續(xù)寫中的情節(jié)構(gòu)思-2023年新高考英語讀后續(xù)寫提分技能

1、2023年新高考英語讀后續(xù)寫提分技能3.02續(xù)寫中的情節(jié)構(gòu)思背景回顧1背景回顧情節(jié)是事件的形式系列或語義系列，它是故事結(jié)構(gòu)中的主干、人物、環(huán)境的支撐點，情 節(jié)的類型包括線型、非線型、轉(zhuǎn)換型、范疇型情節(jié)。其中，線型又稱故事型，是情節(jié)的形式 分類，它標(biāo)明情節(jié)開展的軌跡，顯示情節(jié)的組織關(guān)系，線型情節(jié)又分為單線、復(fù)線和環(huán)型三 種子類型。單線顧名思義指只有單一線索的情節(jié)類型，多以一個單一連貫的故事為主，一般 情節(jié)緊湊，人物有限，結(jié)構(gòu)簡單。童話故事、民間故事和大局部短篇小說均屬于這一類。非 線型情節(jié)類型是相對于線型情節(jié)而言的，是對傳統(tǒng)的故事情節(jié)的一種沖擊，非線型情節(jié)的趨 勢之一就是情節(jié)的淡化。情節(jié)淡化主要

2、有以下幾種基本特征：一是敘事文中會打亂時間順序 和因果關(guān)系，從而淡化人物和情節(jié)；二是情節(jié)平淡、朦朧乃至支離破碎，故事成自然狀態(tài)， 在情節(jié)淡化中，作品會有意無意地放棄“序幕、開端、開展、高潮、結(jié)局、尾聲”的情節(jié) 模式，不以高潮和懸念取勝，表達(dá)的只是故事的自然流程；三是故事中非動作因素比重增大, 故事充滿各種議論和感覺。讀后續(xù)寫是語言模仿與創(chuàng)造性使用的有機結(jié)合，是語言理解與產(chǎn)出交互協(xié)同、相互促進 的結(jié)果，有助于激發(fā)學(xué)生的想象力、創(chuàng)造力，到達(dá)以讀促寫、以寫促讀的外語學(xué)習(xí)效果。讀 后續(xù)寫的閱讀材料一般以敘事性文本為主，故事情節(jié)多有曲折，故事線索清晰，邏輯性強。 目前學(xué)生在讀后續(xù)寫中存在的問題主要有續(xù)寫

3、情節(jié)偏離主題、續(xù)文結(jié)構(gòu)松散無序、語言知識 缺乏以表達(dá)思想等。情節(jié)在讀后續(xù)寫中占據(jù)十分重要的地位，一個好的情節(jié)會讓人產(chǎn)生情 感共鳴與價值認(rèn)同。然而，在續(xù)寫過程中，學(xué)生往往會出現(xiàn)續(xù)寫情節(jié)偏離主題、隱性話語（伏 筆）未能回應(yīng)、內(nèi)容薄弱、因果不清、時空混亂、角色引入失當(dāng)、結(jié)局模糊與價值升華缺 失等現(xiàn)象，說明他們?nèi)狈η楣?jié)設(shè)置的基本策略。長此以往，學(xué)生難免會產(chǎn)生讀后續(xù)寫的畏 難情緒。為此，熟悉并使用讀后續(xù)寫的情節(jié)設(shè)置策略是考生取得讀后續(xù)寫成功的關(guān)鍵因素 之一。情節(jié)是敘事性文本的構(gòu)成要素之一，由一系列相互關(guān)聯(lián)的事件構(gòu)成，是敘事性文本中最 為典型、最為生動的內(nèi)容。解讀敘事性文本，不僅應(yīng)抓住情節(jié)的起因、開展、高

