Unit5Poems讀后續(xù)寫講練-【寫作課】（原卷版）-高二單元寫作深度指導(dǎo)（人教版2019）

Unit5Poems單元寫作深度指導(dǎo)（人教版2019）（讀后續(xù)寫）三年考情（20222024）解題技巧2024：新高考I卷&II卷：人與社會（打車費）

浙江1月：人與自我（校園話題）2023

新高考I卷&II卷：人與自我（老師幫助作者培養(yǎng)寫作興趣）

2022新高考I卷&II卷；人與自我（鼓勵殘疾學生參加越野賽跑）

浙江1月：人與自我（與隊友互助完成任務(wù)）浙江6月：人與社會（參加社區(qū)服務(wù)）1.

讀文精讀文章，確定文章線索。每篇文章都有各自獨特的寫作思路，通過精讀文章，找到該篇文章的寫作線索，比如，是以時間為線索還是以空間為線索，這樣有利于考生“順藤摸瓜”完成續(xù)寫。確定文章體裁和主要內(nèi)容（話題）。注意文中的關(guān)鍵詞，也就是故事中的時間、地點、人物和事件等信息。2.

審題仔細審題，明確續(xù)寫要求。一般短文后面的“注意”都有對此次短文續(xù)寫的具體要求，如詞數(shù)限制、續(xù)寫段落的首句提示，這樣考生才能做到“心中有數(shù)”。3.

謀段在讀文、審題的基礎(chǔ)上，先仔細閱讀續(xù)寫部分所給出的兩段段首文字，再構(gòu)思這兩段要寫的段落大意。根據(jù)原文情節(jié)確定好段落大意，找出每一段的寫作要點，然后再補充相關(guān)細節(jié)和常識，這兩段加起來要能寫出10到15個句子，以滿足續(xù)寫詞數(shù)的要求。4.

初寫擬寫草稿，修改錯詞病句。在確定了思路和內(nèi)容之后，擬寫草稿。擬寫時，注意句子結(jié)構(gòu)的多樣性及語言的豐富性，并通過句與句之間連接詞的正確使用，使上下文連貫。寫作時要注意，所用的人稱和時態(tài)要與原材料一致。5.

定稿完成初稿后，考生需先結(jié)合原材料中故事線索讀一讀自己續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容，既要確保所寫內(nèi)容沒有與原材料相矛盾的地方，又要保證內(nèi)容上前后連貫，語句通順；然后潤色續(xù)寫部分，可使用高分單詞或短語，運用各種從句、介詞短語結(jié)構(gòu)、非謂語動詞等高級表達，合理添加過渡詞；最后譽寫文字，這個過程考生務(wù)必做到“字跡工整、清晰”。高頻寫作例句讀后續(xù)寫情感描寫高分句式01高分秘訣1.發(fā)出者升級（用情緒名詞代替）2.情緒程度修飾詞升級（更形象具體的形容詞副詞）3.句式升級（非謂語、獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)）02高分筆記高級詞塊________________________________________

令某人激動的是________________________________________

激動地________________________________________

激動得滿臉通紅________________________________________

抑制內(nèi)心的激動________________________________________

難掩激動________________________________________一陣興奮________________________________________

激動的尖叫聲萬能句式句式一：adj.1andadj.2,

主句，doing…

/

獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)【舉個例子】“他站起身來領(lǐng)獎?！盚estooduptoaccepttheprize.句式升級：________________________________________________________________________________.又意外又開心，他站起身來去領(lǐng)獎，感到非常自豪。句式二：量詞＋表情感狀態(tài)的名詞＋動詞

+

sb.常用量詞：aburst/wave/

flood

/surge/senseof…常用動詞：takeholdof/seize/grasp抓住、握住，crawl／creep爬，swallow吞噬，wellup涌出，surge涌動，sweepover沖；卷，overwhelm充溢，壓倒【舉個例子】“她傷心不已?！盨hefeltextremelysad.句式升級：________________________________________________________________________________.她突然感到一陣悲傷，禁不住痛哭起來。句式三：(doing…),so＋adj./adv.＋部分倒裝＋that…,

(doing…)【舉個例子】“Jane忍不住哭了?！盝anecouldn’tstopcrying.句式升級：________________________________________________________________________________.回想起那一幕，簡非常后悔，忍不住哭了起來，淚水奪眶而出。03高分干貨1.喜悅之情①________________________________________________________________________________.令人難忘的是她的眼睛像鉆石一樣閃閃發(fā)光，嘴角保持著微笑。（Unforgettablewerehereyes→主語hereyes，這里是為了強調(diào)她像鉆石一樣的眼睛多么令人難忘；句子結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊：定語從句、引導(dǎo)詞與先行詞在結(jié)構(gòu)上的緊湊。）②________________________________________________________________________________.

