北京英語高考情景作文植樹.ppt

,情景作文,假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三一班的學(xué)生李華，為響應(yīng)綠化祖國的號(hào)召，你班四月十二日去郊區(qū)植樹，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序，介紹植樹活動(dòng)的全過程，給某英文雜志的“綠色行動(dòng)”專欄寫一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”為題的英文稿件。 注意：詞數(shù)不少于60 提示詞：郊區(qū) suburbs,情景作文,假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三一班的學(xué)生李華，為響應(yīng)綠化祖國的號(hào)召，你班四月十二日去郊區(qū)植樹，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序，介紹植樹活動(dòng)的全過程，給某英文雜志的“綠色行動(dòng)”專欄寫一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”為題的英文稿件。 注意：詞數(shù)不少于60 提示詞：郊區(qū) suburbs,審中文信息,標(biāo)題,圖的順序不能錯(cuò)！,詞數(shù),提示詞,第一人稱過去時(shí),圖1. 出發(fā) 圖2. 種樹過程 圖3. 安插提示牌 圖4. 照相留念,審圖,四幅圖的先后順序：,圖1內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)及細(xì)節(jié),要點(diǎn),出發(fā),細(xì)節(jié),清晨 騎車出發(fā) 風(fēng)景和心情,Set out,Early in the morning on April 12th； suburbs; by bike；,圖2內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)及細(xì)節(jié),要點(diǎn),種樹,細(xì)節(jié),挖坑 搬樹 種樹 澆水,plant trees,arrive; dig holes; carry trees; water trees;,圖3內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)及細(xì)節(jié),要點(diǎn),安插提示牌,細(xì)節(jié),安插提示牌 愛護(hù)樹木,put up a board,put up a board saying ”please protect trees”,圖4內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)及細(xì)節(jié),要點(diǎn),照相留念,細(xì)節(jié),手里拿著種樹工具 站在小樹林和牌子旁 心情或感受,take photos,take photos; stand in a row with tools in hands; beside the board and trees,閱卷過程中發(fā)現(xiàn)的問題,時(shí)間和地點(diǎn)不清：on April 12th, suburbs,關(guān)鍵詞錯(cuò)誤：dig-dug，board,字?jǐn)?shù)不足60詞-1,無結(jié)尾-1,人稱錯(cuò)-酌情扣分,時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)-降檔,情景作文寫作要求,內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)、上下文的連貫、詞匯和句式的多樣性及語言的準(zhǔn)確性。,考試說明指出：,情景作文評(píng)分原則,先看內(nèi)容定檔,重點(diǎn)參考語言質(zhì)量,注重整體語言運(yùn)用能力,要點(diǎn)齊全，語言好，進(jìn)三檔以上 （12分以上）,缺要點(diǎn)，語言差，四檔或五檔 （11分以下）,情景作文各檔范文,高考范文：April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering them. After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees.,定檔：一檔,Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel its our duty to protect and beautify our environment.,點(diǎn)評(píng),Green Action in Our Class I am Li Hua from Class 1 Senior 3 in HongXing middle school. On April 12th our class organized an activity to plant trees in suburbs to make our country more beautiful. Early in the morning on April 12th, my classmates and I went to the suburbs by bicycle. And there was an awful lot of breath-taking scenery on our way which could be just appreciated in rural areas, green mountains, golden wheat field and so on, which brought us great joys.,覆蓋了所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，有細(xì)節(jié)描述，句式和詞匯較豐富，所寫內(nèi)容連貫，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，體現(xiàn)較強(qiáng)的語言運(yùn)用能力。 17-18分,When we got there, we went into working at once. Some of us dug holes to plant trees and some of us took the little trees to the holes. Whats more, there were also some careful girls watering the trees which were just planted. Thanks to our great efforts, all the trees were soon planted and two of our classmates put up a board reading “l(fā)ove and protect the trees” in front of the little forest made by us. After all the hard work, we also took photos of our whole class with tools in our hand in front of the trees. Exhausted but happy, we had a significant day and I hope our country will be more beautiful because of the decorating of trees!,點(diǎn)評(píng),Im Li Hua a student of Seniro 3 class of Hong Xing Middle School. In order to respond to the appealation of making our courntry greener, our class decided to go to suburbs to plant trees on April, 12th. Early in the morning, we went to the destination by bike. There are many trees and rice by the side of the road. On our way to there, we enjoyed the beautiful view and talked happily. As soon as we got there, we began to work. Some of us dug, some burried, some watered and the rest took the trees to places where need them. After planting trees, we chose an obvious place to make a sign read “ Protect treess” stand to prevent people from cutting trees. At last, we took photes in front of the trees. Almost worn out as we were, we extremely excited, for we did a qualification deed.,基本覆蓋了全部?jī)?nèi)容要點(diǎn)，細(xì)節(jié)描寫不夠充分，基本完成規(guī)定的寫作任務(wù)。存在語法和用詞等錯(cuò)誤。 12 分,點(diǎn)評(píng),Hong Xing middle school had an activity to make the country green than before on April 12nd. Class one greade three students made the action in suburbs. First of all, they met at country road in the morning and went to the suburbs by bike. After the arrived at the suburbs they began to planted the tree and watered the tree. While they finished planting, they made a sign beside the trees. The words in the sign are plase protect the trees. Finally they took some photos and back to the home. What a meaningful day!,要點(diǎn)描述不充分；尤其是第二幅圖沒有展開；所用句式和詞匯有限；有語法等表述錯(cuò)誤，影響對(duì)內(nèi)容的理解。 6分,好句子,When we got there, it was still early. We worked so hard that we finished the work quickly. After finishing planting trees, we put up a board reminding people of protecting the trees. Standing in front of the trees, we took a photo to record this meaningful activity. It was our duty to beautify our nation.,That was what I gain from our activity. The sweat rolled down from our neck, but we were still full of energy. Pleasure can be seen on our faces. We hoped that there will be more and more people to taking part in our action. To draw peoples attention, we also put up a sign which called on people to We did the things as we had planned. Having done all these things, we. Having finished this Green Action, I realized that,Everyone got down to work as soon as we got there. From that day on It was high time we protected our environment.,特別提示,注意： 1、要點(diǎn)（細(xì)節(jié)） 2、時(shí)態(tài)人稱 3、字?jǐn)?shù) 4、結(jié)尾 5、標(biāo)題 6、給分（區(qū)分度） 7、卷面和書寫,寫作評(píng)分要點(diǎn)： 1、定檔是關(guān)鍵 2、語言質(zhì)量是關(guān)鍵 3、關(guān)鍵詞是關(guān)鍵 4、要點(diǎn)齊全是關(guān)鍵,Good sentences,Tough as it was, everyone was devoted to the work and never complained about it. I think those beautiful moments are worth any sacrifice No sooner had we arrived there than everyone started planting trees,With high spirits, we set out on the bike in the early morning. Cycling along the road which was surrounded by green woods and fields, we gradually got close to our destinationWe believed that humans should keep a harmonious relationship with nature. The moment we arrived there, we began our Green Action.,To make this Green Action successful, we had prepared for a long time. On arriving there Looking at the trees I had planted, I felt a surge of satisfaction I had never experienced before. Im sure those beautiful moment