高考英語高低分作文

低分作文類型與高分作文訓練上海高考英語作文要求：內容：

觀點明確，內容充實，理由充分.

語言：

表達正確，語言流暢,用詞恰當，句式多樣化.組織結構：

結構正確，上下文連貫一致低分作文的類型

（以2008年上海高考作文為例）1、對文字提示及要求只字不提的E.g.Iwilltakepartinthegroupdancingcompetitionforseveralreasons…E.g.Themonitoraskedmetojoininthegroupdancingcompetitionforourclass,andIagreed…GuidedWriting:你班將組隊參加學校組織的集體舞比賽（groupdancingcompetition),班長希望大家積極參與。對此談談你的想法。你的文章必須包括以下內容：·你是否會參加比賽,·你做出該決定的具體理由:2、對文字提示要求過度描述的E.g.Themonitortoldusthatourschoolisgoingtoholdagroupdancingcompetitionnextweek.Sinceourclassisverygoodinstudiesbutnotinschoolactivities,Iwilltakepartinthiscompetition…E.g.Ilovedancingverymuch.However,sinceIcametostudyinthisschool,Ihavehadnochancetoshowoffmyskills.Yesterdayourmonitorsaidthatagroupdancingcompetitionwillbeheldinourschool,Iwasveryexcited.Iwassurethatmychancefinallycame…3、開篇的文字描述“發(fā)揮”的太多的四、離題：通篇談論一些與主題無關宏旨的內容，直到文章結尾才表明觀點的E.g.…firstofall,Iamagoodfriendofourmonitor,so…;second,IhaveattendedadancingschoolwhenIwasalittlegirl/boy,andIthinkIcandancethebestinthewholeschool;lastlyIthinkdancingisakindofgoodsport.IfI…,IamsureIwill…Inaword,Iwilltakepartin…

五、離題：通篇空發(fā)議論，似乎關注國計民生，實則離題萬里，E.g.Tobeginwith,asweallknow,therewasaterribleinHunanthisspring.Andalotofpeoplesufferedagreatdealfromthisdisaster.IfI…,IthinkpeopleinHunanwillbeencouraged….Then,abigearthquakehitWenchuanandmanychildrenofmyagecannotgotoschooltostudy,justlike.IamsureifI…,Imaycollectsomemoneytohelpthem…Last,manystarsaretakingpartintheWuLinDaHuiandtheyarejustencouragingpeopletodance,sodancingisgoodforourcountry.Inthatcase,IthinkIshould…soIcould…六、語法、文字錯誤連篇，文理不通的恕不舉例七、字跡潦草、難辨的八、通篇文章從頭至尾涂涂改改的

恕不舉例恕不舉例高分作文訓練建議一、學會確定主題，亮明觀點

所謂審定主題是指在認真、審慎地閱讀題目的文字說明或要求的前提下，對文字內容進行甄別，剔除干擾性的、無關主旨的信息；而對于以圖畫為背景的題目，一定要讀懂各圖畫之間意義的關聯(lián)信息、有時可能是諷刺或幽默的內涵，從而確定必須論述的主題，明確自己的觀點。下筆行文時，最好開門見山，直奔主題，不迂回，不啰唆，簡潔即美。08年上海卷

Themonitorsaidthatourclasswouldjoininthegroupdancingcompetitiontobeheldbyourschoolandthathewishedthewholeclasstotakeanactivepartinit.Asagreatdancelover,Icertainlywillenterforthisevent.二、學會鋪架龍骨，確立文章雛形

所謂鋪架龍骨，確立雛形是指在確立主題之后，動筆開始之前，用五至六個完整的英語句子，將你準備申明的觀點、進行的論述以及結語粗線條地勾勒出來。龍骨不是文章的全部，因此不必面面俱到，但龍骨是文章的整體架構，因此它必須起到提綱挈領的作用。08年陜西卷：某天，你班貼出了一張通知，請根據通知、內容要點和要求寫一篇英文發(fā)言稿。 Notice Ourmonitorsuggeststhatwehave“FridayNewsHour”.Butsomeclassmatesdonotagree.WewillhaveaclassmeetinginEnglishtomorrowafternoontodiscussthissuggestion.Pleaseprepareyourtalkandtakeanactivepart.May6th,2008.

