2023年高考英語復(fù)習(xí)講練測第22講 讀后續(xù)寫（新高考）（講）（全國通用教案）

1、2023年高考英語復(fù)習(xí)講練測第22講讀后續(xù)寫（新高考）（講）【考綱考情】讀后續(xù)寫文章題材選擇以記敘文為主，文章信息不完整，給續(xù)寫留出余地，但可以提煉出要點。要求 考生在理解文章的基礎(chǔ)上，融入所提供的語言環(huán)境，充分調(diào)動想象創(chuàng)新思維，大膽預(yù)測文章缺失局部的內(nèi) 容走勢，進(jìn)行充滿個性色彩的設(shè)計進(jìn)行續(xù)寫。所續(xù)寫短文需要運用豐富、準(zhǔn)確的詞匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)；結(jié)構(gòu)緊 湊邏輯合理，與所給短文融洽度高，與所提供段落開頭語銜接合理。【考點梳理】一、理清文章脈絡(luò)，明確文章主旨就目前高考命題情況來看，讀后續(xù)寫的閱讀材料為記敘文，大多淺顯易懂，但故事情節(jié)曲折動人，故 事線索的邏輯性也較強，要求考生續(xù)寫的局部多是故事開展的高潮

2、或結(jié)局，考生要抓住故事的敘事線索， 依據(jù)原文的寫作思路續(xù)寫文章，并適當(dāng)發(fā)散思維。一般來說，完成一篇完整的記敘文寫作，需要選取合適的角度、按照一定的順序組織素材進(jìn)行表達(dá)， 其中包括六個基本要素：時間、地點、人物，事情的起因、經(jīng)過和結(jié)果，即我們通常所說的“5W1H”（what, who, when, where, why, how） o所以在通讀閱讀材料的過程中，首先應(yīng)著重找出“5W1H信息”，抓住文章 主要內(nèi)容，理清文章脈絡(luò)。與此同時，我們還要對所給材料的主旨進(jìn)行概括，以便掌握全篇文章的主要基調(diào)，在續(xù)寫時能夠更好 地延續(xù)文章主旨，增加續(xù)寫局部與所給材料的融洽度。與漢語文章一樣，英語閱讀材料也有線

3、索。情節(jié)線 與情感線就像是一篇文章的“骨骼”和“靈魂”，共同決定整篇文章的內(nèi)容走向與主旨走向。情節(jié)的開展 推動整個故事的開展，所以讀后續(xù)寫中理清所給材料的情節(jié)開展脈絡(luò)，可使續(xù)寫局部的情節(jié)更加連貫，上 下文銜接更加自然；讀材料的過程中讀懂人物情感的變化那么有助于把握原文的主旨，并引導(dǎo)續(xù)寫局部的主 旨走向，實現(xiàn)情感升華，將續(xù)寫局部的整體情感基調(diào)推向一個較高的層次。我們可以從表達(dá)結(jié)構(gòu)、時空順 序、文本線索三個角度梳理情節(jié)線索和情感線索。二、構(gòu)建豐富且合理的續(xù)寫情節(jié)我們首先應(yīng)該以從所給閱讀材料中梳理出來的信息為續(xù)寫背景，接著通過對兩段段落所給出的開頭語 進(jìn)行分析，推測要寫的內(nèi)容構(gòu)，建出續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的主要情

4、節(jié)框架。大局部文章都是這個模式：（1）情緒：消極情緒（2）細(xì)節(jié)：進(jìn)一步解釋描寫（3）轉(zhuǎn)折：個人的努力或借助外界（4）轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)：事情似乎有了轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)，并抱有希望，感到欣慰（5）失望：但是問題還是沒有解決或出現(xiàn)了新問題（6）新法：突然有了一個想法（一句話說明這個想法）（7）結(jié)局：過了一段時間；事情有了最后的轉(zhuǎn)折（8）總結(jié)：點題，呼應(yīng)前文根據(jù)兩段段落開頭語，可以確定第一段的主要情節(jié)，根據(jù)第一段的段落開頭，可以順推該段續(xù)寫的第 一句話內(nèi)容，即第一段情節(jié)應(yīng)該從何開始；在根據(jù)第二段的段落開頭，可以逆推出第一段的尾句，即第一 段情節(jié)應(yīng)該到哪里結(jié)束。根據(jù)第二段的開頭語，可以順推出第二段的情節(jié)，第二段尾句那么應(yīng)有文章主

5、旨以及感情的升華，以正 能量的語句（或自己從中得到的感悟等）進(jìn)行總結(jié)，從而結(jié)束續(xù)寫。在續(xù)寫過程中，應(yīng)該注意以下幾個問題：不隨意添加無關(guān)人物；不添加旁支情節(jié)；不使用過多對話； 不使用負(fù)能量結(jié)局；不在文末設(shè)置懸念；不偏離原文主題；不違背邏輯常理。三、潤色語言，提高文采同漢語記敘文一樣，描寫也是英語記敘文的一種輔助的表達(dá)方式，對加強文章的表現(xiàn)力發(fā)揮著重要的 作用，這就要求我們善于捕捉細(xì)節(jié)、刻畫細(xì)節(jié)（如心理描寫、動作描寫、環(huán)境描寫、外貌描寫、神態(tài)描寫）， 還可以用上比喻、擬人、夸張等修辭手法。同樣地，議論、抒情的表達(dá)方式對記敘文主題的展現(xiàn)也發(fā)揮著 重要的作用。同時還要注意，讀后續(xù)寫評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中的其中一項

