2017中考一模（議論文）【教師版】

第頁(yè)2019靜安一模Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“Tobearesponsiblestudent!”（請(qǐng)以“做一個(gè)有擔(dān)當(dāng)?shù)膶W(xué)生!”為題，寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。）

（注意：中文不得出現(xiàn)考生的姓名、校名及其他相關(guān)信息，否則不予評(píng)分。）Situation：新時(shí)代的學(xué)生都需要有責(zé)任意識(shí)，無(wú)論是在自己家中、在學(xué)?；蛘呤窃谏鐣?huì)上都需要有擔(dān)當(dāng)。請(qǐng)你談?wù)勀愕恼J(rèn)識(shí)，并舉例說(shuō)明你的理解。審題分析：根據(jù)題目要求，本文是一篇命題記敘文作文，要求講述如何成為一名有責(zé)任的學(xué)生本文開頭應(yīng)先引入有責(zé)任的人應(yīng)該是什么樣這一話題，然后過(guò)渡到個(gè)人應(yīng)當(dāng)如何去做。在內(nèi)容較多的部分要注意層次和連詞。案例分析：TobearesponsiblestudentInthemodernage,everyonehasasenseofresponsibility.AlthoughIamastudent,Istillshouldberesponsibleforalotofthings.Ithinkthemostmajorthingisourfamilies.MyparentsarethepeoplewhichIcareandlove.Theygivemeawarmhomeandmanyotherconditions.It’snodoubtthatIshouldresponsibleforthem.Forexample,Icanhelpmymomwithhousework,Istudyharderatschool.WhenIgetagoodmark,theywillproudofmeandhaveabigsmileontheirface.Ifnot,theywillbeverydisappointed.Tobearesponsiblestudent,Ishouldnotonlymakemyselfsuccessfulbutalsomakethefamilymoreunitedandmorepeaceful.范文點(diǎn)評(píng)：TobearesponsiblestudentCanyouberesponsibleforyourself?Asenseofresponsibilityisvaluable

foragoodstudent.Inmyopinion,first,beingaresponsiblestudentshouldberesponsibleforourselves.Inlaterlife,nomatterwhatdifficultiesweface,weshouldnevergiveup.Then,weshouldberesponsibleforourfamilyandfriends.Itisourdutytoloveourfamilyandfriends.Weshouldkeepourloyaltyandcommitmentinmind,Atlast,weshouldberesponsibleforthesocial.Toberesponsibleforoursocialismeaningtomakecontributionstoit.Showourunselfishdevotiontothecommunity,smileandhelpothers.作文提綱：句子內(nèi)容關(guān)鍵詞/句開頭引入①Canyouberesponsibleforyourself主題引入②inmyopinion分論點(diǎn)引入③responsibleforourselves論點(diǎn)1④responsibleforourfamilyandfriends.論點(diǎn)2⑤responsibleforoursocial語(yǔ)言進(jìn)階：非謂語(yǔ)做主語(yǔ)beingaresponsiblestudentshouldberesponsibleforourselves動(dòng)名詞做主語(yǔ)，可以表示經(jīng)常性，習(xí)慣性的動(dòng)作,也可以表示具體的動(dòng)作比如：paintingishishobby.動(dòng)名詞做主語(yǔ)還可以指經(jīng)驗(yàn)比如：Drivingintherushhouristiring.It可以在句首做形式主語(yǔ)，動(dòng)名詞短語(yǔ)在后面做真正的主語(yǔ)在下面的句型中，it是形式主語(yǔ)，v-ing形式作真正的主語(yǔ)。

Itisnouse/good/point+doing例如：It’snousearguingwithhim.動(dòng)名詞做主語(yǔ)，謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞用單數(shù)詞典例句：Being

deaf

and

dumb

makes

communication

very

difficult.

