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1、WritingLeaving school（畢業(yè)時分）Growing pains and gains（成長的煩惱與歡樂）I have a dream（我有一個夢想）Things I hate to do（我不喜歡。）Love around me（我身邊的愛)I want to do something for my school(我為學(xué)校做件事）Im proud of myself（我為自己感到自豪）與生活相關(guān)與“我”相關(guān)Write at least 60 words about the topic The best way to make me happy. ( 以“最能使我快樂的方法”為題

2、，寫一篇不少于60個詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號不占格)The following points are for your reference: (所給提示僅供參考)1. What are the ways to make you happy?2. Which way do you think is the best one to make you happy? 3. Why do you feel happy in this way? (give at least two reasons)內(nèi)容（7分）+語言（8分）+文采（3分）一、認(rèn)真審題，結(jié)構(gòu)合理*寫什么(題目，參考問題）What should w

3、e write about? What shouldnt we (only) write about?Free talk1. My school life 2. My dream teacher 3. The thing I hate to do 4. My opinions of keeping pet dogs 5.The best way to make me happy內(nèi)容（7分）+語言（8分）+文采（3分）一、認(rèn)真審題，結(jié)構(gòu)合理*寫什么(題目，參考問題）Write at least 60 words about the topic The best way to make me ha

4、ppy.The following points are for your reference: (所給提示僅供參考)1. What are the ways to make you happy?2. Which way do you think is the best one to make you happy? 3. Why do you feel happy in this way? (give at least two reasons) The best way to make me happy is achieving good marks. I think this way is

5、the best one to make me happy because it is the easiest ways and it can improve my ability so I think it is the best way. In this way, I can get some prizes, so I will feel happy, whats more it can also make my parents happy.The following points are for your reference: (所給提示僅供參考)1. What are the ways

6、 to make you happy?2. Which way do you think is the best one to make you happy? 3. Why do you feel happy in this way? (give at least two reasons)內(nèi)容不全 there are a lot of ways to make me happy. The best way to make me happy is to play basketball. To play computer games is also a way to make me happy.

7、Everyday we have PE lesson. These are a lot of interests in it. So I feel happy in this way.The following points are for your reference: (所給提示僅供參考)1. What are the ways to make you happy?2. Which way do you think is the best one to make you happy? 3. Why do you feel happy in this way? (give at least

8、two reasons)內(nèi)容不全 the best way to make me happy is to help another. When I feel sad, I can help another, because I hope the others happy. I can help old people cross the road and play with small children. In this way I feel another happy, then I also will happy. Help others not only make me happy, bu

9、t also make others happy.The following points are for your reference: (所給提示僅供參考)1. What are the ways to make you happy?2. Which way do you think is the best one to make you happy? 3. Why do you feel happy in this way? (give at least two reasons)內(nèi)容不全The most unforgettable thing I did in the winter ho

10、lidays.What do you think of this article?內(nèi)容不全1. What was the thing you did in the winter holidays ? (1)2. Give some descriptions about it, such as where/when/how /who, etc. (4)3. Why do you think its the most unforgettable thing you did? (2) The winter holidays are one of the most exciting holidays

11、in the year. The most unforgettable thing I did in the winter holidays is making a birthday cake with my mother on my birthday. My mother bought the things we needed from the supermarket. We mixed the flour and eggs, then added some special things to make the cake soft. Finally, we put it into the o

12、ven. I shared the cake with my family members. It was really delicious. I will never forget that day.內(nèi)容得分5 My spoken English used to be very poor. I tried to improve it, but failed . So I told it to my English teacher and wished him to give me some advice . He told me that I could improve my spoken

13、English by speaking more English. He said, The more you practice speaking English, the more progress you will make. Then I followed his advice and spoke as much English as possible. At last , my spoken English improved .My troubleWhat is missed in this article?What was your trouble in your study ? (

14、2)How did you face the trouble ? (3)How did you feel after solving it ? (2)內(nèi)容得分5 The environment is important to us all. We need fresh air, clean water and so on. There used to be many trees around us, the air was fresh and the river was clean, but now they disappeared for one reason or another and

15、were replaced by dirty water and polluted air. Because of the terrible pollution, peoples health is getting worse and worse. Whats more, the green house effect is changing our climate, which may lead to even more serious situation.Environment around usWhat is missed in this article?1. What do you th

16、ink of the environment around us ? （4）2. As students, what should we do ? （3）內(nèi)容得分4The most unforgettable thing I did in the winter holidays.What do you think of this article?內(nèi)容不全1. What was the thing you did in the winter holidays ? (1)2. Give some descriptions about it, such as where/when/how /who,

17、 etc. (4)3. Why do you think its the most unforgettable thing you did? (2) The winter holidays are one of the most exciting holidays in the year. The most unforgettable thing I did in the winter holidays is making a birthday cake with my mother on my birthday. My mother bought the things we needed f

