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1、Continuation Writing讀后續(xù)寫Continuation Writing新課程標(biāo)準(zhǔn)提出了英語(yǔ)學(xué)科核心素養(yǎng)：語(yǔ)言能力、思維品質(zhì)、文化品格和學(xué)習(xí)能力。 讀后續(xù)寫：要求學(xué)生在理解一篇不完整文章的基礎(chǔ)上，充分調(diào)動(dòng)想象創(chuàng)新思維，大膽預(yù)測(cè)文章缺失部分的內(nèi)容走勢(shì)，進(jìn)行充滿個(gè)性色彩的設(shè)計(jì)，并用英語(yǔ)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫表達(dá)。 語(yǔ)言能力：閱讀和寫作思維品質(zhì)：想象能力和創(chuàng)新精神新課程標(biāo)準(zhǔn)提出了英語(yǔ)學(xué)科核心素養(yǎng)：語(yǔ)言能力、思維品質(zhì)、文讀后續(xù)寫高檔次的給分范圍和要求對(duì)第四檔(16-20)作文的描述： 與所給短文融洽度較高， 與所提供各段落開頭語(yǔ)銜接較為合理。 內(nèi)容比較豐富，應(yīng)用了5個(gè)以上短文中標(biāo)出的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。 所使

2、用語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯較為豐富、準(zhǔn)確，可能有些許錯(cuò)誤，但不影響意義表達(dá)； 比較有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。對(duì)第五檔(21-25)作文的描述： 與所給短文融洽度高， 與所提供各段落開頭語(yǔ)銜接合理。 內(nèi)容豐富，應(yīng)用了5個(gè)以上短文中標(biāo)出的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。 所使用語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯豐富、準(zhǔn)確，可能有些許錯(cuò)誤，但完全不影響意義表達(dá)； 有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。讀后續(xù)寫高檔次的給分范圍和要求對(duì)第四檔(16-20)作文的描寫作的幾個(gè)考慮語(yǔ)言的功能與目的邏輯語(yǔ)言作者是否能順利地表達(dá)自己的意思這個(gè)意義是否能順利地被接受 情節(jié)邏輯融洽度（1）原文與后續(xù)的邏輯（2）后續(xù)兩段間的邏輯

3、（3）段落開頭與后續(xù)語(yǔ)句間的邏輯（1）邏輯是否嚴(yán)密（2）情節(jié)是否有旁支 （1）銜接（2）語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)與詞匯的豐富性、準(zhǔn)確性 （3）修辭(交際)寫作的幾個(gè)考慮作者是否能順利地表達(dá)自己的意思這個(gè)意義是否能順讀后續(xù)寫三大步驟readingplottingwriting內(nèi)容語(yǔ)言主題細(xì)節(jié)銜接內(nèi)容邏輯語(yǔ)言讀后續(xù)寫三大步驟readingplottingwritingreadingcontent whoJane, Tom (a couple) whenone weekend in July wherein the forest what One weekend in July, Jane and Tom deci

4、ded to camp by a lake. After a quarrel with Tom, Jane walked away angrily. Having walked too far, Jane got lost in the forest and couldnt contact Tom without her cell phone which was left in their car. With night falling, Jane had to stop for the night. Feeling tired, thirsty and hungry, she missed

5、Tom and her family very much. To her great joy, the next morning she drank and also found some berries to eat nearby a stream. As she walked along the stream, two helicopters flew overhead one after another. But the trees blocked out the sight. Jane thought it wise to make herself noticed by flaggin

6、g her yellow blouse on an open area.readingcontent whoJane, Tom ( content what One weekend in July, Jane and Tom decided to camp by a lake. After a quarrel with Tom, Jane walked away angrily. Having walked too far, Jane got lost in the forest and couldnt contact Tom without her cell phone which was

7、left in their car. With night falling, Jane had to stop for the night. Feeling tired, thirsty and hungry, she missed Tom and her family very much. To her great joy, the next morning she drank and also found some berries to eat nearby a stream. As she walked along the stream, two helicopters flew ove

8、rhead one after another. But the trees blocked out the sight. Jane thought it wise to make herself noticed by flagging her yellow blouse on an open area.Para1: But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Para 2: It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Jane lake helicopter walked away at a

9、 distanceTom stream her yellow blouse climbed to her great joyTopic: survive language 1. Jane was so angry that she said to Tom 2. With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. 3. she turned around, hoping to see the lake. 4. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest 5. To her

10、 great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. 6. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. 7. The farther she walked, the more confused she became. 8. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. language 1. Jane was so angry separatePara1: But no more helicopters came and i

11、t was getting dark again. Para 2: It was daybreak when Jane woke up. the paragraph topicJane suffered physically and mentally.darkdaybreak the paragraph topicJane survived.reunitedJane regretted what she had done.Jane realized how much they loved.plottingPara1: But no more helicoptersseparatePara1:

12、But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Para 2: It was daybreak when Jane woke up. whowhenwherewhat / howJanenightin the forest how Jane felt what Jane did darkdaybreakwhowhenwherewhat / howJaneTomdayin the forest or other places how Jane survived how they feltreunited disappoint

13、ed tiredwalk, find, climb, stop, sleepTom, helicopter, find, tell, love, hug happyPara1: But no more helicoptersJane was very disappointed, but she didnt give up.She still kept walking, and tried her best to find the lake.She climbed to a high place and fell asleep quickly.In the end, because she wa

14、s so tired that she stopped screaming.She screamed for help when she walked on the road.12345But Toms face floated in her mind before she closed her eyes.6writingJane was very disappointed, buJane was very disappointed, but she didnt give up.1She still kept walking, and tried her best to find the la

15、ke.2She was screamed when her walked on the road.3In the end, because she was too tired that she stopped to scream.4She climbed a high place and fall sleep quickly.5But Toms face crowded in her mind before she closed her eyes.6Tip 1: Plots should be logically connected. It was daybreak when Jane wok

16、e up. To her surprised, she found Tom was alongside her! She asked Tom why she was in there. Tom said he called the police to help him and they drived the helicopter the found her laid in a high place. Jane was so moved, then she told Tom how much she loved him, and promised she will never do it aga

17、in. Tom was very happy and they never have some quarrels. But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Jane was very disappointed, but she didnt give up. She still kept walking, and tried her best to find the lake. She was screamed when her walked on the road. In the end, because she

18、was too tired that she stopped to scream. She climbed a high place and fall asleep quickly. But Toms face crowded in her mind before she closed her eyes. 13 能基本完成任務(wù)。 與原文關(guān)系密切，故事情節(jié)基本可信，銜接較好。 語(yǔ)言有錯(cuò)誤，且影響意義傳達(dá)。Jane was very disappointed, bu書面表達(dá)高檔次的給分范圍和要求對(duì)第五檔(21-25)作文的描述： 與所給短文融洽度高， 與所提供各段落開頭語(yǔ)銜接合理。 內(nèi)容豐富，應(yīng)用

19、了5個(gè)以上短文中標(biāo)出的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。 所使用語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯豐富、準(zhǔn)確，可能有些許錯(cuò)誤，但完全不影響意義表達(dá)； 有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。 logical reasonable creative powerful書面表達(dá)高檔次的給分范圍和要求對(duì)第五檔(21-25)作文的描creative writing windrainfogwild animals treeslake streamwild fruits stones/rocksgrass leaves wooden housecavesuffer survive tirednessthirsthungerloneline

20、ss fearcold matches a knife her yellow blousecigarette lighter a small torch forest JaneTip 2: Your creativity comes from your direct or indirect experience. creative writing windrainfogwisuffering: windA strong wind blowing through the forest, the shadows of trees were just like the shapes of aggre

21、ssive animals. Jane was so scared that she buried her head in her arms, not daring to see anything. suffering: rainWorse still, it began to rain. Jane was getting soaked, out there in the pouring rain. Helpless, dejected, and hungry, she threw herself down on the ground and sobbed. suffering: wild a

22、nimalsA tiger was roaring at a distance. Jane was too scared to open her eyes, hoping it would disappear right away. suffering: windsuffering: rainlanguagewordsphrasessentences narration = exposition + description Topic: a shocking knife attackAnne Slade, mother of three, had been stabbed repeatedly

23、 with a knife. She was lying in her front garden bleeding very heavily. Her hands had almost been cut off. languagewordsphrasessentences 1. Her feet was beginning to swell up after the whole days walk.2. Sweet memories flash across/through her mind. Sweet memories flooded in her mind.3. A wave of re

24、gret and fear swept over her pale face. 4. The unforgettable experience, Jane strongly believed, would never fail to remind her how much she loved Tom and her family.Tip 3: Use what we have learned flexibly. 1. Her feet was beginning to s1. “Tom, where are you?” Jane _. shouted yelled screamed excla

25、imed2. Anxiety and despair grabbed her mind.3. Overwhelmed with anxiety and tiredness, Jane failed to decide where on earth to go. 4. The branches waved in the breeze as if extending its encouragement and blessing to her. Tip 4: Accumulate advanced words. 1. “Tom, where are you?” Jane 1. feel hungry

26、2. feel tired3. feel scared4. feel hopelessan empty stomachintolerable physical exhaustionher aching feetthe whistling night windthe thick darknessher trembling lipsher watery eyes Her stomach was growling.She dragged her heavy feet, more slowly and painfully than she haddone. The terrifying sounds

27、made her hair stand on end. As everything was dissolved by the darkness, deep hopelessness set in.Tip 5: Vivid descriptions can focus on “how” and “what”. 1. feel hungryan empty stomach哭：淚如泉涌，淚如雨下，梨花帶雨，喜極而泣1. with tears in her eyes2. with tears welling up in her eyes 3. with tears rolling/streaming

28、down her face4. Tears of excitement and relief streamed down her face.5. When Jane called up the happy and fragrant time spent with Tom, tears clouded her eyes.Tip 5: Vivid descriptions can focus on “how” and “what”. 哭：淚如泉涌，淚如雨下，梨花帶雨，喜極而泣Tip 5: Vi1. Jane felt overwhelmingly scared.2. Jane was ultima

29、tely saved 3. Jane thought regretfully / rationally.4. Hungry and exhausted, Jane gradually fell asleep against a huge rock. 5. Dropped into despair, Jane walked aimlessly along the stream.Tip 5: Vivid descriptions can focus on “how” and “what”. 1. Jane felt overwhelmingly sc1.“It was all my fault.