4、潮、結(jié)局， 更應(yīng)抓住情節(jié)的內(nèi)在沖突、矛盾等。一方面，高考續(xù)寫內(nèi)容主要集中在情節(jié)的高潮和結(jié)局部 分。此局部反映個體經(jīng)驗及思想上的困惑與沖突、危機的出現(xiàn)或轉(zhuǎn)折、矛盾沖突以某種方 式得到解決及事件的最終結(jié)局。因而，合理的續(xù)寫情節(jié)應(yīng)包括矛盾沖突、危機轉(zhuǎn)折、問題解【典型句式】【句型 1 It was a star made of branches, which must have taken hours to make.（由關(guān)系代詞 which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句）【句型 2】I thought, Betsy, you are the one who showed me what real charit

5、y look like.（由關(guān)系 代詞who引導(dǎo)限制性定語從句，由連接詞what引導(dǎo)賓語從句作動詞showed的賓語） 3.（2022.廣東.二模）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一 篇完整的短文。Music has always been an essential part of my family. As a little girl, I often watched my mom singing with others in the church. As I grew older, she and I would sing while we did the dis

6、hes or hung clothes. My brother Dean was also a musical soul. In good time or in bad, there was always music in our house. It shaped us, comforted us, and gave us a way to express feelings that might otherwise have gone unspoken.After Dean became a father, we learned that his oldest son was on the a

7、utism spectrum. My nephew Dj did not handle social situation well, and sometimes even for him to speak aloud outside the family was a struggle. He worked very hard to overcome his fears, so much so that the year he was eight, he decided he wanted to be part of the Christmas music program with the ot

8、her children in his Sunday school class. The part he had been offered was one that required him to sing a verse all on his own - a solo.My brother carefully explained to him that this would mean singing in front of the audience; there would be no one singing with him. Dj considered this very careful

9、ly. After a couple of days, he decided that he would accept the part. He explained to us that he believed he could do it because it was a very special occasion, and lie would practice until he was as perfect as he could be. He said he knew his daddy would help him to be the best singer possible.For

10、over a month, he and his father practiced together. Every evening would find them locked away in the music room, my brother on guitar, and my nephews small voice coming from somewhere deep down inside his little body. He gained confidence, and when the day of the concert arrived, he was certain all

11、would go well. My brother waited backstage, giving Dj double thumbs-up, and he came out lo sit with the rest of the family to watch and take photos. 注意：.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。When it was finally time for Dj to sing, the music played on, and he froze.Everyone turned to see who was singing, w

12、hile I knew it was my brother.【答案】When it was finally time for Dj to sinx, the music played on, and he froze. His little face grew pale, and we could see the panic in his eyes as the silence grew. The pianist started the music again but still nothing came out. The entire audience seemed to lean forw

13、ard in expectation. The silence seemed enormous. The whole family of us all staring at our little boy, hoping he would cheer up and act out his part. Then the pianist started over again, and a low voice filled the air, singing the song.Everyone turned to see who was sinRina, while I knew it was my m

14、othn匚 My mother and I were fixed on the little angel on stage. The color came back to his face, and his eyes began to sparkle. He opened his mouth and began to sing along, his little voice growing stronger with each word. The show ended with thunderous applause, with the kids bowing dramatically, ac

15、cepting their praise for a job well done. I turned to my brotha with tears in my eyes. I knew at that time no words needed to be spoken; the understanding between us was louder than the applause that night.【寫作解析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者的侄子Dj患有自閉癥，不善于處理社交 場合，有時甚至對他來說，在家庭之外大聲說話都是一件困難的事情。但他努力地克服自己 的恐懼，以至于在他八歲那

16、年，他決定要和主日學(xué)校的其他孩子一起參加圣誕音樂工程。給 他的角色要求他獨唱一段。演出當(dāng)天，Dj因為緊張無法發(fā)聲，最后在作者母親的帶動下， 順利完成了演出。.段落續(xù)寫：由第一段首句內(nèi)容“當(dāng)Dj終于該唱歌的時候，音樂響起，他愣住了?！笨芍?，第一段可描 寫Dj因為緊張在舞臺上無法發(fā)聲，這時一個消沉的聲音唱著這首歌。由第二段首句內(nèi)容“每個人都轉(zhuǎn)過身來看看是誰在唱歌，而我知道那是我的母親?！笨芍?， 第二段可描寫Dj在作者母親的帶動下完成演出。.續(xù)寫線索：Dj恐慌Dj無法演唱母親帶著Dj完成演出.詞匯激活行為類：（1）看著：stare at/look at； （2）希望：hope/in the hope

