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i托?！art1IntroductiontoTOEFLiBTQuickWhatisGRE:CriticalWhatisTOEFLP1-P195-P575-StickwiththeUsetopicChoosewordsAvoidusing“I-opinion”tosupporttheAvoidUseScoringofWritingHumanrater+E-Holistic整數(shù)給分E-Raterswilljudgethequalityofyourwriting.Theywillconsiderhowwellyoudevelopyourideas,howwellyouorganizeyouressay,andhowwellyouuselanguagetoexpressyourideas.Part2ScoringRaterswilljudgethequalityofyourwriting.Theywillconsiderhowwellyoudevelopyourideas,howwellyouorganizeyouressay,andhowwellyouuselanguagetoexpressyourideas.DevelopmentDevelopmentistheamountandkindsofsupport(examples,details,reasons)foryourthatyoupresentinyouressay.Togetatopscore,youressayshouldbe,accordingtotheraterguidelines,"welldeveloped,usingclearlyappropriateexplanations,exemplifications,and/ordetails."Theraterswilljudgewhetheryouhaveaddressedthetopicandhowwellyourdetails,examples,andreasonssupportyourideas.Donot"memorize"longintroductoryandconcludingparagraphsjusttoaddwordstoyouressay.Ifpeoplewanttodealwithsomeproblems,theywillfindit’sdifficultforthemtosolvethemwithoutthehelpfromthegovernmentbecausetheydon’thaveenoughexperience.Inthefirstplace,buildingnewhousesenhanceourlivingsafety.Inmanyoccasions,housesbuiltlongtimeagotendtobedangerouswhenearthquakesstrike.Therefore,itisimperativethatgovernmentshouldbuildnewarchitecturesinordertogetthesafetyofourcitizensE-LengthofdiscourseE-raterandorE-raterOrganizationOrganizationissomethingthatratersnoticewhenyoufailtoorganize…..Writingparagraphsandmarkingtransitionsfromoneideatoanotherinvariouswaysusuallyhelpsthereadertofollowyourideas.But…justusingtransitionwordssuchasfirstorseconddoesnotguaranteethatyouressayisorganized.Thepointsyoumakemustallrelatetothetopicoftheessayandtothemainideayouarepresentinginresponse.…,youressayshouldbeunified.Thescoringguidementions"unity"aswellas"progression"and"coherence",….Toearnatopscore,youneedtoavoidredundancy(repetitionofideas),digression(pointsthatconnections(placeswhereitishardforthereadertounderstandhowtwoideasorpartsofyourwritingarerelated).Firstly,thehomeworkcanhelpyouconsolidatetheknowledge.Youknowifyourteacherassignyousomehomework,afteryoufinishit,youcanpromoteyourabilityinfinishinghomeworkindependence.Paperbookhasalonghistory,itcanbringusasenseofrealisticanditisgoodforourNowadays,becauseoftheimprovementoftheelectronicproducts,moreandmorepeoplebegintowearglasses.Forinstance,Iamaseniorhighschoolstudent,andmyschoolisfamousinmyprovince,soeveryoneinmyschoolhasaheavylearningstress.E-NumberofdiscourseUseofLanguageUseLanguageuse….Togetatopscore,anessaymustdisplay“consistentfacilityintheuselanguage.”Thereshouldbeavarietyofsentencestructures,andwordchoiceshouldbeappropriate.Ifyouressayincludesafewminorlexicalorgrammarerrors,youcanstillgetahighscore.However,ifyoumakealotofgrammarerrorsandifthoseerrorsmakeithardtounderstandyourmeaning,youwillgetalowerscore....Someonethinksthegovernmenttakestaxesfromusbutdonothing.Everythingisdonebyus.However,thisisatotallywrongidea.Lastbutnottheleast,admirationiskeytoinfluencelevel,too.Becausehumanaretendedtoimitatesomeoneweadmire.Meanwhile,friendscanalsoinfluenceourlife,buttheinfluencefromourfriendsmaynotasstrongasthatfromourteachers.Becauseourfriendsoftenhavethesameageandwealwaysbelievethepeoplewhohavemoreexperiences.Asweallknow,studyingisveryboring.Takeavividfigureofspeech,allthehappinessandenjoymentshideinthedarkness,andgodsays,letteachersbe!Sothestudyingislighted.ScoringRubricsScore5：Effectivelyaddressesthetopicandiswellorganizedandwelldeveloped,usingclearlyappropriateexplanation,exemplification,and/ordetailsDisplaysconsistentfacilityintheuseoflanguage,demonstratingsyntacticvariety,appropriatewordchoice,andidiomaticity,thoughitmayhaveminorlexicalorgrammaticalerrors?ScoreAddressesthetopicandtaskwell,thoughsomepointsmaynotbefullyIsgenerallywellorganizedandwelldeveloped,usingappropriateandsufficientexplanations,exemplifications,and/ordetailsDisplaysunity,progression,andcoherence,thoughitmaycontainoccasionalredundancy,digression,orunclearconnectionsDisplaysfacilityintheuseoflanguage,demonstratingsyntacticvarietyandrangeofvocabulary,thoughitwillprobablyhaveoccasionalnoticeableminorerrorsinstructure,wordform,oruseofidiomaticlanguagethatdonotinterferewithScoreAnessayatthislevelismarkedbyoneormoreoftheAddressesthetopicandtaskusingsomewhatdevelopedexplanations,exemplifications,and/ordetailsDisplaysunity,progression,andcoherence,thoughconnectionofideasmaybeoccasionallyobscuredMaydemonstrateinconsistentfacilityinsentenceformationandwordchoicethatmayresultinlackofclarityandoccasionallyobscuremeaningMaydisplayaccuratebutlimitedrangeofsyntacticstructuresandPart3Furthermore,bydoingavarietyoftasks,apersoncandevelopskillsindifferentareas.Thiscanhelpthepersonwithhisorhercareerdevelopmentbecausetheworkerhasmoreskillstoapplyforagreaterrangeofjobs.Inmodernsociety,apersonwithseveralskillsiseasiertoachievesuccess.Incontrast,ifaworkeralwaysdoesthesamething,he/shemaylosemanyopportunitiestobepromotedaslongasthereissomeonebetterthanhim/her.Forexample,mycousin,Jackson,worksinabigcompanyaftergraduationandhisdailyworkinvolvesalotofthings,includingarrangingtheconference,negotiatingwithothercompanies,drawingthemarketplanforthedepartmentandsoon.Thankstothevaluableexperienceheaccumulatesinthosedifferenttasks,hehasbeenpromotedtobethesalesmanager.Whileoneofhisclassmates,Tom,workinginanothercompany,stillworksasanordinaryclerk,asTomonlydoesthesametaskeverydayandvariousskillsandhelpthemtosucceed.中間段（BODY主題句（topicexplanationstopicsentenceexplanations還是exemplification都要有具體的details(細節(jié))unitysentencetopic（emplificationStep1Step4Step5Step1特點：題目中往往建議或者選擇執(zhí)行某個具體的動作，題干中常含有should,must,need,important,necessary,better/besttodo等DoyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingParentshavespenttoomuchtimehelpingtodeterminethefutureoftheirchildren.Childrenshouldmaketheirowndecisions.I（1）Allowingchildrentomaketheirownchoiceshelpsthemgrowintoindependentandresponsibleadults.（2）MakingchoicesbythechildrenthemselveswillletthemhaveagoodknowledgeoftherealDoyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingIfpeopleareonvacation(holiday),theyshouldleavetheirmobilephonesatIMobilephonesenablepeopletoconnectwithothersandsharetheirjoyonthesocialnetworks.MobilephonesprovidepeoplewithaccesstousefulinformationontheDoyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingDriversshouldpayforapermit,whichallowsthemtodriverushhours,inordertosolvetheproblemoftrafficcongestion.IPayingfeesduringtherushhourscanreducethenumberofvehiclesintheTheadditionalmoneypaidbydriversintrafficbusytimecanbeusedtobuildandmaintainmorefacilitiesinthecity.DoyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingYoungerschoolchildren(fromage5to10)shouldberequiredtostudyartandmusicinadditiontomath,language,science,andhistory.IArtandmusichelpchildrentocultivateimaginationandArtandmusicprovidechildrenwithanalternativewaytoexpressIArtandmusicaddextrapressuretoyoungerschoolArtandmusictakeupchildren’ssparetimethatcanbeusedforsocialDoyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingSpendingalotoftimewatchingsportsonTVandfollowingone'sfavoriteteamwillhaveanegativeimpactonone'slife.ISpendingalotoftimeonsportswatchingmayaffecttheefficiencyofourworkorstudySpendingalotoftimeonsportswatchingmayaffectourFollowingone’sfavoriteteammaycosttoo古今對比/culturalDoyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingItiseasierforparentstoraisechildrentodaythanitwas50yearsIAdvancedmedicalfacilitiesandtreatmentensurethehealthofchildreninmodernCompulsoryeducationenablesallchildrentoreceiveaformaloftheirDoyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingTheopinionsofcelebrities,suchasentertainersandathletes,aremoreimportanttotheyoungerpeoplethantheyaretotheolderpeople.IYoungpeopleareeasilyinfluencedbytheopinionofothers,especiallythosecelebritiessuchasentertainersandathletes.DoyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingItiseasierformorepeoplenowthaninthepasttogetanICompulsoryeducationensuresthateverychildhasarighttogetanMoreschoolsarebuiltinthecitiesandTechnologyprovidespeoplewithalternativewaystogetanDoyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingYoungpeopletodayarelessdependentontheirparentsthanintheIThedevelopmentoftechnologyoffersyoungpeoplemoreapproachestosolveGenerationgappreventscommunicationbetweenyoungpeopleandtheirStep2Livinginthecountrycontributestoourhealth.Asisknowntoall,inthecountrytherearefewwecanenjoythebluesky,cleanwater,freshairandhealthyfood,whichcontributetoourhealth.Itisadvisableforstudentstopursueafieldofstudyconcerningtheirinterestandtalents.Majorswithinterestsandtalentspromotestudents’academicprogress,whichwouldcontributetotheirfinalsuccess.JustasanoldChinesesayinggoes,“Interestisthebestteacherforstudents.”Withinterestandtalents,studentsmaybemoreenthusiasticwiththeiracademicstudyandwillachievemorewithinthatfield,forwhattheyareengagedinarejustwhattheyenjoy.Andtalentswillplayacrucialroleduringthestudyprocess,assistingstudentstohaveadeeperunderstandingandexplorationofthefield.Step3ABAAB在該方面的Bycontrast,peoplelivinginthecityaresufferingfromvariousdiseasescausedbytheenvironmentalcontamination,forpollutantsfromfactoriesandautomobilesarecontinuallybeingdischargedintotheairandrivers.Theimportanceofoldfriendsinreducingstresscannotbeexaggerated.Olderfriendshavelongerrelationshipswithus;therefore,theyknowusbetterthannewfriends.Whenweencounterobstacles,itisourlong-termfriends—ouroldfriends—whogiveusthebestsuggestionsandhelpusgetthroughourproblems.Ournewfriendssometimescannotgiveadequateadvicetousbecausetheydonotknowoursituationswellenough.Weneedtimetogettoknowournewfriends.Asisknowntoall,peoplewillbecometiredandloseefficiencyiftheyconcentrateonthesamethingforalongtime,fortheirbrainscannothavearest.Thiswillfurthercreateriskofmakingmistakesorevenphysicalinjuriesifthepersonkeepsthesamebodygestureforalongtime.Bycontrast,differenttypesoftasksprovideworkerswiththeopportunitytoshifttheirmindsandmakethemlesstiredduringthework.Whenchildrengetasumofmoney,theyshouldconsidercarefullyhowtoallocatethismoneyandsetapriorityofthingstobuy.Besides,somechildrenmayeventhinkabouthowtomakemoremoneyoutofthemoneyhe/shehasalreadypossessed.Bydoingso,thosechildrenwillbeadeptathowtousetheirmoneywiselyandproperly,andthisiswhatwecallfinancialmanagement.However,ifachildcouldnotmanagehis/hermoneyatayoungage,whenhe/shegrowsup,he/shemaybeexcitedaboutthefirstmoneyhe/shemakes,andthushe/shemaybuy/purchaseeverythinghe/shewantswithoutconsiderationandcomparison.Itisevidentthatthechildwillsoonrunoutof/useuphis/hermoneyandmaysufferalotinthefollowingdays.