考研1號(hào)考研英語《寫作160篇》讀者寫作練.doc

考研1號(hào)考研英語寫作160篇讀者寫作練習(xí)“成功需要繼續(xù)努力” Everybody loves success. Yet pleasure at your own can vanish if you learn that you have fallen behind others. As is shown in the picture, a man achieved the first lying on the first place stand, recollecting his past success with smile. However, he will lose and feel sad in the near future. We should learn this lesson and avoid repeating his way.With the rapid development of our society, the pace and rhythm of life becomes swifter and swifter. Well, no gain without pain, they say. No matter how high achievements he has once made, will lag behind if he stops his painstaking efforts in the fierce competition word. The achievements once made reflect that one is good in the passing day, while working hard in present-day is the way to success. So the clear message is that we should still make efforts after getting some achievements.Hard work is the ultimate source of success. What is more important is modest and persisting on working hard after high achievement. Only by this way, can we make greater success in years to come.原作點(diǎn)評(píng)Everybody loves success. Yet pleasure at your own can vanish（表意不明）if you learn that you have fallen behind others. As is shown in the picture, a man achieved the first（who won the first prize“得第一”，定語）（加主句謂語動(dòng)詞is）lying on the first place stand（podium“領(lǐng)獎(jiǎng)臺(tái)”）, recollecting his past success with smile. However, he will lose and feel sad in the near future. We should learn this lesson and avoid repeating his way.【一段描述圖畫，為下文展開話題做鋪墊】（with句型太老套，且與話題無實(shí)際聯(lián)系，建議替換為相關(guān)句式，如諺語等）With the rapid development of our society, the pace and rhythm of life becomes swifter and swifter. Well, no gain without pain, they say.（no pains, no gains.諺語表述錯(cuò)誤）No matter how high achievements he has once made,（主句不完整，加主語he）will lag behind（加others）if he stops his painstaking efforts in the fierce competition word（world拼寫錯(cuò)誤，且應(yīng)刪除）. The achievements once made reflect that one is good in the passing day, while working hard in present-day is the way to success. So the clear message is that we should still make efforts after getting some achievements.【本段思路不清晰，論點(diǎn)和論據(jù)不明顯?！縃ard work is the ultimate source of success. What is more important is modest and persisting on working hard after high achievement. Only by this way, can we make greater success in years to come.【第三段總結(jié)全文，但收尾太倉促，應(yīng)給出相應(yīng)的建議措施】總體點(diǎn)評(píng)1.句式：很多句子漢語思維明顯，不符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣，建