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浙江1月：人與自我（與隊友互助完成任務(wù)）浙江6月：人與社會（參加社區(qū)服務(wù)）新高考讀后續(xù)寫語篇類型以記敘文為主，敘議結(jié)合為輔。語篇材料通常具有正能量且通俗易懂，故事線索邏輯性較強(qiáng)。新高考主題均選自人與自我、人與社會、人與自然。內(nèi)容包括個人成長類、逆境脫困類；善舉助人類、社會親情友愛類、人與動物類、趣事回憶類等等。主要考查動作描寫，環(huán)境描寫，語言描寫和情感描寫。讀后續(xù)寫是高中英語一個重要的組成部分,其中情緒描寫是所有描寫手法中占比例最大的一項?？疾橐c與應(yīng)對策略環(huán)境描寫是指對人物所處的具體的社會環(huán)境和自然環(huán)境的描寫。環(huán)境描寫是必不可少的。通過對環(huán)境的描寫，能夠向讀者交代故事的背景，襯托人物，渲染氣氛，從而推動情節(jié)發(fā)展。此外，作者可以通過環(huán)境描寫向讀者間接表達(dá)故事中主人公的內(nèi)心情感變化。?高考英語讀后續(xù)寫是一種綜合性較強(qiáng)的題型，?既考查了考生的語言基礎(chǔ)知識，?又考查了其綜合運用語言的能力、?創(chuàng)造力和想象力。?因此，?考生需要在備考過程中注重多方面能力的提升和訓(xùn)練。?高考英語讀后續(xù)寫作為一種新題型，?其考查特點主要體現(xiàn)在以下幾個方面：?1.綜合語言運用能力：?讀后續(xù)寫要求考生在閱讀理解的基礎(chǔ)上，?將所獲取的信息進(jìn)行整合，?并通過寫作表達(dá)出來。?這既考查了考生的閱讀理解能力，?也考查了其語言表達(dá)能力，?包括詞匯、?語法和句式的運用。?2.創(chuàng)造性與想象力：?讀后續(xù)寫通常提供一篇不完整的故事，?要求考生根據(jù)已有情節(jié)進(jìn)行合理想象，?續(xù)寫故事的高潮或結(jié)局。?這要求考生具備一定的創(chuàng)造性和想象力，?能夠構(gòu)思出既符合邏輯又新穎有趣的故事情節(jié)。?3.邏輯性與連貫性：?續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容需要與原文情境融洽，?保持人物性格、?故事情節(jié)的一致性，?同時上下文之間要銜接自然、?連貫。?這要求考生具備較強(qiáng)的邏輯思維能力，?能夠準(zhǔn)確把握原文的脈絡(luò)和走向。?4.文化意識與價值觀：?讀后續(xù)寫所提供的語篇材料一般是具有正能量且故事性較強(qiáng)的文章，?主題往往涉及人與自我、?人與社會、?人與自然等。?考生在續(xù)寫過程中需要體現(xiàn)積極的世界觀和價值觀取向，?這有助于培養(yǎng)其文化意識和正確的價值取向。?5.評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)與要求：?讀后續(xù)寫的評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)通常從內(nèi)容、?詞匯、?語法和語篇結(jié)構(gòu)三個方面進(jìn)行考慮，?具體包括續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的質(zhì)量、?完整性以及與原文情境的融洽度；?所使用詞匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)的準(zhǔn)確性、?恰當(dāng)性和多樣性；?上下文的銜接和全文的連貫性等。?同時，?還會關(guān)注詞數(shù)、?拼寫和標(biāo)點符號等細(xì)節(jié)問題。??為了做好讀后續(xù)寫題，?考生需要在平時注重積累語料庫，?增強(qiáng)語篇分析能力，?加強(qiáng)思維訓(xùn)練和自主創(chuàng)造能力的培養(yǎng)。?同時，?還需要多讀范文，?積累有效的語言素材，?提升語言表達(dá)的質(zhì)量。讀后續(xù)寫三原則：原文一致原則內(nèi)容要前后銜接，上下連貫，語言表達(dá)風(fēng)格一致。2.曲折性原則故事情節(jié)應(yīng)跌宕起伏，其中人物會遇到困難或問題，但最終能解決。3.正能量原則故事內(nèi)容一定要正能量，弘揚社會主義核心價值觀。如迷路了但最終一定回到了家；失敗了或遇到困難了，但最終一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言歸于好,和睦相處；犯錯了，最后一定會改過自新，重新做人；賊逃了，最后一定是繩之以法等等。?讀后續(xù)寫環(huán)境描寫常用的表達(dá)環(huán)境描寫常見詞匯自然環(huán)境：meadow(草地),forest(森林),mountain(山脈),river(河流),lake(湖泊),ocean(海洋),cliff(懸崖),cave(洞穴),waterfall(瀑布),desert(沙漠),jungle(叢林)天氣：sunny(晴朗的),cloudy(多云的),rainy(下雨的),stormy(暴風(fēng)雨的),windy(有風(fēng)的),snowy(下雪的),foggy(有霧的)時間：dawn(黎明),sunrise(日出),daytime(白天),sunset(日落),dusk(黃昏),night(夜晚)光線：sunlight(陽光),moonlight(月光),shadow(陰影),ray(光線),gleam(閃光),glow(微光),shimmer(閃爍)溫度：warm(溫暖的),hot(熱的),cold(冷的),cool(涼爽的),freezing(冰凍的),chill(寒冷的)氣氛：serene(寧靜的),tranquil(平靜的),peaceful(和平的),calm(安靜的),quiet(安靜的),noisy(嘈雜的),bustling(繁忙的),lively(活潑的),vibrant(充滿生機(jī)的),chaotic(混亂的)話題句式：1.Thewind/breeze,softandsweet,clickedthroughtreebranches.