高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫訓(xùn)練6（bike+basket）學(xué)案

高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫訓(xùn)練6（bikebasket）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Twothingschangedmylife:mymotherandabikebasket.It'strue.Iwouldbeadifferentpersonifmymomhadn’tturnedabikebasketintoalifelessonIcarrywithmetoday—Alessonaboutthevalueofefforts.Mymotherandfatherwereunitedintheirwayofraisingchildren,butitmostlyfelltomymothertoactuallycarryitout.Lookingback,Ihonestlydon’tknowhowshedidit.Managingthefamilybudgetmusthavebeenaveryhardtask,butshemadeitlookeffortless.Ifwecomplainedaboutnothavingwhatotherkidsdid,we'dhearsomethinglike,“Idon'tcarewhatso-and-sogotforhisbirthday,youarenotgettingaTVinyourroomorabigparty.”Wehadtoearnourallowance(零用錢)bydoingchores(家務(wù))aroundthehouse.Icanstillrememberhowlongittooktopolishthelegsofourcoffeetable.Mybrotherscannodoubtrememberhoursspentcleaningthehouse.Wehadtokeeptrackofourbelongings,andifsomethingwaslost,itwasnotreplaced.Itwasonesummerday.Mymotherdrovemetothebikeshoptogetatirefixed—andthereitwasinthewindow—white,shiny,plasticanddecoratedwithflowers.ThebasketwinkedatmeandIknew—Iknew—Ihadtohaveit.“It'sbeautiful,”mymothersaidwhenIpointeditouttoher,“Whataneatbasket.”Itriedtoholdoffatfirst,butthenIcouldn'tstanditanylonger.“Mom,pleasecanIgetit?I'lldoextrachoresforaslongasyousay.I’lldoanything,butIlovethatbasket.Please,Mom,please?"1wasdesperate.“Youknow,"shesaid,gentlyrubbingmybackwhilewebothstaredatwhatIbelievedwasthecoolestthingever,“Ifyousaveupyoucouldbuythisyourself.”“BythetimeIearnenoughit’llbegone!Someoneelsewillbuyit.Please,Mom,please?”“Theremightbeanotherway,"shesaid.1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右“I’llbuyitnowbutyouonlygetitafter3weeksofdoublechores,”Momexplained.Finally,Igotmydreambasket,butsoonIsadlyfoundthesamebasketonothers’bikes!“I’llbuyitnowbutyouonlygetitafter3weeksofdoublechores,”Momexplained.Finally,Igotmydreambasket,butsoonIsadlyfoundthesamebasketonothers’bikes!I.讀主題主題：__________________________________________________Sample12020年新高考卷TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.Sample22021年八省適應(yīng)性測(cè)試Duringthispastyear,I'vehadthreeinstancesofcartrouble.Eachtimethesethingshappened,Iwassickofthewaymostpeoplehadn'tbotheredtohelp.Oneofthosetimes,IwasonthesideoftheroadforclosetothreehourswithmybigJeep.Iputsignsinthewindows,bigsignsthatsaidNEEDAJACK（千斤頂）,andofferedmoney.Nothing.RightasIwasabouttogiveup,aMexicanfamilyinasmalltruckpulledover,andthefatherboundedout.Sample32017年11月浙江卷AvacationwithmymotherIhadaninterestingchildhood:Itwasfilledwithsurprisesandamusements,allbecauseofmymother—loving,sweet,yetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.PracticeTheicywindhowledacrosstheemptystreetanditwasanunusuallyquietdayintheemergencyroomonDecembertwenty-fifth.Quiet,thatis,exceptforthenurseswhowerestandingaroundthenurses’stationcomplainingabouthavingtoworkonChristmasDay,forpeopleweresupposedtobespendingtimewiththeirfamilies,exchanginggiftsandwishes.II.讀原文人物、情節(jié)、情感人物：___________________________________________________________________背景：___________________________________________________________________故事發(fā)生（誘因）：________________________________________________________角色品質(zhì)：_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________問(wèn)題沖突：______________________________________________________________III.接續(xù)上文情節(jié)，解決問(wèn)題沖突（把握每段中心、情節(jié)鋪陳、接續(xù)線索、不節(jié)外生枝）(P1)“I’llbuyitnowbutyouonlygetitafter3weeksofdoublechores,”Momexplained.