高中英語新高考-英語寫作進(jìn)階指導(dǎo)：整融同題仿寫法（附實例）

高中英語新高考-英語寫作進(jìn)階指導(dǎo)：整融同題仿寫法（附實例）很久以來，我一直思考的是，如何培養(yǎng)學(xué)生寫地道、高質(zhì)量的作文？按照流行的思路就是：作文續(xù)寫。我一般的做法就是提供詞塊，話題引導(dǎo)，思維激發(fā)。但是我還是很困惑，體現(xiàn)如下：1.學(xué)生思維的激發(fā)陷入俗套，所謂思維模板化。2.學(xué)生的詞塊陷入孤立化，即詞塊不知道什么語境下使用。同時很多人的做法就是：閱讀語篇，話題續(xù)寫。也就是先讓學(xué)生閱讀，然后討論問題，然后就流行的話題進(jìn)行拓展寫作。理論上說，這里是沒有多大的問題的，但是實踐中，我們學(xué)生寫作也沒有本質(zhì)提高，因為學(xué)生的批判思維究竟還是囿于自己的思維圈子，另外，所用的詞塊還是自己的固有的知識。而我需要解決的：1.英語批判思維或邏輯思維究竟如何有效培養(yǎng)？2.英語詞塊究竟如何高質(zhì)量輸入？但是我有一天突然發(fā)現(xiàn)：我不知覺間陷入一個錯誤的圈子，我只是在想著教，卻忘記了如何學(xué)。我在做任何一個教學(xué)實驗的時候，我問自己：我能用我的理論解決我自己的問題嗎？也就是說，我教給學(xué)生這樣寫作方法，我自己是這樣學(xué)的嗎？答案是否定的。我把教和學(xué)的理論隔離開了。我自己是這樣學(xué)的：

先大量閱讀同一個話題很多文章，譬如我若遇到了手機癥的文字，我會同時搜集數(shù)篇這樣的文字，然后分析作者行文邏輯。最后，我會整理這些同類話題下的很多好詞好句，然后他們的邏輯思維整合，再插入自己的新觀點，著手寫作。寫作過程中，我會融合摘抄的那些好詞好句。我相信一點：英語不是我們的母語，我們需要去模仿人家的英語思維和詞塊來寫作。我們天天鼓勵各種學(xué)生思維突破和寫作輸出，但問題是，這種思維究竟和英語邏輯思維有多大的契合度？學(xué)生寫作的輸出質(zhì)量有多高？是不是句子正確，沒有離題，用到一些可能是陳詞濫調(diào)的高級詞塊就可以了？

我認(rèn)為初級階段的英語寫作只能以模仿為主（我自己也是處在初級向中級過度階段）。等到了高級階段，我們的邏輯思維充分成熟了，就可以跳出這個框子，提出自己的獨立批判思維，同時隨時調(diào)取各種備用詞庫。由此，我的教學(xué)思路如下：【范例說明】由于篇幅有限，我且以一篇文章為例，來自雜志。我整合的寫作如下。讀者都上去會覺得佳詞跌出，且邏輯清晰。原因很簡單，我不過就是整合了原作者的思維和詞塊。本質(zhì)上就是：透析原文的英語思維，整理其中的佳詞佳句，插入自己的點滴思維，融合詞句。【作文示范】Wechat,initssimplestform,wasawaytoconnectyoutoyourfriendsandfamilymembers.Butnow,itistheotherwayaround.Ithasturnedmeoffandbecomeaworldofself-absorption,avirtualsoapboxforpeopletocomplainaboutverytrivialthingsandaplacetopostuneducatedcommentsonreligionandpolitics.Iendedupquietlydeactivatingmyaccountanduninstallingit.WiththearrivalofSmartphonescomesthegenerationwhocarrytheInternetintheirbackpocketorpurseviaSmartphones.AttheforefrontofsocialmediaisWechatonwhichhonestsharinghasgivenwaytooversharing.Ironically,wejustcreatepersonasofourselvesonlinewhereweshareopenlywhatwewanttoshare,makingourlivesseemsbetter(orworse)thantheyaretogain“l(fā)ikes,”notfriends.Meanwhile,allkindsofannoyingadvertisementsfloodinmysocialmediaandgnawatuswheneverwetakeoutthecellphones.Therefore,Ifeelsafeinsayingsocialmediaisactuallyquiteanti-social.Isn’titridiculoustoseeatableofpeoplewiththeirnosesburiedintotheirphonesleavingnoroomtoseewhatisgoingonintheperipheral?Ofcourse,it’swonderfulyoucanshareyourpictureswithyourfamilyscatteredallacrossthecountryorworldtorelievetheirconcerns.Butbeingoverlyconsumedwithlettingothersknowwhatyouaredoingorwhereyouarewilldepriveyouofthechancetoappreciatewhatishappeningaroundandwhoyouaresharingthatmomentwithinreallife.Whenyoustopupdatingtheworldoneveryfacetofyourlife,youwillrealizehowmuchtimethatfreesuptolive.【原文】WhyIDeactivated[1]MyFacebookAccountByHollySmen