17、 of； （3）結(jié)束：end with/end up with情緒類：（1）有力的：thunderous/powerful； （2）贊美：praise/compliment【典型句式】句型 1 His little face grew pale, and we could see the panic in his eyes as the silence grew.（運用 了 as引導(dǎo)時間狀語從句）句型 2 The whole family of us were all staring at our little boy, hoping he would cheer up and act out

18、 his part.（運用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語）決和最終結(jié)局。另一方面，高考讀后續(xù)寫不是獨立存在的，它是已有敘事情節(jié)的延續(xù)，這就 要求學(xué)生在主題、情感、人物和事件等方面與已有情節(jié)保持一致。讀后續(xù)寫中，學(xué)生可以 利用如下步驟進行故事的情節(jié)分析及設(shè)置：.研讀續(xù)寫源語篇，確定故事話題與主題讀后續(xù)寫，首先在于“讀:“讀”的一個重要意圖在于確定材料的主題。主題也稱之 為“中心思想”，是語篇的靈魂。因此，續(xù)寫情節(jié)應(yīng)緊緊圍繞主題這個核心，突顯主題的 現(xiàn)實價值和情感意義。主題確實定有兩條途徑：一是提煉，二是感悟。認(rèn)識事物是由淺入深、 由表及里的過程。我們要對已有材料進 行分析、歸納、篩選，并從不同的角度進行比擬鑒

19、 別，去粗取精，由感性到理性，這樣才能提煉 出事物的本質(zhì)和深刻的主題。感悟來自苦思 而產(chǎn)生的靈感?？嗨嫉倪^程就是對材料信息進行去偽存真、由表及里的感悟過程。主題始 終蘊藏著作者的意圖或價值取向。主題一般包括中心內(nèi)容與價值取向兩個方面。中心內(nèi)容是 文章所負(fù)載的信息。價值取向是作者想要通過作品傳達(dá)的思想。作者可能會用標(biāo)題、一個 詞、一句話或一段話呈現(xiàn)主題，而學(xué)生需要敏銳地獲取這些關(guān)鍵信息以提煉出主題及作者的 價值取向。一般來說，作者的價值取向包括歷史意義、倫理意義、人生意義、現(xiàn)實價 值、 情感價值等。.尋找語篇的隱性話語，發(fā)現(xiàn)隱藏在故事背后的問題隱性話語（隱性話語（伏筆）是上文看似無關(guān)緊要的事或物

20、，對下文將要出現(xiàn)的人物 或事件預(yù)先作出的某種提示或暗示。隱性話語（伏筆）有以下三種作用：為故事的展開服務(wù), 給予讀者暗示；制造懸念，提高讀 者繼續(xù)閱讀的興趣；強調(diào)伏線必須有始有終，前文的跡 象提示必在后文中表達(dá)。閱讀材料中的隱性話語（伏筆）在續(xù)寫局部得以表達(dá)，才能使得 續(xù) 文情節(jié)合情合理，即學(xué)生在續(xù)寫中要遵循“尋找隱性話語（伏筆）一回應(yīng)隱性話語（伏 筆）”的寫作規(guī)那么。然而，隱性話語（伏筆）經(jīng)常零星散落在試題材料中，不易覺察。有時, 試題材料中看似“閑筆”之處卻是重要的伏筆信息。學(xué)生如何才能精準(zhǔn)地找出“潛伏”在 試 題材料中的隱性話語（伏筆）？通過梳理歷次高考讀后 續(xù)寫試題材料，我們發(fā)現(xiàn)，隱性

