初中英語中考復(fù)習(xí) 08 成長記憶 2021年中考英語書面表達(dá)高分作文攻略（全國通用版）

08成長記憶2021年中考英語書面表達(dá)高分作文攻略（全國通用版）素材儲(chǔ)備與寫作指導(dǎo)成長歷程的話題無外乎是有關(guān)學(xué)生成長過程中所經(jīng)歷過的事件，以及從中學(xué)習(xí)到的經(jīng)驗(yàn)和教訓(xùn)，主要集中于學(xué)生走向成熟、擺脫稚嫩的過程。從學(xué)生的身份角度來講，話題可能會(huì)涉及家庭生活和學(xué)校學(xué)習(xí)方面所擁有的成長經(jīng)歷，以及人生體驗(yàn)而引發(fā)的處事態(tài)度、人生觀、價(jià)值觀、人格品質(zhì)等方面的回顧和分析，并進(jìn)行領(lǐng)悟和自我完善。如，通過某個(gè)挫折學(xué)會(huì)了自我鼓舞;通過某次經(jīng)歷學(xué)到了自信獨(dú)立;通過某項(xiàng)活動(dòng)提高了自身能力等等。而這些題目既可以是全命題文章，也可以是半命題文章，話題多樣，要謹(jǐn)慎審題，安排好文章結(jié)構(gòu)。我們就以某次經(jīng)歷為例，來具體剖析如何寫好這類作文。實(shí)踐案例.題目Writeatleast60wordswiththetopic“Ilearnfromthisexperience".(請(qǐng)你以“我從這次經(jīng)歷中學(xué)會(huì)”為題，寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文。).每個(gè)人在成長歷程中，都有著各種各樣經(jīng)歷，這些經(jīng)歷對(duì)其成長也起著不同的影響。請(qǐng)你選取一次經(jīng)歷進(jìn)行描述，并與大家分享你從中學(xué)會(huì)了些什么。審題這是一篇以成長中的學(xué)習(xí)為主題的半命題記敘文。learn后面可以補(bǔ)充tobe...1todosomething/something這些形式，但具體選擇什么取決于后面的“thisexperience"。乍一看，應(yīng)該有很多話題可供選擇，或許會(huì)無從下手。但仔細(xì)思考，應(yīng)該選取那些對(duì)個(gè)人成長起積極影響和作用的經(jīng)歷，比如“學(xué)會(huì)團(tuán)隊(duì)合作的一次活動(dòng)”、“學(xué)會(huì)誠實(shí)守信的一次體驗(yàn)”“學(xué)會(huì)尊重他人的次經(jīng)歷”等，題目明確要求“就其中個(gè)進(jìn)行描述”，并且要交代“你從中學(xué)會(huì)些什么”。因此，選取一個(gè)有意義的話題進(jìn)行描述，交代清楚幾大要素:人物、時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、發(fā)展經(jīng)過(即who1when1where1what)，并寫出它對(duì)自身成長的重要性(即how).這些是文章的內(nèi)容精髓。所以，該題目的審題核心詞在于:“一次經(jīng)歷”和“學(xué)會(huì)些什么”。同時(shí)還需要注意的是，對(duì)于“經(jīng)歷”的描述應(yīng)使用過去時(shí)。段落結(jié)構(gòu)本文可采用三段式的寫作結(jié)構(gòu):第一部分The1stpart補(bǔ)充題目，引人文章的主題，為想要記敘的主題進(jìn)行鋪墊。如:Duringmyprocessofgrowingup,Ilearnalotfromtheexperience....IhavehadthisexperiencethatteachesmealotaboutIrememberoneexperienceclearlybecauseitenablesmetorealizethat...第二部分The2ndpart文章的中心部分，對(duì)選取的話題展開描述。如:Ithappenedon.../in..WhenIwasattheageof....第三部分The3rdpart文章的結(jié)尾段，對(duì)全文進(jìn)行總結(jié)，情感升華，首尾呼應(yīng)，說明“學(xué)會(huì)些什么”。如:Fromthis...experience,Irealize/learnthat......wasknown/learntfromthisexperience,andIwill/won'hefuture.核心語匯■growth成長(名詞)growup成長learnfromsb.向某人學(xué)習(xí).learnaboutsth.了解某事.learnthelessonof...得到教訓(xùn).....learn..byheart/keep...inmind牢牢記住befullyawareof...充分意識(shí)到.....■...playanimportantrole...起重要作用.developagoodhabitof..養(yǎng)成....的好習(xí)慣■overcome:/solve/workoutdifficulties克服/解決困難■experiencetheexcitementofgrowingup體驗(yàn)成長的快樂managetodo1succeedindoing成功做某事enable...todo...使....能夠做....■teamwork(spirit)團(tuán)隊(duì)合作(精神).beresponsiblefor.對(duì)....負(fù)責(zé)參考句型.Lifeisfullofupsanddowns.生活處處有苦也有樂。.Thereasonwhy...isthat.......的原因是.....Thisexperiencetaughtmealotbecause....這次經(jīng)歷教會(huì)我很多，因?yàn)?...Thankstothisexperience,Ifinallyrealizethat...多虧了這次經(jīng)歷，我終于意識(shí)到......Growingupmeansweshould...成長意味著我們應(yīng)該......Ididn'trealizehowimportant...isuntil...直到....我才意識(shí)到....的重要性。.Irealizethat..issoimportantthatImust..我意識(shí)到....如此重要，我一定.....Itis...thatmakesmegrowupmore..正.....使得我成長得更......Ilearnfromtheexperiencethat...我從這個(gè)經(jīng)歷中學(xué)到.....Difficultiesandfrustrationsareunavoidable.困難和挫折是不可避免的。Weshouldpullourselvestogether.我們應(yīng)該振作起來。習(xí)作1IlearnlovefromthisexperienceMymotherteachesmealotofthings.Butthemostimportantisthatsheteachesmehowtoloveothers.Lastmonth,mymothertookmetoacharityorganizationwherelotsofpeoplewerewaitingtheretodonatemoneytosomepoorchildrenintheremotecountryside.Besidesmoney,wealsobringalotofusedclothes.Shetoldmeshewishedtherewouldn'tbepoorchildrenwhosufferedfromhungerandcold.Shealsohopedmetobeapersonfulloflove.Ilearnlovefromthisexperience.Ihopetherewillbemoreloveintheworld.點(diǎn)評(píng):這篇習(xí)作從結(jié)構(gòu)上看基本是完整的，但從整體內(nèi)容上看，與其說是從“thisexperience"中學(xué)會(huì)"love"，倒不如說是“mymother"教會(huì)我的，所以主題上對(duì)于“thisexperience"的處理不是很恰當(dāng)，即沒有在審題的時(shí)候抓住核心詞“-次經(jīng)歷”，而是偏重于突出“母親”對(duì)“我”影響，而非具體描述這次經(jīng)歷。語言上問題不大，出現(xiàn)一處時(shí)態(tài)上的錯(cuò)誤，wealsobring應(yīng)為wealsobrought。除此以外，句型結(jié)構(gòu)比較單，還可以通過變化句型來使文章再提高一個(gè)檔次。修改稿IlearnlovefromthisexperienceIhadanunforgettableexperiencethattaughtmetoloveothers.Lastmonth,mymothertookmetoacharityorganizationwhere1hadneverbeen.WhenIsawsomanypeoplewaitingtheretomakedonationIfeltshockedandmoved.Avolunteertoldmeherewerelotsofpoorchildrenwhodidn'thaveenoughmoneytobuyfoodorclothesAnotheroneadvisedmetodonatesomebooksbecauseitwouldbehelpfulforthosechildrentogainmoreknowledge.SoIreturnedhomeandbroughtlotsofbooksimmediately.Itislovethatenablessomanypeopletocareforotherswhotheyevendon'tknow.Itislovethatmakestheworldahappyplace.Afterthisexperience,Idecidetojoinincharityactivitiesmoreoftentospreadmylovetoothers.習(xí)作2IlearntobebraveandindependentfromthisexperienceIntheprocessofgrowingup,itisunavoidabletofacesomedifficulties.Butthereisnoneedtobefrightenedbecauselearningsomethingfromthemisthemostimportant.Lastyear,Iwentabroadforsightseeing.IwassoexcitedatthebeautifulscenerythatIfailedtostayclosewithmyparents.Ilostmyway.Tearsandfeartunedouttobeuseless,soIhadtocalmdown.IknewImustdependonmyself.Finally,Imanagedtofindthelocalpoliceandtheproblemwassolved.Fromthisexperience,Ilearntobebraveandindependent,becausecourageandindependencecanhelpmeovercomedifficultiesandgetpreparedforotherproblemsinthefuture.