她臉上帶著燦爛的笑容。③________________________________________________________________________________.她高興得流下了眼淚。④________________________________________________________________________________.她的眼睛閃著鉆石般的光芒。（sparklev.閃閃發(fā)光，閃耀e.g.

Herjewellerysparkledinthecandlelight.

燭光下，她的首飾光彩熠熠。）⑤________________________________________________________________________________.她洋溢著幸福。（beoverflowingwithafeeling洋溢著（情感））⑥________________________________________________________________________________.她激動得滿臉通紅。⑦________________________________________________________________________________.她臉上總是掛著心滿意足的微笑。⑧________________________________________________________________________________.

看到任務(wù)完成了，他們感到很滿意。2.憤怒之情①________________________________________________________________________________.他氣得大發(fā)雷霆。（sbfumeoversth/sb.

某人因為……生氣

e.g.She'sstillfumingabout/over/atnotbeinginvitedtotheparty.

她仍在對未受邀參加聚會感到憤憤不平。）②________________________________________________________________________________.他的憤怒爆發(fā)了。________________________________________________________________________________.他氣得快要失去控制了。（sbbeboilingwith

rage

怒不可遏

e.g.Hewasboilingwithrage.

他怒不可遏。）③________________________________________________________________________________.他幾乎控制不住怒火。④________________________________________________________________________________.他的聲音因憤怒而顫抖。⑤________________________________________________________________________________.他用灼熱的目光怒視著我。⑥________________________________________________________________________________.他滿面怒容。（cloud

v.

顯得陰沉（或恐懼、憤怒等）；看起來憂愁（或害怕、憤怒等）

e.g.Suspicioncloudedhisface.

他狐疑滿面。）3.悲傷煩惱之情①________________________________________________________________________________.他靜靜地站著，眼淚順著面頰流了下來。②________________________________________________________________________________.我漂浮在悲傷的海洋里。③________________________________________________________________________________.聽到這個消息，他絕望地把悲傷淹沒在酒里。④________________________________________________________________________________.他皺起了眉頭。⑤________________________________________________________________________________.他們坐在那里，帶著一臉憂郁。

⑥________________________________________________________________________________.這消息使他臉上蒙上了一層陰影。⑦________________________________________________________________________________.他們沉浸在悲痛之中。4.恐懼之情①________________________________________________________________________________.恐懼慢慢地蔓延到她身上。②________________________________________________________________________________.她臉色蒼白地站在那里，說不出話來。③

________________________________________________________________________________.他心中涌起一陣恐懼。/

恐懼淹沒了他。（wellv.涌出；流出；溢出e.g.Tearsofjoywelledupinhereyes.[=hereyesfilledwithtearsofjoy]

她的眼里流出了喜悅的淚水。）④________________________________________________________________________________.

她渾身顫抖，覺得如坐針氈。⑤

________________________________________________________________________________.恐懼突然向她襲來。5.

感動之情①

Toucheddeeply/immensely,we…

被深深感動，我們……②________________________________________________________________________________.她熱淚盈眶，表示衷心的感謝。(獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)）③

Withtearsstreamingdownherface,she...

淚水順著她臉上留下來，她……④________________________________________________________________________________.老婦人感動到淚流滿面。6.緊張之情①________________________________________________________________________________.我緊張地等待著我的成績,心提到了嗓子眼。②________________________________________________________________________________.我能感覺到我的心在狂跳。③________________________________________________________________________________.他的心幾乎要跳出來了。④

