讀后續(xù)寫：圣誕節(jié)的神秘禮物 講義-高三英語(yǔ)寫作專項(xiàng)

【原題重現(xiàn)】高三期中考試讀后續(xù)寫-圣誕節(jié)的神秘禮物閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Iwasasinglemotherinmy30swholiveddownandoutwithmydaughterPeggyinasmallapartment,strugglinghardtomakeourneedsmeet.Oneday,Iheadedtothedowntownforaninterview.Isatdowninthestreetcar,andthereagainsttheseatwasabeautifulsilkumbrellawithasilverhandledecoratedwithgoldscrolls,amongwhichtherewasanamecarved.Onimpulse(沖動(dòng))Ideterminedtofindtheownermyself.Igotoffthestreetcarintheheavyrainandthankfullyopenedtheumbrellatoprotectmyself.ThenIsearchedatelephonebookforthename,Ifounditimmediatelyandcalledit,waitingpatiently,andthenaladyanswered.“Yes,”shesaidinsurprise,withextremeexcitement.“Itwasmyumbrellawhichhadbeenstolenayearago.”SoappealingwasherpleasurethatIforgotIwaslookingforajobandwentdirectlytohersmallhouse.Shetooktheumbrella,withtearyeyes,explainingwith

choking

voicethattheumbrellawasgivenbyherparents,nowdead.Herhappinessatretrieving(找回)thisspecialpossessionwassuchthattohaveacceptedherrewardwouldhave

spoiled

something,soIrefusedherofferandleft.Thefollowingmonthswerehard.Icanonlyobtaintemporaryemployment,forasmallsalary.Whatwasworse,IhadjustlostmylastjobbeforeChristmas,

withonlyfifteendollarsleft.

Unlessamiraclehappened,IwouldbehomelessinJanuary,foodlessandjobless.Ihadprayedsteadilyforweeks,andtherehadbeennoanswerbutthiscoldnessanddarkness.TheairwasfullofChristmasmerriment,withthebellsringingandchildrenshoutinginthebitterduskoftheevening.ButthereshouldbenoChristmasforme,Iknew,nogifts,noremembrancewhatsoever.Thinkingofthis,Icouldn’tcontrolmytearsonmywayhome,butImanagedasmilesocouldgreetmylittledaughter.Sheopenedthedoorformeandthrewherselfinmyarms,screamingjoyouslyanddemandingdesirablyforherChristmasgift.ThereIstood,frozen,overwhelmedbymisery.Suddenly,thedoorbellrangandPeggyrushedtoanswerit,callingthatitmustbeSantaClaus.Suddenly,anoteattachedtoonepackagecaughtmyeyes.【菲常視角】好詞好句1.strugglehardtomakeourneedsmeet努力使收支平衡2.liveddownandoutwithsb

和某人一起過著窮困潦倒的生活3.withasilverhandledecoratedwithgoldscrolls傘把上裝飾著金色的畫卷4.Onimpulse沖動(dòng)5.insurprise,withextremeexcitement很驚訝又極度興奮6.explainwith

chokedvoice

用沙啞的聲音解釋著7.Herhappinessatretrieving(找回)thisspecialpossessionwas

suchthat

tohaveacceptedherrewardwouldhave

spoiled

something

她如此高興找回這個(gè)特殊的物品以至于她認(rèn)為給她獎(jiǎng)品會(huì)破壞掉一些東西8.praysteadily不斷地持續(xù)地祈禱

9.TheairwasfullofChristmasmerriment,withthebellsringingandchildrenshoutinginthebitterduskoftheevening.空氣中充滿圣誕節(jié)的快樂，鈴鐺響著，孩子們?cè)谶@個(gè)寒冷的傍晚尖叫著10.manageasmile強(qiáng)顏歡笑11.Sheopenedthedoorformeandthrewherselfinmyarms,screamingjoyouslyanddemandingdesirablyforherChristmasgift.ThereIstood,frozen,overwhelmedbymisery.她為我打開門，投入我的懷抱，高興地叫起來，急切地想要圣誕禮物。我僵在那里，充滿了悲傷。梳理原文(參考答案）Q1

WhatdidIseewhenIsatinthestreetcar?Thereagainsttheseatwasabeautifulsilkumbrellawithasilverhandledecoratedwithgoldscrolls,amongwhichtherewasanamecarved.Q2WhatdidIdealwiththeumbrella?Ireturnedittotheowner.Q3Howdidtheownerrespondtoher?Shewassurprisedandhappy.Q4Whatwasmylifelike?IwassufferingpovertyandwouldbehomelessinJanuary,foodlessandjobless.Q5Whatdidmydaughterneedbadlynow?ChristmasgiftswhichIcouldnotafford.分析續(xù)寫（參考答案）Para1Q1

