“以圖助寫”的讀后續(xù)寫（2021年1月浙江高考卷制作南瓜燈）課件 高三英語寫作專項

“以圖助寫”的讀后續(xù)寫ContinuationWriting2021年1月浙江卷

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標1.通過搶答、聽講典型錯題等解決前置導學中未完成的內(nèi)容或存在的問題。2.借助思維導圖定主旨要義,定故事情節(jié),定續(xù)寫內(nèi)容和增加細節(jié)描寫（elements,plots,continuouswritinganddetailedwriting）。3.小組合作探究并提煉“以圖助寫”的讀后續(xù)寫寫作思路。目錄

01.Leadingin（導入）

02.Readforelements(定主旨要義)

03.Readforplots(定故事情節(jié))

04.Readforcontinuationwriting(以增加細節(jié)，定續(xù)寫內(nèi)容)05.Homework(作業(yè))

01.Leadingin（導入）

01.Leadingin（導入）1.Ispumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenyourfamilytradition?2.Whatwouldyoudo？3.Let’sreadastory—HeadStuckinaPumpkin

pumpkin(南瓜)02.Readforelements(定主旨要義)

讀后續(xù)寫原文基本是記敘文，而記敘文主旨要義通常有六要素，即：時間、地點、人物、事情的起因、經(jīng)過結(jié)果。而且文章主題句一般在文章開頭段。02.Readforelements(定主旨要義)I,Dad,Mum,JaksoninthekicthenThisyear...beforeHalloween...Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.wecompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkineveryyear.Ifailedtopullmyheadoutofthepumpkin.續(xù)寫內(nèi)容(待定)Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.wecompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkineveryyear.Ifailedtopullmyheadoutofthepumpkin.03.Readforplots(定故事情節(jié))

故事情節(jié)定為四部分，分別是主要情節(jié)的開頭(beginning)、主要情節(jié)的發(fā)展階段（development），主要情節(jié)的高潮（climax）和結(jié)局（ending），結(jié)局也就是我們的續(xù)寫部分。利用主謂推進式閱讀，畫出句子主謂的方式來理清開頭、發(fā)展和高潮各故事情節(jié)大意。Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.WevisitalocalfarmeveryOctober.Inthepumpkinfield,Icompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkin.Mydadhasarulethatwehavetocarryourpumpkinsbackhome,andastheeldestchildIhaveanadvantage—Icarriedan85-pounderbacklastyear.Readforplots(定故事情節(jié))

Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.WevisitalocalfarmeveryOctober.Inthepumpkinfield,Icompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkin.Mydadhasarulethatwehavetocarryourpumpkinsbackhome,andastheeldestchildIhaveanadvantage—Icarriedan85-pounderbacklastyear.Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.wecompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkineveryyear.開頭（beginning）compete:familytradition

Thisyear,itwashardtotellwhethermyprizeortheonechosenbymy14-year-oldbrother,Jason,wasthewinner.Unfortunatelyweforgottoweighthembeforetakingouttheirinsides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint.Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmymomfilmingtheannualevent.I’munsurenowwhyIthoughtforcingmyheadinsidethepumpkinwouldsettlethematter,butitseemedtomakeperfectsenseatthetime.Withthepumpkinrestingonthetable,holeuppermost,Ibentoverandpressedmyheadagainsttheopening.AtfirstIgotjammedjustabovemyeyesandthen,asIwentonwithmytask,unwillingtoquit,mynosebrieflypreventedentry.FinallyImanagedtoputmywholeheadintoit,likeacork(軟木塞)forcedintoabottle.Iwasabletostraightenupwiththehugepumpkinrestingonmyshoulders.Readforplots(定故事情節(jié))

Thisyear,itwashardtotellwhethermyprizeortheonechosenbymy14-year-oldbrother,Jason,wasthewinner.Unfortunatelyweforgottoweighthembeforetakingouttheirinsides,butIwasdeterminedtoprovemypoint.Allofuswerehardatworkatthekitchentable,withmymomfilmingtheannualevent.I’munsurenowwhyIthoughtforcingmyheadinsidethepumpkinwouldsettlethematter,butitseemedtomakeperfectsenseatthetime.Withthepumpkinrestingonthetable,holeuppermost,Ibentoverandpressedmyheadagainsttheopening.AtfirstIgotjammedjustabovemyeyesandthen,asIwentonwithmytask,unwillingtoquit,mynosebrieflypreventedentry.FinallyImanagedtoputmywholeheadintoit,likeacork(軟木塞)forcedintoabottle.Iwasabletostraightenupwiththehugepumpkinrestingonmyshoulders.Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.wecompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkineveryyear.CompetewitheachotherandtoproveIwasthewinner,Iforcedmyheadintomypumpkin.發(fā)展階段（development）Competitive;confident;excited;attemptcompete:familytradition

Myexcitementwasshort-lived.Thepumpkinwasheavy.“I’mgoingtosetitdown,now,”Isaid,andwithJasonhelpingtosupportitsweight,Ibentbackoverthetabletogiveitsomewheretorest.ItwasonlywhenItriedtoremovemyheadthatIrealizedgettingoutwasgoingtobelessstraightforwardthangettingin.WhenIpulledhard,mynosegotintheway.IgotintoapanicasIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle,butitwasnouse.“Ican’tgetitout!”Ishouted,myvoicesoundingunnaturallyloudintheenclosedspace.