________________________________________________________________________________.我心里直打鼓，手心直冒汗。⑤________________________________________________________________________________.只要他在身邊，她就緊張得說不出話來。（2024·廣東江蘇·高考真題）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。ImetGunteronacold,wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.IhadplannedtoflytoViennaandtakeabustoPragueforaconference.Duetoabigstorm,myflighthadbeendelayedbyanhourandahalf.ItoucheddowninViennajust30minutesbeforethedepartureofthelastbustoPrague.ThemomentIgotofftheplane,Iranlikecrazythroughtheairportbuildingandjumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecondthought.ThatwaswhenImetGunter.ItoldhimwhereIwasgoing,buthesaidhehadn'theardofthebusstation.Ithoughtmypronunciationwastheproblem,soIexplainedagainmoreslowly,buthestilllookedconfused.WhenIwasabouttogiveup,Gunterfishedouthislittlephoneandrangupafriend.Afteraheateddiscussionthatlastedforwhatseemedlikeacentury,Gunterputhisphonedownandstartedthecar.Finally,withjusttwominutestosparewerolledintothebusstation.Thankfully,therewasalongqueue(隊列)stillwaitingtoboardthebus.Gunterparkedthetaxibehindthebus,turnedaround,andlookedatmewithabigsmileonhisface."Wemadeit,"hesaid.JustthenIrealisedthatIhadzerocashinmywallet.IflashedhimanapologeticsmileasIpulledoutmyPortuguesebankcard.Hetrieditseveraltimes,butthecardmachinejustdidnotplayalong.AfeelingofhelplessnesswashedovermeasIsawthebusqueuethinningout.Atthismoment,Gunterpointedtowardsthewaitinghallofthebusstation.There,attheentrance,wasacashmachine.Ijumpedoutofthecar,madeamadrunforthemachine,andpoppedmycardin,onlytoreadthemessage:"Outoforder.Sorry."注意：（1）續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右；（2）請按如下格式在答題紙的相應(yīng)位置作答。IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________精講精析：【知識點】善行義舉（個人）、個人經(jīng)歷【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者在一次因風暴延誤的旅途中，匆忙搭乘出租車前往車站趕最后一班去布拉格的公共汽車。司機岡特不熟悉車站位置，通過求助后順利抵達。到達時作者卻發(fā)現(xiàn)自己沒帶現(xiàn)金，嘗試用葡萄牙銀行卡支付沒有成功，而車站的取款機也故障了?！驹斀狻?.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我跑回到岡特那里，告訴他這個壞消息。”可知，第一段可描寫作者留下岡特的，承諾會還錢給對方，岡特同意，最終作者及時登上了公共汽車。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“四天后，當我回到維也納時，我按照承諾給岡特打了?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫作者付費給岡特，并向?qū)Ψ奖硎靖屑?，兩人成為了好朋友?.續(xù)寫線索：作者給出解決辦法——承諾還錢——岡特同意——作者登上公共汽車——履行承諾還錢——兩人成為朋友3.詞匯激活行為類①拒絕：reject/refuse②給某人擁抱：givesb.ahug/embracesb.③記下，寫下：writedown/setdown情緒類①難以置信地：indisbelief/incredibly/unbelievably②開心地：happily/joyfully【點睛】【高分句型1】Hepickedmeupatthebusstationwherehehaddroppedmeofffourdaysbefore.（運用了where引導(dǎo)的限制性定語從句）【高分句型2】Whenhestoppedhistaxioutsidetheairport,Ipaidhimforthe“doublecarride”,backandforthfromtheairporttothebusstation,togetherwithageneroustipthatheturneddown.（運用了when引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句，that引導(dǎo)的限制性定語從句）【答案】參考范文Para1IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.Helookedatmeindisbelief,askingmewhattodo.Flashinghimanotherapologeticsmile,Ibeggedhimforadelayedpayment.“IfImissthislastbustoPrague,I’llbelatefortheconferencewhichissoimportantthatIcan’taffordtomissit!”Iexplained.“MayIhaveyourphonenumber?IwillcallyouandreturnthemoneyIoweyou.IpromiseIwillkeepmywordoryoukeepmywatch!”Iadded,handinghimmywatchaswellasmybusinesscard.Gunteracceptedmybusinesscardbutrejectedmywatch.Hewrotedownhisphonenumberandgaveittome.“Justkeepyourpromise,Sir.”AfeelingofgratitudewashedovermeasIheardhiswords.Givinghimafirmhandshake,Ijumpedoutofthecar,madeamadrunforthebus,andjumpedontoitjustbeforeitsdeparture.Para2Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.Hepickedmeupatthebusstationwherehehaddroppedmeofffourdaysbefore.Beamingawarmsmileathim,IgavehimabighugthemomentIsawhim.Wechattedhappilyonthewaytotheairport.Itoldhimthatthankstohisgenerosityandtimelyhelp,everythinghadgonesmoothly.Whenhestoppedhistaxioutsidetheairport,Ipaidhimforthe“doublecarride”,backandforthfromtheairporttothebusstation,togetherwithageneroustipthatheturneddown.IalsogavehimanattractivesouvenirIhadboughtatPrague,whichheacceptedwithdelight.Webecamegoodfriendsandkeptintouchwitheachotherregularly.IfeltblessedtohavesuchawarmheartedfriendlikeGunter.一、翻譯語段人物描寫之性格他坦率隨和，笑容隨和，能贏得人們的好感。他有一顆溫暖的心，總是想著別人，愿意在任何時候提供幫助。他喜歡說話，從不害怕表達自己的觀點，但他也樂于傾聽他人的意見。在內(nèi)心深處，他雄心勃勃，知道自己想要什么。他學習勤奮，努力工作以實現(xiàn)目標。__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________二、讀后續(xù)寫1．（2023高三·全國·專題練習）

閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(銀匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswereing.Mystorywouldestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2．（2023高三·全國·專題練習）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfriend’sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird(蜂鳥),desperatelytryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspiderwebs(蛛網(wǎng))andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings.SheceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup.Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthestickyspiderwebsthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still,shemadenoattempttofly.Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?AsIcarriedheruptheblackberrylinedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.Hovering(懸停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow.AsIwasdeparting,myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthaveetosaygoodbye.”注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題紙的相應(yīng)位置作答。Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3．（2024·河南鄭州·模擬預(yù)測）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Beingatwelveyearoldgirlishard;beingatwelveyearoldgirlwithdyslexia(閱讀障礙)makesitevenharder.Iwasstandinginmymom’sbedroomwithmyunfinishedmathhomeworkinmyhand.“Ican’tdoit,Mom.Idon’tunderstandit!”AlthoughIcouldn’tseeclearlythroughmytearyeyes,Icouldstillsensemymom’sfacewasfilledwithconcern.“CanIseeyourhomework,honey?”Asinstructed,Islowlyhandedoverthepaper.Afterashortpause,sheexcitedlyannounced,“Yougotthefifthquestionright!”Shrugging(聳)myshoulders,Ireplied,“Yeah,buttherestareprobablywrong.”Momliftedmychinwithagentlehandandsaid,“Thatyougotsomeanswerswrongdoesn’tmaketheansweryougotrightanylessimpressive!”Aswestoodinsilence,shelightlyheldmyshouldersandslowlyturnedmesoIcouldseemyselfinthelargemirror.“Nowrepeatafterme!”Momsaidinakindbutdemandingvoice,“IDIDIT!”Shestoppedasshewaitedformetofollowher.Withareassuringhandonmyshoulder,Momsaid,“YouknowthatIwentthrough,andstillgothroughthesamehardships.ButIknowI’mpetent,smartandsuccessfulandit’ssoimportantthatmydaughterknowshowintelligentsheis.Now,let’stakealookatyourhomework.”Togetherwelookedthroughandpletedthemathhomework.Aftereachproblemwegotright,wewouldhighfiveasifIhadjustwonahugevictory.“Now,tomorrowwhenyouaredoingyourmath,Iwantyoutotaketheproblemsoneatatimeandsay‘IDIDIT!’afterpletingeachone.OK?”saidMom.“OK,I’lltry,”Ireplied.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Thenextday,Isatatmydeskinfrontofmyfrighteningmathtest.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________AsIwalkedthroughtheschoolgate,Ihadasmileonmyface.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________（2425高二上·河南洛陽·階段練習）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。OneMondaymorning,LilahCleveystartedherusualjourneyfromherhouseinAnnArbor,Mich.,tohercollegeaboutanhouraway.ShewalkedoutofthedoortoaclassicMidwesternwinterscene—thecloudyskyprojectingagraycoloronthealreadygraywhitesnowcoveringhercar.Aftercleaningherwindshield(擋風玻璃),Cleveygotintohercaranddrovetoanearbygasstation,whereshefueledup,boughtherselfacupofcoffee,a