6、為哪一項上下文的連貫。所以在寫作中，我們要注意續(xù)寫部 分與原文的形式和意義兩方面都要保持連貫。我們可以通過恰當(dāng)準(zhǔn)確地使用過渡詞，來到達(dá)文章形式上的 連貫性。文章語言不但要優(yōu)美，而且遣詞造句更要多樣化。有老師提出，一篇作文中同一個單詞不要重復(fù)使用。 雖然這有點言過其實，但是足以表達(dá)出多樣化語句的重要性，因為閱卷老師只能通過學(xué)生的用詞和句式來 判斷學(xué)生的語言水平。這就要求我們不僅要熟練掌握語法知識、句式結(jié)構(gòu)，（比方倒裝句、強調(diào)句、非限制性定語從句、分 詞作狀語、各種狀語從句、獨立主格、虛擬語氣等），還要掌握大量的詞匯，以及同義詞轉(zhuǎn)換（新版高中 課程標(biāo)準(zhǔn)所要求的3000詞必須要掌握，有余力的同學(xué)還可

7、以背四級詞匯，盡可能擴(kuò)充自己的詞匯量，在 閱讀理解題型中也會受益）?！绢}型剖析】閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。（2021 全國高考真題）A MOTHERS DAY SURPRISEThe twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mothers Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They

8、 planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge

9、 first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everyth

10、ing was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of th

11、e pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But

12、Jeffs hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well. 注意：1 .續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。As the twins looked around them in disappointment, thei

13、r father appeared.The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.答案】 As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. Fathers appearing was like a savior to the two children. Under the guidance of their father, they took positive actions and started all ov

14、er again. They made the bread and then went on cooking porridge. Father helped them adjust the fire, which was the key to success. It was all right this time. Delicious breakfast was ready. How happy they were!The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. When their mother saw t

15、he delicious and perfect breakfast in front of her, she was very surprised. It was not only the gift, but the love of the children for her that moved her very much. The two children could finish cooking a breakfast, which she didnt expect. The children said loudly, Happy Mothers Day!” Mother hugged

16、them tightly and kissed them again and again.【解析】本文以母親節(jié)為線索展開，講述了雙胞胎Jenna和Jeff為了獻(xiàn)給母親一份美味的早餐，自己動手, 做起飯餐來，但是不幸的是，他們連連失敗，后來在父親的幫助下，獲得成功，他們把早餐獻(xiàn)給親愛的母 親，媽媽非常感動的故事。.續(xù)寫步驟：由第一段首句內(nèi)容“當(dāng)雙胞胎失望地環(huán)顧四周時，他們的父親出現(xiàn)了。”可知，第一段可描寫他們的父 親指導(dǎo)幫助他們準(zhǔn)備早餐。由第二段首句內(nèi)容“這對雙胞胎把早餐端到樓上，叫醒了他們的母親?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫母親收到 孩子們的禮物早餐，非常感動。.續(xù)寫線索：幫助指導(dǎo)一積極獻(xiàn)禮感動二、（

17、2022山東濟(jì)南市歷城第二中學(xué)模擬預(yù)測）Edward walked slowly past the school blacktop where his older brother, Leon, was playing basketball with his friends. Leon didnt notice Edward until he turned to shoot the ball. Leon really loved basketball and was good at it. But Edward was another story.Edward would beg to play

18、 with them but Leons friends complained a lot. For some reason, in that last game, Edwards playing was worse than ever. He couldnt do anything right. He was completely unable to keep possession of the ball. He missed even the easy rebounds. His dribbling was useless, and none of his throws were anyw

19、here near the basket. Leon had to turn his brother away.Edward was always a whiz at math. He was so advanced that he already knew how to solve long division problems before he was taught in school. Word problems, even the complicated ones with several steps, were no problem.One day, Leons math teach

20、er, pulled him aside. u You need to do better, a lot better, or youre not going to pass this class. Theres a big test coming up.”Leons heart sank. When he got home, he talked with Edward about it. The boys agreed that over the next two weeks they intended to spend an hour each day after school worki

21、ng on math problems and then an hour playing basketball.“Here is a good one,“ Edward said and pointed to a word problem.66 Why dont you read it?”Leon looked at the book fbr several seconds.66 Tm dizzy already!He exclaimed.“Do you know what the first step is? asked Edward, The first step is to stay c

22、ool and fbcused. Edward talked Leon through the problem. Think about what you need to find out. Dont let the problem trick you. Step by step, together they figured it out and got the right answer. Leon soon discovered that Edward was really good at helping him.Paragraph!.Soon it was time for basketb

23、all practice.Paragraph!.The morning of the math test came all too soon for Leon.【答案】Soon it was time for basketball practice. Edward held the ball with sweaty hands., standing on the court nervously. Stay cool and stay focused. Those rules work in basketball, too. Leon said “Lets start from the basi

24、cs. With Leons patient instructions, Edward started to practice dribbling. At first Edward would get frustrated because he couldnt remember all the steps. But after attentive practice his performance changed for the better. The next two weeks saw the two brothers inspiring each other and making prog

25、ress steadily. Edward learned how to shoot, pass and rebound; Leon was able to solve more and more complicated word problems.The morning of the math test came all too soon for Leon. Stay cool and fbcused!” With Edwardsencouraging words echoing in his mind, Leon calmed down and buried himself in the questions. Eventually, he finished the paper with flying colors. The bell ringing, Leon handed in the paper, darted out of