21、話 語（伏筆）通常表達(dá)在特 定的人、物（事件）、語言、情感、主人公期待和反常情境六個方 面。通過關(guān)注這六個方面，我們就能找到隱性話語（伏筆），進而通過回應(yīng)隱性話語（伏 筆）來設(shè)置合理的情節(jié)。需要注意的是，試題材料中可能會有很多隱性話語（伏筆），而續(xù) 寫內(nèi)容不可能回應(yīng) 所有隱性話語（伏筆），這就需要學(xué)生選取有助于推動情 節(jié)開展或能突 顯試題材料價值取向的隱性話語（伏筆）來 設(shè)置情節(jié)。例如，以2021年6月浙江卷讀后 續(xù)寫試題的隱性話語（伏筆）及其回應(yīng)為例進行詳細(xì)闡述：【物（事件）】隱性話語（伏筆）：My dad earned money to pay family expenses from a

22、ge 14.I didnt really understand his world. I thought that I would surpass anything he had accomplished after high school gradua- tion.(4)1 planned to do with the pay as I wished.I wasnt interested more work.1 understood immediately what my parents were worried about. the truck回應(yīng)：He exerted all his e

23、nergies to support the family without any bitter words. I now understand all the efforts my dad put into the family.(3)1 would never surpass what my dad did for the family due to my little responsibility tak- en for the household.I decided to contribute all my money to mend the truck instead of buyi

24、ng a new basket- ball.That night, before I went to bed, I decided to continue my work if I could because I learned the true meaning of growing up.My parents had intended to fix the bro- ken truck but couldnt get enough money to afford it.通過梳理試題材料中人、物(事件)、語言、情感、主人公期待及反常情境等隱性話語 (伏筆)信息，我們能夠快速把握敘事的情節(jié)，找到

25、矛盾沖突的原因，進而發(fā)現(xiàn)亟待解決 的問題。.豐富故事情節(jié)的內(nèi)涵，突出問題解決的實際意義歷次高考讀后續(xù)寫試題材料多為遇險脫困、生活趣事等常見的個體經(jīng)歷，其情節(jié)主線并 不復(fù)雜。學(xué)生三言兩語便能寫完情節(jié)主線內(nèi)容，而這又引發(fā)了另一個問題：學(xué)生寫出的情 節(jié)徒有主線骨架，并無“血肉”。例如，2021年新高考I卷讀后續(xù)寫試題中寫完Jenna和 Je什做好早餐送到母親床前，看著母親吃完早餐的時候，是否就應(yīng)該結(jié)束續(xù)寫呢？其實不然。 我們還可以從環(huán)境、心理、動作、語言和情感等五個方面著手，豐富情節(jié)內(nèi)容，推動問題的 解決。.聚焦事件發(fā)生始末，確保敘事的層次性敘事文本就是表達(dá)人物活 動、事件發(fā)生經(jīng)過、作者抒發(fā)情感的語

26、篇，其結(jié)構(gòu)一般遵循 以下三種順序：(1)時間順序：敘事主要用來表達(dá)過去發(fā)生的事件，這個 事件既可以是真實的，也 可以是虛構(gòu)的。敘事的特點是，敘事中事件發(fā)生的時間順序就是事件實際發(fā)生的時間順序。 如果表達(dá)的時間發(fā)生改變，那么表達(dá)的事件也會發(fā)生相應(yīng)改變。例如：事件一： On the way home full of excitement, I thought about how to make use of the “hugesum of money/l need a new football in the future.I whispered to myself. Approaching my

27、house, I noticed my dad and mom standing beside the old truck of my family, looking sad.事件二： On the way home full of excitement, I thought about how to make use of the “huge”sum of money Approaching my house, I noticed my dad and mom standing beside the old truck of my family, looking sad/I need a n

28、ew football in the future.事件一是基于2021年6月浙江卷讀后續(xù)寫試題材料進行的續(xù)寫，其傳遞的是作者可 能會改變錢的用途，將錢用于解決家里的困難。而事件二那么恰恰相反，其傳遞出作者即便 知道了家里的困難，仍然想買新足球的想法。事件一、二傳達(dá)的意義之所以大相徑庭，原 因就在于改變了表達(dá)的時間。（2）空間順序：敘事文本尤其是關(guān)于景物的敘事文本，常常會出現(xiàn)空間位移的現(xiàn)象， 這在一定程度上是 由于景物都是以一定的空間為背景的?？臻g位移一般可以分為兩種：一 種是以作者的位置 為中心，推向其他人或物的位置；另一種是作者在行動中，按行動路線 所涉及的空間逐個敘事狀物，即人們常說的“