30、I shouldnt have quarreled with Tom.”2. If only Tom would be here with her now! How regretful she was to quarrel with Tom and walk away!3. Never had she missed Tom so much. “If it were not for my stubborn behavior, I would have enjoyed the beauty of nature with Tom.” She thought regretfully.Tip 6: A

31、vivid description of ones inner thoughts adds color to writing.1.“It was all my fault. I shou4. She blamed herself thousands of times that she would not leave Tom again.5. “Why am I always quarrelling over trifles? Why am I always ignoring his consideration? It was Tom who came up with the idea of c

32、amping just to please me. Also, it was Tom who prepared everything for the camp.” A feeling of infinite regret swept over her.4. She blamed herself thousand他走了很久。She kept walking.2. She walked _.3. Jane had walked _ without pausing. and walked more than five hoursTip 7: Repetition and data, if used

33、properly, are powerful. 他走了很久。 and walked more than fwander漫無(wú)目的地閑逛 stagger 蹣跚 pace 踱步 trudge 艱難地走 limp 跛行 drag 拖，拉1. The injured man _ away like someone drunk. 2. After four hours walk, the tired soldier _ the last two miles to the town.3. He _ the room, lost in thought.4. The runner had sprained hi

34、s ankle and was _ off the field.5. What fun it is to _ through a strange city. 6. Feeling tired, she _ her aching feet towards a big tree and sat down. staggeredtrudgedpacedlimpingwanderdraggedTip 8: Accumulating words of a family is necessary. wander漫無(wú)目的地閑逛 stagger 蹣跚 pac Depressed and hopeless, sh

35、e wandered along the stream. “If only I hadnt quarreled with Tom.” At the thought of her impulsiveness, Jane fell into deep regret. She trudged forward, more slowly and painfully than she had done. There was a big stone in the way but she didnt notice it and tripped over. Her ankle was badly spraine

36、d. When Jane bent down to rub her aching ankle, a gust of wind came, blowing away her yellow blouse. Now the only hope was lost. She broke down and wept uncontrollably. Apart from her cry, the forest was silent. No helicopter, no Tom no difference. “Weeping makes no difference.” she thought, wiping

37、her tears away. Then she struggled to her feet and limped toward a big tree. Too tired, she leaned against the tree and fell asleep soon. Tip 9: A vivid description should be based on the topic, for example, suffering caused by walking. Depressed and hopeless, shlanguage 1. Jane was so angry that sh

38、e said to Tom 2. With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. 3. she turned around, hoping to see the lake. 4. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest 5. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. 6. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. 7.

39、The farther she walked, the more confused she became. 8. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. So tired was she that she could hardly move her aching feet.With tears welling up in her eyes, she wanted to say sorry to Tom for having lost her temper.She took off her yellow blouse and began

40、 shaking it wildly, hoping someone would see her.If only Tom would be here with me now! How regretful I was to quarrel with Tom and walk away!By no means would she walk away so impulsively.The further she walked, the more tired she felt.language 1. Jane was so angry 1. Hardly had she opened her eyes

41、 when she noticed herself covered by a thick coat. Tom was sitting beside her, smiling to her.2. No sooner had she risen to her feet than she heard the sound of a helicopter at a distance.3. So tired was she that she could hardly move her heavy/aching feet.4. The further she walked, the more tired s

42、he felt.5. How much she missed Tom!6. Nothing could be better than a cup of hot coffee.7. She kept flagging the yellow blouse until the day became completely dark. 8. What if I cant walk out of the forest? 9. She was about to continue her walk along the stream when she heard slight calls of her name

43、 at a distance. 10. By no means would she walk away so impulsively.Tip 10: Imitate the original language and put the sentence patterns to use flexibly and naturally. 1. Hardly had she opened her eTip 11: A good beginning is half done. But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Anxie

44、ty and desire grabbed her mind. Astonishingly she found comfort in the tale of Robinson Crusoe who was stranded on an isolated island but managed to survive in the end. Jane began to think rationally. It was obvious that her bright yellow blouse would increase the chances of survival, so wrenching off a branch, she transformed it into a big flag and climbed up to a high platform. Drowsiness overwhelmed her and she fell to the ground in a dead faint. Tip 11: A g