2013高考英語書面表達(dá)講義及訓(xùn)練（21）參考范文 如何寫出英語作文得分的“亮點(diǎn)”

1、2013高考英語書面表達(dá)講義及訓(xùn)練（21）及參考范文：如何寫出英語作文得分的“亮點(diǎn)”以前,英語作文評分的依據(jù)是根據(jù)要點(diǎn)和語言準(zhǔn)確度而定。但是從2001年起實(shí)行的高考評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)強(qiáng)調(diào)了內(nèi)容要點(diǎn),語言的多樣性、連貫性和得體性, 鼓勵(lì)學(xué)生嘗試語言表達(dá)的多樣化和復(fù)雜化。因此要寫成一篇較有水準(zhǔn)的英語作文,除了要點(diǎn)和語言準(zhǔn)確度以外,還必須在語用、語法結(jié)構(gòu)以及表達(dá)的多樣性和靈活性上有所表現(xiàn)。句子單一、缺乏生氣的文章,哪怕沒有任何錯(cuò)誤也不可能得高分,相反,"有些許錯(cuò)誤,但是為了使用較復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)或較高級詞匯所致",給分檔次仍在最高檔(21-25分)。 那么,英語作文如何才能得高分呢?以下幾種手段是

2、增加句子復(fù)雜性的常見方法,也是得高分的"亮點(diǎn)"。 1. 改變句子的開頭方式,不是一味地都是主語開頭,接著是謂語、賓語,最后再加一個(gè)狀語?？梢园褷钫Z置于句首,或用分詞作狀語等。試比較: (原文) My brother and I went to the cinema by bicycle the other day. (修正) The other day my brother and I went to the cinema by bicycle. (原文) The young man couldn't help crying when he heard the ba

3、d news. (修正) Hearing the bad news, the young man couldn't help crying. *結(jié)束【記敘文寫作訓(xùn)練03】3高考是全社會(huì)關(guān)注的大事，學(xué)校和家庭表現(xiàn)尤為突出。家庭成員對考生從學(xué)習(xí)到生活給予無微不至的"關(guān)懷"，結(jié)果卻給考生帶來負(fù)面影響。根據(jù)圖畫所描述的內(nèi)容寫一篇文章,并發(fā)表自己的觀點(diǎn)(夾敘夾議)。詞數(shù)120左右。As the College Entrance Examination is drawing near，_As the College Entrance Examination is drawing

4、 near, the situation is getting worse and worse. From the picture, we can see that Li Ming is "studying hard". There are many books for him to read and many papers for him to do. How poor he is! At the same time, all his family are also busy working for him.Nowadays, many parents expect to

5、o much of their sons or daughters. They hope that their sons or daughters study hard in order to be admitted to an ideal college or a key university. It is for this reason that parents are strict with their children. However, they don't realize what they have become a heavy burden or a great pre

6、ssure. It is the hard work or the great pressure that changes their children that much.So I hope parents provide a proper environment for their children. Only in this way, will they try their best and succeed at last!本文是夾敘夾議類的文章，主要反映家庭對考生的特別"關(guān)注"給他們帶來負(fù)面影響。在寫作過程中，對主題要審準(zhǔn)、審清，對發(fā)展過程和結(jié)果進(jìn)行敘述*結(jié)束【記敘

7、文寫作訓(xùn)練04】4下列圖畫描述的是你的一段親身經(jīng)歷，請據(jù)此為一家中學(xué)生英文報(bào)的故事專欄寫一篇短文。注意：1. 短文必須包括圖畫所表現(xiàn)的主要內(nèi)容，可以適當(dāng)增減細(xì)節(jié)，使其連貫、完整；2. 敘述必須用第一人稱；3. 詞數(shù)100左右。 生詞：違章者offender n. 十字路口crossroads n.The other day my brother and I went to the cinema by bicycle. My brother was riding with me sitting on the seat behind. As we came to the crossroads a

8、young man and a girl came up and stopped us. “We've found you at long last,” they said. But we didn't know them. Pointing to a policeman not far away, the young man explained, “He stopped us about half an hour ago and made us catch the next offender. So come on, stand here. Hope you don'

9、t have to wait as long as we did. Good luck.”*結(jié)束2. 在整篇文章中,避免只使用一兩個(gè)句式,要靈活運(yùn)用諸如強(qiáng)調(diào)句、主從復(fù)合句、分詞短語、倒裝句、省略句等。例如: (1)強(qiáng)調(diào)句 (原文) The dog has saved my little sister bravely. (修正) It is the dog that has saved my little sister bravely. (2)主從復(fù)合句 (原文) We had to stand there to catch the offender. (修正) What we had to d

10、o was to stand there, trying to catch the offender. (3)分詞短語、由with或without引導(dǎo)的短語 (原文) The driver escaped and didn't stop, he left the old man lying on the road. (修正) The driver escaped without stopping, leaving the old man lying on the road. (4)倒裝句 (原文) I went to bed at 11:30. (修正) Not until 11:30

11、 did I go to bed. (5)省略句 (原文) While you are crossing the street, you should be careful. (修正) While crossing the street, you should be careful. 3. 通過分句和合句,增強(qiáng)句子的連貫性和表現(xiàn)力。例如: (原文) He stopped us an hour ago. He made us catch the next offender. (修正) He stopped us half an hour ago and made us catch the nex

12、t offender. (原文) We had a short rest. Then we began to play happily. We sang and danced. (修正) After a short rest, we had great fun singing and dancing. 4. 注意連接詞與句子的運(yùn)用。 以2001年高考作文為例,在信的開頭,可加上"You want to know something about what is going on in schools in China?"這句話起承上啟下的作用,使文章過渡自然;再如,用&quo

13、t;What was worse?"引出減負(fù)前,晚上還要做作業(yè),就寢時(shí)間11:30等要點(diǎn)。又如,"Now I have more free time." 可引出減負(fù)后的情況。另外,在信的結(jié)尾,可用"How about you? I'm looking forward to hearing from you."來自然地結(jié)束這封信。 5. 使用過渡詞語。 寫好了每個(gè)句子,并不一定就是一篇好文章,因?yàn)樽鳛橐黄恼?還必須行文連貫。那么,如何使文章行文連貫?zāi)?這就要求我們在組成篇章時(shí),要用好過渡性詞語,過渡性詞語就像是我們組裝機(jī)械時(shí)使用的潤滑劑一樣,起著潤滑的作用。常用的過渡詞語主要有: 并列遞進(jìn):and, also, as well as, besides, what's more, furthermore, moreover, etc. 轉(zhuǎn)折:but, yet, however, although, nevertheless, in spite of, after all, etc. 因果:because, as, for, since, for this reason, because of, so, therefore, thus, as a result, etc. 對比:or, otherwise, lik