中心：情節(jié)______________________________________________________情感______________________________________________________重要情節(jié)：①_______________________________________________（描寫）②_______________________________________________（描寫）(P2)Finally,Igotmydreambasket,butsoonIsadlyfoundthesamebasketonothers’bikes!中心：情節(jié)______________________________________________________情感______________________________________________________重要情節(jié)：①_______________________________________________（描寫）②_______________________________________________（描寫）③點(diǎn)題：__________________________________________IV.語(yǔ)言與情節(jié)聯(lián)動(dòng)（1）敘述的視角第一人稱vs.第三人稱全景（快，show）vs.特寫（慢，tell）（2）細(xì)節(jié)的鋪陳顯性陳述vs.隱性描述細(xì)節(jié)：語(yǔ)言（直接vs.間接）、動(dòng)作、表情、姿態(tài)、思想……（3）情節(jié)的推進(jìn)詳略與推進(jìn)（概括—具體，上義詞—下義詞，順序）（4）角色的互動(dòng)對(duì)手戲（主角vs.配角）內(nèi)心戲反襯戲（人物vs.環(huán)境）（5）主題的升華有揭示主題的：必須要回扣，與前文主題一致，使短文完整（結(jié)構(gòu)上、內(nèi)容上）無(wú)明顯提示主題的：含而不露vs.點(diǎn)到即止(當(dāng)不太確定主題把握是否有偏差時(shí))（6）長(zhǎng)度的控制故事語(yǔ)篇范式？（逆向構(gòu)思，先構(gòu)思好末段最后的結(jié)局和內(nèi)容，保證預(yù)留與前文做好必要呼應(yīng)所需的空間）各段寫什么情節(jié)？推進(jìn)方式？（沖突雙方一來(lái)一往，互動(dòng)推進(jìn)）Action-response用多少句來(lái)寫？（設(shè)計(jì)好各句的功能、句間內(nèi)容的連貫與銜接）（7）揚(yáng)長(zhǎng)與避短（在充分用好原文的基礎(chǔ)上-現(xiàn)學(xué)現(xiàn)用，自己擅長(zhǎng)的在恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r(shí)機(jī)要多用，自己不會(huì)的詞或相關(guān)背景知識(shí)，盡量找別的辦法或?qū)憚e的內(nèi)容，避免自暴其短）第一段“I’llbuyitnowbutyouonlygetitafter3weeksofdoublechores,”Momexplained.1.我答應(yīng)了，媽媽買下（略）IagreedimmediatelyandMomboughttheflowerybasketandkeptitsomewhereIcouldn’tfind.（action-response,一來(lái)一回構(gòu)成情節(jié)）AfloodofjoysurgedfromthebottomofmyheartandIagreedatoncewithabrightsmileacrossmycheeks.（情感詞做主語(yǔ)）“Deal!”Ijumpedtomyfeetwithexcitement,agreeingontheexchangewithouthesitation.Andthebasketwaspaid.2.這三周付出的努力（詳）Eachday,Ifinishedmynewroutineofdoublehouseholdchoreswithpassionandenthusiasm.（為了所愛(ài)單車籃，很樂(lè)意去完成）Fromthatdayon,everydayafterschool,Ihadnotimetoplayandhadtorushedbackhometofinishthedoublechores.Iwashedtheclothesandcleanedthewindows.ItwassoboringandtiringthatIwasevenwornout,buttherewasalwaysarisingvoicefrommymindencouragingmetokeeponworking—fortheshiningbasket.（再苦再累也有籃筐支持著我）Togetmydreambasket,Ihadbeenburyingmyselfintocountlesschoresforthenextthreeweeks,frompolishingtableslegs,tocleaningwindows,todoinglaundry.Effortsneededwentfarbeyondmyimagination.（TS+Supporting的寫法，回扣原文）3.這三周的心路歷程與變化（可詳）Eachnight,IcrossedoffanotherdayonthecalendarasIcounteddownthedays.Asthedayspassed,thebasketseemedtobecomeevenmorebeautifulinmyimagination.Theextrachoresdidn’tbotherme.Theanticipationgrewstrongerasthedaystickeddown.（用劃日歷上的日期表達(dá)期待，畫面感）Mymotherandfatherwereimpressedbymyefforts,butmymumneverofferedhelp.Threeweekspassedslowly,butIperseveredtodothechores,despitesweatsstreamingownmyface.（家風(fēng)的堅(jiān)持，無(wú)論辛苦也堅(jiān)持）TiredasIwas,Imadeupmymindtosticktoitandeventookjoyintheprocess.（as表示雖然的倒裝句，苦中作樂(lè)）第二段Finally,Igotmydreambasket,butsoonIsadlyfoundthesamebasketonothers’bikes!1.小女孩的反應(yīng)如何?SoshockedandupsetwasIthatIimmediatelywenthometoreportthisdisastertomymom.（event-emotion，用disaster代指所見(jiàn)）Aflushoffrustrationanddisappointmentwelledupinsideme,andIdraggedmyfeetreluctantlywhenIfollowedmom’sbike.（情感類做主語(yǔ)）Aflushofdisappointmentsurgedfromthebottomofmyheart.Ifeltthatwhathadencouragedmetoputhugeeffortstoturnedouttobejustacommonbasket.Tearsdimmedmyeyes.（情感類做主語(yǔ)）2.媽媽如何安撫？+3.點(diǎn)題（勞動(dòng)和努力）Seeingmysulkyface,shegentlywipedawaymytears.Holdingmylittlefaceinherwarmhands,shespokeoutwhathasbecomethelessonIstillcarrywithmetoday.“Yourbasketisnot‘thesamebasket’.It’suniquebecauseitwasnotobtainedbymeremoneybutbyallyourworthwhileeffortandwaiting.”（體現(xiàn)媽媽形象，回扣主題）“What’sthematter?”Sheas