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導(dǎo)讀本單元的主題是用英語談?wù)撟兓?通過教材提供的語言材料，同學(xué)們將學(xué)會用usedtobe/usedtodo這類短語展開描述，繼而表達(dá)自己的成長變化，包括外貌、性格、心理上的變化以及在生活和學(xué)習(xí)中所取得的進(jìn)步等方面.與本單元相關(guān)聯(lián)的話題很多，如ThegreatestchangeIhaveevermade,IhavemadeprogressinmyEnglishlearning等.題目回放我們的每一次變化都見證了我們的成長.請以ThegreatestchangeIhaveevermade為題,根據(jù)要點(diǎn)和要求用英語寫一篇短文.寫作要點(diǎn)：.變化是什么；.變化是如何發(fā)生的；.變化后有何感受.寫作要求：1.文中不要出現(xiàn)你的真實(shí)姓名和校名；2,詞數(shù)90左右.審題指引1審體裁：敘述成長變化，屬于記敘文.2審內(nèi)容：講述自己最大的變化和由此帶來的改變.3審時(shí)態(tài)：主體時(shí)態(tài)為一般過去時(shí).4審人稱：以第一人稱為主.框架設(shè)計(jì)開頭：直接點(diǎn)題，引出話題.中間：描述自己經(jīng)歷的事情和由此給自己帶來的改變.結(jié)尾：說明變化后的感受.段落素描.Firstparagraph:Everybodyissuretochange,andsoamI.However,mygreatestchangeis...(...).Thebody:Irememberwhen...Luckily...Gradually...Surprisingly...Thanksto...(...).Lastparagraph:Thanksto...(Justasthesayinggoes...)(...)范本淬煉AThegreatestchangeIhaveevermadeEverybodyissuretochange,and①soamI.However,thegreatestchangeIhaveevermadeismygradualloveofreadingbooks.WhenIwasalittlechild,Ididnotusetoreadbooks,forIthoughtitwasboring.②Afterwards,mymothernoticedthis,andshestartedtoreadbookswithme.③Gradually,Ibegantolovereading.WhenIwasreading,IfeltasifIwastalkingwithawiseman.Thankstomymother,Ihavebecomeinterestedinreading.Indeed,readinghaschangedmealot.Ihave④acquiredmoreknowledge,andmylifeismorecolorful.①soamI,用倒裝句,很自然地切入主題.afterwards,之后.③用gradually,準(zhǔn)確描述出喜歡閱讀的過程.④acquire,獲取.亮點(diǎn)點(diǎn)評L本文圍繞主題描述自己的某一改變，用三個(gè)段落呈現(xiàn)，段落布局清晰..文中句式多變，定語從句、狀語從句、動名詞充當(dāng)賓語和主語等運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)..句子之間銜接自然，恰當(dāng)運(yùn)用了afterwards,gradually,thanksto等，使文章讀起來較為順暢.BThegreatestchangeIhaveevermadeNodoubt,everyoneissuretochange,and?soamI.However,thegreatestchange②Ihaveevermadeismygradualloveofreading.IrememberwhenIwasalittlechild,Iusedtoshownointerestinreadingsimplybecauseitwasboring.Noticingthis,mymother③thesignificanceoftoldmeaboutandstartedtoreadbookswithme.Gradually,Iwasattractedbybooks,④whichledmeintoanewworld.Whilereading,Ifelt⑤asiftalkingwithawiseman.Infact,readingbroughtmemuchknowledge,andmademylifecolorfulandjoyful.Thankstomymother'shelp,I(6)amusedtoreading,andIbenefitalotfromit.①so引導(dǎo)倒裝句.②Ihaveevermade是定語從句，修飾change.thesignificanceofreading,reading,閱讀的重要性.?which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句.⑤asiftalkingwithawiseman,仿佛在和一個(gè)有智慧的人對話.⑥beusedtoreading,習(xí)慣于讀書.亮點(diǎn)點(diǎn)評.本文用三段描述自己的改變，段落清晰，層次分明..本文以Nodoubt開頭引出話題，句式多樣，富于變化,如運(yùn)用了定語從句、賓語從句、伴隨狀語等..