點(diǎn)評(píng):成長歷程有很多可以寫的東西，-次印象深刻且有教育意義的經(jīng)歷不失為一一個(gè)易寫的話題，可以輕松做到寫之有物兼顧語言精練，這篇習(xí)作便是如此。以“人生難題”為引人，“異國迷路”為主題，“勇氣加獨(dú)立”為成長教訓(xùn)，結(jié)構(gòu)安排上中規(guī)中矩，可以得到滿分。從unavoidable/thereisnoneedto/beexcitedat/turnout等地道表達(dá)和多樣的句型結(jié)構(gòu)中，也可知該生語言修養(yǎng)上乘，思路清晰。本篇作文語句精簡，無冗贅之辭，所以可以算是一篇A檔優(yōu)秀作文。相關(guān)話題優(yōu)秀范文解析（一）MountainClimbinglastsummer,Iwentmountainclimbingtogetherwithmyfather.Istillrememberthedayuntilnow.Westartedclimbingthemountainearlyinthemorning.Butwhenthesuncameup,itbecameveryhot.Igotallsweaty,feelingdizzyandtired,so1couldn'thelpcomplainingandwantedtoquit.Hearingmycomplaint,myfatherencouragedmenottogiveupandhelpedmewipeawaythesweatontheface.Hesaid,"Wewon'tseethefantasticsceneryunlesswereachthetop."|suddenlycheeredupandcontinuedtoclimbwithfullstrength.WegottothetopatlastandenjoyedthebeautyofthenaturethatIhadneverseen.Icouldneverforgotthatexperienceandthelessonfromthatday.Thebeautycanonlybeseenafteryoumakeyourefforts.參考譯文爬山去年暑假，我和爸爸一起去爬了山。直到現(xiàn)在我還記得那天。一大早，我們就開始爬山。但是當(dāng)太陽出來的時(shí)候，天氣變得很熱。我全身都是汗，又暈又累，所以我禁不住抱怨起來，并想要放棄。聽到了我的抱怨，爸爸鼓勵(lì)我不要放棄，并幫我擦掉了臉上的汗。他說:“除非我們到達(dá)山頂，否則無法看到美麗的景色?！蔽彝蝗皇艿搅斯奈?，繼續(xù)全力往上爬。我們最終到達(dá)了山頂，并欣賞到了我從未看過的大自然的美麗。我永遠(yuǎn)不會(huì)忘記那次經(jīng)歷，也不會(huì)忘記那天得到的啟示。美麗只有在你努力過后才能看到。亮點(diǎn)詞匯togetherwit.h......一走comeup出來;出現(xiàn)sweaty出汗的dizzy.眩暈的complaint抱怨;怨言wipeaway擦掉;抹掉出彩句型Icouldn’thelpdoing.....我禁不住Hearing.....，myfather.......聽到了....我爸爸.Wewon't..unless.我們不會(huì)...除非.......Thebeautycanonlybeseenafteryoumakeyourefforts美麗只有在你努力過后才能看到，高分點(diǎn)評(píng)本文描述了作者和爸爸的一一次爬山經(jīng)歷，豐富的細(xì)節(jié)描寫，使人有身臨其境的感覺。作者在文中運(yùn)用了豐富的句型，如when引導(dǎo)的定語從句和unless引導(dǎo)的條件狀語從句，為文章潤色不少。最后得出的啟發(fā)，更是點(diǎn)出了文章的主旨，將文章提升了一個(gè)高度。（二）GoBackHomeAloneTherewasanunforgettableexperienceinmychildhood.When1wassevenyearsold,mymotherwouldpickmeupfromtheschooleveryday.Butoneday,mymothertoldmethatshewouldn'tdothisanymore.1wasafraidofgoingbackhomealone,so1triedtopersuadeher.Although1toldhermyfear,shestillinsistedonheridea.Shethought"Itwasgoodformetolearntobeindependent.Thenextdayafterschool,Itookabustogobackhome.IforgottoseethebusroutewhenIgeton..Thereforewhenthebuswasmoreandmorefarawayfrommyhome,1feltveryterrified.Finally,Igo1othelaststop,andthentooktheSamebusbackhome.Afterthat,1learnedtogobackhomealone.Andthisexperiencemademeknowmoreaboutindependence.