裝聾作啞使談話變得非常困難Talking

mends

no

holes．空談無(wú)濟(jì)于事。練習(xí)：-What

do

you

think

made

Lisaangry？-___

herkey.A.As

she

lost B.Lost C.Losing D.Belost

解析：答案CLosing在此為動(dòng)名詞，與her

key構(gòu)成動(dòng)名詞短語(yǔ)在句中作主語(yǔ)。該題可以理解為：Losing

her

key

made

Lisa

so

upset翻譯鞏固：翻譯鞏固：丟了新的自行車使瑪麗覺(jué)得非常沮喪_______________________________________________________________________________在這里空等是浪費(fèi)時(shí)間，不如早點(diǎn)回家吧。_______________________________________________________________________________抽煙對(duì)身體有害，你最好相信醫(yī)生的話早點(diǎn)戒掉。_______________________________________________________________________________1.LosinghernewbicyclemadeMaryveryupset.2.It’swasteoftimewaitinghere，youcangohomeearlier.3.It’snogoodsmoking,you’dbetterobeythedoctor’swordandgiveitupearly.nomatter+疑問(wèn)詞的讓步壯語(yǔ)從句nomatter+what等引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語(yǔ)從句。Nomatter后面接關(guān)系代詞或關(guān)系副詞引導(dǎo)狀語(yǔ)從句在句中作讓步狀語(yǔ)。Nomatterwhat(who/whenetc.)...分別表示“無(wú)論何事”、“無(wú)論何人”、“無(wú)論何時(shí)”等，這個(gè)從句可以置主句之前，也可以置主句之后。

詞典例句：Nomatterwhatyoudo,youmustbeverycareful.不管做什么事，你都必須非常細(xì)心。Nomatterwhichyouchoose,youwillbesatisfied.不論你選擇哪一個(gè)，你都會(huì)滿意的。翻譯鞏固：不管你如何努力，你都不會(huì)成功的。_______________________________________________________________________________無(wú)論發(fā)生什么，我會(huì)一直在你身邊_______________________________________________________________________________無(wú)論如何，我都不會(huì)和他們那種人成為一丘之貉_______________________________________________________________________________1.Nomatterhowhardyoutry(=Howeverhardyoutry),youwillneverbesuccessful.2.Nomatterwhathappens.I'llalwaysbethereforyou.3.Nomatterwhat,Iwouldn’tbelikethosepeople.keepsb/sthinmind.Keep(sb/sth)inmind記住，銘記用來(lái)替換remember例句：When

you

keep

this

in

mind

you

realize

thatall

you

can

control

in

a

dangeroussituation

isyourself.

記住這一點(diǎn)你就能意識(shí)到，在危險(xiǎn)的情況下你能控制的是你自己Keepinmind

thatyouhavetobehomeby11o'clock.記住，你必須在11點(diǎn)前回家翻譯鞏固：記住你告訴我的話并不容易。______________________________________________________________________________假如時(shí)間能在此刻停留，我會(huì)把你放在我心中。______________________________________________________________________________只要你時(shí)刻注意方法，每種方案都能成功實(shí)現(xiàn)網(wǎng)站布局。______________________________________________________________________________1.It’snoteasytokeepinmindwhatyouhavetoldme.2.Ifthetimewouldstop,Iwouldkeepyouinmymind.3.Everycase

