雅思大作文預(yù)防犯罪crimeprevention

Welcome!OverviewBriefreviewofthestructureofargumentationLexicalresourcesIntroduction&Body&ConclusionwithexamplesCrimePreventionAssessmentofCriteria

TaskResponse:ContentCoherenceandCohesion:

StructureLexicalResource:VocabularyGrammaticalRangeandAccuracy:SentenceArgumentation&ReportArgumentation:Doyouagreeordisagree?Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagree?Discussbothviewsandgiveyouropinion.Doyouthinktheadvantages/benefitsoutweighitsdisadvantages/problems?Report:Why?Result?

Solution?StructureOne-sided:Agreeordisagree?Introduction:introducetopic/background+youropinion(agreeordisagree)

Body:topicsentence+reasons/examples/argumentstosupportyourviewConclusion:repeatyouropinionTwo-sided:discussbothviews/advantages&disadvantages1.

Introduction:Background+topic(bothviews)2.Discussoneside3.

Discussanotherside4.

ConclusionLexicalResources犯罪：commitacrime違法（犯罪）的人：criminaloffenderLaw-breakerfelon['fel?n]（重罪犯）violator11懲罰：punishmentpenalty(罰款)sentence（判決）：serveprisonsentence/afour-yearsentence

imprisonment(坐牢)嚴(yán)厲的harshseverestrict12打擊(犯罪行為)combat(反對(duì)，戰(zhàn)斗),

beat,

curb（抑制）,tackle控制、減少control,

cut,

reduce

投入監(jiān)獄putintoprison;sendtojail

社區(qū)服務(wù)Communityservice再教育：rehabilitation

[‘ri?h?,b?l?’te???n]，re-education工作培訓(xùn)：jobtraining咨詢：Counseling14Introductionintroducetopic/background+youropinion/bothviewsExamplesTopic1:PoliceinBritaindonotcarryguns.Somepeoplebelievethatunarmedpoliceareunabletoprotectcitizens,butsomesuggestthatarmingthepolicewillleadtoasurgeinviolenceinsociety.Discussthosetwoviews.ModelAnswer1Whethertoarmthepoliceisacontentioussubject.

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Whilesomepeoplemaintainthatunarmedpoliceareunabletoprotectlaw-abidingcitizens,othersrejectthisnotion,believingthatitleadstoadropinviolenceinsociety.3

Thereareseveralfactorsthataccountforthestarkcontrastbetweenthetwothoughts.ExamplesTopic2:Theonlywaytoimproveroadsafetyistoimposeseverepunishmentfordrivingoffenses.Doyouagreeordisagree?ModelAnswer1Roadsafetyhaslongbeenanissueofconcerntothepublic,andtothegovernment.2Nothingqualifiesasasufficientcompensationwhenaroadaccidentoccurs.3Despitetheefforttoreducedeath,injuryandtraumaacrosstheworld,manycountriesareseeingtrafficaccidentsincreaseexponentially.4Inimprovingroadsafety,somepeopleadvocateharshpunishment.5Inmyopinion,itismerelyoneofthemanycountermeasuresandcannotpreventallcriminaloffencesontheroad.SentencePatterns1topicsentence:introducebackground1)Nowadays,thediscussionabout…isaverycontroversial/contentious

one.2)Whetherto…isacontroversial/contentious/debatable/divergentsubject.3)……h(huán)aslongbeenanissueofconcernto….4)Thereisangrowingtendency/concernnowadaysthat….2.introducebothviews1)

Thosewhocriticize…….arguethat……,butpeoplewhoadvocate……,ontheotherhand,maintainthat……2)Whilesomepeoplemaintainthat…,othersrejectthisnotion,believingthat…3)Somepeopletaketheposition/holdtheviewthat….Asopposedtothisidea,manypeople,however,maintainthat…h(huán)oweverwhilewhereaswhilstonthecontraryontheotherhandInsteadconversely3.stateyouropinion:Inmyopinion/view,Iagreeon..Isidewith..AsfarasIamconcerned,TomypointofviewYourTurn!Topic:Manypeopleareafraidofleavingtheirhousesbecauseofthespreadofcrimes.Somethinkthatmoreactionscanbetakentopreventcrimefromoccurring,butothersthinklittlecanbedone.Whatisyouropinion?ModelAnswer1Theriseinthecrimerateinthepastdecadeshasfuelledpublicworriesabouttherapidlydecliningsafetyoftheircommunities.2Somepeopletakethepositionthatlittlecanbedonetopreventthemselvesfromvictimisation.3