微風(fēng)輕拂，柔和又清新，撥動著樹枝。2.Agustofwindblewandpartedthedroopingbranchesofthewillow.一陣狂風(fēng)吹來，撥開了柳樹低垂的枝條。3.Theleavesrustledinthewind.樹葉在風(fēng)中沙沙作響。4.Asweetandsoftbreezewaftedthroughmyhair.輕柔的和風(fēng)吹過我的頭發(fā)。5.Thewindcriedwildlylikeamonster.狂風(fēng)像野獸般嚎叫。6.Agustofwindshipsthedustalongtheroad.一陣狂風(fēng)吹來，卷起路邊的塵土。7.Theicywindstartedhowling,cuttingmyfacelikeasharpknife.刺骨的寒風(fēng)開始咆哮，像一把鋒利的刀子割在我的臉上。（二）雷雨1.Theraincamepouringdown,andthewindsbeatagainstthehouse.大雨傾盆而至，狂風(fēng)拍打著房屋。2.Thedropsofrainarehuge.Soon,theroadwasfilledwithpuddlesfromtherain.大顆大顆的雨滴落下。很快，路上就滿是水坑。3.Thunderbeginstogrumbleinthedistance.遠(yuǎn)處開始響起轟隆隆的雷聲。4.Theboltoflightningstabsthesky.一道閃電劃過天空。5.Suddenly,anearthshakingclapofthunderroaredfromthestormoutside.突然間，震耳欲聾的雷聲從外面咆哮而來。6.Thelightsflickeredonceanddied,coveringeverythinginablanketofblackness.Thundercontinuedtoshaketheskyandlightningilluminatedthestoreforseconds.燈光閃爍了一下，又消失了，讓一切都被籠罩在黑暗里。雷聲持續(xù)不斷，似乎天空都在顫抖，閃電照亮了商店幾秒鐘。（三）雪花1.Itwasstillcoldandfrigidwiththesnowconstantlyblowingandwhippingontoourfaces.天氣極其寒冷，雪花不停飄落，打在我們的臉上。2.Onesnowyday,thewindsgrewstrongerandthesnowturnedintoablindingsnowstorm.在一個雪天，風(fēng)越來越強(qiáng)，大雪變成了白茫茫一片的暴風(fēng)雪。3.Thefrozensnowcrunchunderourfeet.結(jié)了冰的雪花在我們腳下嘎吱嘎吱響。4.Thefeatherysnowflakesdancedinthenightair,makingabeautifulpicture.鵝毛般的雪花在夜空中飛舞，成了一幅美麗的圖畫。（四）天空1.Theskyisovercast,darkenedwithgloomyclouds.天空烏云密布。2.Theskywasacurdledgrayburdenedwithlumpsofclouds.天空是昏暗的灰色，濃云密布。3.Theskystoodfarandblue.天空蔚藍(lán)高遠(yuǎn)。4.Thecoloroftheskywaschanging,firstlightgray,thendarkgray,andfinallydarkanddense.天空的顏色開始變化，從淺灰色到深灰色，最后一片漆黑。（五）陽光、月光、星光1.Theskywasdottedwithsparklingstars,shininglikediamonds.天空中點綴著璀璨的繁星，像鉆石般閃耀。2.Clustersofstarsdecoratedthevastskylikesparklingjewels.繁星像閃閃發(fā)光的珠寶一樣點綴著廣闊的天空。3.Spectacularpinkshadesmarkedthewesternskyline.Theskydarkenedand,onebyone,thestarsshonewithasoftlight.絢麗的粉紅色的暮色標(biāo)記著西邊的天際線。天空暗下來了，星星一顆接一顆地發(fā)出柔和的光。4.Starswinkedatmeinadarkeningsky.夜空中的星星向我眨眼。5.Thesunwasbeginningtoset,glitteringred.太陽開始西落，閃爍著紅色的斜暉。6.Aglimmeroflightspilledintothecorridor.一絲微光泄入了走廊。（六）水流、河流、海洋1.Thewaterwasdeepblueandsunlightglitteredonitslookingglassclearsurface.溪水湛藍(lán)，陽光在玻璃一樣透明的水面閃閃發(fā)光。2.Thefaintsoundofwaterwastumblingthroughthevalley.潺潺的水聲在山谷里回響。3.Alittlewayoffwasasmallbrook,rushingandsparklingalongbetweengreenbanks.離此不遠(yuǎn)處，有一條小溪，在綠色的河岸間奔騰閃耀。