用詞豐富，靈活運(yùn)用了豐富多樣的詞匯和短語，如gradual,usedto,shownointerestin,significance,o,colorful,joyful,benefitalotfrom等，給文章增加亮點(diǎn)..各種銜接語運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)，如nodoubt,however,gradually,infact,thanksto等,使句子和句子之間的連接自然流暢，上下文聯(lián)系更緊密.與上一篇文章相比，這篇文章語言表現(xiàn)力更強(qiáng)，句式更豐富，內(nèi)容更充實(shí).佳作賞析IhavemadeprogressinmyEnglishlearningIusedtobepooratEnglish,?especiallyEnglishreadingandwriting.Thebiggestproblemwas②thatafterreadinganEnglishpassage,Icouldnotfullyunderstandit,whichmademefeeldepressed.③WiththehelpofmyEnglishteacher,IkeptreadingEnglishstoriesinsteadofjustgivingup.Besides,IpracticedEnglishwritingbykeepinganEnglishjournaleveryday.Gradually,ImadeprogressinEnglishreadingandwriting,andgainedconfidenceinmyself.NowIrealize④thataslongasIfaceuptomyweaknessesandendeavortoovercomethem,Iwillbesuccessful.①especially,尤其，特別是.②thatafterreading…,是表語從句.③withthehelpof…，在的幫助下.④that…,此處賓語從句中帶有aslongas引導(dǎo)的條件狀語從句.亮點(diǎn)點(diǎn)評L本文圍繞主題，描述了自己改變的過程.段落明晰，富有邏輯..文中恰當(dāng)運(yùn)用銜接語，如especially,besides,gradually等，使文章銜接自然..文中用詞豐富,使用了usedto,depressed,confidence等詞語..本文句式多樣，運(yùn)用了表語從句、定語從句、賓語從句等從句.BShoppingonlineAtpresent,@peoplehavechangedtheirwaysofshopping,andshoppingonlinehasbecomeanimportantpartoftheirlives.②Comparedwiththetraditionalwayofshopping,shoppingonlineisconvenient,foritsavesmuchtime.Justusingaphoneoracomputer,wecanbuy③whateverwewantwithoutgoingoutdoors.Besides,shoppingonlinecansaveourmoneybecausethegoodsonlineareusually④cheaperthanthoseinofflinestores.ThankstotheInternet,peoplehavemorewaysofshopping.①此處用兩個(gè)現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)引出主題，時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用恰當(dāng).②comparedwith,是過去分詞短語充當(dāng)狀語.③whateverwewant,是賓語從句.④cheaperthan,是形容詞的比較級.亮點(diǎn)點(diǎn)評L本文圍繞網(wǎng)上購物這個(gè)主題，描述了現(xiàn)代購物方式，反映了我們?nèi)粘Ｉ畹淖兓?.本文布局合理，邏輯清晰.第一段引出話題，第二段通過比較的方式描述網(wǎng)上購物的優(yōu)點(diǎn),最后一段總結(jié)和照應(yīng)..文中段落之間和句子之間的銜接較為恰當(dāng),使用了atpresent,besides,thanksto等詞語連接前后句和上下文..文章句式比較豐富，如運(yùn)用了過去分詞和現(xiàn)在分詞充當(dāng)狀語、動名詞充當(dāng)主語，以及原因狀語從句和形容詞比較級等，增強(qiáng)了文章的語言表現(xiàn)力.CGreatchangesinmycityOverthepastfewyears,greatchanges①havetakenplaceinmycity.Theroadsinmycityusedtobenarrowandcrowded.Thehousesandbuildingswereoldandsmall.Moreover,theairwasdirty.Theriverbesidemyhouse②waspolluted,andtherewasmuchrubbishinit.