Asopposedtothisgeneralpessimism,manypeople,however,maintainthatincombatingcrime,peopleshouldadoptaproactiveapproach.4

Isidewithbothofthem.BodyEachparagraph:topicsentence+examples/reasons/argumentstosupporttheview.ExamplesTopic:Theonlywaytoimproveroadsafetyistoimposeseverepunishmentfordrivingoffenses.Doyouagreeordisagree?BrainstormEducationCultureEconomyTechnologyEnvironmentTimeEmploymentGovernmentEmotionLawPsychologyPhysiologySociety

Education:boostthesenseofroadsafety;moredrivingtraining;safe-drivingcourses.Government:

improveroadinfrastructureandtransportationsystems;research:riskfactors;reinforcethepoliceforceandincreasepatrol.Law:raisethedrivingage&thestandardsinthedrivingtest;punishillegaldriving.Technology:stoplights,speedcameras..Paragraph11Inmanycases,manyautomobileaccidentsoccurnotbecausedriversbelittleordefyroadregulationsbutbecausethoseregulationsareunfamiliartothem.2Itisaneverydayoccurrencethatrule-breakingactsandtrafficcrashesarelinkedtopoordrivingskills.3Manydrivershavelimitedexperienceincopingwithdifferentsituationsandaninaccurateestimationofthecomplexityofroadconditions,despitehavingpassedlicensetests.4Italertspeopletotheloopholesinpolicies,suchastheloosecontrolovercaruse,lowrequirementsondrivingtrainingandlowlicensestandards.5

Intacklingthoseproblems,itisimperativetorequirelicenseapplicantstoattendmoresafe-drivingcoursesandpassstricttest.Paragraph21Besideseducation,otherendeavors,suchasimprovingroadinfrastructureandtransportationsystem,areequallyimportant.2Roadconditionsshouldbeimprovedtoallowdifferentusers,includingdrivers,cyclistsandpedestrians,touseroadssafely.3Otherfacilities,suchasstoplightsandstopsigns,canbeusedwhereverappropriatetocurbspeeddriving.4

Furthermore,authoritiescansponsortheresearchforroadsafetymeasuresandeffectiveprecautions,suchasidentifyingriskfactorsofdifferentdrivingpatterns.5Bytranslatingthesefindingsintopoliciesandpractices,thegovernmentisinastrongerpositiontoprotectvehicleoccupantsandvulnerableroadusers.Paragraph3However,assuggestedbefore,strictstandardsrequirefullcompliance.Withoutregulationscloselyobserved,standardsareinfactvain.Widerinterventionoflocalauthoritiesisalsorecommended,suchasincreasingpatrolsinthoseareaswhereaccidentrateishigh.Whentheexistingpoliciesfailtoregulateroadusers’behavior,tighteningthecontrolispreferred.Roadregulationsshouldbereassessedandrevisedregularlysoastocombatroadoffencesmoreeffectively.Paragraph31

Widerinterventionoflocalauthoritiesisalsorecommended,suchasincreasingpatrolsinthoseareaswhereaccidentrateishigh.2Roadregulationsshouldbereassessedandrevisedregularlysoastocombatroadoffencesmoreeffectively.3Whentheexistingpoliciesfailtoregulateroadusers’behavior,tighteningthecontrolispreferred.4

However,assuggestedbefore,strictstandardsrequirefullcompliance.Withoutregulationscloselyobserved,standardsareinfactvain.Brainstorm!Topic:Doyouthinkitisbettertosendcriminalstojailorletthemreceiveeducationorjobtraining?EducationandjobtrainingEmotion:reducelonelinessanddepressionEmployment:enhancepracticallifeskills＞assisttheminfindingjobsPsychology:morepositive,hopefulandconfidentputcriminalsintoprison:Society:

beingcloselymonitored＞safesocietyPsychology:deterrenteffectBrainstorm&OutlineTopic:Manypeopleareafraidofleavingtheirhousesbecauseofthespreadofcrimes.Somethinkthatmoreactionscanbetakentopreventcrimefromoccurring,butothersthinklittlecanbedone.Whatisyouropinion?Thefirstpointtosupportthisisthatthegovernmentcanincreaseintervention,includinglaunchinganti-crimepubliccampaigns,enforcingnewlaws,andprovidingeducation.Forindividualcitizens,manycrimescanbenippedinthebud,iftheykeepvigilantatcrimesandarebraveenoughtofightback.Conclusion

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