雅思寫作語料庫-素食主義不是保持健康的唯一方式

1、Some people believe that to become the vegetarian is the only way tokeep healthy. Do you agree or disagree?有人認為：成為素食主義者是保持健康的唯一方式，是否認同？【點評】本文主題是論證如何保持健康?！窘】殿悺縏he government has the duty to ensure its citizens have a healthy diet, while others believe it is individuals responsibility. Discuss both vi

2、ewsand give your own opinion.政府有責任保障人們的健康飲食，健康飲食是個人的責任，討論兩種觀點，給出你的意見?！咀骷伊觥?保持健康是個人和政府的責任，但是，個人應該承擔更多的責任。（個人健康管理的方式就是加強鍛煉、健康管理、合理飲食等）【點評】文本主題是論證如此保持健康?！緦懽麟y點】.沒有觀點.沒有語言.表達不精彩【寫作策略】精彩的語料庫的輸入到輸出。寫文章好像蓋樓房，需要的是圖紙和原料。按照寫 作理解，就是謀篇布局+遣詞造句。語料庫就是打造完美范文的一塊塊磚，料， 水泥和木頭。這是最考驗寫作基本功的。雅思寫作小鵬哥語料庫是整合優(yōu)秀的閱 讀資源和個性化的原創(chuàng)思想。

3、【中國考生分析低分的原因解析】.模板和背誦的痕跡過重，讓人不相信是原創(chuàng)作品。.沒有文采，很多表達已經(jīng)是陳詞濫調(diào)。.基礎薄弱，錯誤較多?！窘馕鰞蓚€寫作術語】pet words n 小狗詞匯作家喜歡的詞匯fossilization n 化石主義固定輸入【雅思寫作評分標準】任務完成情況(Task Achievement)解析：內(nèi)容(content)是否切題，立場(position)是否鮮明并得到有效闡釋，結構 (structure)是否有邏輯性。連貫與銜接(Coherence and Cohesion)解析：段落之間的“啟”、“承”、“轉”、“合”可通過表順序的過渡詞完成。詞匯資源(Lexical

4、Resource)解析：用詞的精準可以加分。詞匯的精彩體現(xiàn)在表達的個性化以及多元化。 語法的多樣性和準確性(Grammatical Range and Accuracy)解析：句子結構的準確性和豐富性；句子的長度和復雜性；用語的邏輯性和正式性?！狙潘紝懽鞯?個步驟】(1)詞匯替換：替換提問中的關鍵詞匯。主題觀點：確立作家立場或者寫作目的。思路拓展：思考支持反駁或者解釋解決的理由。(4)正文寫作：正文寫作準備好的語料庫，做到靈活運用。(5)仔細檢查：堅持行文邏輯；句法;詞匯拼寫?！咀尣椒瘩g解析】：三分讓步、七分反駁(觀點不是完全正確的)【讓步反駁話題的布局圖】首段:背景介紹+爭議焦點+作家立場二

5、段:讓步原題觀點的合理性(最多二點 他人口吻;我的口吻;可以適度反駁) 三段:讓步原題觀點之不合理(二點或者三點反駁)尾段:再次亮明觀點+總結理由【作家立場】 為了保持健康，多食水果蔬菜也許是一種有效的方式，但是，不是最佳的和唯一的方式?！舅悸吠卣埂克厥持髁x為何可以保持健康.素食主義者避免了糖分、脂肪、和過多的熱量的攝入。.并且，水果蔬菜中含有豐富的維生素，因此，多食水果蔬菜真的是可以保持 健康。但是，我想反駁的是：過度攝入水果蔬菜會導致營養(yǎng)的不均衡。素食主義為何不是保持健康的唯一方式.其實，保持健康，僅僅避免肉類的攝入不是最佳的方式。.第一，加強體育鍛煉是很好的保持健康方式，規(guī)律的體育鍛煉可

6、以使人放松身心、增強人的免疫力、提高人的健康指數(shù)。.第二，勞逸結合是健康的生活方式的保障，因為，現(xiàn)代人面對激烈的競爭，很多人過度工作，這種生活方式其實潛移默化地對健康施加不良影響， 因此，有 效地休息例如安排旅行或者周末會友也會愉悅心情， 甜美生活，有助于人們的健康管理。【原創(chuàng)語料庫】Happiness lies , first of all , in health. 健康是幸福人生的本源。vegetarians = those who are keen on eating vegetables or fruits n素食主義者vegetarians =people who conscious

7、ly avoid the intake of meat n素食主義者is the only way = is the sole method v 是唯一的方式keep healthy = keep fit = embark on a healthier lifestyle = have a wholesome lifestyle v保持健康【范文賞析】首段:背景介紹+作家立場Happiness lies , first of all , in health. Health enables us to brave career challenges energetically and harmo

8、nize family life optimistically. The awareness of a healthier lifestyle has been making numerous people alter their dietary habits, which explains the increase of vegetarians. My stand is that to eat fruits and vegetables might be an effective way in terms of keeping fit , however , it is not the be

9、st and only strategy.【解析】My stand is that = my firm conviction is that =to voice myopinion 我認為【拓展】in terms of 在的方面;就而言二段:讓步段Indeed, I have to concede that people who consciously avoid the intake of meat can, to some extent, help them embark on a wholesome lifestyle. More precisely, vegetarian eating

10、 habit helps people avoid excessive intake of sugar, fat and calorie. Meanwhile, rich nutrients and vitamins are contained in plenty of fruits and vegetables. What I want to rebut, however, is that too much consumption of fruits and vegetables might result in the imbalance of nutritional value【解析】em

11、bark on a wholesome lifestyle v開始健康的生活方式【拓展】 What I want to rebut, however, is that然而，我想反駁的是三段:反駁段Virtually , to avoid eating meat leaves much to be desired as far as keeping fit is concerned. Other ways should be explored. First, strengthening the physical exercise is also a commendable way because

12、 regular physical activities help us relax our bodies and ease our minds.Hence, one s immune system can be improved and one sxhealth indecan be enhanced. Also, modern people usually have to face fierce competition and huge pressure deriving from either study or work. Tostand out, numerous people bur

13、n the midnight oil, which undermines their health. In this sense, to strike a proper balance between rest and work can also ensure people s health management. To 川ustrate,occupied workers or students should be urged to arrange holiday trip or friends reunion from time to time.【解析】leaves much to be desired遠非令人滿意【拓展】burn the midnight oil = work far into the night開夜車（為工作到深夜）尾段:再次亮明觀點In closing , I re-affirm my conviction that regular sports activities and reasonable schedule will have indispensable role