讀后續(xù)寫+Bopsy的消防員夢(mèng)想+講義 高三英語(yǔ)一輪復(fù)習(xí)

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。The26-year-oldmotherstareddownathersonwhosufferedleukemia(白血病).Althoughherheartwasfilledwithsadness,shealsohadastrongfeelingofdetermination.Likeanyparentshewantedhersontogrowupandfulfillallhisdreams.Nowthatwasnolongerpossible.Theleukemiawouldseetothat.Butshestillwantedherson'sdreamstocometrue.Shetookherson'shandandasked,“Bopsy,didyoueverthinkaboutwhatyouwantedtobewhenyougrewup?Didyoueverdreamandwishaboutwhatyouwoulddowithyourlife?"“Mommy,IalwayswantedtobeafiremanwhenIgrewup."Momsmiledbackandsaid,"Let'sseeifwecanmakeyourwishcometrue."LaterthatdayshewenttoherlocalfiredepartmentinPhoenix,Arizona,whereshemetFiremanBob,whohadaheartasbigasPhoenix.Sheexplainedherson'sfinalwishandaskedifitmightbepossibletogivehersix-year-oldsonaridearoundtheblockonafireengine.FiremanBobsaid,“Look,wecandobetterthanthat.Ifyou'llhaveyoursonreadyatseveno'clockWednesdaymorning,we'llmakehimanhonoraryfiremanforthewholeday.Hecancomedowntothefirestation,eatwithus,gooutonallthefirecalls,thewholenineyards!And,ifyou'llgiveushissizes,we'llgetarealfireuniformmadeforhim,witharealfirehat—notatoyone—withtheemblemofthePhoenixFireDepartmentonit,ayellowslickerlikewewearandrubberboots.They'reallmanufacturedrighthereinPhoenix,sowecangetthemfast.”Threedayslater,FiremanBobpickedupBopsy,dressedhiminhisfireuniformandaccompaniedhimfromhishospitalbedtothewaitinghookandladdertruck.Bopsygottosituponthebackofthetruckandhelpsteeritbacktothefirestation.Hewasinheaven.TherewerethreefirecallsinPhoenixthatdayandBopsygottogooutonallthreecalls.Herodeinthedifferentfireengines,theparamedics'vanandeventhefirechiefscar.Hewasalsovideotapedforthelocalnewsprogram.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。SodeeplytouchedwasBopsythatheresolvedtolivewithperseverance.Allthedoctorsthoughttheboytoasontheedgeoflifeanddeath.文本分析：原文講述了一個(gè)身患白血病的男孩名叫Bopsy,該文也是以男孩名字作為文章題目。故事講述了Bopsy的母親在其臨終前詢問(wèn)男孩的愿望，男孩自述想做消防員。母親于是走進(jìn)亞利桑那菲尼克斯當(dāng)?shù)氐南谰?，向消防?duì)長(zhǎng)Bob講述了兒子的愿望。Bob立馬答應(yīng)，而且說(shuō)可以比男孩母親的要求做的更好，并且承諾三天后幫助他實(shí)現(xiàn)成為消防員的夢(mèng)想。在這個(gè)故事中，我們最直觀的感受大致有：男孩的堅(jiān)強(qiáng)，母愛(ài)的偉大，還有消防員的善良。和所有的心靈雞湯故事一樣，里面的人都存有真善美的本性。故事首段交代了背景，男孩命不久矣，和天下所有母親一樣，Bopsy的媽媽想要幫助孩子實(shí)現(xiàn)最終的愿望。在二三段的一問(wèn)一答中，讀者知曉了男孩的愿望是成為消防員。在四五段的一求一應(yīng)中，我們看到了Bob的慷慨大方，他說(shuō)Wecandobetterthanthat。原文的五段依照人物之間的關(guān)系和對(duì)話進(jìn)行推進(jìn)，涉及到Bopsy，motherandfiremen三方，三個(gè)角色各具特色，學(xué)生讀寫中若能有所指則可以寫得更出彩。原文的語(yǔ)言也特別適合高中生去賞析和積累。比如描寫doctor無(wú)奈地告知噩耗：heldoutnohopeforhim,and

predicted

hehadabouttwoweeksleft.

描寫母親對(duì)孩子的愛(ài)以及幫助實(shí)現(xiàn)其愿望的執(zhí)著：1.stareddownatherson;2.Althoughherheartwasfilledwithsadness,themotheralsohadastrongfeelingofdetermination;3.

Shestillwantedherson'sdreamstocometrue;4.

