞數(shù)：80-120。參考詞匯：ShenzhouXV神州十五號(hào)launch發(fā)射HomeworkDearMr.