高考英語讀后續(xù)寫語篇練習(xí)：艱難徒步后的堅(jiān)持與收獲+課件

高考英語讀后續(xù)寫語篇練習(xí)：艱難徒步后的堅(jiān)持與收獲1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文Itwasafineday.MyfriendHenryandIsetoffonashorttripwithalocalasourguide.Hesaiditwouldbearathereasytwo-hourhiketoseethePaiutetrout(克拉克大馬哈魚)livinginitsnaturallivingplace.Webelievedwhathehadsaidandstartedoutfollowinghim.Butwelaterfounditwasadifferentstory.Whenwethreearrivedattheplace,HenryandIwerewornout.However,wewerenottootiredtoenjoytheexcitementwhenwesawthecolorfulfishswimmingfreelythere.IstoodbythewaterandHenrytooksomephotosofmewithgreenplantsandbeautifulflowers.Timepassedquickly.Beforeweknewit,itwasgettinglate.Thelocalguidetoldusthatwecouldonlyappreciatethescenery(景色)forabriefwhileandthenwehadtogobacktoourcarbeforedark.Wehadthoughttherestofthehikeshouldberelaxing.Butitwasn'tasitwasthesteepest(最陡峭的)waythatwe’dfacedsofar.4續(xù)寫原文Whenweadvanced,myhugebackpackfeltlikeatonofstone.Bothofmylegswerereallypainfulandtearsranoutofmyeyes.Andtherewasanothermountainaheadofus.Asthesunbegantoset,mylegsgaveoutcompletely.5續(xù)寫原文Paragraph1:Seeingthat,Henryaskedmetotakeonetinystepatatime.Paragraph2:Finally,weclimbedoverthemountain.6段首句本文講述了作者和朋友Henry在當(dāng)?shù)貙?dǎo)游的帶領(lǐng)下進(jìn)行短途徒步去看克拉克大馬哈魚。原本以為輕松的旅程，到達(dá)目的地欣賞完景色后，返程時(shí)卻困難重重。作者背著沉重的背包，雙腿疼痛，在太陽落山時(shí)更是體力不支，雙腿完全走不動(dòng)了，故事在此留下懸念，需要續(xù)寫后續(xù)的發(fā)展。7Part2題目分析8續(xù)寫原文分析9Paragraph1：Seeingthat,Henryaskedmetotakeonetinystepatatime.分析：此段首句表明Henry注意到作者的困境并給出建議。續(xù)寫時(shí)可先描述Henry鼓勵(lì)作者的具體話語，展現(xiàn)他的關(guān)心。接著詳細(xì)描寫作者如何在Henry的鼓勵(lì)下，艱難地邁出每一步，如描寫作者的心理活動(dòng)、身體感受等。還可提及導(dǎo)游的行為，比如導(dǎo)游也在一旁加油打氣或提供一些實(shí)際幫助，豐富情節(jié)內(nèi)容。同時(shí)，通過描寫周圍環(huán)境，如逐漸昏暗的天色、陡峭的山路等，來烘托緊張和艱難的氛圍。點(diǎn)1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；點(diǎn)2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點(diǎn)3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語；點(diǎn)4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強(qiáng)調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構(gòu)建的重點(diǎn)10續(xù)寫思路分析Paragraph2:Finally,weclimbedoverthemountain.分析：此段首句直接表明到達(dá)翻過了山這一結(jié)果。續(xù)寫時(shí)先描述作者站在山頂時(shí)的心情，如成就感、喜悅感等。接著細(xì)致描寫山頂?shù)拿谰?，如落日余暉下的壯麗景色，與前文的艱難形成對(duì)比，突出堅(jiān)持后的收獲。然后講述下山過程，可提及下山相對(duì)輕松一些，以及大家到達(dá)車旁時(shí)的狀態(tài)和感受。最后升華主題，表達(dá)這次經(jīng)歷對(duì)作者的深刻影響，如讓作者懂得了堅(jiān)持和朋友支持的重要性。11續(xù)寫思路分析Seeingthat,Henryaskedmetotakeonetinystepatatime.Hesaid,"Don'tworry.We'llmakeit.Justfocusonmovingonefootinfrontoftheother."Withhiswordsinmind,Itriedmybesttomoveforward.Eachstepwasastruggle,butIdidn'tgiveup.Thelocalguidealsoencouragedme,saying,"You'realmostthere."Henryeventookmybackpacktolightenmyload.IwassotiredthatIcouldhardlybreathe,buttheirsupportgavemethestrengthtokeepgoing.Finally,weclimbedoverthemountain.WhenIreachedthetop,Ifeltagreatsenseofachievement.Ilookedbackatthelonganddifficultpathwehadcomethrough.Thesettingsunpaintedtheskyinbeautifulcolors.Itwasabreathtakingview.Wewalkeddownthemountaineasilyinthegentlelight.Whenwegotbacktothecar,Iwastiredbuthappy.Thisexperiencetaughtmethatwiththehelpoffriends,wecanovercomeanydifficulty.12Part3范文呈現(xiàn)13范文呈現(xiàn)Seeingthat,Henryaskedmetotakeonetinystepatatime."It'sokay.Onestepatatime.We'reinthistogether,"Henryencouragedme.Igrittedmyteethandforcedmytremblinglegstomove.Everystepwaslikesteppingonneedles,butIdidn'twanttogiveup.Theguidewalkedbesideme,offeringhishandwhenIneededsupport.Henry'swordsandtheguide'shelpgavemethecouragetocontinue.Finally,weclimbedoverthemountain.Standingonthetop,Iwasfilledwithpride.Theviewwasamazing.Thesunwassetting,makingthewholeworldlookgolden.Wetookafewminutestoenjoythescenery.Thenwestartedtogodownthemountain.Itwasmucheasiergoingdown.Whenwegottothecar,wewereallexhaustedbutexcited.Thistripmademeunderstandthataslongaswesticktogether,there'snothingwecan'tovercome.14范文呈現(xiàn)Seeingthat,Henryaskedmetotakeonetinystepatatime."Comeon,"hesaid,hisvoicefullofdetermination."Eachsmallstepisprogress.Don'tthinkaboutthedistance,justfocusonthenextstep."Inspiredbyhiswords,Isummonedupmyremainingstrength.Mylegswerelikelead,butIforcedthemtomove.Thelocalguide,sensingmystruggle,cameoverandofferedhisarmforsupport.Henrytookmybackpack,whichfeltlikeahugeburdenliftedoffmyshoulders.AsImovedforward,IkeptrepeatingHenry'swordsinmymind,usingthemasasourceofmotivation.Finally,weclimbedoverthemountain.AsIstoodonthemountaintop,awaveofprideandaccomplishmentwashedoverme.Ilookedbackatthearduousjourneywehadendured,andthesightofthesunsettingoverthehorizonwasnothingshortofspectacular.Theskywasablazewithcolors-oranges,pinks,andpurples-creatingabreathtakingpanorama.Welingeredthereforawhile,soakinginthebeauty.Then,webeganourdescent.Thepathdownwaseasier,andwemadeourwaybacktothecarwithanewfoundsenseofenergy.Thisexperiencetaughtmeaninvaluablelesson:withunwaveringdeterminationandthesupportoffriends,anyobstaclecanbeovercome.15升級(jí)版范文呈現(xiàn)Seeingthat,Henryaskedmetotakeonetinystepatatime."Don'tloseheart,"heurged."Onestepatatime.We'llreachthetoptogether."Hiswordswerelikeabeaconofhopeinmydespair.Itookadeepbreathandtriedtoignorethepaininmylegs.Eachstepwasabattle,butIpersevered.Thelocalguidestayedbymyside,offeringwordsofcomfortandpracticalassistance.Henry,withmybackpackonhisback,encouragedmeeverystepoftheway.AsIstruggledforward,Icouldfeelthewarmthoftheirfriendship,whichgavemethestrengthtokeepgoing.Finally,weclimbedoverthemountain.Standingonthepeak,Iwasoverwhelmedbyasenseofachievement.Thesettingsuncastawarmglowovereverything,turningthelandscapeintoapainting.Theviewwassimplystunning-asightthatmadeallthepainandstruggleworthit.Wespentafewmomentsinsilence,admiringthebeautyaroundus.Then,wemadeourwaydownthemountain.Thedescentwasrelativelysmooth,andsoonwewerebackatthecar.Thisjourneywasnotjustahike;itwasatestamenttothepoweroffriendshipandthestrengthofthehumanspirit.Ittaughtmethataslongaswehavethesupportofothersandthecouragetokeepgoing,wecanovercomeeventhemostdifficultchallenges.16升級(jí)版范文呈現(xiàn)Paragraph1:LilydeterminedlytookontheresponsibilityinMrs.Thompson'sabsence.Earlyinthemorning,asthefirstraysofsunlightpeekedthroughtheclouds,Lilywouldarriveatthegarden.Shewateredtheplantswithsuchprecisionthatnotasingledropwaswasted,usingawateringcanwithalongspouttoreacheverycorner.Whenitcametoweeding,sheemployedasmalltrowel,delicatelylooseningthesoilaroundtheweedsbeforepluckingthemout.Toaddapersonaltouch,Lilycraftedlittlenametagsfortheherbsusingpopsiclesticksandmarkers.Sheputherheartintomakingtheherbaltea,boilingthewaterjustrightandsteepingtheherbsfortheperfectamountoftime.Then,shewouldhurrytoth