高考英語復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫練習(xí)：公交車上的溫情：陌生人的慷慨解囊+課件

高考英語讀后續(xù)寫語篇練習(xí)公交車上的溫情：陌生人的慷慨解囊1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文Wesatonthebuswaitingwhileotherpassengerspiledon.Ablond-hairedgirl,aboutfifteenyearsold,tooktheseatinfrontofus.Thebusdriverfollowedbehindher.Hedemandedherfare(車費(fèi)).“Youshouldpay$40,younglady,”thedriversaid.“Ipaidalready.Yesterday,online.”thegirlsaid.“No,norecordofit,”thebusdriverpointedtothepaperinhishandandwaveditinherface.“See?Nopay.Youpay,oryoumustgetoff,”thebusdriverpointedtotheexitdoor.“ButIdon’thavemoney.AndIpaidalready,”thegirlinsisted.4續(xù)寫原文Thebusdriverpickeduphismobilephoneandmadeacalltofindoutiftherehadbeenanerrorwiththepaperwork.Andafewminuteslater,hecutthecallandsaidtothegirl.“Youhaven’tpaid.Youmustpaynow.”“Butplease,Idon’thaveanymoneyonmenow.ImustgettoLosAngelestoday.Please…”thegirlbegged.Tearsstreameddownherface.JohnandIhadboardedthebusheadingtoLosAngeles.IwasexcitedaboutexperiencingLosAngeles.ButwhileIwassittingtherecomfortablyinmyseat,thinkingaboutmynextadventure,thisgirlwasintears,withamanstandinginfrontofhertodemandmoney.5續(xù)寫原文Iwasn’tsurewhatIshoulddo.Wasshetellingthetruth?Itwouldn’tbethefirsttimethatsomeonehadaskedformoneybytellingasadstorythatturnedoutuntrue.Wasshereallyshortofmoney?Maybethebusdriverwouldshowsomesympathyandallowhertosortthepaymentoutlater?Butno,thebusdrivercontinuedtodemandthatshepay$40orgetoffthebus.Thegirlinsistedthatshedidn’thavemoneyforthefareandhadnooneshecouldcontactforhelp.Itseemedthatthedriverwouldthrowheroffthebus.6段首句Paragraph1:Suddenly,anoldwomanwithgreyhairwalkedupfromthebackofthebus.Paragraph2：Iwastouchedbythekindactdonebytheoldwomanwholookedinneedherself.7Part2題目分析8續(xù)寫原文分析9在一輛前往洛杉磯的公交車上，一位約15歲的金發(fā)女孩上車后，司機(jī)稱她未支付40美元車費(fèi)，要求她當(dāng)場付款，否則就得下車。女孩堅稱自己前一天已在線支付，但司機(jī)表示沒有記錄。司機(jī)打電話核實(shí)后，仍認(rèn)定女孩未付費(fèi)，堅持讓她付款。女孩無奈落淚，稱自己身上沒錢，且無人可求助。“我”和約翰也在這輛車上，“我”對于女孩的遭遇感到糾結(jié)，不確定她是否在說謊，也期待司機(jī)能網(wǎng)開一面，但司機(jī)依舊態(tài)度強(qiáng)硬。此時，故事的發(fā)展陷入僵局，后續(xù)情節(jié)圍繞是否有人會幫助女孩展開。點(diǎn)1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；點(diǎn)2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點(diǎn)3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語；點(diǎn)4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強(qiáng)調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構(gòu)建的重點(diǎn)10續(xù)寫思路分析Para1：Suddenly,anoldwomanwithgreyhairwalkedupfromthebackofthebus.