（analogyJustashumanbeingsneedtimetodigestandabsorbthefoodaftereachmeal,studentsalsoneedsometimetodigestandmasterwhattheyhavelearnedinclassbeforetheymoveon.Step4Childrentendtoconsumejunkfoodwhilewatchingtelevision.Forinstance,whentheywatchtelevision,friedchipsandcoca-colaaretheirfavorites. 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Forexample,mygrandparentshavebeenlivinginthecountrysideforoverfiftyyearsandseldomdotheygotohospital.Lastmonth,theycametothecityIlivein,andthenextweektheybothfellill.Theyweresenttothehospitalandthedoctorsaidthatitwasbecauseofsmog.Thedoctorsuggestedthatmygrandparentsshouldliveinthehospitalforsometime,buttheyrefused.Theydecidedtogobacktothevillage.Itwasamazingthatafewdaysaftertheywentback,bothofthemrecovered.Takemybother,Tom,asanexample.Tomhadlivedinthecountrywithmygrandparentsfortwelveyearsbeforehewenttothecitytoentermiddleschool.Whenhewaslivinginthecountryside,heseldomfellillandenjoyedhimselfinthenatureeveryday.Sincehewenttothecity,hegraduallyfelthisthroatsoreandoftencoughed.Whenhewassenttothehospital,thegasofautomobilesandthepollutantsdischargedbythefactories.SoTomhadtowearmasksinbadweather.Lastsummer,hewentbacktothecountrysidetospendhisvacation,andthenextweekhearrived,hiscoughstoppedandhefeltmuchbetter.假設(shè)情況Inmanylifesituations,complaininginpersonisthesuperiorchoice.Let’sconsiderthefollowinghypotheticalsituation.Apersonbuysadefectiveproductands/hewantstoreturnit.Supposes/hewritesalettertothedealer/manufacturertodoso.It’lltakedaysorevenweeksbeforetheletterreachestheresponsibleparty.Andevenafterreceivingtheletter,theresponsiblepartymightdismissitoutofthehandorburyitunderbureaucraticprocedures.Incontrast,ifs/hegoesdirectlytothedealerorproducer,his/herproblemwillgettheproperattentionimmediately.名人事例（famousWhatismoreimportant,onecaneasilyacquireachievementwithinanyfieldaslongashe/sheisspecializedinit.J.K.Rowling,thegreatestwriterinBritain,whoispopularforherseriesofHarryPotter,canbestbuttressthispoint.WhenJ.K.Rowlinggraduatedfromhighschool,herparentssuggestedherchoosingthemajorofengineering,whichwasconsideredasoneofthemoreinterestinEnglishliterature,anunpopularmajorthenandnowadays,andshesecretlychangedhermajortoEnglishliteraturewhenshewasinFreshmenyear.Combinedwithherinterestsandtalents,J.K.Rowlinghasbecomeafamouswriterintheworldandherworksarepopularwithpeopleofallages.TheexampleofJ.K.Rowlingindicatesthatwithendeavor,togetherwithourinterestsandtalents,wecanachieveoursuccessintheend.調(diào)查和研究（survey&Step5Thankstothegoodenvironmentinthecountryside,mygrandparentscanenjoyahealthyStep1Step4Step5Livinginthecountrycontributestoourhealth.Asisknowntoall,inthecountrytherearefewwecanenjoythebluesky,cleanwater,freshairandhealthyfood,whichcontributestoourhealth.Bycontrast,peoplelivinginthecityaresufferingfromvariousdiseasescausedbytheenvironmentalcontamination,forpollutantsfromfactoriesandautomobilesarecontinuallybeingdischargedintotheairandrivers.Forexample,mygrandparentshavebeenlivinginthecountrysideforoverfiftyyearsandseldomdotheygotohospital.Lastmonth,theycametothecityIlivein,andthenextweektheybothfellill.Theyweresenttothehospitalandthedoctorsaidthatitwasbecauseofsmog.Thedoctorsuggestedthatmygrandparentsshouldliveinthehospitalforsometime,buttheyrefused.Theydecidedtogobacktothevillage.Itwasamazingthatafewdaysaftertheywentback,bothofthemrecovered.Thankstothegoodenvironmentinthecountryside,mygrandparentscanenjoyahealthylife.