高考英語讀后續(xù)寫競賽故事類陌生人的關愛可以改變一個孩子的未來課件

高考英語讀后續(xù)寫語篇練習愛心故事——陌生人的關愛可以改變一個孩子的未來1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文Jose’sfatherdiedwhenhewas9andhismotherhasbarelyearnedenoughtopaythefamilybills.Thedropoutrateoftheschoolheattendedwashighbecausetherewerelotsofkidsfromfatherlesshomeswithnomoney.ButJosewasdifferent.Hetriedtofindjobsmowinglawnsanddeliveringnewspapertohelphisfamily.Healsoexcelledinmathandartatschool.Hewantedtobearemarkableman.WhatJoseexpectedmostwastheBoyScoutmeetingeveryWednesdayafternoon.Theirscoutmaster,GeorgeguidedthetrooptolearnhowtogiveVCR,treatsnakebitesandidentifyplants.TheyclimbedatCampCherokeeandattendedtheNationalScoutJamboreeinVirginia.Georgekeptclosetothekids.Heknewtheirstrugglesandwishes.Heoftendugintohispocketwhenoneofthemneededalittleextramoney.Heledthetroopwithagentlehand,encouragedthembutlettheboysfindtheirownwayforward.Healwayssaidtotheboys,“Ihavealwaysbeenhereforyou.”“Hewasafatherfigurewatchingoverme,”saidJose.HeworshipedGeorgeandpracticedhard,hopingtowinanEagleScoutbadgejustlikehisscoutmaster.4續(xù)寫原文Butatthestartofhisjunioryear,hisfamilyfacedacrisis:Mariacouldnotfindenoughworktokeepthemfromlosingtheirapartment.Besidesmowinglawnsanddeliveringnewspaper,Josehadtotakeanafternoonjobcleaningofficesandoneatnightmakingmicrochipsatthemanufacturingplant.Therewasnotimeleftforhomework,littleforsleep.HemissedclassesandtheweeklyBoyScoutmeeting.Forthefirsttime,hisgradesslipped.Georgesensedthechange.“Whyareyouskippingmeetings?”heaskedandJosewouldonlysayhehadtoomuchworktodo.5段首句Para1：GeorgelearntabouttherealcausewhenanotherScoutmentionedit.Para2：JoserespondedtoGeorge’sconcernwithhisgradesrisinggraduallyandhisenthusiasmforScouting.6Part2題目分析7點1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；點2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語；點4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構建的重點8續(xù)寫思路分析本文以人物為線索展開，講述了家庭貧困的失去父親的少年Jose在童子軍團長George父親般的幫助和鼓勵下，最終學業(yè)進步并且獲得老鷹胸章的故事。本文體現(xiàn)陌生人的關愛可以改變一個孩子的未來。9續(xù)寫思路分析Para1：GeorgelearntabouttherealcausewhenanotherScoutmentionedit.由第一段首句內(nèi)容“當另一個童子軍提到真正的原因時，George才知道。”可知，第一段可描寫George對Jose曠課和成績下降的反應，他的幫忙措施，以及Jose一家人接受幫助。10續(xù)寫思路分析Para2：JoserespondedtoGeorge’sconcernwithhisgradesrisinggraduallyandhisenthusiasmforScouting.由第二段首句內(nèi)容“Jose對George的關心作出了回應，他的成績逐漸提高，并對童子軍活動充滿熱情?！?1續(xù)寫思路分析續(xù)寫線索George了解了原因——George提供幫助——Jose成績提高——Jose獲得胸章——Jose感謝12續(xù)寫素材可用詞匯：行為類幫助：lendahand/giveahand提出：propose/putforward克制：containoneself/holdback情緒類善良的：good-hearted/kind-hearted感謝：gratefully/thankfully13續(xù)寫素材可用句型：[高分句型1]Hecouldn’thelpworryingthatsuchagood-heartedandtalentedboymightnotgetwherehedreamttobeifnobodypushedhim.(運用了where引導賓語從句)[高分句型2]AsGeorgewenttothestageandpinnedthebadgetoJose’schestandpattedhisshoulder,theboycouldn’tcontainhimselfanymore.(運用了as引導時間狀語從句)14Part3范文呈現(xiàn)15范文呈現(xiàn)GeorgelearntabouttherealcausewhenanotherScoutmentionedit.Thenewsshookhim.Hecouldn’thelpworryingthatsuchagood-heartedandtalentedboymightnotgetwherehedreamttobeifnobodypushedhim.AsJose’sscoutmaster,hefeltitwashisdutytolendahand.Hewenttothefamilyapartmentandproposedadeal.HewouldpayMaria$400amonthtocoverhalftherentandsomeotherexpenses.Inreturn,Josewouldquithisjobsandgobacktoschool.Theeveningendedwithahandshakeallaround.16范文呈現(xiàn)JoserespondedtoGeorge’sconcernwithhisgradesrisinggraduallyandhisenthusiasmforScouting.Hedidwellnotonlyinmathandartbutalsoinallsubjectsandsetanewgoalofstudyingengineeringinthefuture.Atthesametime,withhisgreateffortsandpractice,hesuccessfullywonanEagleScoutbadgeattheendofhisjuniorschool.AsGeorgewenttothestageandpinnedthebadgetoJose’schestandpattedhisshoulder,theboycouldn’tcontainhimselfanymore.HehuggedGeorgetightly,fightingtearsandsaidgratefully,“Thankyouforalwaysbeinghereformelikeafather.”17范文譯文18范文譯文何塞回應了喬治的擔憂，他的成績逐漸提高，他對偵察的熱情。他不僅在數(shù)學和藝術方面表現(xiàn)出色，而且在所有科目上都表現(xiàn)出色，并設定了未來學習工程