湖南高考評(píng)卷-精講版課件

1、2012湖南高考英語(yǔ)書面表達(dá)評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)及對(duì)教學(xué)的啟示Section C (25 marks)2012湖南高考 Directions: Write an English composition according to the instructions given below in Chinese. 在生活中, 你自已或他人曾有過(guò)物品不慎丟失而又找回的經(jīng)歷, 其間有煩惱、有驚喜、有感慨請(qǐng)就此寫一篇英語(yǔ)短文.主要內(nèi)容包括:1) 丟失的物品;2) 物品失而復(fù)得的經(jīng)過(guò);3) 你的感想。注意:詞數(shù)不少于120個(gè);不能使用真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。評(píng)分要點(diǎn):給分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)：一、內(nèi)容（13分）1) 丟失的物品;2) 物品

2、失而復(fù)得的經(jīng)過(guò);3) 你的感想。二、 表達(dá)（10分）1）詞匯、語(yǔ)法（5分）2）銜接、連貫（5分）三、整體印象（2分）補(bǔ)充說(shuō)明：一 語(yǔ)法、拼寫、標(biāo)點(diǎn)錯(cuò)誤不影響意義表達(dá)的，可以不扣分，此項(xiàng)扣分不超過(guò)5分。二 合理使用高級(jí)表達(dá)（如強(qiáng)調(diào)、排比、虛擬、倒裝、復(fù)雜句、非謂語(yǔ)結(jié)構(gòu)、格言、諺語(yǔ)等），而且詞匯表達(dá)豐富，語(yǔ)言地道的文章加2-3分或取本檔最高分。三 抄襲試卷中的成段文字， 或者生硬套用文字，與主題無(wú)關(guān)的，歸為第一檔。我的想法：一 用欣賞的眼光評(píng)卷 （師評(píng)自評(píng)互評(píng)） 三美： 書寫美 結(jié)構(gòu)美 語(yǔ)言美二 用欣賞的態(tài)度處理教材 啟發(fā)學(xué)生發(fā)現(xiàn)課文美，大聲朗讀，師生 齊讀，背誦并模仿 例如：(M5U3)Scie

3、ntists have announced that they have cloned the first human embryo. This has caused much debate around the world. On the one hand.On the other hand. Imitate: Our school has annouced that students are forbidden to bring their cellphones to school, which has caused . (M6U2)What is happiness? To some,

4、happiness is being surrounded by family and friends. To others, happiness means achieving success in something, such as meeting a goal. To those who have been injured or struggle with a physical disability, happiness can simply mean a day without suffering, or just being alive. (主題句排比） Imitate: What

5、 is success.(M10U1) There is a saying that goes,Give a man a fish, and you feed him for a day. Teach a man to fish, and you feed . 三 欣賞，朗讀并背誦優(yōu)美文章，格 言，諺語(yǔ)，和句子2012湖南高考英語(yǔ)書面表達(dá)評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)第五檔(很好，2125分)完全完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)。覆蓋所有知識(shí)要點(diǎn)；應(yīng)用了較多語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯；語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯有些許錯(cuò)誤，但為盡力使用復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)和高級(jí)詞匯所致；具備較強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力；有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間的連接成分，使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊；完全達(dá)到了預(yù)期的寫作目的

6、。第四檔(好，1620分)較全面地完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)。雖漏掉一、兩個(gè)次重點(diǎn)，但覆蓋了所有的主要內(nèi)容；應(yīng)用的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯能滿足任務(wù)的要求；語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯方面應(yīng)用基本準(zhǔn)確、些許錯(cuò)誤主要是因嘗試使用復(fù)雜語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和高級(jí)詞匯所致；應(yīng)用簡(jiǎn)單的語(yǔ)句間連接成分，使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊；達(dá)到了預(yù)期寫作目的。第三檔(適當(dāng)，1115分)基本完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)。雖漏掉一些內(nèi)容，但覆蓋了所有主要內(nèi)容；應(yīng)用的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯能滿足任務(wù)的要求；有一些語(yǔ)法和詞匯方面的錯(cuò)誤，但不影響整體理解。應(yīng)用簡(jiǎn)單的語(yǔ)句間的連接成分，使全文內(nèi)容連貫；整體而言，達(dá)到了預(yù)期的寫作目的。第二檔(較差，610分)未恰當(dāng)完成試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)。漏掉或未描述清

7、楚一些主要內(nèi)容；寫了一些無(wú)關(guān)的內(nèi)容；語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，詞匯項(xiàng)目有限；有一些語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯方面的錯(cuò)誤，影響了讀者對(duì)寫作內(nèi)容的理解；較少使用語(yǔ)句間的連接成分，內(nèi)容缺少連貫性；信息未能清楚地傳達(dá)得給讀者。第一檔(差，15分)未完成試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)。明顯遺漏了主要內(nèi)容；寫了一些無(wú)關(guān)內(nèi)容，原因可能是未了解試題的要求；語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，詞匯項(xiàng)目有限；較多語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯方面的錯(cuò)誤，影響了讀者對(duì)寫作內(nèi)容的理解；缺乏語(yǔ)句間的連接成分，內(nèi)容不連貫；信息未能傳達(dá)給讀者。0分未能傳達(dá)給讀者任何信息；內(nèi)容太少，無(wú)法評(píng)判；寫的內(nèi)容均與所要求內(nèi)容無(wú)關(guān)或所寫內(nèi)容無(wú)法看清。評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)對(duì)教學(xué)的啟示我有幸參加了2012年湖南高考英語(yǔ)書面表達(dá)的

