雅思流程圖的寫作(含范文深度點(diǎn)評(píng))

1、.：.；The illustrations below show how chocolate is produced. Summarise the informaiton by selecting and reporting the main features.【高分范文及深度點(diǎn)評(píng)】The diagram shows the stages in the process of making chocolate.【一切的小作文第一句話都要用普通如今時(shí)。流程圖必備三個(gè)詞：process：整個(gè)過(guò)程, stage：階段，step：步驟】Chocolate comes from the cacao tre

2、e, which is grown in parts of South America, Africa and Indonesia.【開頭不能沖上來(lái)就直接引見cacao tree，而是經(jīng)過(guò)主題詞chocolate引出，否那么顯得太唐突】【流程圖特點(diǎn)之一：介 紹過(guò)程要運(yùn)用普通如今時(shí)】【流 程圖特點(diǎn)之二：大量運(yùn)用定語(yǔ)從句，將有關(guān)聯(lián)的兩句話銜接。】【流程圖特點(diǎn)之三：大量運(yùn)用被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)】The tree produces large red pods which contain white cocoa beans. Firstly,【流程圖特點(diǎn)之四：運(yùn)用一些表示順序的銜接詞】when the pods

3、are ripe, they are harvested, the beans are removed and they are fermented for several days in large wooden boxes.【三個(gè)句子的并列：“句子A，句子B and 句子C?！緿uring the fermenting process, the beans turn brown.【流程圖特點(diǎn)之五：要 適當(dāng)?shù)靥砑觽€(gè)別圖中沒(méi)有交代但能從圖片中直接讀出來(lái)的的一些內(nèi)容，否那么能夠達(dá)不到字?jǐn)?shù)要求。但是一定要把握尺度，千萬(wàn)不要加上本人的客觀觀念，否那么會(huì)扣 分】Next, the brown bean

4、s are spread in the sun to dry. They are then put in large sacks and transported by train or lorry. After this, the beans are taken to a chocolate factory where they are roasted in an oven at temperatures of between 250 and 350 degree Celsius.After being roasted, the beans are crushed and the outer

5、shell is removed. This part is not needed for making chocolate. Finally, the inner part of the bean is pressed and liquid chocolate is produced.【流程圖特點(diǎn)之六：普通不需求寫總結(jié)】最后再總結(jié)一下流程圖的特點(diǎn)：特點(diǎn)一：現(xiàn) 在時(shí)特點(diǎn)二：定語(yǔ)從句特點(diǎn)三：被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)特點(diǎn)四：順序詞特點(diǎn)五：適當(dāng)添加特點(diǎn)六：無(wú)總結(jié)雅思流程圖范文(含9分范文 及考官點(diǎn)評(píng)WRITING TASK 1You should spend about 20 minutes on this tas

6、k.The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.Brick manufacturing* Clay: type of sticky earth that is used for makin

7、g bricks, pots, etc.【總分值范文】The process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry can be outlined in seven consecutive steps. First the raw material, clay, which was just below the surface of soil in certain clay-rich areas has to be dug up by a digger.Then the lumps of clay are plac

8、ed on a metal grid in order to break up the big chunks of clay into much smaller areas, which fall through the metal grid onto a roller, whose motion further segregates the bits of clay. Sand and water are added to make a homogenous mixture, which is then either formed in moulds or cut into brick-sh

9、aped pieces by means of a wire cutter.Those fresh bricks are then kept in a drying oven for at least 24 and a maximum of 48 hours, several dozens if not hundreds of bricks at a time. The dried bricks are then transferred to a so-called kiln, another type of high temperature oven. First they are kept

10、 at a moderate temperature of 200 -1300 . This process is followed by cooling down the finished bricks for 48 to 72 hours in a cooling chamber.Once the bricks have cooled down and have become hard, they get packaged and delivered to their final destination, be it a building site or storage.(215 word

11、s)【考官評(píng)語(yǔ)】Band 9This response fully satisfies the requirements of the task. All key features of each stage of the process are appropriately and accurately presented. An excellent overview is given at the beginning of the response and this skilfully incorporates part of the rubric, changing the grammat

12、ical function, to give a brief summary of the whole process. The message is very easy to read, with seamless cohesion that attracts no attention. Paragraphing, linking and referencing are all skilfully managed. The language used is very fluent and sophisticated. A wide range of vocabulary and struct

