2023學(xué)年B2 U1writing 教學(xué)設(shè)計(jì)

武昌區(qū)教育教學(xué)案例及分析（2022---2022學(xué)年度）英語(yǔ)作文訓(xùn)練和評(píng)析課教學(xué)案例武漢中學(xué)高中階段作文訓(xùn)練變得比初中更重要。教師對(duì)學(xué)生進(jìn)行各種策略指導(dǎo)的同時(shí)，必須提供給學(xué)生練習(xí)的機(jī)會(huì)，以達(dá)到熟能生巧的效果。但是針對(duì)學(xué)生作文數(shù)量多，難修改的實(shí)際情況，教師也必須想辦法，充分發(fā)揮學(xué)生的主觀能動(dòng)性，使其作文能夠得到及時(shí)講評(píng)，以評(píng)促寫。本人進(jìn)行了多次作文練習(xí)和評(píng)講，通過這種講練結(jié)合，反復(fù)操作的辦法，學(xué)生的寫作水平得到了較大程度的提高。根據(jù)NSEFCBook2Unit1Writing部分的要求，結(jié)合所任課班級(jí)學(xué)生的實(shí)際水平和授課內(nèi)容，本人設(shè)計(jì)了以下一堂作文訓(xùn)練和評(píng)講課，共分兩課時(shí)完成。一教學(xué)目標(biāo)（一）知識(shí)目標(biāo)1進(jìn)一步熟悉半開放式話題作文寫作，鞏固和豐富詞匯和句型。2通過修改他人習(xí)作，了解高分作文的必備要素。（二）能力目標(biāo)1通過寫作練習(xí)，培養(yǎng)思維能力；領(lǐng)會(huì)和學(xué)習(xí)寫作技巧，提高寫作能力。2通過修改他人作文，培養(yǎng)和提高改錯(cuò)和語(yǔ)言應(yīng)用能力。（三）情感目標(biāo)1在寫作中熟悉語(yǔ)言應(yīng)用技巧，培養(yǎng)學(xué)習(xí)自信心。2在修改他人習(xí)作過程中，培養(yǎng)合作探究精神，相互學(xué)習(xí)，共同進(jìn)步。（四）教學(xué)重點(diǎn)和難點(diǎn)培養(yǎng)和提高限時(shí)作文能力和作文修改能力，糾正作文中易錯(cuò)形式，體會(huì)高分作文的必備要素。二教學(xué)過程第一課時(shí)作文練習(xí)（一）簡(jiǎn)要導(dǎo)入What’syourpurposeofyourstudyinginthehighschool?Doyouthinkitisnecessaryforyoutogotocollege?Why?Whatifyoucan’tgotocollege?[設(shè)計(jì)說明]：簡(jiǎn)要的引導(dǎo)可以引起學(xué)生及時(shí)思考話題，使其在寫作時(shí)及時(shí)進(jìn)入狀態(tài)。一些學(xué)生的回答也可以啟發(fā)其他同學(xué)，讓他們?cè)趯懽鲿r(shí)有話可說。當(dāng)然并非每一次的限時(shí)作文都需要這種導(dǎo)入，學(xué)生需要獨(dú)立思考的機(jī)會(huì)。（二）任務(wù)布置書面表達(dá)書面表達(dá)某中學(xué)生報(bào)的“熱點(diǎn)話題”專欄下一期的討論主題目是：“上大學(xué)是高中生的唯一選擇嗎?”假如你是某中學(xué)高三的學(xué)生李華,請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下面所給出的漢語(yǔ)提示用英語(yǔ)給該專欄的編輯寫一封信,介紹你班同學(xué)的觀點(diǎn),并發(fā)表你的個(gè)人意見。參考要點(diǎn)：1.75％左右的學(xué)生認(rèn)為應(yīng)該上大學(xué)；15％左右的學(xué)生不想上大學(xué)：10％左右的學(xué)生認(rèn)為無所謂。2.觀點(diǎn)：(1)增長(zhǎng)知識(shí),提高素養(yǎng),利于擇業(yè)；(2)成功的路千萬條；(3)學(xué)費(fèi)昂貴,就業(yè)困難。注意：(1)書信的格式與開頭己給出,但不計(jì)入總數(shù)；(2)詞數(shù)：120左右。（三）思路點(diǎn)撥與熱身1審題注意：本文要求以一名學(xué)生的身份給編輯寫一封信，介紹同學(xué)的觀點(diǎn)，應(yīng)注意語(yǔ)言的得體性；同時(shí)介紹以后應(yīng)適當(dāng)發(fā)表個(gè)人的意見。thefollowingingroupsoffour.1認(rèn)為…無所謂___________________________________2增長(zhǎng)知識(shí)___________________________________3提高素養(yǎng)_____________________________________4利于擇業(yè)_____________________________________5成功的路千萬條______________________________6學(xué)費(fèi)昂貴_______________________________________7就業(yè)困難__________________________________________(四)限時(shí)寫作Askstudentstofinishwritingthepassagein20-25minutes.[設(shè)計(jì)說明]：作文來源具有原生態(tài)，能反映學(xué)生的真實(shí)寫作水平。而且限時(shí)作文能培養(yǎng)學(xué)生的自我調(diào)控能力，包括心態(tài)和解題速度。第二課時(shí)作文評(píng)析（一）

