讀后續(xù)寫制作稻草人（T8聯(lián)考）講義-高考英語作文復(fù)習(xí)專項(xiàng)

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Mymotherbelievedin

usingthingsup.Lastyear,ourcornfieldhad

abadharvest

because

birds

feasted

onthecrops.

ItwasprobablythenthatMom's

frugality(節(jié)儉)

becameevenmoreextraordinary.Shebegankeepingeverythingthat

seemeduselessinthe

attic

(閣樓)—

wornoutclothes,oldsheets,broken

umbrellas,andsomeotherold

items.

Mom'sfavoritesayingwas"wastenot,wantnot".

MybrotherJoshandIweren'tsurewhatthatmeantuntilthe“Affairofthe

Scarecrow(稻草人)",which,asitlaterbecameknown,leftalastingimpressiononus.

Thestorybeganwith

a

prettyhat

thatMomreceivedasagifttoprotectherfromthesun.

However,JoshandIcouldseethatMom's

frugal

natureandfashionsensewereinbattle.

Momreallydidn'twanttogetridofthehatitwasnewandhadalotofuseleftinitbutneithercouldshestandwearingit.

Shetriedtotakeoffthefancydecorations,buttheywerestuckontight.

She'dhavetofindsomeothersolution.

JoshandIwatchedasMomheadedupstairstotheatticwiththehat."Wastenot,wantnot,"shecalledbackdown.Weheardboxesbeingmovedaround.Momentslater,Momleanedout,holdingaflour

bagfullofstraw,andwithamysterioussmile,sheplacedthehatonit.

"Whatisthatfor?"Iasked,

confused.

"Ascarecrow!"Momexclaimed."Butnotagoodoneyet.Itneeds

astrongbodytostandfirm

inthefield,shesaidwithafrown."

Andit

doesn'tlookscaryenough,"

Josh

remarked.

IhadtoadmitthatJosh,thoughyoungerthanIwas,couldsometimesbe

moreimaginative.JoshandIturnedtoeachother,searchingfor

agoodidea.

Soonenough,

Josh'seyeslitupwithinspiration.

注意：

150左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Paragraph1:

"ewithme!"Joshcalledout.

______________________

Paragraph2:

Inthedaysthatfollowed,thescarecrowstoodtall.