Whowouldbeatthedoor?SantaClaus;Thedeliverman;nobodybutapileofpackagesQ2Whatwerethepackageslike?Theylookedattractiveandcolorfulindifferentsizesandwerewrappedinbeautifulpaperinaverydelicateandcautiousway.Q3HowdidIfeelwhenseeingthepackageinfrontofme?Ifeltamazedandstrangewhosepackagestheywereandwaswonderingwhethertheyweresenttomebymistake.Q4HowdidPeggyfeel?Shefeltveryexcitedandhappytoopenthegifts.Q5WhatwouldIdonext?Iwantedtodoublecheckwherethegiftcamefrom.Para2Q1

Whatwasonthenote?Alineofnicewritingonthenotesaid:“MerryChristmas!Theseareforyourreturningmyspecialumbrella!”Q2HowdidIfeelatthattime?Ichokedwithhappinessandastonishment,realizingthesegiftwerenotsentbymistakebutgiventomespecifically.Q3

Whatmaybeincludedinthegiftpackages?SomeChristmasgiftssuchasChristmastree,turkey,puddings,cakes,toysandsonon.Q4WhatwasPiggydoingandwhatwasthefamilyatmosphere?Thebellringingandthewholefamilytakingonacheerfulatmosphere,Peggywasbusyonhernewgift.Q5Howdiditmakeadifferencetomylife?Mylifebegantomakeachange:IreceivedacallfromcertaincompanywhichofferedmeafinesalaryandhelpedmeoutQ6Whatwastherealpurpose/themeofwritingtheessay?Tospeakhighlyofagooddeedandtellusalessonthat“onegoodturndeservesanother.”【線索構(gòu)思】Para1【打開門所見-Peggy反應(yīng)-尖叫，驚喜】Peggy’s

astonished

yell

rang

fromthedoor,

leavingmecuriousabout

whowascoming.【包裹是來自SantaClaus？或快遞員送包裹？或無人，很多包裹放在門口】？？？①Atthedoor

stood

aSantaClaus

whoheldseveralboxesofgifts,

wavingtoPeggyandmeandsendinghisbestwishestous.②Atthedoorstoodakindandyoungpostmanwhowarmlyexpressedhisbestwishestousandhandedboxesofdelicategiftstome.TheyoungpostmanhadleftbeforeIaskedhimwhosentthegifts.③HardlyhadIreachedthedoorwhenIsawamountainofpackagespilingupinfrontofthedoor,withnoonebeingthere.【孩子的反應(yīng)（動(dòng)作，神態(tài)等：喜出望外）】Jumpingwithjoyandexcitement/Hereyes

twinklingwith

greatexcitement,Peggyhelpedmetakethesegiftstothelivingroomand

waseagerto

opentheminstantly.【包裹的狀態(tài)和內(nèi)容-各色各樣，大大小小，精心包裝好的...】Withthegiftswrappedinthebeautifulpaperandribbonsallaroundthelivingroom,【我的反應(yīng)（好奇想要知道是誰送的,或者疑惑是不是送錯(cuò)了等,讓女兒暫時(shí)不要打開包裹）】I

wasseizedwithatotalconfusionabout

wherethegiftscamefromandeven

concerned

whethertheyweresent

bymistake,IaskedPeggynottoopenthematonceandhelpedmelookforanycluesonthegiftboxes.Para2

【紙條上內(nèi)容】？？？Alineofnicewritingonthenote

said:“MerryChristmas!Theseareforyourreturningmyspecialumbrella!”【我的反應(yīng)-感動(dòng)流淚，示意孩子可以打開禮物】Lookingatthosegiftsandmydaughter,withtears

blurring

myeyes,I

chokedwithunexpectedjoy

and

signalled

Peggytoopenthesegifts.Ifeltvery

appreciativeof

herkindnessand

generosity

fromtheladywithwhomeverIsharedmykindness.

【禮物的內(nèi)容，？？？家庭的氛圍】AChristmastree，itsdecorations,turkey,puddingsandsometoysforPeggy

rosebeforemyeyes,which

addedto

thewholefamily

festivalatmosphere.Mydaughter’sthrillingvoiceand

laughterlingeredaroundroom.【孩子和我的狀態(tài)，動(dòng)作】PeggydoveintodecoratingtheChristmastreewhileIwasbusyinpreparingfortheChristmasbigdinner.ThatChristmasevewouldremaininmymindandheartsforever.【我生活狀態(tài)的改變】AftertheChristmas,Ireceivedacallfromabigcompanywhichofferedmeafinesalaryandhelpedmeout.Itseemedthatmy

fate

beganto

makeabigchange

sincethatday.