29、移步換形: 例如：（2018 年 6 月浙江卷讀后續(xù)寫）I knew we had gotten hopelessly lost. After seemingly ages, there came a loud cry of my dad. As a quick response, I shouted in a loud voice. Dad, I m here! ” Tracing my voice, Dad finally found me and we got reunited.（2021 年 6 月浙江卷讀后續(xù)寫）0n the way home full of excitement,

30、I thought about how to make use of the “huge sum of money. Approaching my house, I noticed my dad and mom standing beside the old truck of my family, looking sad. That night, before I went to bed, I decided to continue my work if I could because I learned the true mean- ing of growing up.（3）情感順序：情感順

31、序指將客觀事物固有的邏輯關(guān)系巧妙地組合在思想情感開展的線 索中，組成一個層次式的語篇，表達(dá)了人在認(rèn)識事物過程中的情感變化與不斷成長的心路歷 程，以及面對矛盾沖突時的思想轉(zhuǎn)變和情感變化。情感層次的不斷提升不僅有助于推動情 節(jié)的開展、矛盾沖突的解決，更有助于突顯語篇的情感價值，進一步升華主題。例如：（2021 年 6 月浙江卷讀后續(xù)寫）From age 14, my dad earned and used it to pay family expenses. I didnt really understand his world either. At home, my dad said, “A j

32、obs a big step to growing up. Tm glad you will be contributing to the household. ,9My dads words made me realize that my earnings might not be mine to do with as I wished. My labors lasted about two weeks, and the farmer said there might be more work, but I wasnt interested. I decided it was not fai

33、r that I had to contribute my money.I understood immediately what my parents were worried about. My parents had intended to buy a new truck but couldnt get enough money to afford it. Suddenly, I realized what I should do my part in the family responsibilities. Hold- ing the money, I saidJDad, here i

34、s what I got for my work I hope it would help. That night, before I went to bed, I decided to continue my work if I could because I learned the true mean- ing of growing up.2021年6月浙江卷讀后續(xù)寫試題材料表達(dá)出作者情感層次的不斷遞進和升華。首先， 語篇描寫了作者情感的第一層次一自私。作者不理解為何父親從小就賺錢養(yǎng)家，對父親暗 示他要將打 工賺來的錢用于補貼家用較為抵觸。兩周后,作者便萌生了不愿再工作的想法, 并認(rèn)為將自

35、己辛苦賺來的錢用于補貼家用是不公平的。接著，語篇描寫了作者情感的第二 層次責(zé)任。當(dāng)作者意識到父母因沒有足夠的錢購買全家賴以生存的卡車而擔(dān)憂時，他 主動把賺來的錢交給父母。最后，語篇描寫了作者情感的第三層次成長。作者決定繼續(xù) 工作，主動承當(dāng)起一份家庭責(zé)任。上述語篇通過情感描寫的不斷遞進，既推動了情節(jié)的發(fā) 展，又突顯了主題。.基于故事進展引入新角色，以合理解決矛盾沖突續(xù)寫內(nèi)容中最主要的情節(jié)就是故事的高潮局部。所謂高潮就是矛盾沖突激化最激烈、涉 事各方最終角力即將分出勝負(fù)的關(guān)鍵節(jié)點。一旦矛盾沖突得以解決，敘事就走向結(jié)局。在有 些情形下，主人公會碰到自己無法解 決的矛盾沖突，此時就需要敘事材料中其他涉

36、 事人或 物來幫助主人公走出困境。如果協(xié)助 主人公走出困境的其他人或物已在試題材料中出現(xiàn), 我們稱之為介質(zhì)。介質(zhì)在高考讀后續(xù)寫試題中經(jīng)常出現(xiàn)。介質(zhì)就是作者安排的某個人物或 事件為下一個人物或事件的出現(xiàn)埋 下的隱性話語(伏筆)。如果協(xié)助主人公走出困境的人 物 或事件沒有出現(xiàn)在試題材料中，或試題材料只是暗示這一人物或事件即將出現(xiàn)，我們稱之 為第三方角色。第三方角色引入的唯一目的就是幫助主人公脫離困境，使敘事朝著主人所 期待的結(jié)局開展。例如，2020年7月浙江卷讀后續(xù)寫試題最后解決人熊大戰(zhàn)這一矛盾沖突 的第三方角色是護林員(rangers)。護林員這個角色雖然在所給材料中并未出現(xiàn)，但試題材料 已對其