美國的臉書、推特，中國的微博、微信……各類社交媒體層出不窮。隨著社交平臺的發(fā)展，它們也從原本與親朋好友溝通的工具變成了展示自己的平臺。親友相聚時最主要的事已不再是閑談交流，而是以“保存美好回憶”之美名，低頭沉迷于拍照、上傳和分享。你是否也正沉溺其中，又是否曾想到過離開呢？In2004,Ibeganmyfirstyearofcollege,whichwasalsothebirthyearofFacebook.

EverythingchangedwhenFacebookarrived.Picturescouldbesharedandtagged;youcouldbeGoogled,andyoucouldeasilycheckuponanex.[2](Rememberthedaysofneverknowingwhathisnewgirlfriendlookedlike?Yeah,meeither.)

Unliketoday,Facebook,initssimplestform,wasawaytoconnectyoutoyourclassmatesandotherfellowcollegestudents.IusedFacebooktocheckifthecuteguyImetwas“inarelationship[3].”IusedittogroupchatwithclassmatesaboutanupcomingstudygrouportocatchthehomeworkImissedifIwasabsentfrom[4]classthatday.

BeforeFacebookwasFacebookitwas“TheFacebook.”Irecalltypingintomycomputer(yes,therewasnomobilesitebecausephoneshadn’tbecome“smart”justyet),.Youneededcollegeemailaddresstoevenjoin.Beforethedaysofparents“friending”you,Facebookhadatargetedpurpose:[5]toconnectyoutorealpeople.Now,11yearslater,InolongerhaveaFacebookaccount,andIhaven’tloggedinsince2011.

FacebookandIhadagoodrun,butIwasturnedoffwhenitstoppedbeingaplacetochatwithpeopleIknewandwenttoclasswith,andturnedintoaworldofself-absorption,avirtualsoapboxforpeopletocomplainaboutverytrivialthingsandaplacetopostuneducatedcommentsonreligionandpolitics.[6]FromwhatIhearnow,aperson’snewsfeednolongerevenresembleswhatitoncewas,andisnowahubofnewslinksandadswith751ofyourclosest“friends”tellingyouitis,infact,snowingoutside(incaseyouareinawindowlessbunkersomewhere).[7]

Itwasmypersonalpreferencetoremovemyself.Iquietlydeactivatedmyaccountandhaven’tlookedbacksince.Ihadtodisconnectfromthisvirtualworldthatwasalwaysconnecting.YouwouldhavethoughtIhaddecidedtobecomearecluse[8]atthetimeIshutdownmyaccount.

Iwouldbeoutandfriendswouldcomplaintheycouldnot“checkmein”tothebarormoviesorrestaurantwewerefrequenting[9].Theyweregenuinelyupsettheycouldn’ttagmeontheInternet,eventhoughIwasstillrightbesidethem.Ibegantowonder,ifamemoryismade,andasmartphoneisn’ttheretocapture[10]it,doesthememoryexist?

