讀后續(xù)寫：The+first+hunting+講義高三英語寫作專項

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。Hisfathersaid,“Allset,boy?”andJeremynodded,pickinguphisgunwithawkwardglovedhands.Hisfatherpushedopenthedoorandtheywentoutintothefreezingdawntogether.OrdinarilyJeremywouldtakeouthiscameratorecordthescenery,butnotthismorning.Thiswasthemorning,particularlysacred,when14-year-oldJeremywouldgoduckhuntingforthefirsttime.However,hehatedit,andhadhatedthewholeideasincehisfatherboughthimagun.ButhewasdeterminedtogothroughwithitHelovedhisfather,andwantedhisapprovalmorethananythingintheworld.Theycametoanarrowandhiddenplacefacingthebay.Jeremysatdownnervouslyandwaited.Toreducefear,hetookapictureofhisfatheragainstthecleanwater.Thenheputthecamerahurriedlyonthegrassandpickeduphisgun.Jeremygothisgunready.'TIIletyoushootfirst,〃hisfathersaid,loadinghisowngun."Youknow,Tvebeenwaitingforalongtimeforthisday.Justthetwoofus…〃Hebrokeoff,bendingforward,eyesnarrowed."There'sasmallflightheadingthiswaynow.Keepyourheaddown.Illgiveyoutheword.”Thesuncameout.Jeremycouldseeeverythingclearly:hisfather'sface,tenseandeager;thewhitefrostonthegun.Hisheartwasbeatingwildly.Heprayed,"Don'tletthemcome,please!〃Buttheykeptcoming."Fourblack/7hisfathersaid.Z/Onemallard（綠頭鴨）."Highabove,Jeremyheardthepulsingwhistleofwingsastheflightbegantocircle.Themallardwasleading,hisfeetdroppingdown,reachingforthesilver-coloredwater.Closer,closer...z,Getset,〃hisfatherwhispered./zNow!〃criedJeremyfsfather."Takethem!〃Jeremyfelthisbodyobey.Hestoodup,holdingthegun.Inthesameinstant,thewildduckssawthegunnersandflew,“Shoot!"saidsomethingsharplyinJeremy'sbrain.Butupwentthemallardhigherstill,untilsuddenlyhecaughtthefullforceofthewindandflewaway,outofrange.注意：.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;.應(yīng)使用5個以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。Paragraph1:Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,“Whydidn'tyoushoot?”Paragraph2:ToJeremy'ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim.主要人物：Jeremy喜歡攝影、討厭打獵、愛父親、渴望得到父親的認(rèn)可Father喜歡打獵、期待跟兒子一起打獵（以為兒子也喜歡打獵）時間地點:時間：atdawn寸苗述：freezing;sacred;thesuncomeout;thewhitefrostonthegun.地點：nearthecleanwater幫助：戶外情景運用環(huán)境描寫，呼應(yīng)時間地點相關(guān)描述細(xì)節(jié)shoot的雙重含義：shoot一語雙關(guān)含義1：射擊；含義2：拍攝文章主要矛盾/問題表面上的矛盾：Jeremy是否該開槍打獵深層次的矛盾：1）Jeremy該堅持自己的興趣（拍照）還是為了獲得爸爸的認(rèn)可而選擇打獵2）父親和兒子的相處之道：父親喜歡的東西，兒子是否一定要聽從和喜歡有第二段開頭可推出第一段的內(nèi)容：第二段開頭ToJeremy'ssurprise可知，第一段結(jié)尾可以寫Jeremy講完自己的為什么不開槍的原因后的心理描寫，他以為父親會生氣。詞語積累：請找出以下中文對應(yīng)的英文表達(dá)。續(xù)寫題目：.推開門:pushopenthedoor.極冷的:freezing.第——次:forthefirsttime.完成（或做完）艱難（或令人不快）的事：gothroughwith.（給武器）裝彈藥：load.他停止說話，向前彎下腰，瞇起眼睛：Hebrokeoff,bendingforward,eyesnarrowed..緊張的:tense.翅膀搏動的呼嘯聲:pulsingwhistleofwings.（聲音）突然而響亮地：sharply參考范文：.從…中判斷：judgefrom.勃然（大怒）：explode.一想到…某人就有一種…感覺：Atthethoughtof...,sbwasovercomewithasenseof..….眼里閃著光，嘴角露出微笑：Eyesglintandlipscurveintoabigsmile.把某人攬入懷中：gathersbintoone'sarms.溜達(dá)、散步：stroll.模糊的雙眼：mistyeyes.沐浴在燦爛的陽光下：bebathedintheradiantglowofsun.鳥鳴聲:thechirpsofthebirdsPossibleversionl:Paragraph1:Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,7/Whydidnrtyoushoot?”"BecausetheyweresoalivevJeremyexplained,withhislipsshaking.Hesatonthegrass,buriedhisfaceinhishandsandburstintotears.Allhopeofpleasinghisfatherwasgone.Foralongmoment,hisfatherwassilent.ThenJeremyfelthimkneeldownbesidehimandpathimontheshouldergently.Suddenly,hisfathershouted,nGetready!HFeelingcoldmetaltouchinghishand,Jeremylookedup.Paragraph2:ToJeremy'ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim./zHerecomesanotherduckAbeautifulwildduckflewcloser,itswhitebreastshininginthesunshine.Jeremyhelduphiscameraimmediately/7Igothim廣Abroadsmilelituphisface.Hisfathergavehimathumbs-up.Jeremydiscoveredtherewasnodisappointmentinhiseyes,onlyprideandlove，"It'sokay,son.Iloveshooting,butthatdoesn'tmeanyouhaveto.HHepausedandsaid,Z/Couldyouteachmehowtousethatcamera?nPossibleversion2:Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,/7Whydidnrtyoushoot?”"I,I'msorry/7Jeremymurmuredwithhisheadlow,beingtotallyataloss（獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)，非謂語動詞）.Hedidwanttoshoottheduckandgethisfather'sapproval.（強(qiáng)調(diào)句,回扣原文）However,whenheheldhisgunandaimedattheflyingmallard（學(xué)以致用，新概念3L9）,hismindwentblank—heknewhecouldn'tkillthebeautifulcreatureinsuchacruelway.Hestruggledforalongtime.Finally,hegatheredallhisbraveryandlookedupintohisfather'scrosseyes."Dad,"hesaid,nIhategunsandkillings.CanIquithunting?"（反映主題：人與動物和諧相處）Hisfatherwentsilentandturnedaround.ToJeremy'ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim.Hetookoverhiscameraunbelievablywithhismouthopenedwide.（獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)）Amusedbyhisaction,非謂語動詞hisfatherlookedathimaffectionately（學(xué)以致用,新概念3L9）andexplained,nIknowyoulovephotography,however,Iwantyoutotakeove