讀后續(xù)寫寫作技巧Atechnique-toshownottotell

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Atechniqueincontinuationwriting他焦急地等待著朋友的出現(xiàn)。他坐在椅子上，不停地看表，眉頭緊鎖，嘴角微微向下。手指有節(jié)奏地敲擊著桌面，腳也不安分地抖動著。他時不時地望向門口，眼神中充滿了期待和焦慮。每當有人從門口經(jīng)過時，他都抬頭向外看，但隨即又失望地低下頭去。李華約了一位重要朋友在餐廳19:00見面，已經(jīng)19:10，朋友還沒來，他等得有點急。

TellShow!asceneor

Showthereaderseverything,tellthemnothing.

--ErnestHemingway

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Don’ttellmethemoonisshining.Showmetheglint(閃光）oflightonbrokenglass.--AntonChechove

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Atechniqueincontinuationwriting:ToshownottotellSHOWVSTELLLearn&UnderstandToTell:giveusinformation.ToShow:helpusformpicturesinourmind

throughdetails.Whatis“toshow”&“totell”Learn&UnderstandHewasverycold.Histeethchatteredasheblewonhisfingers.Hepulledhercollarup,tightenedhisscarf,puthishandsdeepintohispocketsandturnedhisfaceawayfromthebitingwind.Techniquesincontinuationwriting:Showthecharacters’emotions.（情感）Describespecificverbs.(動作鏈)Picturethesetting.(環(huán)境)

Atechniqueincontinuationwriting:thecharacters’emotions.We’lllearntoshowhappiness,sadness,excitement,surprise,anger,embarrassment,boredom,confusion….Suppose:Youwereboundforanothercitywhereyouwillstudy,youexchangedgoodbyewithyourmotherattherailwaystation.HowwillyouwriteanentryofdairytodescribetheseparationToday,mymomsawmeoffatthestation.Iwasreallyupsettosaygoodbye.Describethesceneofseparation.Howtoshowthecharacter’semotion.Learn&UnderstandLikethis

“Takecare,mydear!”Momsaidinachokedvoice.Shethrewherarmsaroundmeandstrokemyhair.Iwasseizedbysadness,mylipstremblingandtearsstreamingdownmyface.

Foramoment,theworldandallitspeopledisappeared,onlyMumandmeatthestation.“Ihavetoleavenow.”Mummurmured（輕聲說）.Sheturnedaroundandheadedfortheexit.“Iwillmissyou!”Iwavedmyarmandshoutedatthetopofmyvoice.Butshedidn’thearme.Throughmistyeyes/glisteningtears,Isawherbacklostamongcrowdsofpeoplehurryingtoandfro(來去匆匆)andnolongervisible.Aclearandvividpicture.Howtoshowthecharacter’semotion.Learn&UnderstandHowdidthewriterpaintsuchapictureFromwhataspects

“Takecare,mydear!”Momsaidinachokedvoice.Shethrewherarmsaroundmeandstrokemyhair.Iwasseizedbysadness,mylipstremblingandtearsstreamingdownmyface.Foramoment,theworldandallitspeopledisappeared,onlyMumandmeatthestation.“Ihavetoleavenow.”Mummurmured（輕聲說）.Sheturnedaroundandheadedfortheexit.“Iwillmissyou!”Iwavedmyarmandshoutedatthetopofmyvoice.Butshedidn’thearme.Throughmistyeyes/glisteningtears,Isawherbacklostamongcrowdsofpeoplehurryingtoandfro(來去匆匆)andnolongervisible.FacialexpressionsBodylanguageVoiceHowtoshowthecharacter’semotion.Learn&UnderstandHowtoshow

characters’emotions.++FaceBodyVoiceShow:Hewasexcited.Aplayerscoredagoal.Thecoachwasveryexcited.Howtoshowthecharacter’semotion.learn&understandShow:Hewasexcited.①FACEStep1:Drawanexcitedfaceinyourmind.Step2:Imaginehisfacialexpressionsfromthetoptothe

bottom.(eyebrows,eyes,nose,mouth,cheeks,

jaw)Howtoshowthecharacter’semotion.learn&understand①Face:Hiseyessparkled/twinkledwithgreatdelight.Abigtoothysmilespreadacrosshisface.Show:Hewasexcited.Howtoshowthecharacter’semotion.learn&understandHepunchedtheairwithfists.

舉拳歡呼Hesprangtohisfeet/gaveajumpintheair.Howtoshowthecharacter’semotion.Show:Hewasexcited.②Body:learn&understand“Yes!/Yeah!”hescreamed/yelled/exclaimedatthetopofhislung.③Voice:Howtoshowthecharacter’semotion.Show:Hewasexcited.learn&understandWithhiseyessparkling/twinklingwithgreatdelight(face),thecoachsprangtohisfeet,punchingtheairwithfists(body)ashisplayerscoredagoal.

“Yes!”Hescreamedatthetopofhislung(voice).Abigtoothysmilespread

acrosshisface(face).Howtoshowthecharacter’semotion.Show:Hewasexcited.With復合結(jié)構(gòu)V-ing伴隨狀語“無靈”主語句╳(totell)√(toshow)Hewasexcited.Withhiseyessparkling/twinklingwithgreatdelight,thecoachsprangtohisfeet,punchingtheairwithfistsashisplayerscoredagoal.“Yes!”Hescreamedatthetopofhislung.Abigtoothysmilespreadacrosshisface.facebodyvoiceshowthecharacter’semotion.Show:MissDengwasangrybecauseweliedtoher.learn&understandShow:MissDengwasangrybecauseweliedtoher.facebodyvoice“Howdareyou!”MissDengscreamedatthetopofhervoice（Voice）,hercheeksflushedwithrage

（face）.Sheglaredatus,herwholebodyshakinglikealeaf./Sheglaredatus,pounding/bangingthedesk.（body）.learn&understand獨立主格獨立主格V-ing作伴隨狀語Atthenewsthathegotthefirstprizeinthecompetition,hewasverysurprised.Howtoshowthecharacter’semotion.Show:Hewassurprised.Apply&PracticeHiseyebrowswereraised.Hiseyeswidened.Hismouthwasopen.Show:Hewassurprised.Face:Apply&PracticeBody:Voice:“Really”Heexclaimedinshock.HestraightenedupDiscussionHegotthefirstprizeinthecompetition.Face:One’seyebrowsrose/wereraised.One’seyeswidened/werewideopen.One’smouthwasopen.open-mouthedadj.One’smouthwaswideopenenoughto

swallowadentist.One’sjawdropped/felltotheground.Body:Sb.shookone’sheadindisbelief.Sb.straightenedup.

Shockrootedsb.tothespot.Sb.wasnumbwithshock.Voice:Sb.yelled/exclaimedinshock.Sb.wasspeechlesswithshock.Sb.gaveagaspofsurprise/gaspedinsurprise.

倒吸一口氣Expressionsandgrammarthatmayhelpyou:Groupwork:createyourworktoshow:Hewassurprised.with復合結(jié)構(gòu)V-ing作伴隨狀語獨立主格無靈主語句…①Sb.+V,with復合結(jié)構(gòu)

Theyhuggedtightlytogether,withtearsofjoywellingupintheir

eyes/withtearsofjoyintheireyes.②Sb.+V,獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)Theyhuggedtightlytogether,tearsofjoywellingupintheireyes.③Sb.+V,V-ing伴隨狀語Hecheered,

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