③However,thingshavechanged.Nowwideandcleanroads④canbeseeneverywhere,andwecanchoosedifferentkindsoftransportationtogoanywhere.Besides,tallbuildings⑤havesprungupinthecity.Mostofushavemovedtobeautifulbighouses.Moreover,theairisfresher.Thankstothegovernment,mycityhaschangedalot,andthepeopleherearelivingahappylife.①havetakenplace是現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)，時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用準(zhǔn)確.②waspolluted是一般過去時(shí)的被動語態(tài)，運(yùn)用恰當(dāng).③however,是銜接語，運(yùn)用準(zhǔn)確.④canbeseeneverywhere,是情態(tài)動詞的被動語態(tài).⑤springup,聳立.亮點(diǎn)點(diǎn)評.本文通過對比描寫了一座城市的變化，段落清晰，結(jié)構(gòu)合理..文中時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)運(yùn)用準(zhǔn)確，表達(dá)清晰.3,用詞豐富,如使用了choose,differentkindsoftransportation,springup等,使文章讀起來生動、流暢.素材寶庫.好詞妙語beawareofthesignificanceofreading認(rèn)識到閱讀的重要性sparenoefforttodosth.不遺余力地做某事achieveadream實(shí)現(xiàn)夢想usedtohaveshorthair以前留短發(fā)outgoingandactive夕卜向和7舌潑fallinlovewithsports愛上運(yùn)動themostimportantchange最重要的變化greatchangeshavetakenplace發(fā)生了巨大變化inmyfreetime在我的空閑時(shí)間里spendmoretimereadingbooksinsteadofplayingcomputergames把更多時(shí)間花在讀書而不是玩電腦游戲上especially尤其.提分佳句Isparednoefforttoachievemydream.我不遺余力地實(shí)現(xiàn)我的夢想.Sheusedtohaveshorthair,butnowshehaslonghair.以前她留短頭發(fā)，但現(xiàn)在她留長頭發(fā)了.Ihavegreatlychanged,andbecomeoutgoingandactive.我已經(jīng)有了很大變化，同時(shí)也變得外向和活潑了.ThegreatestchangeIhavemadeisthatIhavefalleninlovewithsports.我做出的最大改變就是愛上了運(yùn)動.Thisisthemostimportantchangebecauseitmakesmylifebetterthanitisusedtobe.這是最重要的變化，因?yàn)樗沟梦业纳畋纫郧昂玫枚?Howtimeflies!Greatchangeshavetakenplaceinmyhometowninthelastfewyears.時(shí)光飛逝！在過去的幾年里，我的家鄉(xiāng)發(fā)生了巨大的變化.Inmyfreetime,Iusuallyspendmoretimereadingbooksinsteadofplayingcomputergames.在我的空閑時(shí)間里,我通常把更多的時(shí)間花在讀書上而不是玩電腦游戲上.Thereisalwayssomethingunforgettableinmylife,especiallythestorybetweenmyfriendsandme.我的生活中總是有難以忘懷的東西，尤其是發(fā)生在我的朋友和我之間的故事.寫作預(yù)熱句式變換Ibegantobecomemoreindependent.Thisisthegreatestchangeformethisyear.(用表語從句改寫句子)Mymotherencouragedme.Ibecamebraverandmoreconfident.(用thanksto改寫句子)Anotherbigchangeisthatmanytallbuildingshaveappearedinthetown.另一個(gè)大的改變是居住環(huán)境大大改善了.（根據(jù)中文提示仿寫句子）Thecityissmallbutbeautiful.ItliesinthesouthofChina,(用which替換It,改為含非限制性定語從句的復(fù)合句)Ilikemyhometownbecauseitisneithertoohotnortoocold.(用Onereason...isthat…改寫句子)答案:l)ThegreatestchangeformethisyearisthatIbegantobecomemoreindependent.Thankstomymother'sencouragement,Ibecamebraverandmoreconfident.Anotherbigchangeisthatthelivingconditionshavegreatlyimproved.4)Thecity,whichliesinthesouthofChina,issmallbutbeautiful.OnereasonIlikem