2024屆高考英語(yǔ)專題復(fù)習(xí)：讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)語(yǔ)篇訓(xùn)練 第三節(jié) 人與自然（語(yǔ)篇演練）課件

語(yǔ)篇演練：閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”—thetownofChurchillinManitoba,Canada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears—likeallwildanimals—shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI’mfacetofacewithapolarbear,Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes,thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpotshard,andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough—hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws(爪子).Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter(相遇),Itooksomepicturesofthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn’tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear’spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes,butdoesn’thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar(吼叫),thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.注意：1.所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；3.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好；4.續(xù)寫(xiě)完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.

Attheverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.

Step1讀懂大意，理清脈絡(luò)1.ReadforinformationWhoWhenWhereWhatWhyI,Elli,thepolarbearOnenightinthefallAresearchcampoutsidethetownofChurchillinManitoba,CanadaConflictarousedwithahungrypolarbearElliandIwantedtotakepicturesofpolarbears.Thebearwasattractedbygarlicbread.Step1讀懂大意，理清脈絡(luò)1.ReadforinformationParagraphHowPara.1&2Para.3,4&5Para.6&7ElliandIwantedtotakepicturesofpolarbears,butitwasdangerous.Wetriedourbesttorepelthebearattractedbyfood,butinvain.Weturnedtothecampmanager,whoinstructedustousepepperspraytorepelthebearuntilhelparrived.Step1讀懂大意，理清脈絡(luò)2.ReadforplotsA.Thebearcamebackangrilyandtheyhadtotrynewideas.B.ThecouplewenttoatowninCanadatotakephotosofpolarbears.C.Thehelicopterarrivedtotheirrescue.D.Frightened,thecoupletriedallthemeansofdefensetheyknewbutnoneofthemworked.E.Abearcameunexpectedlywhilethecouplewascookingdinner.①BeginningPlot:

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Step2細(xì)讀首句，構(gòu)思框架第一段首句譯文：幾分鐘后，北極熊回到了我們的營(yíng)地。第二段首句譯文：就在這時(shí)，直升機(jī)到了。1.讀懂兩段首句第一段框架：“我”和Elli想盡辦法驅(qū)趕北極熊。第二段框架：“我”和Elli最終被直升機(jī)救起并再次拍照。Step2細(xì)讀首句，構(gòu)思框架第一段首句后的銜接句：Roaringevenmoreangrilythistime,hesmashedhispawscrazilyagainstthewirefence,tryingtostabuswithhissharpclaws.2.寫(xiě)好三個(gè)銜接句第一段尾句（須與第二段首句銜接）：Thebearviolentlydashedagainstthewoodenpostswhichwereevidentlyonthevergeofcollapsing!第二段首句后的銜接句：Thegustingwindfromthehoveringvehiclesweptawayourfearimmediately.Step2細(xì)讀首句，構(gòu)思框架第二段的尾句，即結(jié)尾句，可以是體現(xiàn)故事圓滿的句子，也可以是故事給我們的啟示的句子：Atthisonce-in-a-lifetimemoment,Ireachedintomybackpackandpulledoutthecamera,photographingthatimpressivescene.3.寫(xiě)好一個(gè)升華句Step3增加細(xì)節(jié)，開(kāi)始寫(xiě)作第一段：熊的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)（這次他咆哮得更兇了，瘋狂地用爪子撞鐵絲柵欄，想用他鋒利的爪子抓“我們”）→“我們”的情感和動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)（Elli和“我”驚慌失措，扯著嗓子尖叫，向他揮舞著拳頭，試圖嚇跑他）→“我們”的情感描寫(xiě)（因徒勞無(wú)功而感到失望）→熊的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)（熊猛烈地撞向木樁，木樁顯然快要倒了）。第二段：“我們”的情感描寫(xiě)（從懸停的飛機(jī)出來(lái)的陣陣大風(fēng)立刻驅(qū)散了“我們”的恐懼）→飛行員的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)（從直升機(jī)上放下一根繩子把“我們”拉上來(lái)）→“我們”的情感和動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)（“我們”既興奮又松了一口氣，抓住繩子，安全到達(dá)直升機(jī)上）→“我”的情感動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)（當(dāng)“我”從高處看著這只粗壯的熊時(shí)，“我”驚訝地發(fā)現(xiàn)這個(gè)固執(zhí)的家伙已經(jīng)打破了圍欄，朝“我們”的營(yíng)地走去，要吃誘人的食物）→“我”的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)（在這個(gè)千載難逢的時(shí)刻，“我”拿出相機(jī)，拍下了這一幕）。Step4檢查優(yōu)化，整潔謄寫(xiě)Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Roaringevenmoreangrilythistime,hesmashedhispawscrazilyagainstthewirefence,tryingtostabuswithhissharpclaws.Panickedaswewere,ElliandIscreamedatthetopofourlungs,andwavedourfistsathiminanattempttoscarehimaway.Toourdisappointment,alltheseeffortswereinvain.Thebearviolentlydashedagainstthewoodenpostswhichwereevidentlyonthevergeofcollapsing!Step4檢查優(yōu)化，整潔謄寫(xiě)Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Thegustingwindfromthehoveringvehiclesweptawayourfearimmediately.Outofthehelicopterdescendedaropetopullusup.Thrilledyetrelieved,wegrabbedtheropeandeventuallylandedonthehelicoptersafeandsound.While