2024年浙江卷1月讀后續(xù)寫(路癡的自我救贖)講義-高考英語作文復習專項

2024年浙江卷1月續(xù)寫(路癡的自我救贖)SelfRedemptionofaPersonwithPoorSenseofDirection

（路癡的自我救贖）閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構成一篇完整的短文。Evaspentthefirstweekofhighschooltryingtokeepherheadabovewater.Oneofthemajorheadachesforherwasfindingherwayinthehugeschoolbuilding.Itwasasixstorybuilding.Oneachfloor,hallwaysstretchedinfourdirections,leadingtoclassrooms,laboratories,andteachers’offices.Somewhereinthebuilding,therewasalsoalibrary,acafeteria,andagym.Havingapoorsenseofdirection,Evafounditimpossibletogetaroundinsuchahugebuilding.Allthedifferenthallwaysandroomsweretoomuchtothinkabout,letalonemittomemory.Shedecidedthatshewouldmemorizewhereherclasseswereandthenpretendthattherestoftheplacedidn’texist.InherfirstPEclass,EvawasshockedwhenCoachPittannouncedthateveryonehadtorunonemilearoundthetrackoutside.Shesearchedthefacesofherclassmatesforsignsofpanic.Therewasnothingshefearedmorethanhavingtorunawholemile.ToEva,“amile”wasusedtodescribelongdistances.Itwastenmilesfromherhometohergrandfather’s,andthatalwaysseemedlikealongway,eveninacar!WhenCoachPittblewhiswhistle(哨子),Evafiguredshewouldbeleftinthedust.However,whilesomeofherclassmatesedgedahead,othersactuallyfellbehind.”It’sjustthebeginning,“shethought.”I’lleinlastforsure.“SoonEvabegantobreathehard,withherheartpoundingandlegsshaking.Feelingdesperate,Evastartedusingamindtrickonherself.Shestoppedthinkingabouttheword”mile.“Instead,shefocusedonreachingtheshadowcastonthetrackbyanoaktreeupahead.Thensheconcentratedonjoggingtothespotwherethetrackcurved(拐彎).Afterthat,shetriedtoseeifshecouldpleteherfirstlap.Onelapturnedintotwo,thenthree,thenfour.注意:1.

續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右;2,

請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Paragraph1:WhenCoachPittsaid“Nicework!”toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.Paragraph2:Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.情節(jié)梳理：Beginning：Eva開始了她的高中生活，在這個新環(huán)境中她試圖適應。最大的挑戰(zhàn)之一是在巨大的學校建筑中找到自己的路。建筑物龐大，使她感到迷茫。Buildup：Eva在巨大的學校建筑中迷路的問題逐漸升級，她決定只記住自己上課的地方。此時，體育課上的一個新挑戰(zhàn)出現(xiàn)了：教練要求每個人跑一英里。Eva對跑步感到極度恐懼，認為自己無法完成。Climax：跑步的時候，Eva開始感到絕望。然而，她使用了一個心理技巧：不再想象整個一英里的距離，而是專注于逐漸到達的小目標。她的心情由恐懼轉變?yōu)闆Q心，一圈又一圈地跑下去。Resolution：Eva最終成功地完成了跑步，并意外地獲得了教練的表揚。她意識到，她所害怕的距離實際上更多是心理層面的挑戰(zhàn)。她決定將這種分解任務的方法應用到學校的探索上，逐步熟悉整個建筑。Ending：Eva通過逐步攻克學校建筑的復雜性，成功地適應了新環(huán)境。故事以她的成長和自信的提升結束，她從一開始的迷茫和恐懼變得更加自信和適應。這個故事不僅是關于學習和適應的，還強調了面對挑戰(zhàn)時心理策略的重要性。續(xù)寫思路：第一段續(xù)寫：“當皮特教練在終點線對她說：‘干得不錯’時，伊娃感到吃驚?！薄径卫m(xù)寫的關鍵在于吃驚的創(chuàng)設，所以要充分結合語篇材料，合理利用跑步過程中伊娃的擔心，通過強烈的反差與對比描寫推動本段的情節(jié)，同時結合二段提示，為本段做結——即通過一次害怕的跑步，意外悟出了解決自己“路盲”的方法，即將目標分解這個方法具體寫出來。

第二段續(xù)寫：“伊娃決定用相同的方式應對教學樓”——本段續(xù)寫的關鍵在于，方法論的遷移，重點在于把跑步中的成功經(jīng)驗再次移植到對教學樓的適應中，同時為主題升華留足空間，即“勇于思考與總結方法的重要性，而不是一味的逃避或抱怨”。對第五段的解讀是續(xù)寫的關鍵。