13、ures are used with full flexibility and accuracy. Only rare minor slips can be found and these do not detract from the high rating.雅思寫作劍橋范文解析 流程圖下面是劍橋6的test 3 考到的流程圖，考官給的范文。范文中有兩步考官直接就寫成一步，本來(lái)是3-8天和16天兩個(gè)時(shí)間段，縮成了3個(gè)星期，大家寫的時(shí)候可以分別寫，不用寫這么 精練?？脊俜段模篢he first diagram shows that there are four main stages in t

14、he life of the silkworm. 第一個(gè)圖顯示了，在蠶的生命過(guò)程中主要有四步。First of all, eggs are produced by the moth and it takes ten days for each egg to become a silkworm larva that feeds on mulberry leaves. 首先，蛾子產(chǎn)出卵，每個(gè)卵用10天的時(shí)間變成蠶的幼蟲， 他們以桑葉為食。This stage lasts for up to six weeks until the larva produces a cocoon of silk th

15、read around itself. 這個(gè)階段繼續(xù)最多到六個(gè)星期，直到幼蟲周圍消費(fèi)出繭silk thread. After a period of about three weeks, the adult moths eventually emerge from these cocoons and the life cycle begins again. 經(jīng)過(guò)三個(gè)星期的一段時(shí)間之后，成年的蛾子最終從繭里面出來(lái)，這個(gè)生命的循環(huán)就再一次開場(chǎng)了。The cocoons are the raw material used for the production of silk cloth. 繭是消費(fèi)絲

16、綢的原資料。Once selected, they are boiled in water and the thread can be separated in the unwinding stage. 一旦被挑選出來(lái)，他們?cè)谒镏蠓?，絲可以在翻開的階段中被分別出來(lái)。Each thread is between 300 and 900 metres long, which means they can be twisted together, dyed and then used to produce cloth in the weaving stage. 每條絲是300到900米長(zhǎng)，這就意味

17、著，他們可以被纏繞在一同，染色，然后在織布階段被用于消費(fèi)布品。Overall, the diagrams show that the cocoon stage of the silk worm can be used to produce silk cloth through a very simple process.范文總結(jié)：1 163個(gè)字。2 運(yùn)用了很多適宜的關(guān)聯(lián)詞，見陰影部分。3 主要是簡(jiǎn)單的并列句。4 句型，搭配了一些被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)。5 動(dòng)詞運(yùn)用豐富：produce, feed on, last, emerge, select, boil, separate, unwind, twist

18、(多數(shù)原詞帶入)6 名詞比較專業(yè)：life cycle, raw material.表述時(shí)間：in 10 days, during the period of 10 days, The process lasts for up to 10 days. after 10 days, 10 days passed utill something happened.表示然后：then, next, in the next state, following that, after that, the next step in the stage is .表示過(guò)程：process, procedure,

19、 formation, development表示步驟：step, stage, phase方法：l 找到流程圖的過(guò)程，起點(diǎn)，終點(diǎn)。l 找到圖上標(biāo)出的知?jiǎng)幼?，假設(shè)出現(xiàn)生詞，盡量猜測(cè)。無(wú)詞，用本人言語(yǔ)。l 按照步驟，分段描畫，千萬(wàn)不能省略任何一步。l 切記！參與流暢合理的表示順序的關(guān)聯(lián)詞。l 句型以自動(dòng)為主，搭配被動(dòng)，以及主語(yǔ)從句例如：It can be seen from the graph thatl 時(shí)態(tài)要運(yùn)用普通如今時(shí)補(bǔ)充的表達(dá)方式流程圖常用詞匯：時(shí)間階段： after a period of .months/days/minutes, during順序連詞： first, first

20、of all, in the first stage, initially, to begin with Second, then, next, also After that, at the same time, in the meantime, meanwhile Prior to, untilthe first stage involves / in the second stage / in the third stage /in the last stage/The next step in the stage is that.目的連詞： in order to / in order

21、 that; so as to / so that常見動(dòng)詞： Produce消費(fèi), lay放置, put, accumulate積 累 gather / collect / 搜集obtain獲 得, Heat up加熱expand膨脹bend彎 曲turn off封鎖cool down冷卻disconnect斷 開銜接spin旋轉(zhuǎn), 紡, strike打 擊,Compress緊縮, release釋放, move, flow流 動(dòng), accelerate加速, form構(gòu)成, Press按 壓, adjust調(diào)整, absorb吸收, , process加 工, Rotate旋轉(zhuǎn), chop坎