_____________________段首句分析：Paragraph1:“ewithme!”Joshcalledout.第一段第一句:這一句的作用是空間的更換。所以，我們在銜接中需要將josh的“ewithme”進(jìn)一步具體化，也就是“去哪里”。由上文可知，人物的主要任務(wù)是完善稻草人，結(jié)合整篇文章可知這個工作需要用到曾經(jīng)被媽媽“丟棄”在閣樓的“uselessitems”，因此此處我們需要將空間的轉(zhuǎn)換完成。比如:BeforeIknewit,Joshdartedupthestairsandshoutedagain,“totheattic!第一段最后一句:結(jié)合第二段段首句可知，在第一段我們完成了稻草人的制作工作，并且將稻草人放到了田野里。因此，我們第一段與第二段的接需要寫到:稻草人制作完成+投入使用+對稻草人作用的期待(可寫可不寫)。比如:Withourcreativecooperation,thescarecrowwasdone.Lookingatourwork,weevencouldhaveseenaharvestedfieldescapedfrombirds’feasting.Paragraph2:Inthedaysthatfollowed,thescarecrowstoodtall.第二段第一句:首句我們可知稻草人已經(jīng)投入使用，那我們可以用對比來銜接，即寫一下使用后稻草人田野中的變化。這里可以與原文中來啄食的小鳥進(jìn)行協(xié)同，比如:Thescarecrowstoodasaguardianoverthecornfield.Thebirds,oncefeastingwithoutscruple,nowhadtokeepaneyeonthis“unexpectedguest"第二段最后一句:故事結(jié)尾+主旨升華故事結(jié)尾需要回扣文章開頭，去回答“這次有沒有大豐收”以及“有沒有懂得媽媽的價值觀”兩個問題主旨也可以從故事的結(jié)尾去升華，抓住媽媽的“wastenotwantnot”和我們制作稻人的“creativity”。三、下水作文Paragraph1:“ewithme!Joshcalledout.BeforeIknewit,Joshdartedupthestairsandshoutedagain'totheattic!”Together,weenteredtheatticfilledwith“uselessitems”inmom'swords.“Weletothescarecrow*wardrobe’!”"Joshwinkedatme.“Aha!”That'swhenithitme.Wethenbegantorummagethroughtheoldclothesandsheetstofindthe“strongbodyforourscarecrow.Suddenly,IspottedtheoldcanethatusedtobelongtoCirandma.That'sperfect!"Joshgavemeathumbsup.Theexplorationwentonuntilwediscoveredawornoutsweater,fadedjeans,andabrokenumbrella.Excitementbubblingbetweenus,weracedbacktoMom.Sheraisedaneyebrowatourselection.“Well,Isupposethatwillmakeafinescarecrow.,Wespenttheafteroonfashioningourcreation.Whenmom'shatfellonthescarecrow,“CaptainAslan”wasborn.Wepassedhimhisumbrellaandputhimtowork.Paragraph2:Inthedaysthatfollowed.thescarecrowstoodtall.CaptainAslanstoodasaguardianoverthecornfield.Thebirds,oncefeastingwithoutscruple.nowhadtokeepaneveonthestrangelycolorfulgentleman.ThedecorationsfromMomshatdancedinthebreezecastingawhimsicalcharmoverthefield.WechangedCaptainAslan'soutfitonceaweeksothateventhecleverestbirdwouldbelievethismanwasarealcaptain.ThecornfieldflourishedunderCaptainAslan'swatchfulgazeandourfamilyembracedaoreatharvestthankstohimDuringthesedayptainAslan'swardrobealsoecameourwardrobetoour“Narnia”insidewhichwasaworldfilledwithmagicalitemsmom'sfrugalitygaveus,andwherethemagicwouldeoutaslongasweusedourimaginationandcreativity.Asseasonspassed,CaptainAslanstillstoodthere,remindingusofMom'ssaying“Wastenot,wantnot”andanewsaying“Imaginemore.createmore?逐句解讀:Paragraph1:“ewithme!”Joshcalledout.BeforeIknewit,Joshdartedupthestairsandshoutedagain.“totheattic!”(交代一下空間的更換)Together,weenteredtheatticfilledwith“uselessitems”inmom'swords(空間更換完畢)“Weletothescarecrowwardrobe!”(想用一個比較俏皮的說法來體現(xiàn)Josh的機(jī)靈勁兒;同時也為下文納尼亞的衣櫥做個小鋪墊)Joshwinkedatme“Aha”That’swhenithitme(我悟了。家可以看這里是如何表達(dá)的，其實(shí)表達(dá)“恍然大悟”有一個俗語“Thepennyhasdropped”。但考慮到閱卷老師可能會一時反應(yīng)不過來，所以就不推薦大家冒險了。Wethenbegantorummagethroughtheoldclothesandsheetstofindthe"strongbody"forourscarecrow.Suddenly,IspottedtheoldcanethatusedtobelongtoGrandma(靈感來源于哈爾的移動城堡中蘇菲婆婆想要給自己找一根拐杖結(jié)果找到了被詛咒的稻草人)“That”perfect!”Joshgavemeathumbsup.(你真棒)Theexplorationwentonuntilwediscoveredawornoutsweaterfadedabrokenumbrella.(這個雨我本來想把這個稻草人裝飾成“英國紳士”的，結(jié)果寫著寫著想起了媽媽花里胡哨的帽子。但是后面還是不想放棄這把傘，這種混搭風(fēng)怎么不算一種scary呢一)Excitementbubblingbetweenus.weracedbacktoMom.Sheraisedaneyebrowatourselection.(眉毛的協(xié)同)Well.Isupposethatwillmakeafinescarecrow."Wespenttheafternoonfashioningourcreation.Whenmom'shatfellonthescarecrow“CaptainAslanwasborn(Aslan是納尼亞里面那只代表智與勇敢的獅子)Wepassed(這個遞企有種老母親送自己孩子去上班的即視感)himhisumbrellaandputhimtowork.Paragraph2:Inthedaysthatfollowed,thescarecrowstoodtall.CaptainAslanstoodasaguardianoverthecornfield.(交代基本情況)Thebirds,oncefeastingwithoutscruple,nowhadtokeepaneyeonthestrangelycolorfulgentleman.(交代鳥的轉(zhuǎn)變。鳥:被人類精神狀態(tài)良好的混搭風(fēng)嚇暈。ThedecorationsfromMom’shatdancedinthebreeze,castingawhimsicalcharmoverthefield.(強(qiáng)化一下這個帽子的存在感)WechangedCaptainAslan'soutfitonceaweeksothateventhecleverestbirdwouldb