Eva對自己使用了一個mindtrick，不再去想“英里”這個詞，而是先專注于到達前方一棵橡樹投在跑道上的影子，然后又集中精神跑到拐彎的地方，在那之后，她想看看自己能否跑完第一圈。就這樣，一圈，兩圈，四圈跑完了。先把橡樹作為自己的第一個目標，然后是拐彎處，然后是第一圈終點，實際上就是目標的分解，將一個看似很難實現(xiàn)的大目標拆分成若干切實可行的小目標，一個小目標一個小目標地完成，大目標就在不知不覺中被完成了。語言特點：1.Oneofthemajorheadachesforherwas

finding

herwayinthehugeschoolbuilding.（動名詞做表語）2.Oneachfloor,hallwaysstretchedinfourdirections,

leading

toclassrooms,laboratories,andteachers’offices.（現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語）3.Having

apoorsenseofdirection,Evafounditimpossibletogetaroundinsuchahugebuilding.（現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語）4.Therewasnothingshefearedmorethanhavingtorunawholemile.（定語從句）5.However,whilesomeofherclassmates

edged

ahead,othersactuallyfellbehind.”（edgev.徐徐移動，漸漸移動）6.SoonEvabegantobreathehard,withherheart

pounding

andlegsshaking.（現(xiàn)在分詞做賓補）7.Feeling

desperate,Evastartedusingamindtrickonherself.

（現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語）8.Thensheconcentratedonjoggingtothespot

where

thetrackcurved(拐彎).

（定語從句）范文一賞析：

WhenCoachPittsaid"Greatwork"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.

Itwastotallybeyondherimaginationthatshefinallypletedtherun,andmuchmoreincredibly,wasnotthelasttofinishthemile.

Breathlessandexhausted,sherealizedthatoveringseeminglythetoughestchallengesjustneededasmartstrategylikehermindtrick.Staringatthetoweringteachingbuilding,Eva

seemingly

graspedthetricktoliveinhighschool，

withasmilebloomingacrossherface.

Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.

Thistime,shedidnotfeelaheadachewhenfindingherwayinthehugeschoolbuilding.Instead,shefocusedmoreonspecialfeaturesanduniquedesignsofdifferentplacesoneachfloor.

Timetickingaway,Evaeventuallygotfamiliarwiththevastmazeinthewayshefinishedtheonemilerun.Onelapatatimedidwork!Sodidoneflooraweek!ltdawnedonherthatgoalsareeasiertoachieveinsmallsteps.

語言特點：1.

Itwastotallybeyondherimaginationthatshefinallypletedtherun,andmuchmoreincredibly,wasnotthelasttofinishthemile.(主語從句)

這完全超出了她的想象，她最終完成了比賽，更令人難以置信的是，她不是最后一個跑完一英里的人。2.Breathlessandexhausted,sherealizedthatoveringseeminglythetoughestchallengesjustneededasmartstrategylikehermindtrick.（形容詞做狀語動名詞做主語）她氣喘吁吁，筋疲力盡，她意識到克服看似最艱難的挑戰(zhàn)只需要一個聰明的策略，就像她的心術一樣。3.Staringatthetoweringteachingbuilding,Evacameupwitha

goodidea,withasmilebloomingacrossherface.（現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語和賓補）凝視著高聳的教學樓，伊娃想出了一個好主意，她臉上綻開了笑容。4.

Thistime,shedidnotfeelaheadachewhenfindingherwayinthehugeschoolbuilding.（現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語）5.Timetickingaway,Evaeventuallygotfamiliarwiththevastmazeinthewayshefinishedtheonemilerun.（獨立主格定語從句）6.ltdawnedonherthatgoalsareeasiertoachieveinsmallsteps.（主語從句）范文二賞析：

WhenCoachPittsaid"Nicework!"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.

Knowingthatshehadperformedbetterthanmostclassmates,shewasmorethandelightedbutcouldn’thelpaskingherself,“HowdidImakeit？Thisisabsolutelyunbelievable!”Shebegantorecalltheprocessofherrunning:theoaktree,thecurvespot,thefirstlap...“Oh,Igetit!Theseeminglyunattainablegoalscanbedividedintoseveralpracticalsmallgoals.Witheachsmallgoalfulfilled,theultimategoalwillbenaturallyachieved.”Realizingthis,shefeltherworldlightenlittlebylittle.

Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.

Shestoppedthinkingaboutallthedifferenthallwaysandroomsandmadeascheduleforherself.Thefirstweekshewouldmemorizeteachers'offices,thesecondweeklaboratories,andthelibrary,thecafeteria...Timepassingby，shehadalreadykeptinmindwheremostroomswere.Asenseofachievementgraduallyroseinhermind.Latersheappliedthetricktoherstudyanddidbetterandbetterin