Myexcitementwasshort-lived.Thepumpkinwasheavy.“I’mgoingtosetitdown,now,”Isaid,andwithJasonhelpingtosupportitsweight,Ibentbackoverthetabletogiveitsomewheretorest.ItwasonlywhenItriedtoremovemyheadthatIrealizedgettingoutwasgoingtobelessstraightforwardthangettingin.WhenIpulledhard,mynosegotintheway.IgotintoapanicasIpressedfirmlyagainstthetableandmovedmyheadaroundtryingtofindtherightangle,butitwasnouse.“Ican’tgetitout!”Ishouted,myvoicesoundingunnaturallyloudintheenclosedspace.Readforplots(定故事情節(jié))

Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.wecompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkineveryyear.CompetewitheachotherandtoproveIwasthewinner,Iforcedmyheadintomypumpkin.Itriedtoremoveoutofthepumpkinbutfailedcompete:familytradition

failed,gotintoapanic

高潮（climax）Competitive;confident;excited;attemptReadforplots(定故事情節(jié))

Pumpkin(南瓜）carvingatHalloweenisafamilytradition.wecompetewithmythreebrothersandsistertoseekoutthebiggestpumpkineveryyear.CompetewitheachotherandtoproveIwasthewinner,Iforcedmyheadintomypumpkin.ItriedtoremoveoutofthepumpkinbutfailedIwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween.結(jié)局（ending）compete:familytradition

Competitive;attempt;excitedfailed,gotintoapanic

04.Readforcontinuationwriting(定續(xù)寫內(nèi)容)定續(xù)寫內(nèi)容是在前面“二定”對文本理解的基礎(chǔ)上，對續(xù)寫開頭語利用主謂推進式進行研讀，以開頭句主謂內(nèi)容為基礎(chǔ)以問問題（問問題從語言、動作【五官，肢體等】、心理或周圍環(huán)境角度出發(fā)）的形式尋找續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的切入點。04.Readforcontinuationwriting(以增加細節(jié)，定續(xù)寫內(nèi)容)Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween.1.“Ishouldgetmyheadoutofthepumpkin”“No,mylovelypumpkin”2.triedtopullmyheadout;heardmysister’slaughterandJason’svoice

talkingaboutcuttingthepumpkinopen;myfamilyhelpmerelaxmybody,andpulledthepumpkinoutofmyhead,myheadwasrelaxed;myMumfilmtheevent3.Allofusfeltexcited1.WhatmightIsay?2.WhatfuthereffortdidImake?Whatdidmyfamilydo?whowillhelpmeandhow?whatwastheresult?(mymother)3.HowdidIfeel?本段應該描寫如何把南瓜拔出來Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween.1.“Lookatmyhead,likeapumpkin.Itisfunny”3.surprised，happy(delighted);Familytraditionsleavewonderfulmemoriesforthechildren.Weshouldstaycalmandacteffectivelywhenfacingtrouble.2.ithad(raised)muchattention;Manypeoplewatchedit,saidsomething(leftcomments)andgavelotsoflikes(點贊).theyalsosharedtheirHalloweenontheinternet.1.WhatdidIsaywhenthevideowasposted?

2.Whatwillhappentothevideo?Whatwasthenetizens’response?3.HowdidIfeel?WhatcanIlearnit?04.Readforcontinuationwriting(以增加細節(jié)，定續(xù)寫內(nèi)容)本段應該描寫視頻上傳上網(wǎng)后的反饋情況04.Readforcontinuationwriting(定續(xù)寫內(nèi)容)提升拓學：總結(jié)以圖助寫的讀后續(xù)寫寫作思路時間、地點、人物、起因、經(jīng)過和結(jié)果（續(xù)寫內(nèi)容）利用主謂推進式方法進行有效閱讀，閱讀過程中畫出句子主謂的方式來理清開頭、發(fā)展和高潮各故事情節(jié)大意。對續(xù)寫開頭語利用主謂推進式進行研讀，以開頭句主謂內(nèi)容為基礎(chǔ)以問問題（問問題從語言、動作、心理或周圍環(huán)境角度出發(fā)）的形式尋找續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的切入點。主旨要義故事情節(jié)故事情節(jié)范文欣賞

Itwasfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.

“Ishouldgetmyheadoutofthepumpkin.”Itriedtopullmyheadoutandheardmysister’slaughterandJason’s

voice

talkingaboutcuttingthepumpkinopen.“No,mylovelypumpkin.”Isaid.Finally,myfatherhelpmerelaxmybody,andpulledthepumpkinoutofmyhead,myheadwasrelaxed.Atthesametime,IrealizedmyMumfilmthewholeevent.Allofusfeltexcited.

ThevideowaspostedonlinetheMondaybeforeHallowee