(197words)Heavyworkloadinmodernsocietymaylessentheopportunityforparentstohaveabetterunderstandingoftheirkids.Duetothequickeningpaceofmodernlife,thefiercecompetitionforcespeopletodevotemuchmoretimeandenergythanbeforetotheirwork.Consequently,parentsmaysparelesstimetocommunicatewiththeirchildrendespitethevariouschattingtoolsexistingnowadays.Onthecontrary,parentswholived50yearsagowerenotsoengagedintheirworkandthusspentmoretimewiththeirkids.Therefore,itisconceivablethatparentsinthepastunderstoodtheirchildrenbetterthanparentsinmodernsociety.AccordingtothelatestsurveyconductedbyPekingUniversityamongmostteenagersinseveralmajorcities,parentsspendlessthan6hourswiththeirkidsperweek,andmosttimeisspentduringthedinner.Thoseteenagerscomplainthattheytrytocommunicatewiththeirparentsandareeagertogetsomeadvicefromthem;however,itisalwaysfutiletodoso.Lackingcommunicationbetweenparentsandchildrenmayworsenthesituationaboutthemutualunderstanding.（182效 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Coherence&Furthermore,heavyworkloadinmodernsocietymaylessentheopportunityforparentstohaveabetterunderstandingoftheirkids.Duetothequickeningpaceofmodernlife,thefiercecompetitionforcespeopletodevotemuchmoretimeandenergythanbeforetotheirthevariouschattingtoolsexistingnowadays.Onthecontrary,parentswholived50yearsagowerenotsoengagedintheirworkandthusspentmoretimewiththeirkids.Therefore,itisconceivablethatparentsinthepastunderstoodtheirchildrenbetterthanparentsinmodernsociety.AccordingtothelatestsurveyconductedbyPekingUniversityamongmostteenagersinseveralmajorcities,parentsspendlessthan6hourswiththeirkidsperweek,andmosttimeisspentduringthedinner.Thoseteenagerscomplainthattheytrytocommunicatewiththeirparentsandareeagertogetsomeadvicefromthem;however,itisalwaysfutiletodoso.Lackingcommunicationbetweenparentsandchildrenmayworsenthesituationaboutthemutualunderstanding.增補inwhat`s比較inthesamejustincompared對照inontheontheothereven因果(Causeandbecausedueowinggiventhanksasaresultasa強調(diào)aboveofasamatterofin讓步afterinspitewhileitistrue例證forforthatsuchinotherinthisOneaptillustrationofthispoint總結(jié)tosumtoininallinintoputitinainaswhenitcomeswhentalkingasfar時間和空間(TimeandontheintheinfrontFinally,highersalariescanattractmoreelitestotheteachingtroop.Asisknowntoall,haveawiderangeofknowledgeandarealwaysspecializedinacertainfield.Therefore,theyHowever,itisdifficulttobecomeanelite,sothoseelitesareexpectingtogetbetterpaymentwhentheywork.Ifteachers’salariesareraised,eliteswillworkasteachers,fortheywillacceptsuchahighsalary.Forexample,mybrother,Tom,graduatedfromYaleUniversityfiveyearsagoandworkedinacompany,becauseatthattime,theteachers’salarieswererelativelylow.However,lastyear,helefthiscompanyandworkedinamiddleschoolinmycity,forthesalaryofferedbytheschoolistwiceasmuchasthatbythecompany.Inthelastfewmonths,itisreportedthatmoreandmorepeoplegraduatedfromfamousuniversitiesjoininthatschoolandthatschoolprovidesabettereducationthanbefore,withmorethan80%studentsenrolledinkeyhighschoolinmycity.Itisclearthatwithhighsalary,moreelitescanbeattractedtotheteachingtroop.Part4YouaretowriteinthreeInthefirstpart,stateclearlywhatyourviewInthesecondpart,supportyourviewwithappropriatereasonsandInthelastpart,bringwhatyouhavewrittentoanaturalconclusionoraStep1Step2：解釋拓展主題句Step3：比較對比論證Step4：例證Step5社會中存在的與主題相關(guān)的背景Frommyperspective,明確自己的觀點Currentlythereisawidespreadbeliefthat其他觀點。