突然，一位頭發(fā)花白的老婦人從公交車的后排走了過來。她步履蹣跚，每一步都走得小心翼翼，但眼神中卻透露出一種堅定。她走到女孩和司機(jī)面前，輕輕拍了拍司機(jī)的肩膀，溫和地說：“小伙子，別為難這孩子了。她看起來不像在說謊，這40美元我替她付了?！彼緳C(jī)有些驚訝地看著老婦人，猶豫了一下說道：“這……不太好吧，這不是您的責(zé)任?！崩蠇D人微笑著搖了搖頭，說：“出門在外，誰還沒個難處呢。這孩子著急去洛杉磯，肯定有要緊的事。我能幫一把是一把?！闭f著，她從自己破舊的錢包里拿出幾張皺巴巴的鈔票，仔細(xì)地數(shù)出40美元，遞給了司機(jī)。女孩看著老婦人，眼中滿是震驚和感激，淚水再次奪眶而出。她哽咽著說：“奶奶，謝謝您，您的恩情我一輩子都不會忘記。”老婦人摸了摸女孩的頭，安慰道：“孩子，別哭了，以后出門在外要多注意。”隨后，老婦人轉(zhuǎn)身準(zhǔn)備回到自己的座位上。11續(xù)寫思路分析Para2：Iwastouchedbythekindactdonebytheoldwomanwholookedinneedherself.我被這位看起來同樣需要幫助的老婦人的善舉深深打動了。她自己的穿著樸素，錢包也破舊不堪，顯然生活并不富裕，但她卻毫不猶豫地伸出援手，幫助了一個素不相識的女孩。我心中涌起一股暖流，也為自己之前的猶豫和懷疑感到羞愧。我看著老婦人緩緩走回座位的背影，心中充滿了敬佩。于是，我起身走到老婦人身邊，輕聲對她說：“奶奶，您真是太善良了。我想替您分擔(dān)一部分車費(fèi)，這是我的一點(diǎn)心意。”說著，我拿出20美元遞給她。老婦人連連擺手拒絕，說：“孩子，不用了，奶奶能幫就幫了，你留著錢自己用。”但我堅持把錢塞到她手里，說：“奶奶，您就收下吧，這也是我對您的一點(diǎn)敬意?！崩蠇D人看著我，眼中滿是感動，最終收下了錢。車上的其他乘客也紛紛向老婦人和我投來了贊許的目光。在這之后，公交車內(nèi)的氣氛變得溫馨起來，大家都被老婦人的善良所感染，彼此之間的交流也多了起來。這次公交車上的經(jīng)歷，讓我深刻地體會到了人間的溫暖和善良的力量。12Part3范文呈現(xiàn)13范文呈現(xiàn)Suddenly,anoldwomanwithgreyhairwalkedupfromthebackofthebus.Shewalkedslowlyandunsteadily,eachstepcarefullytaken,buttherewasadeterminationinhereyes.Shecameuptothegirlandthedriver,gentlypattedthedriverontheshoulder,andsaidsoftly,"Youngman,don'tbesohardonthischild.Shedoesn'tseemtobelying.I'llpaythe$40forher."Thedriverlookedattheoldwomaninsurpriseandhesitatedforamoment,saying,"Well...thisisn'treallyyourresponsibility."Theoldwomanshookherheadwithasmileandsaid,"Whenwe'reoutandabout,everyonehastheirowndifficulties.ThischildisinahurrytogettoLosAngeles.Shemusthavesomethingimportanttodo.IcanhelpifIcan."Withthat,shetookoutseveralcrumpledbanknotesfromherworn-outwallet,carefullycountedout$40,andhandedittothedriver.Thegirllookedattheoldwoman,hereyesfilledwithshockandgratitude,andtearsstreameddownherfaceagain.Shechokedandsaid,"Grandma,thankyousomuch.Iwillneverforgetyourkindness."Theoldwomanstrokedthegirl'sheadandcomfortedher,"Don'tcry,child.Bemorecarefulwhenyou'reoutinthefuture."Then,theoldwomanturnedaroundandpreparedtogobacktoherseat.14范文呈現(xiàn)Iwastouchedbythekindactdonebytheoldwomanwholookedinneedherself.Shewasdressedsimply,andherwalletwasoldandshabby.Itwasclearthatshedidn'thaveawealthylife,butshedidn'thesitatetoreachoutandhelpastranger.Awarmcurrentsurgedinmyheart,andIfeltashamedofmyprevioushesitationandsuspicion.Ilookedattheoldwoman'sbackassheslowlywalkedbacktoherseat,filledwithadmiration.So,Igotupandwalkedtotheoldwoman,sayingsoftlytoher,"Grandma,you'resokind.Iwanttosharepartofthefarewithyou.Thisisalittlesomethingfromme."Withthat,Itookout$20andhandedittoher.Theoldwomanwavedherhandsrepeatedlytorefuse,saying,"Child,noneed.Grandmacanhelpifshecan.Youkeepyourmoneyforyourself."ButIinsistedonstuffingthemoneyintoherhand,saying,"Grandma,pleasetakeit.Thisisalsomyrespectforyou."Theoldwomanlookedatme,hereyesfullofemotion,andfinallyacceptedthemoney.Theotherpassengersonthebusalsocastapprovingglancesattheoldwomanandme.Afterthat,theatmosphereonthebusbecamewarmandfriendly.Everyonewasinfectedbytheoldwoman'skindness,andthecommunicationamongpassengersincreased.Thisexperienceonthebusmademedeeplyrealizethewarmthofhumanityandthepowerofkindness.15升級版范文呈現(xiàn)Suddenly,anoldwomanwithgreyhairwalkedupfromthebackofthebus.Movingwithaslowanddeliberategait,eachstepmeasuredandcautious,sheexudedaquietdeterminationinhereyes.Approachingthegirlandthedriver,shegentlypattedthedriverontheshoulderandspokeinasoft,soothingtone,"Youngman,don'tbetooharshonthischild.Shedoesn'tstrikemeassomeonewho'slying.I'llcoverthe$40fareforher."Thedriver,visiblytakenaback,hesitatedforamomentbeforereplying,"Well...thisreallyisn'tyourburdentobear."Theoldwoman,withawarmsmile,shookherheadandsaid,"Whenwe'reoutintheworld,everyoneencounterstheirfairshareofhardships.ThisgirlisinarushtoreachLosAngeles;shemusthavesomethingimportanttoattendto.IfIcanlendahand,Iwill."Havingsaidthat,sheretrievedseveralcrumpledbanknotesfromhertatteredwallet,meticulouslycountedout$40,andhandeditovertothedriver.Thegirl,hereyeswidewithshockandbrimmingwithgratitude,hadtearsstreamingdownhercheeksoncemore.Chokingbacksobs,shemanagedtosay,"Grandma,thankyousomuch.I'llneverforgetyourkindness."Theoldwomantenderlystrokedthegirl'sheadandcomfortedher,"Don'tcry,child.Bemorecarefulwhenyou'reoutandaboutinthefuture."Subsequently,theoldwomanturnedaroundandmadeherwaybacktoherseat.16升級版范文呈現(xiàn)Iwasdeeplytouchedbythekindactoftheoldwoman,whoherselfseemedtobeinneed.Dressedinsimpleattireandwithaworn-outwallet,itwasevidentthatherlifewasn'toneofabundance.Yet,withoutamoment'shesitation,sheextendedahelpinghandtoacompletestranger.Awaveofwarmthwelledupwithinme,andIfeltapangofshameformyearlierhesitationanddoubt.Gazingattheoldwoman'sretreatingfigureassheslowlymadeherwaybacktoherseat,myheartwasfilledwithadmiration.Irosefrommyseatandapproachedtheoldwoman,speakingsoftly,"Grandma,you'reincrediblykind.I'dliketosharepartofthefarewithyou.Thisisjustasmalltokenofmyappreciation."Withthat,Itookout$20andofferedi