can

beusedto

make

a

successful

website

layout,

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you

keepmethods

in

mind.二次修改：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2019長(zhǎng)寧一模Writeatleast60wordswiththetitle“Myopiniononhomework”.（以“我對(duì)作業(yè)的看法”為題寫一篇不少于60字的短文。標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。）你每天都要完成學(xué)科作業(yè)，請(qǐng)你談?wù)勀銓?duì)作業(yè)的看法及建議。（注意：短文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的姓名、校名及其他相關(guān)信息，否則不予評(píng)分。）審題分析：此題考察的是學(xué)生議論文寫作能力，屬于主觀理由型，即對(duì)某一問(wèn)題或者社會(huì)現(xiàn)象表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)。對(duì)于homework的看法，首先要有一個(gè)總體的觀點(diǎn)，然后再舉例形成分論點(diǎn)，可以從homework的作用和對(duì)學(xué)生的建議這些方面來(lái)擴(kuò)充。值得注意的是，分論點(diǎn)之間要有意識(shí)地增加連詞，論點(diǎn)內(nèi)容之間也要保持合理的邏輯，避免東一句西一句不知所云的情況。案例分析：此處添加學(xué)生案例范文范文點(diǎn)評(píng)：MyopiniononhomeworkDifferentpeopleholddifferentopinionsonhomework.Frommypointofview,homeworkistohelpstudentsreviewwhattheyhavelearnedinclassesaswellasdevelopthehabitofworkingouttheproblemsindependently.Doinghomeworkindifferentwaysmayhavedifferentresults.Somestudentsdotheirhomeworkactivelybyusingeffectivelearningtoolswhileothersmaychoosetodoitwiththehelpoftutorsorevenjustcopyothers.However,thegoalofhomeworkistoteachstudentshowtoplanassignments,organizematerialsandmanagetimeeffectively.Therefore,theimportanceofhomeworkcanneverbetoomuchstressedduringourstudylife.作文提綱：句子關(guān)鍵詞/句題干引入①不同的人對(duì)作業(yè)有不同的觀點(diǎn)。(holddifferentopinionson...)個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)②我認(rèn)為，作業(yè)是幫助學(xué)生復(fù)習(xí)他們?cè)谡n堂中學(xué)習(xí)的內(nèi)容(reviewwhattheyhavelearnedinclasses)并且培養(yǎng)獨(dú)立解決問(wèn)題的習(xí)慣(developthehabitofworkingouttheproblemsontheirown)。分論點(diǎn)引入句③用不同的方式(indifferentways)做作業(yè)可能會(huì)有不同的效果。(differentresults.)現(xiàn)象描寫④一些學(xué)生用有效的學(xué)習(xí)工具(useeffectivelearningtools)積極地做作業(yè)而另一些學(xué)生選擇在他們家教的幫助下(withthehelpoftutors)完成或者甚至抄襲別人的作業(yè)(copyothers’homework)。對(duì)觀點(diǎn)進(jìn)一步解釋并前后呼應(yīng)⑤然而做作業(yè)的目標(biāo)是幫助學(xué)生學(xué)會(huì)計(jì)劃任務(wù)，整理材料和有效管理時(shí)間(planassignments,organizematerials,managetimeeffectively)。結(jié)尾⑥突出總結(jié)homework的重要性（theimportanceofhomeworkcanneverbetoomuchstressed）其他觀點(diǎn)詞組：1)helpusgetreadyfortheexams2)improveourvariousabilitiessuchastheabilityofidentityingpiorities,calculation,3)problem-solvingandsoon.4)ensureenoughstudytime5)worksasatoolofselftestingtoknowhowmuchyouhaveunderstoodatclasses語(yǔ)言進(jìn)階1.aswellas aswellas是英語(yǔ)中常用的連接詞，使用時(shí)常常會(huì)出現(xiàn)錯(cuò)誤，將其用法作以下簡(jiǎn)要?dú)w納和說(shuō)明。練習(xí)：Thetournamentisopentoamateursprofessionals. A.that B.aswellas C.which D.this答案B。Shetakesprivatepupilsteachinginschool. A.aswellas B.what C.which D.this答案A。翻譯鞏固：護(hù)理工作既是職業(yè)又是救死扶傷的責(zé)任._______________________________________________________________________________這會(huì)對(duì)于你,接下來(lái)要學(xué)到的,和明天要做的東西起一個(gè)引導(dǎo)作用。_______________________________________________________________________________聽聽這些描述：,針對(duì)那些已經(jīng)沉浸于《尤利西斯》的人,和那些還在猶豫不決的人。_______________________________________________________________________________Nursingisavocationaswellasaprofession.Andthis'llleadintowhatyou'regoingtoseenexttime

as

well

as

whatyou'regoingtodotomorrow.

Listentothatlanguage:"ForthosewhoarealreadyengrossedinthereadingofUlysses,

as

well

as

forthosewhohesitatetobeginit."