Frommyperspective,however,明確提出自己Universitystudentsshouldnotberequiredtoattendclasses.Instead,theyshouldbeabletoreceivecreditsthroughafinaltestorpaper.Somestudentsoftenmanagetogetthroughtheircollegeyearsbyattendingveryfewoftheirclasseswhilenotevenhavingtheirgradessuffer.Inmyopinion,however,studentsshouldberequiredtoattendtheirclassforseveralimportantreasons.Currently,thereisawidespreadbeliefthatitisunnecessaryforcollegestudentstoattendclassesaslongastheycanpassafinalexamorpaper.Frommyperspective,ParentsshouldlimitthetimechildrenspendonmoviesandInthesedays,childrenspendtoomuchtimewatchingTVprogramsandmovies.Inmyopinion,however,thetimespentonmoviesandtelevisionsshouldbelimited.Currently,thereisawidespreadbeliefthatitisbeneficialforchildrentowatchTVprogramsandmovies.Frommyperspective,however,thetimespentonmoviesandtelevisionsshouldbelimited.Inthelastpart,bringwhatyouhavewrittentoanaturalconclusionoraInconclusion,再次明確自己的觀點duetobecause理由一and理由二Para1：Currentlythereisawidespreadbeliefthat其他觀點Frommyperspective,however,明Para2：Inthefirstplace,主題句.解釋拓展主題句.對比論證.例證.小結(jié).Para.3：Furthermore,主題句.解釋拓展主題句.對比論證.例證.小結(jié).Para4：Inconclusion,再次強調(diào)自己的觀點duetobecause理由一and理由二對比：betterthan/ratherthan/moreimportantPrintedbookshavegreatereffectsonsocietythantelevisionhas.Para.1:Bothprintedbooksandtelevisionhavegreateffectsonsociety.Para.2:Inthefirstplace,printedbooksarethemajorsourceofacademicPara.3:Furthermore,televisionprovidestheupdatedinformationaswellaspublicPara.4:Inconclusion,printedbooksandtelevisionbothhavegreateffectsonAteacher‘sabilitytorelatewellwiththestudentsismoreimportantthanknowingthesubjectwell.Para.1:Ateacher‘sabilitytorelatewellwiththestudentsisasimportantasknowingthesubjectPara.2:Inthefirstplace,havingagoodrelationshipwithstudentscontributestotheinteractionbetweenteachersandstudents.Para.3:Furthermore,knowingthesubjectwellensurestheefficiencyandaccuracyofteaching.Para.4:Inconclusion,bothateacher‘sabilitytorelatewellwiththestudentsandknowingthesubjectwellareofequalimportance.——Workingathomeusingcomputersandtelephonesisbetterthanworkingintheoffice.WorkingathomeWorkingathomeismorecomfortableandWorkingathomesavestimeandWorkingathomeensuresahighworkWorkingintheWorkingintheofficeensuresahighworkWorkingintheofficehelpsworkerstocultivatethespiritofWorkingintheofficeenablespeopletomakemoreSpendingmoneyontravelingisbetterthansavingmoneyforfutureuse.TravelinghelpspeopletogetTravelingenablespeopletomakemoresavingSavingmoneyisnecessaryforemergencySavingmoneyenablespeopletolearnfinancialWorkingthreedaysaweekwithlongerhoursisbetterthanworkingfivedaysaweekwithshorterhours.workingfivedaysaweekwithshorterWorkingfivedaysaweekwithshorterhoursensuresworkWorkingfivedaysaweekwithshorterhourscontributestopeople’sWorkingfivedaysaweekwithshorterhoursreducesworkers’Gettingadvicefromfriendswhoareolderthanyouismorevaluablethangettingadvicefromfriendsyoursameage.GettingadvicefromelderElderfriendscanteachusmorevaluablelifeElderfriendscansteerusintherightdirectionandawayfrommistakestheyhavealready絕對詞：bestonlyPara.1:Currently,thereisawidespreadbeliefthat原statement的絕對觀點.Fromperspective,however,itisanoverstatementtoclaimPara.2:Admittedly,原statement去掉絕對詞之后存在一定的合理之處.解釋其合理之處.HowevertoconsiderXXtobethebest/onlyXXisapieceofoveremphasisforthereexistotherXX,whichareasgoodas,orevenbetterthanXX./whichcanalsoleadto…Para.3:Inthefirstplace,其他一Para.4:Furthermore,其他二Para.5:Inconclusion,小結(jié)Thebestwaytoimprovethequalityoftheeducationinacountryistoincreaseteachers'Para.1:Currently,thereisawidespreadbeliefthatincreasingteacher’ssalariesisthebestwaytoimprovethequalityoftheeducationinacountry.Frommyperspective,however,itisanoverstatementtoclaimso.解釋.However,toconsiderincreasingteachers’salariestobethebestwayisapieceofoveremphasisforthereexistotherapproacheswhichareasgoodasorevenbetterthanthisone.Para.3:Inthefirstplace,schoolsshouldinvestmoreonteachingfacilities.解釋.例子.