Unit5IntothewildDevelopingideas讀后續(xù)寫拯救小海鷗課件-高中英語

拯救小海鷗

無靈主語ApangofpainstruckmeasIwitnessedthestruggleoftheinnocentcreature.Whatifitdoesn’tpullthrough?Willitdiefrominfections?Thesefearsseizedme.

ThemomentIsteppedontothestage,myfearsseizedme,butthememoryofmyhardworkandpracticestrengthenedmyresolvetoperformwell.Astheexamresultswereannounced,afloodoftensionwelledupinmyheart.

Itwasabeautifulsummerevening,andIwaswalkingalongthebeachnearmyhome.Asusual,seagulls（海鷗）hovered（盤旋）aboveme,waitingeagerlyforapieceofbreadortwo.Suddenly,somethingcaughtmyeye-alittlebirdflappingitswingsdesperately,strugglingtotakeoff.

Irushedcloserandsawthatitwasababyseagull,withafishhookpiercingthroughitsbeak.ApangofpainstruckmeasIwitnessedthestruggleoftheinnocentcreature.Itsmotherwashoveringaboveus,cryingfiercely,herwailsresoundingacrossthecoast.

"Willitsurvive?"Iaskednervously.

Thevetrepliedwithreassurance,"Withourexpertiseandyourkindgesture,itstandsagoodchance."Ifeltaglimmerofhopesparkinsidemeasthebirdwastakenawayfortheoperation.

AsIwaitedoutsidetheoperatingtheatre,Iwasfeelinganxiousandhadanuneasyfeelinginmystomach.Whatifitdoesn’tpullthrough?Willitdiefrominfections?Thesefearsseizedme,butthememoryofthedeterminedmotherseagullstrengthenedmyresolve.Paragraph1:

Finally,afterwhatseemedlikeages,thedooropened.Paragraph2:

Atthebeach,Icarefullyplacedthebirdonthesand.Para1:Isawalittlebirdflappingitswingsdesperately,strugglingtotakeoff.Para2:Itwasababyseagull,withafishhookpiercingthroughitsbeak.Itsmotherwashoveringaboveus,cryingfiercely,Para3:Iheadedtowardstheclosestveterinaryclinic(獸醫(yī)診所),holdingthelittlebird.Para4-7:Thehookneededtobeextractedsurgically.thebirdwastakenawayfortheoperation.續(xù)寫：Paragraph1:Finally,afterwhatseemedlikeages,thedooropened.Paragraph2:Atthebeach,Icarefullyplacedthebirdonthesand.Ahappyending?Para.2：Atthebeach,Icarefullyplacedthebirdonthesand.續(xù)寫框架：五五拍戲法Para.1:Finally,afterwhatseemedlikeages,thedooropened.承上啟下演員：I,thebabyseagull&itsmother承上演員：I&thebabyseagull獸醫(yī)出來了，說海鷗的傷情?？祻秃?，準備帶它去海灘。我聽后的心情。把小海鷗帶回家養(yǎng)傷。12345①②⑥⑦Tip3：戲份不夠，細節(jié)/環(huán)境來湊。情感態(tài)度價值觀升華小海鷗的母親看到孩子飛了過來。我將永遠記住這次經(jīng)歷?？吹剿麄儓F聚，我很開心。對小海鷗的生活產(chǎn)生了很大的影響。12345

海鷗飛走了。③④⑤⑧⑨故事結(jié)局Finallyafterwhatseemedlikeages,thedooropened.我的反應NosoonerthevetsteppedoutitthanIrushedtowardshim.

（Nosoonerhadsbdone...thansbdid一...就）Finally,afterwhatseemedlikeages,thedooropened.我的反應Anxiousandconcerned,Ihurriedtoaskthevetaboutthesituationoftheseagull.

（我的心理、動作）Finally,afterwhatseemedlikeages,thedooropened.獸醫(yī)的反應

Thevetappeared,saying,“Theoperationwasasuccess,butitwillneedtimetorecover.”,hisvoicefilledwithrelief.

(獸醫(yī)說了什么、)獸醫(yī)的心情)

主題升華Asshedisappeared,IfeltasenseofpeaceandconnectionwithnaturethatIhadneverexperiencedbefore.AsIwatchedthemdisappearintothehorizon,IknewthatIhadmadeadifferenceinthelifeofthatlittlebird,andthatwasallthatmattered.Shehovered

aroundmeforafewsecondsbeforetakingoffhighintothesky,leavingmewithafeelingofjoyandanunforgettablememorythatIwouldcherishforever.Paragraph1:Finally,afterwhatseemedlikeages,thedooropened.Withasmileregisteringonthevet’sface,hesaidthattheoperationwasverysuccessful.(獸醫(yī)的反應)Thisbabyseagullwasoutofdangerbutstilltooweaktofly.Hearingthat,myanxietywasreplacedbyasenseofrelief.(我的反應)AfterIexpressedmygratitudetothevet,Itookithomeanddidmybesttocareforit.Afteramonth,theseagullsrecovered.

SoIbroughtittothebeach.(帶到海灘)

表達感謝Thetinybirdseemedtobethankingmeforrescuingher.Thetinybirdturnedherheadfromsidetosideasifexpressinghergratitudeforsavingherlifetome.Itsmotherseagulllookedupatme,asifthankingmeforsavingherchild.Paragraph2:

Atthebeach,Icarefullyplacedthebirdonthesand.Immediately,themotherseagullflewtowardsus.Shenudgedthelittleseagullgently,asifcheckingtoseeifitwasalright.(海鷗母親出現(xiàn)及反應)Witnessingthereunion,myeyesfilledwithtearsofhappiness.(我的反應)ThenthebabyseagullanditsmotherflewuphighandIwavedmyhandtosaygoodbyetothem.Astheydisappeared,IfeltasenseofpeaceandconnectionwithnaturethatIhadneverexperiencedbefore.(主題升華)Paragraph1:Finally,afterwhatseemedlikeages,thedooropened.Thevetappeared,alookofexhaustionmixedwithreliefonhisface."Theoperationwasasuccess,"heannounced.

Afloodofjoy

seizedmeasIrushedtoseethelittleseagull.Itseyeswerestillclosed,butitsbreathingwassteady."We'veremovedthehook,andwithsomerestandcare,itshouldmakeafullrecovery,"thevetadded.Ithankedhimsincerelyandtookithome,holdingitclosetomychest.Afteramonthofmycarefulattention,theseagullrecovered.Iknewitwastimeforittogobacktothenature.Paragraph2:

Atthebeach,Icarefullyplacedthebirdonthesand.Itsmotherimmediatelyflewdown,gentlynudgingh