2.holddifferentopinionson各抒己見，表達(dá)不同意某個(gè)觀點(diǎn)或者持有不同觀點(diǎn)的時(shí)候可以使用的固定搭配Differentpeoplehasdifferentopinions.這個(gè)句子是不合時(shí)宜的，不要使用。詞典例句：Differentscholarsholddifferentopinionstowardstherighttoknowthetruth. 學(xué)者們對(duì)知情權(quán)的認(rèn)知不盡一致。Therearesomepeoplewhoholddifferentopinionsontheenvironmentprotection. 人們對(duì)于環(huán)境保護(hù)的看法不太一樣翻譯練習(xí)：我在這件事上持有不同的觀點(diǎn)_______________________________________________________________________________家長(zhǎng)對(duì)孩子的教育有不同看法_______________________________________________________________________________對(duì)是否取消學(xué)生回家作業(yè)老師們意見分歧_______________________________________________________________________________答案：1.Iholddifferentopinionsonthisissue.2.Parentsholddifferentopinionsontheirchildren’seducation.3.Theteachersholddifferentopinionsonwhethertocancelthestudents’homework.3.canneverbetoomuchstressed再?gòu)?qiáng)調(diào)也不為過(guò)cannever/nottoo再……也不為過(guò)，通常用于強(qiáng)調(diào)某一內(nèi)容，加強(qiáng)語(yǔ)氣。從語(yǔ)法上來(lái)說(shuō)，不很難理。實(shí)際上，這是一個(gè)雙重否定句。毫無(wú)疑問(wèn)，never是一個(gè)否定用詞，從語(yǔ)法和意義上都是如此。too從意義上來(lái)說(shuō)是一個(gè)否定用詞。所以,實(shí)際上這是一個(gè)雙重否定句。

詞典例句Youcanneverbetoocarefulwhiledriving. 你開車時(shí)越小心越好.Indeed,youcanneverbetooconcentratedwhenyouareworkingonaminiature. 事實(shí)上，當(dāng)你工作的時(shí)候，你在怎么集中精神也不為過(guò)。翻譯鞏固我怎么感謝你也不過(guò)分。______________________________________________________________________________我們做實(shí)驗(yàn)時(shí)越仔細(xì)越好。______________________________________________________________________________人民在歷史上所起的作用,無(wú)論怎樣評(píng)價(jià)都不會(huì)過(guò)高.______________________________________________________________________________1.Icannotthankyoutoomuch.2.Wecannotbetoocarefulindoingexperiments.3.Theimportantrolepeopleplayedinhistorycanneverbehighlightedtoomuch.