小結(jié).Para.4:Furthermore,professionaltrainingshouldbearrangedforteacherstoimprovetheirteachingability.解釋.例子.小結(jié).Para.5:Inconclusion,VisitingmuseumsisthebestwaytolearnaboutaPara.1:Currently,thereisawidespreadbeliefthatthebestwaytolearnaboutacountryistovisitmuseums.Frommyperspective,however,itisanoverstatementtoclaimso.Para.2:Admittedly,museumsareashowcaseofhistoryandculture.Theyrevealsignificanthistoricalevents.…However,toconsidervisitingmuseumstobethebestwayisapieceofoveremphasis,forthereexistotherapproaches,whichareasgoodas,orevenbetterthanthisone.Para.3:Inthefirstplace,byvisitingsomelocalspots,wecancommunicatewithlocalresidents,whichcantellusmoreofthecountry.Para.4:Furthermore,booksandtheInternetaregoodwaystohaveagoodunderstandingofaPara.5:Inconclusion,ThebestwaytolearnaforeigncountryisfromnewspapersandPara.1:Currentlythereisawidespreadbeliefthatnewspapersandmagazinesarethebestwaytolearnaboutaforeigncountry.Frommyperspective,however,itisanoverstatementtoclaimso.Para.2:Admittedlynewspapersandmagazinesareashowcaseofeventsinaforeigncountry.forthereexistotherapproaches,whichareasgoodas,orevenbetterthanthisPara.3:Inthefirstplace,InternetandTVprogramscanbeofgreatimportancetolearnforeignPara.4:Furthermore,travelingorstudyingabroadisveryusefultogetfamiliarwithforeignPara.5:Inconclusion,MostbusinesspeoplearemotivatedonlybythedesireformorePara.1:Currently,thereisawidespreadbeliefthatthedesireformoremoneyistheonlymotivatorformostbusinesspeople.Frommyperspective,however,itisanoverstatementtoclaimso.Para.2:Admittedly,theabilitytomakemoremoneyisoneofthemostimportantcriteriatoperformancetoateacher.…However,toconsiderthewillingnesstomakemoneytobetheonlymotivationforbusinesspeopleisapieceofoveremphasis,forthereexistotherfactors,whichcanalsomotivatebusinesspeople.Para.3:Inthefirstplace,topropelthesocietytomoveforwardthroughthebusinessactivitiesshouldbetheultimategoalofanybusinessman.Para.4:Furthermore,thepursuitofgoodreputationandintegrityshouldbethecornerstoneofanever-lastingbusiness.Para.5:Inconclusion,AdvertisingistheonlycauseofunhealthyeatingPara.1:Currently,thereisawidespreadbeliefthattheonlycauseofunhealthyeatinghabitsisadvertising.Frommyperspective,however,itisanoverstatementtoclaimso.Para.2:Admittedly,advertisements,toacertaindegree,indeedseducepeopletoeatsomeunhealthyfoodbyexaggeratingtheappearanceandnutritionofthejunkfood.(fastfood:McDonald’s,Pizza,potatochips,bottledjuice)…However,toconsideradvertisingtobetheonlycauseisapieceofoveremphasis,forthereexistothercauses,whichcanalsoleadtounhealthyeatinghabits.Para.3:Inthefirstplace,theheavyworkloadinmodernsocietykeepsapersonfromhavingtheirmealsregularly,whichisconsideredasoneofunhealthyeatinghabits.Para.4:Furthermore,theso-calledjunkfoods,suchasfriedchicken,cheeseburgersandcola,areindeedmoredelicious,especiallyforchildren.Para.5:Inconclusion,Peoplecansolveimportantproblemsbythemselvessothere'snoneedforthegovernmenttohelpthem.AnincreasingnumberofenvironmentalissuesneedthehelpofPublicsecuritycallsforhelpfromMedicalinsuranceshouldbecompletedbyTechnologydesignedtomakeourlifesimpleractuallymakesourlifemoreUsingcomputerstendstomakeusmoreCellphonesreducethequalityofhumanPrivatecarshavecreatedmanyurbanMostoftheenvironmentissuesaretoocomplextoday.IndividualscandonothingaboutIndividualscanhelptoreduceglobalIndividualscanplayapartincontrollingIndividualscancontributetotheimprovement thesituationofwaterTherapidgrowthofcitiescanbeseenasapositivedevelopmentofThedevelopmentofpublictransportationmakeslifemoreTheconstructionofnewbuildingsprovidesabetterlivingTheboomingofindustrialparksb