Shetookherson'shand,holdingitfirmly;5.Momsmiledback;6.Sheexplained

herson'sfinalwish.描寫男孩Bobsy臨終的境況：1.Thesonrepliedinstantly,withatwinkle

inhiseyes;

2.wantedtogrowupand

fulfill

allhisdream;

3.Butthatwasnolongerpossible.

用大量的對(duì)白展現(xiàn)消防員Bob的性格：1.

HehadaheartasbigasPhoenix.

2.Wecandobetterthanthat...從第五段的交代可以看出Bob的善良果敢以及心思縝密。故事中也出現(xiàn)了大量和消防相關(guān)的語(yǔ)言，如fireman,

ridealaddertruck,savepeopleintrouble,

localfiredepartment,thechieffireman,

givearidearoundtheblockonafireengine,

firestation,

goout

onallthefirecalls,

arealfireuniform,

arealfire

hat,

the

emblemofthe

Phoenix,ayellowslicker,rubberboots.

從服裝到警局標(biāo)志，還有消防局消防員等，可以說(shuō)很全面了，非常值得學(xué)生關(guān)注。分析完文章后我們?cè)倏蠢m(xù)寫兩段，首段的第一句Threedayslater,Bopsywaitedexcitedlyafterabriefbreakfast.

二段的第一句Onenightafterthreemonths,allofhisvitalsignsbegantofropdramaticallyandbecameweak.

這兩段具有比較長(zhǎng)的時(shí)間跨度，因而學(xué)生并不需要將兩段之間的關(guān)系產(chǎn)生過(guò)度的關(guān)聯(lián)，或者說(shuō)傳統(tǒng)的“倒推法”已經(jīng)不起作用了。這兩個(gè)應(yīng)該是獨(dú)立的自然段。首段主講Bob所在的消防隊(duì)幫助Bopsy實(shí)現(xiàn)成為消防員的夢(mèng)想。這一段的關(guān)系主要和原文第五段Bob答應(yīng)男孩母親的事情產(chǎn)生，如穿上了裝備，拉響了警報(bào)，乘上了消防車，同時(shí)用較多的筆墨去描寫男孩Bopsy的心理反應(yīng)，他一定是特別開心、特別激動(dòng)的，而他的母親也應(yīng)該是很感動(dòng)的。雖然我們?cè)谄綍r(shí)的考試中提醒學(xué)生不要將角色寫死，但在這個(gè)故事中，男孩的死卻成了一種必然，因?yàn)槭拙涮崾救齻€(gè)月后，男孩的生命體征變得微弱。Sir以為這也是這篇續(xù)寫很大的一個(gè)價(jià)值所在，就是我們所提倡的積極向上和正能量并不在于生命的存活和死亡，而是這個(gè)世界所傳遞的真善美，這是我們考試時(shí)候要去挖掘的。男孩是怎么死的？臨死的狀態(tài)是怎么樣的？母親的反應(yīng)是怎么樣的？消防員這次有沒(méi)有出現(xiàn)？再回答完這些問(wèn)題后，提煉相關(guān)的主題便能寫出一段比較美的文章。男孩死的時(shí)候一定是非常平靜的，消防員們也應(yīng)該是陪在身邊的，他可以死在母親的懷里，在消防員的注視下進(jìn)入了天堂。男孩的預(yù)估生命由原先的兩周到現(xiàn)在的三個(gè)月，這不得不說(shuō)是一個(gè)奇跡，而這個(gè)奇跡是由善良的消防員們創(chuàng)造的。PossibleversionSodeeplytouchedwasBopsythatheresolvedtolivewithperseverance.Hisdreamrealized,withhimblessedwithalltheloveandattention,Bobsyfeltthathewasthemostfortunatepersonintheworld.Neverhadtheboyanticipatedsuchagreatdreamcouldberealizedonhim.Thoughintheprocessofterminalleukemia,Bobsystillledalifefullofhopeandbeauty.Itwasthepersonalexperienceofbeingafiremanthatinspiredhisdesiretoliveagoodliferegardlessofthesevereillness.Brimmingwithconfidenceinlife,alongwiththeencouragementofthegreatmother,Bobsywaspositivelyengagedinhistreatment.However,asevereinfectiousvirushithim,whichworsenedhiscondition.Allthedoctorsthoughttheboywasontheedgeoflifeanddeath.However,themotherinsistedonthefactthatfaithcouldcreatethemiracleoflife.Huggingtheboyinherarms,themothercalledthefirechiefandaskedifitwouldbepossibletosendafiremaninuniformtothehospitaltobewithBopsytopullthroughthedangerousperiod.NosoonerhadthefiremancameintothewardthanBobsysmiledasifthefiremanwerehisfutureandallthepainhadgone.Amaz