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讀后續(xù)寫寫作指導(dǎo):送老人去養(yǎng)老院閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Twentyyearsago,Idroveataxi.Once,Iwascalledat3a.m.topicksomeoneup.WhenIarrived,thebuildingwascompletelydarkexceptforonelightinawindow.Often,manydriverswouldjusthonk(按喇叭)onceortwice,waitashortminute,thendriveaway.Butunlessarealdanger,Ialwayswenttothedoortofindthepassenger.Itmightbesomeonewhoneededmyassistance.WouldInotwantadrivertodothesameifmymotherorfatherhadcalledforataxi?SoIwalkedtothedoorandknocked."Justaminute,“answeredaweakandelderlyvoice.Icouldhearthesoundofsomethingbeingdraggedacrossthefloor.A代eralongpause,thedooropened.Asmallwomaninher80sstoodbeforeme.Byhersidewasasmallsuitcase.“Wouldyoucarrymybagouttothecar?”shesaid."I'dlikeafewmomentsalone.Then;ifyoucouldcomebackandhelpme?I'mnotverystrong//Itookthesuitcasetothecab,thenreturnedtoassistthewoman.Shetookmyarm,andwewalkedslowlytowardthecab.Shekeptthankingmeformykindness."It'snothing/'Itoldher.justtrytotreatmypassengersthewayIwouldwantmymothertreated.0〃Oh,you'resuchagoodboy,“shesaid.Whenwegotinthetaxi,shegavemeanaddress.Thensheasked,“Couldyoudrivethroughthedowntown?"〃It'snottheshortestway,“Ianswered.don'tmind,“shesaid,'Tminnohurry.I'monmywaytothenursinghome."Isawhereyesshiningwithtears."Idon'thaveanyfamilyleft,“shecontinued."ThedoctorsaysIamtoooldtolivealone/1Iquietlyturnedoffthemeter(計程器)."Whatroaddoyouwantmetotake?”Iasked."First,takemetoSunriseStreet.That'swhereIwasborn.”注意:.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150詞左右;.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Forhours;wedrovethroughthecity.〃HowmuchdoIoweyou?”sheasked,reachingforherpurse.寫作指導(dǎo):線索:時間:3a.m.人物(背景):Idroveataxi.Asmallwomaninher80sstoodbeforeme.Z/Idon'thaveanyfamilyleft/7shecontinued.事件:Iquietlyturnedoffthemeter(計程器).主題:WouldInotwantadrivertodothesameifmymotherorfatherhadcalledforataxi?Shekeptthankingmeformykindness.Z/IjusttrytotreatmypassengersthewayIwouldwantmymothertreated//情節(jié)推測:Forhours,wedrovethroughthecity..她說話(照應(yīng)人物背景線索:don'thaveanyfamilyleft).我聆聽.到地方“HowmuchdoIoweyou?”sheasked,reachingforherpurse..我回答:不收費(照應(yīng)事件線索:Iquietlyturnedoffthemeter).她反響:由驚奇到感激.我反響:照應(yīng)線索主題(IjusttrytotreatmypassengersthewayIwouldwantmymothertreated.)Forhours,wedrovethroughthecity..她的表達(回憶過去)和她的神情初稿:Suddenly,shesaid,“ThisistheplacewhereIfirstmyhusband.我們提前預(yù)估,本文的對話會很多,如果續(xù)寫都這樣寫,不是太好,可以用轉(zhuǎn)述方式潤色:Suddenly,sheaskedmetopullupnearapeacefulsquare,where,asshetoldmeinagentlevoice,shefirstmetherhusband.Shesatonthebackseatstill,gazingatthesquarethroughamistoftearsforamoment,andthensignaledmetomoveon.技術(shù)手段:多角度豐富聲音:inagentlevoice眼睛:gazingatthesquarethroughamistoftearsforamoment手:andthensignaledmetomoveon動作:satonthebackseatstill.我的反響:聆聽初稿:Alltheway,Ijustlistenedattentively.潤色:Alltheway,IjustlistenedattentivelyasifIwasaloyalaudiencetomymotherwhousedtocalluphergoodolddays.技術(shù)手段:加上asif…比喻手法。這種手法是比擬好的,我記得有一次我女兒(小學(xué)三年級)給我說,我發(fā)現(xiàn)只要用比喻,作文就會被老師表揚。同時也是為主題鋪墊。.到達目的地初稿:Twohourslater,wearrivedatthegateofthenursinghomeatdawn.潤色:技術(shù)手段:Afterwhatseemed...Afterwhatseemedlikeamagicaljourneybacktothepast,weeventuallyarrivedatthegateofthenursinghomeatdawn.“HowmuchdoIoweyou?”sheasked,reachingforherpurse..我的回答:不收費初稿:“Nothing,“Isaid,pointingatthemeter.潤色:“Nothing,“Isaidquickly,shruggingwithalightlaugh,winkingatthemeter.技術(shù)手段:副詞:quickly肩膀:shrugging笑:withalightlaugh眼睛:winkingatthemeter.她的反響:由驚奇到感激初稿:Shewasverysurprisedandthenmoved.Shesaid,Oh,you'resuchagoodboy!Thankyou.”潤色:Shelookedatmewithwide-openeyes.Thenhershockslowlygavewaytogratefulunderstanding.〃Oh,you'resuchagoodboy!Thankyou."Sheheldmyhandtightly.技術(shù)手段:眼睛:lookedatmewithwide-openeyes情感變化:hershockslowlygavewaytogratefulunderstanding手:heldmyhandtightly.我的反響:主題“IjusttrytotreatyouthewayIwouldwantmymothertreated/'Isaidsoftly.潤色:Z/IjusttrytotreatyouthewayIwouldwantmymothertreated/'Irespondedsoftly.ThenIbentoverandgaveherahug.Asuddenwarmthandhappinesshitmelikeagentlebreezewipingmyface.AndIknewitwasthegraceofkindness.技術(shù)手段:動作:bentoverandgaveherahug心情:Asuddenwarmthandhappinesshitmelikeagentlebreezewipingmyface.修辭:比喻Iknewitwasthegraceofkindness.完整:Forhours,wedrovethroughthecity.Suddenly,sheaskedmetopullupnearapeacefulsquare,where,asshetoldmeinagentlevoice,shefirstmetherhusband.Shesatonthebackseatstill,gazingatthesquarethroughamistoftearsforamoment,andthensignaledmetomoveon.Alltheway,IjustlistenedattentivelyasifIwasaloyalaudiencetomymotherwhousedtocalluphergoodolddays.Afterwhatseemedlikeamagicaljourneybacktothepast,weeventuallyarrivedatthegateofthenursinghomeatdawn.“HowmuchdoIoweyou?”sheasked,reachingforherpurse.“Nothing,“Isaidquickly,shruggingwithalightlaugh,winkingatthemeter.Shelookedatmewithwide-openeyes.Thenhershockslowlygavewaytogratefulunderstanding.〃Oh,you'resuch
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