18、rom the supermarket. We mixed the flour and eggs, then added some special things to make the cake soft. Finally, we put it into the oven. I shared the cake with my family members. It was really delicious. I will never forget that day.內(nèi)容得分5 My spoken English used to be very poor. I tried to improve i

19、t, but failed . So I told it to my English teacher and wished him to give me some advice . He told me that I could improve my spoken English by speaking more English. He said, The more you practice speaking English, the more progress you will make. Then I followed his advice and spoke as much Englis

20、h as possible. At last , my spoken English improved .My troubleWhat is missed in this article?What was your trouble in your study ? (2)How did you face the trouble ? (3)How did you feel after solving it ? (2)內(nèi)容得分5 The environment is important to us all. We need fresh air, clean water and so on. Ther

21、e used to be many trees around us, the air was fresh and the river was clean, but now they disappeared for one reason or another and were replaced by dirty water and polluted air. Because of the terrible pollution, peoples health is getting worse and worse. Whats more, the green house effect is chan

22、ging our climate, which may lead to even more serious situation.Environment around usWhat is missed in this article?1. What do you think of the environment around us ? （4）2. As students, what should we do ? （3）內(nèi)容得分4Nowadays, our environment is becoming worse and worse. Our bad habits cause many prob

23、lems like air pollution, land pollution and water pollution. To make our environment better, I want to be an environment protector. We can plant trees to make the air clean because trees can take in CO2 and release O2 into the air. We should buy and use environmentally friendly goods. Finally, we mu

24、stnt leave a lot of rubbish into the river, pond or sea. So lets be environment protectors and enjoy living a better life on the earth.I want to be an environment protector內(nèi)容（7分）+語言（8分）+文采（3分）一、認(rèn)真審題，結(jié)構(gòu)合理*寫什么(題目，參考問題）*重點(diǎn)寫什么 (提示問題） Nowadays, there are many problems of our environment such as air pollu

25、tion, water pollution and land pollution. People cut down and burn the forest. People use things once and throw them away. People use chemicals to produce many things. Because of these reasons, our earth is in great danger. We live on the earth, its our duty to protect it. I will do a lot of things

26、so that I can protect the earth. For example, I will reuse the plastic bags. There are a lot of ways to be green consumers. I want to be an environment protectorUse the following points as a guide.(下列要點(diǎn)僅供參考） What are the problems of our environment? Why do you want to be an environment protector? Wh

27、at will you do to protect the environment? Everybody has many ways to make happy. So do I . First, I listen some favorite music. Second, I read some books and make some notes. I think it is good. Third, I play basketball with my friends. In my opinion, play basketball is the best way to make me happ

28、y,because I fond of it. Because of those, I become happy and strong.1. What are the ways to make you happy?2. Which way do you think is the best one to make you happy? 3. Why do you feel happy in this way? (give at least two reasons)內(nèi)容（7分）+語言（8分）+文采（3分）一、認(rèn)真審題，結(jié)構(gòu)合理*寫什么(題目，參考問題）*重點(diǎn)寫什么 (提示問題） *時態(tài)(參考問題）

29、”I want to be an environment protector(保護(hù)者)”Use the following points as a guide.(下列要點(diǎn)僅供參考） What are the problems of our environment? Why do you want to be an environment protector? What will you do to protect the environment?My troubleWhat was your trouble in your study ? (2)How did you face the tro

30、uble ? (3)How did you feel after solving it ? (2)The most unforgettable thing I did in the winter holidays.1. What was the thing you did in the winter holidays ? (1)2. Give some descriptions about it, such as where/when/how /who, etc. (4)3. Why do you think its the most unforgettable thing you did?

31、(2)Environment around us1. What do you think of the environment around us ? （4）2. As students, what should we do ? （3）二、理清思路，列出提綱Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic”I want to be an environment protector(保護(hù)者)”(以”I want to be an environment protector”為題寫一篇不少于60個詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號不占格。)Use the foll

32、owing points as a guide.(下列要點(diǎn)僅供參考）1. What are the problems of our environment?2. Why do you want to be an environment protector?3. What will you do to protect the environment?Write at least 60 words about the topic The best way to make me happy. ( 以“最能使我快樂的方法”為題，寫一篇不少于60個詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號不占格)The following p

33、oints are for your reference: (所給提示僅供參考)1. What are the ways to make you happy?2. Which way do you think is the best one to make you happy? 3. Why do you feel happy in this way? (give at least two reasons)三、連詞成句，初步成形四、檢查修改，內(nèi)容無誤Environment is very important for us. In our life, the problems of our en