4.Thebeachwasbathedintheamberlikesunshine.沙灘沐浴在琥珀般的陽光中。5.Thegurgleofthestreamsoothedme.汩汩的溪水聲讓我平靜下來。6.Theexpanseofbluewaterstretchedineverydirectiontothehorizon,frothywaveslappingatasandbeach.藍(lán)色的海水向四面八方延伸到地平線，白色泡沫狀的海浪拍打著沙灘。7.Theshipwouldlietheremirroredinaperfectlyunmovingglossysea.船會停靠在那里，映襯在一片波瀾不興的、光彩奪目的海水中。閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。TheicywindhowledacrosstheemptystreetanditwasanunusuallyquietdayintheemergencyroomontheNewYear.Itwasquiet,exceptforthenurseswhowerestandingaroundthenurses'stationplainingabouthavingtoworkovertheNewYear,forpeopleweresupposedtobespendingtimewiththeirfamiliesandexchanginggiftsandwishes.Iwastheguidingnursethatdayandhadjustdonethecleanupinthewaitingroom.Sincetherewerenopatientswaitingtobeseenatthetime,Ireturnedtothenurses'stationforacupofhotcoffeethatsomeonehadbroughtinfortheNewYear.Justthen,acolleaguecamebackandtoldmeIhadfivepatientswaitingtobeevaluated.Iwassurprised,“Five,howdidIgetfive?Iwasjustoutthereandnoonewasinthewaitingroom.”“Well,therearefivesignedin.”SoIwentstraightoutandcalledthefirstname.Fivebodiesshowedupatmyguidingdesk,apaleshortwomanandfoursmallchildreninuntidyclothing.“Areyouallsick?”Iaskedsuspiciously.“Yes,”shesaidweaklyandloweredherhead.“Okay,”Ireplied,unconvinced,“Who'sfirst?”O(jiān)nebyonetheysatdown,andIaskedtheusualbeginningquestions.Whenitcametothedescriptionsoftheirsymptoms,thingsgotalittlevague.Twoofthechildrenhadheadaches,buttheheadachesweren'tacpaniedbythenormalbodylanguageofholdingtheheadortryingtokeepitstill.Twochildrenhadearaches,butonlyonecouldtellmewhichearwasaffected.Themotherplainedofacough,butseemedtoworktoproduceit.Somethingwaswrongwiththepicture.Ourhospitalpolicy,however,wasnottoturnawayanypatient,sowewouldseethem.WhenIexplainedtothemotherthatitmightbealittlewhilebeforeadoctorsawher,becausetherewereseveralmorecriticalpatients,sheresponded,“Takeyourtime.It'swarmhereandthereisanatmosphereoftheNewYearforthattreewiththeNewYeargifts.”注意：續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。Paragraph1:Thensheturnedand,withasmile,settledherkidsinthewaitingroom. Paragraph2:Mycolleagues,plainingaboutworkingovertheNewYear,showedsympathyforthehomelessfamily. [故事梳理]這篇文章是以第一人稱的視角講述新年期間當(dāng)護(hù)士們正在抱怨新年節(jié)日期間仍要上班時，醫(yī)院來了5位病人的故事。一位母親帶著四個孩子在新年之際無家可歸，護(hù)士們都對此深表同情并且想要給他們帶來更多溫暖。WhereWhenWhoWhatWhy[語言分析]通過觀察我們發(fā)現(xiàn)文章的開頭和結(jié)尾處都有環(huán)境描寫。例如：1.TheicywindhowledacrosstheemptystreetanditwasanunusuallyquietdayintheemergencyroomontheNewYear.（Para.1）冰冷的風(fēng)呼嘯著穿過空蕩蕩的街道，新年這天，急診室異常安靜。