內容要點：1、你對“周五讀報活動”的看法；2、陳述你的理由（可舉例說明）；3、你的具體建議。2、ItwillhelpuslearnmoreaboutEnglishincurrentuse.3、Itwillkeepusinformedofwhatisgoingonoutsideoftheschool.4、Theclassisbrokenintoseveralgroups,eachresponsibleforafewpassages.5、Ifwellorganizedandwelldone,thisactivitywillbeaneffectivesupplementtoourEnglishstudies.1、Ithinkitreallyisacreativeidea.三、學會段落的拓展方法及用詞和句式

議論文論述的展開可以采用多種方法，如例證法、歸納法、定義法、因果法、歸類法和比較與對比法等。但就高考的書面表達而言，由于受時間、篇幅、詞匯和外語綜合能力諸因素的制約，這種拓展只能是在龍骨的基礎上，為每一個句子添加或續(xù)寫一個或兩個解釋性、說明性的句子，使之內容更加豐富，結構更加豐滿，讀來更加令人感到言之有物、有理。以為陜西卷的作文所搭設的基本架構為例：第一句Ithinkitreallyisacreativeidea.后可添加：andI’msureitwillbenefitthestudentsagreatdeal.第二句ItwillhelpuslearnmoreaboutEnglishincurrentuse.后可添加：forarticlesinnewspapers,writteninpresent-dayEnglish,tendtobemorelivelythanthoseinthetextbooks.Thuswecanenlargeourvocabularyanddeepenourunderstandingoftheusesofsomewords.第三句Itwillkeepusinformedofwhatisgoingonoutsideoftheschool.后可添加：sothatwemayfurtherbroadenourhorizonsandfurtherdevelopourinterestinEnglish.第四句Theclassisbrokenintoseveralgroups,eachresponsibleforafewpassages.后可添加：forexample,wemayhaveeachgroupwriteasummaryofthearticleassignedtothem,orpreparefourtofivequestionsorevendoapresentationinclassintheirfavouriteway.四、學會修詞煉句

所謂修詞煉句是指選擇使用較高級的詞匯以及適當地變化句式，正確地選用過渡詞語，而且在可能的情況下，嘗試使用比喻、警句、仿擬等基本的修辭方式，從而使得文章讀起來更加順暢，更有成熟感，更有文采，更能體現(xiàn)考生駕馭英語的能力，因而也更加大氣。1-1Weshouldrememberthateveryminuteisveryimportant.1-2Weshouldbearinmindthateveryminutematters/counts.2-1Therewasgrowingunemploymentinthe1990sinJapan.2-2The1990switnessedgrowingunemploymentinJapan.2-3Japanunderwentgrowingunemploymentinthe1990s.3-1Asweallknow,Chinaisbecomingmoreandmoreimportant

intheworld.3-2Asweallknow,Chinaisplayinganincreasinglyimportantrole

worldwide.4-1Thisnewtypeofpersonalcomputerisveryeasytouse.4-2Thisnewtypeofpersonalcomputerisquiteuser-friendly.5-1Whatsoundsgoodmaynotbegoodinuse.5-2Whatispleasingtotheearmaynotbegoodinpractice.1-1Shelostherwayinthewoods,soshecouldonlysitthereandweep.1-2

Losingherwayinthewoods,shecoulddonothingbutsitthereandweep.2-1Ifyouhavetraveledfarandwide,youwillwanttolearnmoreabouttheworld.2-2

Themoreyouhavetraveled,themoreyouwillwanttolearnabouttheworld.3-1Teachersalwaysurgetheirstudentstoworkhard.3-2Teachersarealwaysurgingtheirstudentstostudyhard.4-1Hewassuchaman,whoisagreatthinkerbutcareslittleforclothing.4-2

Suchwastheman,deepinthinkingbutplaininclothing.5-1Readingforpleasureisveryimportant.Wemustputasmuchvalueonitaspossible.5-2Readingforpleasureisofprimeimportance.Wecanneverputenoughvalueonit.1.Thenewhouseisjusttoosmallforafamilyofsix,andfurthermoreitistoofarawayfromdowntown.（遞進）2.Englishisthemostwidelyspokenlanguageintheworldwhereas/whileChinesehasthelargestnumberofspeakers.（對比）3.Thecommitteecouldnotagreeonthedesignofthestation,andasaresult,theconstructiondidn’tgetstarteduntiltwoyearslater.（因果）4.Peopleintheworldmayliveapeacefullifeaslongastherearelastinggoodrelationshipsbetweenthecountries.（條件）5.Alotoffactorscontributetoone’ssuccessinlearningalanguage.Aboveall,interestisthemostessentialofall.（順序）6.WhenitcomestoasuccessfulOlympics,manythingscallformeticulouspreparationandsecurityisjustacaseinpoint.（例證）7.Inconclusion,moneymattersalotbutnotthemost.（總結）Lifeisachallenge.Italwaysfavoursthosewhowouldliketotrytheirbest.（暗喻）Isimplycan’tspendasingledaywithoutdoingsomereading.Youknowreadingistomewhatbreadistoabeggar.（明喻）Alittlelearningisadangerousthing.Solearningisalifetimeeffortandnooneshouldbesatisfiedwithwhattheyhavelearned.（警句/暗喻）Apennysavedisapennyearned.Isn’ttheresometruthinit?（格言，反問）Sinceweallknowthatmanyhandsmakelightwork,whynotworktogether?（諺語）AtthattimeIreallyhadnottheslightestideahowtotellthenewstomyfamily.Well,totellornottotell,thatwasthequestion.（仿擬） 五、學會寫好精巧的結語