37、進行了暗示 “I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way.，敘事情節(jié)中矛盾沖突的解決要遵循“意料之外，情理之中”的原那么，即無論作 者 設(shè)計的情節(jié)多么驚險曲折，介質(zhì)的回應(yīng)或第 三方角色的引入必須合乎情理，并能助力問題 的解決。.點明人物或故事的結(jié)局，回應(yīng)源語篇的隱性話語結(jié)局是指一系列事件的結(jié)束，包括人或物 的下場、目的的實現(xiàn)或失敗等。敘事的結(jié)局 是指主要矛盾沖突解決后至故事結(jié)束的階段。在此階段，事件最終以符合主人公 預(yù)期的結(jié) 局收尾，即便結(jié)局不符合主人公預(yù)期，那也對主人公有著重要的意義或

38、價值。結(jié)局是建立在 開端、開展、高潮基礎(chǔ)上的對整個故事情節(jié)所做的最后完結(jié)和交待，其不是孤立存在的，具 有不可替代性。結(jié)局假設(shè)設(shè)置巧妙那么 對作品的內(nèi)容、主旨都具有畫龍典型句式之用；結(jié)局假設(shè) 草率結(jié)束那么成狗尾續(xù)貂之憾。結(jié)局的設(shè)置有虛實兩種情況。虛的結(jié)局是指作者不直截了當(dāng) 告知讀者事件的準(zhǔn)確結(jié)局，而是留有空間讓讀者去想象；實的結(jié)局是指作者明確告知讀者 事件的結(jié)局。例如，在2018年6月浙江卷讀后續(xù)寫試題中，對于“we能否找到回農(nóng) 場的路，虛的結(jié)局可以設(shè)置為“And just when all hope seemed lost, anxious shouts were heard in the d

39、istance with torches coming into sight. ，實的結(jié)局那么可以設(shè)置為 “Finally, Uncle Paul found us and we were back, safe and sound. 因此，成功的結(jié)局只是敘事活動在時空上的暫 時停止，其文本的現(xiàn)實價值與精神意義由讀者去想象和闡釋，從而賦予文本更長久的生命 力。. （2022.江蘇鹽城.三模）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu) 成一篇完整的短文。From the time I was old enough to help on our Indiana farm, I knew

40、 what my father expected of me. Three generations of men in my family were doctors. I heard stories of the lives my grandfather had saved and I heard similar tales about my father. As Dad grew ever more godlike in my mind, so did the force of the expectation that I would follow in the family traditi

41、on.But as college neared, I began to feel that becoming a doctor was not what I really wanted to do. I didnt dare tell him about my uncertainty. With the weight heavy on my mind the summer before college, I was given a challenge that I hoped would be a distraction.Dad kept several bird dogs which I

42、trained on our farm. As usual, Dad turned Jerry over to me. See what you can do with him J he said.I didnt anticipate problems. Jerry was a willing dog of about ten months. The first part of his training was easy. He mastered the basics: sit, stay, down, walk. His only problem was come. Id call Jerr

43、y! Here! He would turn and look at me, then go on about his business. In the following days, I noticed he would just take off through the grass, fast as a wild thing. Despite my intense desire to train him well, I began to feel a strange sense of joy when he ran.“Why wont he do what I want him to?”