【我的所思所想】EveryChristmas

remindsmeofthelady’sgenerosityandmyownkindness,

tellingme

theessence

ofthesaying“Onegoodturndeservesanother.”

【菲寫不可】MissTang讀后續(xù)寫Para1

Suddenly,thedoorbellrangandPeggyrushedtoanswerit,callingthatitmustbeSantaClaus.Peggy’s

astonished

yellrangfromthedoor,

leavingmecurious

about

whowascoming.

HardlyhadIreachedthedoorwhenIsawamountainofpackages

pilingup

infrontofthedoor,withnoonebeingthere.Hereyes

twinkling

withgreatexcitement,Peggyhelpedmetakethesegiftstothelivingroomand

waseagerto

opentheminstantly.Withthegiftswrappedinthebeautifulpaperandribbonsallover

thelivingroom,I

wasseizedwithatotalconfusionabout

wherethegiftscamefromandevenconcernedwhethertheyweresent

bymistake.SoIaskedPeggynottoopenthematonceandhelpedmelookforanycluesonthegiftboxes.(122)Para2

Suddenly,anoteattachedtoonepackagecaughtmyeyes.

Alineofnicewritingonthenote

said:“MerryChristmas!Theseareforyourreturningmyspecialumbrella!”Lookingatthosegiftsandmydaughter,

withtears

blurring

myeyes,I

choked

withunexpectedjoy

and

signalled

Peggytoopenthesegifts.AChristmastree，itsdecorations,turkey,puddingsandsometoysforPeggyrosebeforemyeyes,

which

addedto

thewholefamily

festivalatmosphere.I

feltvery

appreciativeof

herkindnessand

generosity

fromthelady

withwhomeverIsharedmykindness.(Peggy

doveintodecorating

theChristmastreewhileIwasbusyinpreparingfortheChristmasbigdinner).ThatChristmasevewould

remaininmymindandheartsforever.(117)(AftertheChristmas,Ireceivedacallfromabigcompanywhichofferedmeafinesalaryandhelpedmeout.Itseemedthatmy

fate

beganto

makeabigchange

sincethatday).EveryChristmas

remindsmeofthelady’sgenerosityandmyownkindness,tellingme

theessence

ofthesaying“

Onegoodturndeservesanother.”第一段，突然，門鈴響了，Peggy急忙去開門，說一定是圣誕老人。Peggy驚訝的叫喊聲從門口傳來，讓我好奇誰來了。我剛到門口，就看到門前堆積如山的包裹，沒有人在那里。Peggy興奮地眨著眼睛，她幫我把這些禮物拿到客廳，并急切地想馬上打開?？蛷d里到處都是用漂亮的紙和緞帶包著的禮物，我完全搞不清這些禮物是從哪里來的，甚至擔(dān)心它們是否是錯(cuò)寄的。所以我叫Peggy不要馬上打開它們，并幫我尋找禮品盒上的任何線索。(122)第二段，突然，一個(gè)包裹上的便條吸引了我的目光。便條上寫著一行漂亮的字：“圣誕快樂！這些禮物是因?yàn)槟阍?jīng)還給我一把特別的傘！”看著那些禮物和我的女兒，淚水模糊了我的眼睛，因?yàn)檫@個(gè)意外的喜悅而哽咽起來，示意Peggy打開這些禮物。一棵圣誕樹、圣誕樹上的裝飾品、火雞、布丁和一些給Peggy的玩具出現(xiàn)在我眼前，這給整個(gè)家庭增添了節(jié)日的氣氛。我非常感激這位女士的仁慈和慷慨以及我對(duì)她的善意。（當(dāng)我正忙著準(zhǔn)備圣誕大餐時(shí)，Peggy潛心裝飾圣誕樹。）。那個(gè)平安夜將永遠(yuǎn)留在我的腦海和心中。（圣誕節(jié)過后，我接到一家大公司的電話，該公司給我提供了一份優(yōu)厚的薪水并幫助我度過了難關(guān)。從那天起，我的命運(yùn)似乎開始發(fā)生重大變化）。每個(gè)圣誕節(jié)都讓我想起這位女士的慷慨和我自己的善良，告訴我“善有善報(bào)”這句話的精髓?！竟俜椒段?/p>