22、, grind磨(碎), 碾(碎), Light點(diǎn)燃, burn熄滅, ignite點(diǎn)燃, Reflect 反光， turn 轉(zhuǎn)，starts開場(chǎng)stops終了records錄 音turns up調(diào)高turns down調(diào)低，winds纏 繞unwinds解開revolves旋轉(zhuǎn)(spin, rotate)fold折迭unfold打 開reverse顛倒，倒轉(zhuǎn)Adapt 順應(yīng) adjust 調(diào)整 alter 改動(dòng)cure 治愈 disappear消 失dissolve溶化,解散exchange 交換expand擴(kuò)張, 膨脹 fade 退色increase增長(zhǎng)promote促進(jìn), 升職reduc

23、e 減少renew使更新,使 恢復(fù)renovate革新,更新,修 復(fù)replace取代swell腫脹 switch改 變 transform.:完全改動(dòng) vary改動(dòng)swap:交 換shrink 收縮, melt溶解heal治 愈，cure 治愈form/come into being/take shape 構(gòu)成produce 消費(fèi) /gain /get/ acquire 獲取 evaporate 蒸發(fā)/volatilize 揮發(fā) draw 提取/ recycle 回收/ extract 拔/ absorb 吸收 /collect/ 搜集 meet 相遇 / be made up of/由。組

24、成 be made of由。制成/ be made from 由 。制成 /feed on 以。為食/depend on /rely on 依賴 /release/send out 釋放/sort分類 /separate 分開 conveyed 運(yùn)送cut into 切成 poured into 倒入poured into 倒入a heated 加熱 melted into 融化成flows into 流入雅思圖表作文官方6分范文在雅思索生中，普遍存在一種觀念，以為小作文只占 1/3 的比重，而大作文占了 2/3 ，所以在復(fù)習(xí)的時(shí)候應(yīng)該以大作文為重，考試的時(shí)候也應(yīng)該先寫大作文，而后再寫小作文。

25、但是在對(duì)考生實(shí)踐考分的察看中我們發(fā)現(xiàn)，往往小作文寫得好的同窗，作 文的總分相對(duì)較高。之前有個(gè)根底班的女生，把時(shí)間都花在了小作文上，大作文只寫了個(gè)開頭，但作文的總分通暢拿到了 5 分。 這是什么緣由呢？由于大作文在短時(shí)間內(nèi)提高有限，而小作文卻因套路很多，句式有限，在短時(shí)間內(nèi)只需仔細(xì)學(xué)習(xí)，就不難提高。所以要特別提示寬廣考生，尤其是 時(shí)間非常倉(cāng)促的考生，千萬(wàn)不要忽視了小作文的學(xué)習(xí)！以下提供的是一份 6 分的曲線圖作文范文，后附考官的評(píng)語(yǔ)。同窗們對(duì)照本人的文章，看下能否到達(dá)了 6 分的規(guī)范？也歡迎大家挑戰(zhàn)這位6分考生，提供本人的7分、8分甚至是9分的作文。他可以將他的大作直接貼上來(lái)，我將提供參考的打分

26、。WRITING TASK 1You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.The graph below gives information about cinema attendance in Australia between 1990 and the present, with projections to 2021.【考生樣文】The graph shows percentages of cinema attendance at least once a year in Australia between 1990 to 2021 wi

27、th projections for the future. The graph is described by 4 groups of different ages which are 14 to 24, 25 to 34, 35 to 49 and over 50 year olds.The youngest age group people have been going to cinema more than any other age groups and the percentage has been keeping very high at approximately 90% s

28、ince 1990. It is predicted to keep the high and to increase more from 2006.The middle age groups people have enjoyed going cinema between 60% to 80%. The percentage of age 25 to 34 group has been higher than the one of age 35 to 49 group but from 2006 the percentage of 25 to 34 year olds people will

29、 decrease while the one of 35 to 49 year olds people will increase and get higher than the other one.The oldest people seem to go cinema less than the other groups but the percentage of the attendance has slightly going up by 15% from 40% to 55% between 1990 to 2004 and it will keep increasing to 60% by 2021.Overall, it