44、I asked myself. I had never failed with a dog before, but I was surely failing now. When September came, I finally had to tell Dad that this bird dog wouldnt hunt. The thought that I had failed us both made me guilty.“Son, I know this dog doesnt do what he should,“ he said, but what he does do is so

45、mething he likes. He continued to look at me firmly. For a moment I felt he could see into my very heart. 注意：L續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答?！癉ad, I dont think I can do medicine J I took a solid breath.He gave me a tight hug, said good night and left me.【答案】“Dad, I don 7 think I can do medicine,MI t

46、ook a solid breath. Hearing this, he lowered his eyes, obviously disappointed. He appeared so sad that I almost felt close to tears. But to my great relief, his face lit up when he looked at me again. Staring at Jerry beside his feet, he said gently, “Think about Jory, son. You expected him to be th

47、e hunter you trained him to be. But he just isnt It is a good thing, and now we911 just wait to see how you run.”He gave me a tight hug, said good night and left me. At that moment I understood my father as I never had before, and the love and trust I felt seemed to fill the room. I looked at Jerry,

48、 asleep, his legs stretching suddenly as if to be running even in his dreams. To him, running was a great honor and birds no longer mattered to him. To me, being a doctor is not my ideal choice, but new ones await me in the future.【寫作解析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者在家庭的影響下，選擇了成為醫(yī)生。但是 隨著大學(xué)臨近，作者開始覺得成為一名醫(yī)生并不是自己真正想做

49、的事情。結(jié)果父親從作者訓(xùn) 狗這件事中，覺察到了作者并不喜歡學(xué)醫(yī)，并表示支持作者選擇自己喜歡的事業(yè)。.段落續(xù)寫：由第一段首句內(nèi)容“，爸爸，我覺得不能學(xué)醫(yī)，我深深吸了口氣”可知，第一段可描寫父親聽 到作者的話后的反響以及表示對作者選擇的理解。由第二段首句內(nèi)容“他緊緊地?fù)肀Я宋?，道了晚安就離開了我。”可知，第二段可描寫作者 聽了父親的話后的心理活動以及感悟。.續(xù)寫線索：告訴父親內(nèi)心感受一父親表示理解作者感動作者感悟.詞匯激活行為類:(1)深呼吸：take a solid breath / take a deep breath； (2)在旁邊:beside /next to； (3) 重要：matte

50、r/count情緒類：(1)悲傷：sad/sorrowful； (2)理想：ideal/dream【典型句式】句型 1 Hearing this, he lowered his eyes, obviously disappointed.(運用 了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語) 句型 2 He appeared so sad that T almost felt close to tears.(運用 了結(jié)果狀語從句)2.(2022河北模擬預(yù)測)閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu) 成一篇完整的短文。The winter of 1933. All around us was rough re

51、ality. Lots of folks found themselves penniless. But life went on.New Year was almost upon us. One day Mr. Breiten, our teacher; had a bright idea to cheer us up. With a big smile he proudly announced a gift exchange game. We each pulled a slip of paper with a name on it.Maxine had selected Fleener.

52、 Hildes name was on my slip of paper. My mom was a genius with a needle and thread, and I knew shed sew something up. When we figured out who had my name, I about fainted. It was Betsy! Her family was poorer than the rest of usWhat am I going to do, Maxine, when my name is called? Stand up there loo

53、king stupid while everyone is watching me? That Betsy should not even have taken a name!”Finally the date for the big program arrived. When I reached Maxines house to meet her, her mother called us to see what Maxines aunt had sent. A pair of red gloves was out on the table. “Oh, Maxine screamed wit

54、h delight. Look at the angels!” She pulled off her worn brown gloves and slipped her hand into the new one.“Snow angel gloves J she breathed. Oh, Delores. Look!”Tve never seen anything so beautiful in my whole life, I sighed. Well, I was happy for Maxine, but the sight of those gloves made me feel e

55、ven sorrier for myself.Then the gift exchange began. One name was called and then another Kids jumped up, laughing happily. When Hildes name was called, I fished in my pocket for the little doll Mom had made.“Betsy, Mr. Breiten called. I saw Betsy stand up hesitantly. Then Maxine stood up!I caught Maxines arm. Ybu have Fleener,I reminded her. I traded with him,“ she whispered as she walked over and handed her gift to Betsy. Betsy carefully unfolded the package. My eyes popped out. Maxines red snow angel gloves lay in Betsys pahns. She was spee