先觀察這一部分環(huán)境描寫里的形容詞icy、empty、quiet和動詞howl，雖然沒有一個是描寫心理的，但是我們很容易感受到人物此處傷感的情緒，這為后文奠定了感情基調(diào)：正值新年假期卻不能休息，還要繼續(xù)上班，護(hù)士們對此有諸多抱怨。2.Takeyourtime.It'swarmhereandthereisanatmosphereoftheNewYearforthattreewiththeNewYeargifts.（Para.9)慢慢來。這里很暖和，并且還有新年的氣氛，因為那兒有一棵掛滿新年禮物的樹。 這一段環(huán)境描寫出現(xiàn)在那位母親說的話里。句中的形容詞warm和anatmosphereoftheNewYear的意象很容易讓我們感受到人物此時的心理狀態(tài)是幸福、溫暖的。這也和開頭處的環(huán)境描寫形成對比：同樣在醫(yī)院里，要上班的護(hù)士們感受到的是冷風(fēng)呼嘯，而這位無家可歸的母親感受到的卻是幸福、溫暖。一、單句翻譯（情感描寫）1.郁郁蔥蔥的森林一望無際，生機(jī)勃勃。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.一陣輕柔的微風(fēng)吹拂著村民的臉頰，帶來了一個涼爽夜晚的承諾。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.炎熱的太陽炙烤著貧瘠的景象，使空氣顯得濃重而悶熱。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________落日投下了長長的陰影，穿過庭院，形成了一幅光與影的復(fù)雜圖案。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.月光透過茂密的樹冠，給森林地面投下了一種神秘的的光芒。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6.隨著夜幕降臨，整個村莊被一片柔和的紫色所籠罩，增添了神秘的氣氛。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________二、讀后續(xù)寫MyBestTeachingExperienceTylerwasonlyinmyseniorclassforasemester.Hehadbeensuspended(使停學(xué))manytimesinpreviousyearsbecauseofhisangerissues.Whenheenteredmyclass,Ithoughttheworst.Tylersatinthebackrow.EverytimeItalkedtotheclass,Iwouldaskstudentsquestions,callingthembyname.Unfortunately,everytimeIcalledonTyler,hewouldrespondwithajoke.Ifhegotananswerwrong,hewouldbeeangry.Aboutamonthintotheyear,IwasstilltryingtoconnectwithTyler.Icanusuallygetstudentsinvolvedinclassdiscussionsoratleasthavethemsitquietlyandattentively(專心地).Bycontrast,Tylerwasoftenloudandsometimesrude.Hehadbeeninsomuchtroubleovertheyears.Heexpectedhisteacherstoknowabouthispast;abouthowmanytimeshehadbeensenttotheofficeorsuspendedfromschool.Ihadfoundthatthesesortsofreferrals(移交)werenotveryeffectiveandthatstudentswouldreturnfromtheofficebehavingworsethanbefore.Oneday,TylerwastalkingovermewhileIwasteaching.Istoppedmylessonandsaid,“Tyler,whydon’tyoujoininourdiscussioninsteadofhavingoneofyourown?”Withthat,hegotupfromhischair,pusheditoverandyelledsomething.Ican’trememberwhathesaidotherthanthatheincludedsomeimpolitewords.IsentTylerstraighttotheoffice,andhereceivedaweek’ssuspension.Tothispoint,thiswasoneofmyworstteachingexperiences.Tyler’sangerwasalmosttoomuchforme.TheweekTylerwassuspendedfromschoolwasawonderfultime,andwegotalotacplishedasaclass.However,thesuspensionweekwouldsoonetoanend,andIwasfearfulofhisreturn.續(xù)寫要求：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。OnthedayofTyler’sreturn,Istoodatthedoorawaitinghim.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Asparkofsurpriseflashedacrosshisface.