二次修改：__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2019黃浦一模In60to120words,writeaboutthetopic“Itisimportantto…”(以“…很重要”為題，寫一篇60到120個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格)作為一名中學(xué)生，你的生活一定很忙碌。目前你覺(jué)得什么對(duì)你來(lái)說(shuō)很重要？請(qǐng)你結(jié)合自己的經(jīng)歷談?wù)勀愕南敕ǎ⒄f(shuō)明理由。審題分析此次黃浦區(qū)的作文以一個(gè)半命題的形式考察大家，做什么事情很重要？這類半命題作文自由度非常大，屬于夾敘夾議類文章。命題要求要聯(lián)系自己的實(shí)際生活，這也是考點(diǎn)之一，在行文過(guò)程中稍微附加自己的真實(shí)經(jīng)歷即可。拿到題目后思考：做什么事情很重要呢？話題和素材可以從我們平時(shí)常接觸的話題中選，比如學(xué)英語(yǔ)、努力學(xué)習(xí)、凡事要制定計(jì)劃、關(guān)愛老人、保護(hù)環(huán)境等……選擇非常多，因此在擬題的過(guò)程中一定要找到自己最擅長(zhǎng)的話題。案例分析：It’simportanttosavetrees. Treesareourbestfriends.Wecan’tlivewithoutthem.Theyprovidefoodandsheltersforhumanandanimals.Theyproduceoxygenforusandmakeourcitymorebeautifulandlessnoisy.Treesaresoimportantforus,butwedon’ttakecareofthem.Peoplecutdownsomanytreeseveryyearthattreesbecomefewerandfewer.So,wemustsavethem.Weshouldplantmoretreesandtakecareofthem.Weshouldcutfewertreesandwastelesswood.Inaword,treesareourbestfriendsandveryimportantforus.Ifwedon’tsavethem,wewilldieafterallthetreescutdown.范文點(diǎn)評(píng)：Itisimportanttokeepabalancebetweenstudyandplay.Frommypointofview,keepingabalancebetweenstudyandplaydoesmakeadifferencetous.Itisknowntoallthatstudyisimportant,butnowandthen,Ifindithardtosparesomefreetimetorelaxmyself.What’smore,continuousexaminationsstressmealot,whichputsgreatpressureonmymind.Lastbutnotleast,thereisasayinggoesthat‘AllworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboy’.Onlybykeepingabalancebetweenstudyandplaycanwehaveanoveralldevelopment.寫作素材論點(diǎn)一ItisimportanttostudyEnglish.論據(jù)素材①Withtheglobalizationofthewholeworld,Englishplaysamoreandmoreimportantroleasaninternationallanguageinourdailylife.論據(jù)素材②EnglishisaveryusefultooltohelpusgetaccesstothelatestnewsandresearchpapersbecausemostofthemarewritteninEnglish.論點(diǎn)二Itisimportanttoprotectourenvironment.論據(jù)素材①Studentscan’tenjoytheirschoollifeunlesstheskyisblueandthewaterisclean.論據(jù)素材②Ifwedon’tstarttoprotecttheenvironmentnow,itwillbecomeworseandworse.Weneedtocreateabetterenvironmentforthenextgeneration.作文提綱：句子關(guān)鍵詞/句個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)（開門見山）①就我而言（mypointofview）,保持學(xué)習(xí)和玩樂(lè)之間的平衡很重要（doesmakeadifferenceto…）分論點(diǎn)一②大家都知道（Itisknowntoallthat…）學(xué)習(xí)的重要性，但我有時(shí)（nowandthen）會(huì)覺(jué)得找時(shí)間放松自己變得越來(lái)越難了（findithard）分論點(diǎn)二③其次（What’smore），連續(xù)不斷的考試對(duì)我施壓（stress），讓我心頭感到壓力山大（putgreatpressureonmymind）分論點(diǎn)三④最后（Lastbutnotleast），正如俚語(yǔ)（saying）所說(shuō)，‘AllworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboy’.總結(jié)(首位呼應(yīng))⑤由Only引導(dǎo)倒裝句：只有通過(guò)平衡學(xué)習(xí)和玩樂(lè)，我們才能達(dá)到全面發(fā)展（haveanoveralldevelopment）語(yǔ)言進(jìn)階形式賓語(yǔ)itIfindit+adj.+tofind

it+adj.這里的adj作為賓語(yǔ)it的賓語(yǔ)補(bǔ)足語(yǔ)，補(bǔ)充修飾賓語(yǔ)。詞典例句：Ifindithardtoblow-drymyhair

我發(fā)現(xiàn)我的頭發(fā)很難吹干。Willyouchangeplaceswithme?Ifindittoohotinthesun.

你能不能和我調(diào)換一下位置？我覺(jué)得呆在太陽(yáng)下面太熱。 答案D.這里it做形式賓語(yǔ)。翻譯鞏固：1、我覺(jué)得很難判斷自己的工作如何。______________________________________________________________________________2、他不是個(gè)能與他人溝通的人，所以我感覺(jué)和他交流起來(lái)很困難。______________________________________________________________________________3、我發(fā)現(xiàn)，手邊有幾本詞典大有好處，這樣可以比較它們的選詞用字。______________________________________________________________________________1、Ifindithardtojudgeofmyownwork.2、Heisunabletorelatetootherpeople,soIfinditquitedifficulttocommunicatewithhim.3、Ifindithelpfultokeepseveraldictionariesbymesoastocomparetheirwording.形式主語(yǔ)itItisknowntoallthat…眾所周知……It+be+

分詞（known）+從句，該句型表示“眾所周知”，或“大家都知道”。這樣的分詞還有有said（據(jù)說(shuō)），reported（據(jù)報(bào)道），believed（人們相信），known（眾所周知），decided（已決定），proved（已證實(shí)），thought（認(rèn)為）,expected（期待）,annouced（宣布）等。詞典例句：It

is

known

to

all

that

Shanghai

has

a

modern

and

fashionable

atmosphere.眾所周知，上海擁有時(shí)尚和現(xiàn)代化的氛圍。It

is

known

to

all

that

man

can't

live

without

air

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