參考譯文獨(dú)自回家我的童年有過一次難以忘懷的經(jīng)歷。在我7歲的時(shí)候，我的媽媽每天會(huì)接我放學(xué)。但是有一天，媽媽說，她不會(huì)再接我放學(xué)了。我害怕一個(gè)人回家，所以我試圖說服她。盡管我告訴了她我的恐懼，她仍堅(jiān)持她的想法。她認(rèn)為學(xué)會(huì)獨(dú)立對(duì)我來說是件好事。第二天下課后，我就坐了-輛公共汽車回家。當(dāng)我上車時(shí)，我忘記看路線了。因此，當(dāng)車離我家越來越遠(yuǎn)時(shí)，我感到非常害怕。最后，我到達(dá)了終點(diǎn)站，然后坐了同樣的公交車回家。從那以后，我學(xué)會(huì)了獨(dú)自回家。這次經(jīng)歷讓我更了解了獨(dú)立的含義。亮點(diǎn)詞匯gobackhome回家persuade勸說;說服farawayfrom..遠(yuǎn)......alone獨(dú)自地independence獨(dú)立出彩句型Therewasa()..experienceinmychildhood在我的童年，有一次..的經(jīng)歷。Although.shestillinsistedonheridea.即.....她仍堅(jiān)持她的想法。Shethoughtitwasgoodformeto..地她認(rèn)....對(duì)我好。Iforgotto...whenIgoton.當(dāng)我上車的時(shí)候我忘記..高分點(diǎn)評(píng)本文以頗具戲劇性的過程展現(xiàn)了作者學(xué)會(huì)獨(dú)立的一個(gè)過程一學(xué)會(huì)自己放學(xué)回家，文章細(xì)節(jié)生動(dòng)，真實(shí)具體，并在其中呈現(xiàn)了“我”和“媽媽”兩個(gè)人物鮮明的性格特點(diǎn)。作者對(duì)賓語從句的運(yùn)用非常嫻熟，如"mymothertoldmethat."和"Shethough."，地加句式變化的同時(shí)，使文章的表達(dá)更為流利、順暢。滿分作文必背（一）書面表達(dá)：Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic"Itry,Igrow!"(以“我努力，我成長”為題，寫-篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。)提示:在你的學(xué)習(xí)和生活中，一定遇到過很多困難或挑戰(zhàn)，在應(yīng)對(duì)這些困難和挑戰(zhàn)的過中，你一定學(xué)習(xí)和體驗(yàn)過很多東西，請(qǐng)選其中-件，談?wù)勀愕慕?jīng)歷以及收獲和體會(huì)。Itry,Igrow!AsaGradeNinestudent,thetimeofgraduationisapproaching.Lookingbackonthepastthreeyearsstudy,therehavebeenmanydifficultiesformenotonlyinstudybutalsoinlife.ThereisanunforgettableexperienceIdliketosharewithyou.Itwasthefirsttimethat1didn'tpassanimportantexamAtthattime,1was80depresedthat1couldhardlycontrolmyselfAfterknowingthatIwasinbadmood,mybestfriendspentallherfreetimecomfortingmeandneversoppedencouragingmeWithherhelpandmyownfores,1finallysucceededinmakingprogressAfterthat,1willneverloseconfidenceandwillalwayskeepworking.because1firmlybelievethatifthereisnosweat,therewillbenosweet.（二）書面表達(dá)：Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic"Harvest".(以“收獲”為題，寫箱不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。)Thefollowingisforreferenceonly.(以下問題僅供參考。)1.Whichharvestimpressedyoumostinyourgrowth?Howdidtheharvesthappen?3.Whydoyouthinkitwasaharvest?4.Doyouhaveanychangesaftertheharvest?HarvestInmygrowth,givinganEnglishspeechinfrontofallthestudentswasthegreatestharvest.IhadbeenafraidofEnglishlearninguntilitwasmyturntogivetheclassanEnglishspeech.Withthehelpofmyteacher,I,arathershypersonbynaturewhoeasilysurfersfromstagefright,hadtoplunkupgreatcouragetotakepartinit.Tomysurprise,1didit