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Passage1（20232024高二下·江蘇泰州·階段練習(xí)）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Morethan20hoursearlier,myfriendEmmaandIhadstoodattheentrancetothecave.WelaughedandjokedasIclimbeddownthesteepmouthandshefollowed.Sixofushadgoneonthatcampingtrip,butafterafulldayofexploringcaves,theothershadgonebacktothecampsitetoeat.EmmaandIdecidedtoexploreonemorecave.Themudofthecavefloorwassoftandstickyaswesnakedourwaythroughthetunnel.Theairwasdampandheavy.Asthepassagetwistedthroughtheearth,itbecamesmaller.Then,suddenly,afteratightsqueeze,Icameintoalargerroom.“Onceyoumakeitpastthisnarrowspotyoucanalmoststand,”ItoldEmma,asIstretchedoutmyarmsandlegsandenjoyedthebigspace.“Alright,I’malmostth...”Emma’ssentencewascutshort.Iturnedaround.“Areyoualright?”Iasked.AllIcouldseewasherface,andhereyeswerefulloffear.“Idon’tthinkso,”shesaid.“I’mstuck.”EmmaandItriedeverythingwecouldtofreeher.Butitbecameapparentthatweneededhelp.Itookoutmycellphonetocallmyotherfourfriends,buttherewasnosignal.Icouldn’tgotoseekhelpbecauseEmmawasstuckbetweenmeandthecavemouth.Thatwaswhyweweresorelievedwhenweheardvoicesbehindus.Abeamoflightshotdownthetunnel.“What’sgoingonhere?”rangayoungman’svoice.“Weneedhelp,”Ishouted.“She’sstuck.”“I’vegottwobuddieswithme,”hesaid.“Theycangotofindaparkranger(公園管理員),butI’llstayhereandseeifIcanhelpfromthisside.”注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式作答。Thenextseveralhourswerelongandarduous(艱難的).________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Almostfivehoursafterwehadenteredthecave,therescueteamarrived.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Passage2OnSunday,Nicholas,ateenager,wentskiingwithhisfatheratSugarloafMountaininMaine.TheyhadawonderfuldayanddecidedtodrivehometoMassachusettsafterafinalrun.Theytookachairlifttothetopofthemountain,wheretheysplituptogodownindifferenttrails.Whenthefatherfinishedhisrun,heheadedtotheparkinglottowaitforhisson.However,Nicholasnevershowedup.ItturnedoutthatafiercesnowstormhadsweptintotheareaasNicholaswasonhiswaydown.Unabletoseefar,heaccidentallyturnedoffthepathandventureddownthewestsideofthemountain.Beforeheknewit,Nicholaswaslostandallalone.Hiswaybacktotheskitrailswasblocked.What'sworse,hedidn'thaveanyfoodorwaterwithhim,letalonehiscellphoneorothersupplies.Thesunbegantosinkandhewasgettingcolderbytheminute.Nicholashadnoideawherehewas.Hetriednottopanic.HethoughtaboutBearGrylls'survivalshowManvsWildthatheusedtowatchonTV.Intheshow,Gryllsisabandonedinawildareaandhastohelphimselfout.Itwastimetoputt