互改互評(píng)學(xué)生參照以下評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，互相評(píng)改作文。itemsCriteriaself

peerexamplesabCcabcstructure1.thetopicisstatedclearly.2.wellorganized(beginning,middle,end).3.eachparagraphisclosetothepoint.4.supportideaswithevidenceorreasons.language1.spellallwordscorrectly.2.usevarietiesofsentencestructures.3.uselinkingwordsproperly.4.employsomebeautiful,advancedwordsandexpressions.5.makenogrammarmistakes.handwritingneat,beautiful,easytoreadcollaborationparticipateindiscussion[設(shè)計(jì)說明]：結(jié)合高考作文評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，教師制定以下表格供學(xué)生參考，可以幫助他們熟悉高分作文的基本要素和作文修改的方法，以促進(jìn)自身寫作水平的提高。（二）問題總結(jié)在學(xué)生修改的基礎(chǔ)之上，教師審閱和分析學(xué)生習(xí)作，總結(jié)學(xué)生作文中出現(xiàn)的主要問題并加以歸類，供學(xué)生參考糾正。1結(jié)構(gòu)問題寫作順序混亂，論點(diǎn)與論據(jù)不能對(duì)應(yīng)2語(yǔ)言應(yīng)用錯(cuò)誤單詞拼寫錯(cuò)誤（錯(cuò)誤率較高的詞）:大學(xué)＿＿＿選擇＿＿有利于＿＿＿社會(huì)＿＿＿＿百分?jǐn)?shù)＿＿＿＿＿時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤動(dòng)詞主語(yǔ)：Gotocollegeisnottheonlychoiceforus.邏輯主語(yǔ)錯(cuò)誤eg:Theythinkgoingtocollegehasmorechancestowork.多謂語(yǔ)eg:Therearemanywaysleadtosuccess詞性誤用eg:Therearemanywaystosucceed.Itisdifficultyforthemtogetajobaftergraduation.Goingtocollegeisbenefitforus.搭配不當(dāng)eg:Thefeeistooexpensive/dear/notcheap.句式錯(cuò)誤eg:Theyarenotsurewhethergotocollegeornot.中式表達(dá)eg:Successfulwayisnotonlyway.Thewaytosuccessdon’thaveonlyone3語(yǔ)篇銜接問題不分段，沒有或幾乎無連詞eg:15%studentsdon’tliketogotocollege.Therearemanywaystosuccess.Thefeeissohigh.４書寫問題卷面不清潔，字跡潦草，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)和大小寫不規(guī)范。[設(shè)計(jì)說明]：該環(huán)節(jié)應(yīng)用多媒體，清晰展示了學(xué)生在本次習(xí)作中的主要問題，能夠幫助學(xué)生及時(shí)更改錯(cuò)誤。（三）習(xí)作欣賞收集學(xué)生中評(píng)價(jià)較好的作文，包括書寫清晰規(guī)范，卷面整潔的作文，既讓學(xué)生學(xué)會(huì)欣賞好詞好句和好的行文，又體會(huì)字體卷面等細(xì)節(jié)在寫作總體評(píng)價(jià)中的重要性。[設(shè)計(jì)說明]：學(xué)生往往很愿意向身邊的同學(xué)學(xué)習(xí)，因?yàn)檫@讓他們感到真實(shí)。作為一種評(píng)價(jià)手段，這樣做使做得好的學(xué)生增添了更多信心，其他同學(xué)則受到了相應(yīng)的激勵(lì)。（四）范文展示Thestudentsinourclasshadadiscussionaboutwhethertheonlywayforusstudentstosucceedistogotocollege.About75%ofthestudentsthinkitnecessarytogotocollege,forfurthereducationcanincreasetheirknowledgeandimprovetheirpersonalqualitiesaswell.However,15%ofthestudentsthinkthatitisnousegoingtocollegebecauseit’sextremelydifficultforcollegegraduatestogetsatisfactoryjobs.Inaddition,thetuitionistoohighforthemtopayfor.Theremaining10%holdtheviewthat“AllroadsleadtoRome”.Thereforetheythinkitdoesn’tmakeanydifferencewhethertheygotocollegeornot.Inmyopinion,it’sabetterchoicetogotocollegebecausewecanreceiveabettereducationatcollege.Butifweareunabletogotocollege,therearemanychoicesforustochoosefrom,andwecanstillcontributetosociety.YourssincerelyLiHua[設(shè)計(jì)說明]：作文范文往往具有要點(diǎn)全面，表達(dá)相對(duì)規(guī)范的特征，尤其對(duì)于寫作困難的同學(xué)，更有必要對(duì)照范文修改錯(cuò)誤，積累規(guī)范的語(yǔ)言表達(dá)形式。（五）知識(shí)拓展：I有些人認(rèn)為上大學(xué)只是一件有趣的事，有些人認(rèn)為上大學(xué)是為了將來能找到一份好的工作或獲取一個(gè)較高的社會(huì)地位?，F(xiàn)在請(qǐng)以WhyWeGotoCollege為題寫一篇短文，陳述你對(duì)這一觀點(diǎn)的看法。次數(shù)100-200。WhyWegotoCollegeWhydowegotocollege?Differentpeoplehavedifferentpointsofview.Somestudentsmayhavemanycolorfuldreamsandregardedstudyinginuniversitiesasthemostinterestingpartoftheirlives.Infact,themostinterestinglifeoftendisappointsthem.Somestudentsthinkgoodjobsandhigherpaywillcertainlyresultfromacollegeeducation.Yetaftergraduation,manyofthemfindthatthejobsaren’ttheonestheylikeandthepaysarenotashighastheyhaveexpected.ButIthink,oneoftheimportantreasonswhytheystillhaveastrongattractionisthattheyprovidegoodchancesforthosewhoareeagertolearnmoretoservetheirmotherlandbetterinthefuture.II題目：Foryears,peopleholdanopinionthathasadecentdiplomaisthebestwaytosuccess,butnowadays,moreandmoregraduatesarefacingproblemsoffindingajob,especiallyduringfinancialcrises.Thussomeonepointedoutthatonecanstillbesuccessfulwithoutgoingtocollege;BillGateswasabestexample.Asforseniorhighstudents,,we'refacingCollegeEntranceExams,whichisvitaltoourfuture.Therefore,isittheonlywayouttogotocollege?IsittheOnlyWayouttoGotoCollege?