8、閱卷工作，根據(jù)評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)以及在實(shí)際閱卷過(guò)程中所出現(xiàn)的情況，我進(jìn)行了如下的反思：一，取得高分的竅門要想取得高分，也就是能在第五檔給分，我們必須仔細(xì)琢磨，深入理解“評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)”里的這幾條標(biāo)準(zhǔn)：1.如何理解“應(yīng)用了較多的詞匯”。這里所說(shuō)的“詞匯”可以從“高級(jí)詞匯的使用”，“同義詞的使用”，“短語(yǔ)的使用”三個(gè)方面去理解。我以2012滿分作文為例來(lái)說(shuō)明 Three years ago, just before my departure with my good friend Tommy, he got me a wonderful watch as my birthday gift, which I had

9、 ever since been treasuring all the time before unfortunately I got it lost. I used to go everywhere with company of my watch pet but the other day I could go nowhere for its sign. I was so upset and depressed that I lost any desire for doing things and I could not even recall where and how I lost i

10、t. What happened next on this morning, however, almost sent my spirits flying higher than sky. Guess what? It found its way back to my dormitory, lying on my bed with a note beside it saying: Im sure its yours, so I brought it back from the library assistant. Jack. Ah, my dormmate Jack found it in t

11、he library. Can you imagine how excited I was at that moment? I must offer my thankfulness to Jack for his kindness. And I also need to reflect on my carelessness. 該文170字左右，運(yùn)用了很多高級(jí)詞匯，短語(yǔ)，等等，充分體現(xiàn)了作者很強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力，語(yǔ)言變化多姿，充滿魅力2.如何理解“應(yīng)用了較多、較復(fù)雜的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)”？固定句式，如感嘆句，復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)，強(qiáng)調(diào)句，倒裝句，三大從句，非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞等都屬于較復(fù)雜的“語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)”。這些結(jié)構(gòu)的正確使用，可以

12、使文章的語(yǔ)言充滿層次感，從而姣好地反映作者的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力。 One day I received an invitation from another school to give a speech on how to learn English well, I was extremely happy and accepted it. I got ready for the speech , put the notes in my bag and went there by bus. While on the bus I discovered the notes and my ID card

13、were missing. I was very worried, but I knew the bus wouldnt stop for me to look for the lost things at the moment. On seeing the documents at the bus station, a cleaner picked them up and found my phone number inside. She thought I must have been worried about it. So she called me, hurried to take

14、a taxi, and sent them to me as soon as possible. Happy and surprised, I regained the lost items. Thanks to the cleaners kindness, my speech was so successful that everyone cheered for me. I was very grateful to the cleaner. From the experience, I have learned that honesty is the best policy. Only in

15、 this way will our society be more harmonious and hopeful.該文運(yùn)用了“狀語(yǔ)從句的省略”， 介詞短語(yǔ)， 情態(tài)動(dòng)詞表推測(cè)，形容詞表伴隨狀態(tài)，倒裝句，并列句以及復(fù)合句的運(yùn)用也得心應(yīng)手，游刃有余。充分展示了作者深厚的語(yǔ)言功底。3.如何理解“上下文的連貫性”？評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)指出：書面表達(dá)應(yīng)該注意“上下文的連貫性”并能“有效地使用語(yǔ)句間的連接成分，使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊”。這里說(shuō)的連貫性，就是通過(guò)連接詞，非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)，介詞短語(yǔ)等等，使兩個(gè)或多個(gè)意義相互關(guān)聯(lián)的事情或觀點(diǎn)在同一句子得以表達(dá)，從而使整個(gè)段落或者篇章渾然一體，連貫流暢。 Getting back wh

16、at you have lost would be an unforgettable experience. Last Monday, I lost my expensive cellphone, on which my name was inscribed. Fortunately, it was returned. That morning, I rushed out of my house and jumped into a taxi, for I would be late for the final examination. On arriving at school, I head

17、ed to my classroom quickly, not noticing that I had left my cellphone on the back seat. When the exam ended, to my great surprise, I found the driver waiting at the school gate. He handed the phone over to me, wearing a smile on his face. So touched was I that tears rolled down my cheeks. From this

18、story, I am firmly convinced of the significance of honesty, which will contribute to building a warm and harmonious society.“開(kāi)門見(jiàn)山法”很自然地過(guò)渡到自己或他人也有類似的經(jīng)歷。 清晰表達(dá)出了記敘文 “When, Who, What”三大基本要素。 “時(shí)間順序記敘法”描述物品失而復(fù)得的經(jīng)過(guò)。 自然過(guò)渡到第三段的感想。 二，如何嵌入18分定律？得高分不易，但平淡的文章如何能進(jìn)入閱卷老師的法眼，讓他們有“賞心悅目”之感而“高抬貴手”，最終判出一個(gè)比較滿意的分?jǐn)?shù)呢？近年盛傳的“18分定律”是否真有其事？根據(jù)今年的閱卷工作，我發(fā)現(xiàn)其實(shí)得18分很容易，只要老師們?cè)谄綍r(shí)讓學(xué)生養(yǎng)成良好的寫作習(xí)慣，即使語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力差一些也不會(huì)影響學(xué)生的得分。1.字跡規(guī)范，工整。2.分段明晰。2012作文吻合典型的“三段式作文法” 3.中間段盡量體現(xiàn)“豬肚”的魅力。也就是中間段盡量填充字?jǐn)?shù)，讓文章看起來(lái)內(nèi)容豐滿4.審題嚴(yán)