SincethearrivalofSmartphones,youcantaketheInternetwithyou.Younolongerhavetowaittogetsomewheretologon,youarealwayswiredin[11].CarryingtheInternetinyourbackpocketorpursehasledtothisgeneration,includingmyself,becomingaddictedtosocialmedia,andFacebookwasattheforefrontofitall.[12]

Weareaddictedtoover-sharing,butit’snotevenhonestsharing.Wehavecreatedpersonasofourselvesonlinewhereweshareopenlywhatwewanttoshare,makingourlivesseemsbetter(orworse)thantheyaretogain“l(fā)ikes,”notfriends.[13]Infact,asIsitheretypingthis,IamhopingsomeonewillreadthisontheInternetsomewhereand“l(fā)ike”it.

Now,technologyisgreat.Socialmediaisnecessaryatthispoint,butIenjoyitsmalldoses[14].IwasneverthepersontoupdatetheInternetoneverymoveImadethroughouttheday(“Goodmorning!”“Brushingmyteeth.”“Ugh,traffic.”“Happyhour!”“Goodnightworld”).

Forevery“con”ofsocialmedia,therearefive“pros.”[15]Itisgreatwhenmenandwomeninthemilitaryaredeployed[16]andtheycanstillaccesstheirsocialmediaaccountsandkeepintouchwithlovedones.It’swonderfulyoucanshareyourchild’spictureswithyourfamilyscattered[17]allacrossthecountryorworld.Mywritingwouldnothavethereadership[18]itcurrentlydoeswithouttheexistenceofsocialmedia.Irealizethis,andIwouldneverhopeforanalternateuniversewheretherewasnoonenamedMarkZuckerberg[19].

MyissuewithFacebookcomesfromthefactthatsocialmediaisn’treally“social”atallanymore.Atfirstthought,ourabilitytoconnecttoeveryonearoundus,albeit[20]anover-connectionattimes,shouldhavenaturallyturnedusintomoresocialcreatures.However,forsome,itseemstobemorphinginto[21]somethingentirelydifferent.Wearenotbecomingmoresocialwhereitmatters;wearebecomingmoresocialwherewewanttomatter:intheeyesofcompletestrangersontheInternet.

Ifeelsafeinsayingsocialmediaisactuallyquiteanti-social.Wearegainingfollowers,butlosingfriends.Wearesoover-connectedtooneanother,wedisconnectwiththepeoplewhomatter.Wearewirelessbutwiredin,leavingnoroomtoseewhatisgoingonintheperipheral[22].WeFaceTime,onlynotwiththepersonwearesittingacrossfromatdinner.Ithasgottentothepointwherewordslike“phubbing”(snubbingahumanbeinginfavoroftechnology)[23]havebeencreatedtodiagnosethisaddictiontoourphones.

Whenwasthelasttimeyouwenttoarestaurant,lookedaroundanddidn’tseeatableofpeoplewiththeirnosesburiedintotheirphones?

Somearesooverlyconsumedwith[24]lettingothersknowwhattheyaredoingorwheretheyare,theydon’teventakethetimetoappreciatewhatishappeningaroundthemandwhotheyaresharingthatmomentwithinreallife.

Iamnotsayingrevert[25]backtooldways;Iwouldneverwantto.It’safoolishnotiontoevensayweshouldgobacktoatimebeforetheuprisingoftechnology.However,everysooften[26],putyourdevicesdownandfocusonwhatisinfrontofyou.Experiencethings,climbmountains,jumpintheoceanorgoforawalk.Shareanactualconversationwithsomeonewithoutemoticonsandhashtags[27].Whenyoustopupdatingtheworldoneveryfacetofyourlife,youwillrealizehowmuchtimethatfreesup[28]tolive.【課堂筆記】1.deactive:

停止使用，注銷。2.tag:

貼標(biāo)簽；checkupon:

調(diào)查。3.inarelationship:

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