Asweknow,mostofthemiddleschoolstudentstodayhavethesamedream,togotocollege.Tobeacollegestudentnotonlymeansthatyoucangetfurthereducationbutalsomeansagreatsuccess.However,thequestioniswhethergoingtoacollegeistheonlywaytosuccess.Myansweris“No”.Idisagreetotheopinionforthefollowingreasons.

Firstofall,gettingintoauniversitydoesnotnecessarilymeanthatyouhavewoneverything.AfamousEnglishsayinggoes,"Onecanneverbetoooldtolearn".Youstillneedstudyveryhardtogetthebachelor,masterorevendoctordegreetoachievegreatersuccess.

Next,besidescollegesoruniversities,youstillhavelotsofwaystoachievesuccess.Inhistory,anumberoffamousscientistsandscholars,whodidnotmanagetogetintocolleges,stillmadegreatcontributionstohumanbeings.Whywasthat?Becausethedeterminationtheyhadledthemtothesuccess.

Finally,Ithinkthemostimportantthingfortoday'ssocietyisnotadiplomabutthepersonalability.Nowadays,weareallfacingthechallengesofthemarketeconomysowhatisessentialtodayisnotadecenteducationyoureceivedbuthowsoonyoucandealwiththedifficultiesofallkinds.

Asthesayinggoes,allroadsleadtoRome.Letusdroptheoldconceptaboutthecollegediplomaandembraceanevenbri