古語說“好的結尾，猶如咀嚼干果，品嘗香茗，令人回味再三”。作為高考的書面表達，文章的結尾最好僅用一、兩個句子。在構思結尾句時，必須考慮達成以下兩個目的或功能：1、回應主題，即以不同的語句表達與主題相同的意思;2、升華主題，即將主題的意思進一步提升，但注意升華絕不意味著提出新的觀點。

結尾句的呈現(xiàn)方式可以是:1、反問句;2、祈使句;3、以Since,If或When引導的狀語從句+主句;4、Insummary/conclusion/aword/short,+主句等;回應主題式的結尾（以08年上海卷為例） Sincegroupdancingcannotonlytrainmyteamspiritbutpromotethefriendshipbetweenthestudents,whyshouldInotparticipateinit?升華主題式的結尾（以08年陜西卷為例） I’msurethat“FridayNewsHour”willgreatlybenefiteveryonewhotakesanactivepartinitandprobablymuchmorethancouldbeexpectedrightnow.08上海卷英語高考作文例文1Agroupdancingcompetitionwillbeheldinourschoolandourclassmonitorexpectsustotakeanactivepartinthismeaningfulactivity.Asafamilymemberofmyclass,Iwilldefinitelytakeadvantageofthisopportunitytoshowmydancingtalentandwinhonorformyclass.Aseveryoneknowsthatdancingisoneoftheexcitingsportsthatcannotonlystrengthenourlungandmusclebutalsoreleaseourselveswhenweareundergreatpressureofentranceexamination.Soitisaveryhelpfulsportsforourbusystudents.Besides,wearerequiredtocooperatewellwhiledancingandinthiswayithelpstocultivateourteamspiritswhichisextremelyvitalinourfuturelife.FromthetworeasonsImentionedabove,IamsurethatIcanbenefitalotfromthiswonderfulcompetition.143words例文2Todaythemonitorcallsoneverybodytotakeanactivepartinthegroupdancingcompetitionwhichwillbeheldinacoupleofdaysinourschool.Butaftersomecarefulconsideration,Ihavedecidednottoparticipate.

Thereareanumberofreasonsformydecision.Firstandforemost,astheCollegeEntranceExamisjustaroundthecorner,studyisthetoppriorityforme.Participatinginthegroupdancingcompetitionhastogivewaybecauseitmighttakemetoomuchtime.

What’smore,withoutanyexperienceofdancing,Idon’tthinkIcanbeagooddancingpartner.Iamafraidmypoordancingskillswillprobablyspoiltheperformanceofthewholeclass.Inthiscase,it’sbetterformetobeaspectatorcheeringformyclassmates.

Forthesereasons,itseemsmoreappropriateformetowatchthecompetition

thantodancemyself.

常見英語作文題型框架簡述：（1）

要求論述兩個對立的觀點并給出自己的看法。1．

有一些人認為……2．

另一些人認為……3．

我的看法……

Thetopicof①-----------------（主題）isbecomingmoreandmorepopularrecently.Therearetwosidesofopinionsaboutit.SomepeoplesayAistheirfavorite.Theyholdtheirviewforthereasonof②-----------------（支持A的理由一）Whatismore,③-------------理由二).Moreover,④---------------(理由三).WhileothersthinkthatBisabetterchoiceinthefollowingthreereasons.Firstly,-----------------(支持B的理由一).Secondly(besides),⑥------------------（理由二）.Thirdly(finally),⑦------------------(理由三).Frommypointofview,Ithink⑧----------------（我的觀點）.Thereasonisthat⑨--------------------(原因).Asamatteroffact,therearesomeotherreasonstoexplainmychoice.Forme,theformerissurelyawisechoice.（2）

給出一個觀點，要求考生反對這一觀點Somepeoplebelievethat①----------------（觀點一）.Forexample,theythink②-----------------（舉例說明）．Anditwillbringthem③---------------(為他們帶來的好處).Inmyopinion,Ineverthinkthisreasoncanbethepoint.Foronething,④-------------(我不同意該看法的理由一).Foranotherthing,⑤---------(反對的理由之二)．FormallwhatIhavesaid,Iagreetothethoughtthat⑥-----(我對文章所討論主題的看法)．利弊型的議論文框架

Nowadays,

there

is

a

widespread

concern

over

(the

issue

that)___作文題目______.

In

fact,

there

are

both

advantages

and

disadvantages

in

__題目議題_____.

Generally

speaking,

it

is

widely

believed

there

are

several

positive

aspects

as

follows.

Firstly,

___優(yōu)點一______.

And

secondly

___優(yōu)點二_____.

Just

As

a

popular

saying

goes,

"every

coin

has

two