34、vironment are very important. We have hurt it too much by cutting down trees and pollute water and land. I want to be a environment protector so that save it. Id suggest my parents to take bus instead of drive car. I will progress my habbits such as use a basket or a paper bag. I will prevent people

35、 throw rubbish everywhere. If everybody can do somethings to protect the earth, our environment will be much beautiful.I want to be an environment protector The winter holidays are one of the most exciting days in the year. I did a lot of things this winter holidays. the most unforgetable thing is t

36、o make my birthday cake with my mother on my birthday. My mother buy the things we need from the supermarket. We mixed the floor and eggs. Then add some special things to make the cake soft. Finally, we put it into the iron. I shared the cake with my family numbers. It was really delicions. I will n

37、ever forget that day because I learned to make cakes as well as share my happiness with others.The most unforgettable thing I did in the winter holidays.What do you think of this article?錯誤太多10Find out the mistakes in the following sentences and correct them.1. I climed slowly and was very tried.2.

38、I think it is an unforgetable thing because I helped sb.climbedtiredunforgettablesomebody3. On a friday afternoon, I went shopping with my mother.Spelling（拼寫）（others)Friday4. I cant forget that day. Because it is the last time we can celebrate her birthday together.I cant forget that day because5. W

39、hat a crazy day it was, I will remember it forever.!Capital letter（大小寫）Punctuation（標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號）6. I will remembered that day forever.remember7. I thought it is hungry.was8. My grandmother always tidy up my room.tidies9. How unforgettable this things is!thingFind out the mistakes in the following sentences

40、and correct them.Tense（時態(tài)）Verb agreement (主謂一致)Word form (詞形）10. In my fathers help, I became more patient than before.With my fathers help,11. To cut a long story to short, .To cut a long story short, 12. I went to Shihua by a bus with my mother.by bus13. My mother told me dont give it up.told me n

41、ot to give it upFind out the mistakes in the following sentences and correct them.Phrases(短語和固定搭配）14. I saw an old lady lay in the middle of the road.saw an old lady lying16. We played snow in front of house.played with15. I sat on a seat , listening music.listening to 17. Then a lady asked who had

42、broken her window. We all were afraid.were allFind out the mistakes in the following sentences and correct them.Missing words（漏詞）18. We should do things by our own hands.withthe house19. It is tired work.tiringWords order（詞序）Using wrong word（選詞錯誤）22. He encouraged me to look for the watch by heart.c

43、arefully21. One Sunday morning, I went to Shihua by bus and sat beside me was a girl.I went to Shihua on a bus and there was a girl sitting beside me. Find out the mistakes in the following sentences and correct them.Chinese English（中式英語）In my life, many things happened.20. In my life have many thin

44、gs happened.1.Environment is very important for us. 2.In our life, the problems of our environment are very important.3.We have hurt it too much by cutting down trees and pollute water and land.4.I want to be a environment protector so that save it.5.Id suggest my parents to take bus instead of driv

45、e car.7.I will progress my habbits such as use a basket or a paper bag.8.If everybody can do somethings to protect the earth, our environment will be much beautiful.6.I will prevent people throw rubbish everywhere. to polluting in order to save it/so that I can save it take a bus instead of driving

46、a car from throwing develop good habits using something much more beautifulserious an environment 1234.2567.18.14.17.28.21. 是否有大小寫錯誤(capital letters or lowercase letters) 是否有拼寫錯誤 (spelling mistakes) 是否有標(biāo)點(diǎn)錯誤 (punctuation mistakes)4.是否有語法錯誤 (grammar mistakes) 主謂是否一致 動詞的時態(tài) 語態(tài)的使用是否正確 詞組的搭配是否合乎習(xí)慣 Common

47、Errors in English writing During the winter holidays, It happened a lot of things. One of the things was helpt a small girl to find her mother. When my friends and me shopping in a shopping mall, we saw a small girl cried in a corner. We asked what happened on her . She said she cuondt found her mot

48、her. So we started to helpt she to found her mother. Luckily, we found her mother, they were very happy and we were happy, too. I think it was the most unforgettable thing I did in the winter holidays because I found I also can help others.The most unforgettable thing I did in the winter holidays.Ch

49、eck and correct this article.a lot of things happened.helpingIwere shoppingcryinghappened tocouldntfindhelpherfind.Theycould also, so During the winter holidays, It happened a lot of things. One of the things was helpt a small girl to find her mother. When my friends and me shopping in a shopping ma

50、ll, we saw a small girl cried in a corner. We asked what happened on her . She said she cuondt found her mother. So we started to helpt she to found her mother. Luckily, we found her mother, they were very happy and we were happy, too. I think it was the most unforgettable thing I did in the winter holidays because I found I also can help others.The most unforgettable thing I did in the winter holidays.a lot of things happened.helpingIwere shoppingcryinghappened tocouldntfindhelpherfind.