【公開課課件】英語讀后續(xù)寫省級公開課課件（共42張）

O如何構思續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容1讀后續(xù)寫的高分攻略?讀后續(xù)與的具體要求提供一段350詞以內(nèi)的語言材料，要求考生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容、所給段落開頭語和所標示關鍵詞進行續(xù)寫（150詞左右），將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結構完整的短文。o如何構思續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容Step1ReadforelementsStep2Read

forplots■Step4makepredictionsStep3Gatherideas閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。Steve

wasthemostamazingpersoninallofMinneapolis,andhewasmycousin.Bytheageof19,StevewasastarbaseballplayerattheUniversityofMinnesota.Iwantedtobeexactlylikehim.SowhenSteveaskedmetogowithhimonaspringfishingtripinnorthernMinnesota,Iwasexcited!Afterplanningthetrip,wegatheredclothes

andsupplies,andbeganourgreatadventure.WereachedtheSuperiorNationalForestinnorthernMinnesotabyearlyevening.Onourwaytothecampsite,Stevepointedtoasmallhousefarawayinoneofthemountains,sayingthatitwastherangerstation（護林站）wheretheforesterworked.Finally,afteralongwalk,wereachedthecampsiteandsetupthecampasthesunwassetting.Steveknewallthetricksofanexperiencedwildernesscamper.Afterwegatheredenoughwoodfromtheforest,hestartedthecampfireusingonlystoneandsteel一nomatches.Forsupperwefeastedonfreeze-driedbeef,wildriceandpeasoup.Iategreedilyafterallthatwork.Tiredenough,weclimbedintooursleepingbagsearlyandtalkedaboutourplansforfishingthenextday.Wewerestilltalkingquietlywhenasuddennorthwindpickedup;thetemperaturedroppedanditbegantosnow.Stevefound

awaytoincreasethetemperatureinsidethetent.Hedraggedalogfromtheforesttotheoppositesideofthecampfire.Thenhewrappedaluminumfoil（鋁箔）aroundthelog.Theheatfromthefirereflectedoffthefoilandintothetent.Soonimagesoflakefishwerefillingmydreams.Thesnowhadstopped,butsometimelaterapowerfulwindmusthavekickeduptheflamesofourdyingfire.IwassuddenlyawakenedbySteve.Ourtentwasonfire.Frightened,Iranoutofthetentimmediately.Thetentcollapsed4到塌）withSteveinside.Withoutanythoughtofendangering

myself,Ireachedintotheburningtentandpulledhimtotheicylake.Fortunately,wewerenotseriouslyhurt.，主:1.誘續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Paragraph1:Later,aswestoodbytheburningtenttokeepwarm,weconsideredourdifficultsituation._____Paragraph2:Suddenly,weheardanoiseintheforest._________________________mStep1ReadforelementsElementsAnadventurousfishingtripWhatI.Steve,foresterWhoWhenInspringWhereInaforestStep2ReadforplotsClimax(themainproblemorconflict)BeginningEnding(characterandsetting)(atimetosolvetheproblem/howthingsendup)3ClimaxBeginningEnding1.Steveaskedmetogoonaspringfishingtrip.2.Wereachedthecampsiteandsetupthecamp.3.Ourtentwasonfireandweescapedtotheicylake.

4.?Step3Gatherideas_________________________________方KSetting(time/place)Time:springPlace:SuperiorNationalForestinnorthernMinnesotaCharactersI,Steve,foresterPlotSteveaskedmetogoonaspringfishingtrip.ProblemOurtentwasonfire.Ending??■信息整理:體裁:記敘文的態(tài)：一般過去時原文核心信息解讀：“我"和表哥去森林里露營，夜里下起了雪，天很冷，表哥生起了篝火，"我們”在溫暖中入睡了。睡著后，帳篷起火了，"我們〃匆忙逃了出來，但帳篷燒毀了......Step4Makepredictions尤6農(nóng)定■可用于續(xù)寫的已知信息:劃線詞CharacterSteve,foresterSettingclothes,supplies,campsite,forest,fireActionfound,endangeringMoodfrightened段首句Para.1:Later,aswestoodbytheburningtenttokeepwarm,weconsideredourdifficultsituation.（續(xù)寫部分可詳細描寫具體困境，比如衣服等物品燒毀，在森林中遠離人煙，無法求助等。）Para.2:Suddenly,weheardanoiseintheforest.（續(xù)寫部分可寫聲音的來源，發(fā)出聲音者可以是提供救助的人。）■寫作思路:“我們”在荒蕪人煙的森林深處，孤立無援，隨身物品也都隨著帳篷一起燒毀了，正當不知道該怎么辦的時候,林中傳來了聲響，發(fā)現(xiàn)是護林人開著車過來了。原來護林人看到了火光，過來一探究竟，結果"我們〃得救了?！鰳嬎嫉睦碛桑何恼轮谐霈F(xiàn)過forester（護林人），這是極其有用的信息,另外根據(jù)常識可知，護林人最重要的工作之一就是偵查火情，所以森林中有火情的話，護林人一定會一探究竟。Onepossibleversion:￡Paragraph1:Later,aswestoodbytheburningtenttokeepwarm,weconsideredourdifficultsituation.Ourcampsitewasinthedeepoftheforest,reallyfarawayfromthehighway.Wewereinthemiddleofnowhere,wearingonlyunderwear,withoursuppliesburntintoashes,includingourcellphones.EvenStevewasunsurewhattodonext.Theonlythingwecoulddowasjustsitinthecoldairandwonderhowtogetoutoftheforest.Paragraph2:Suddenly,weheardanoiseintheforest.Anxiouslywelistenedandstaredintothedarkness.Ajeepappeared.Aforesterhadspottedthelightfromthefireandhadcometohaveacheck.Wejumpedintothewarmvehicleandtheforesterdroveustotherangerstation,whereweweregivenclothesandwereabletocallourparents.SteveandIhadmanymorecampingadventuresfromthenon,butitwasonthistripthatStevebegantotreatmemorelikeafriendratherthanayoungercousin.Ourfriendshipcontinuestothisday.讀后續(xù)寫的高分攻略第五檔：21分?25分第四檔：16分?20分第三檔：11分?15分第二檔：6分?10分第一檔：1分?5分評分標準第五檔:21分-25分?與所給短文融洽度高，與所提供各段落開頭語銜接合理。?內(nèi)容豐富，應用了5個以上短文中標出的關鍵詞語。?所使用語法結構和詞匯豐富，準確，可能有些許錯誤，但完全不影響意義表達。?有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫短文結構緊湊。第四檔：16分-20分?與所給短文融洽度較高，與所提供各段落開頭語銜接較為合理。?內(nèi)容比較豐富，應用了5個以上短文所標出的關鍵詞語。?所使用的語法結構和詞匯較為豐富、準確，可能有些許錯誤，但不影響意義表達。?比較有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫短文結構緊湊。?與所給短文關系較為密切，與所提供各段落開頭語有一定程度的銜接；?寫出了若干有關內(nèi)容，應用了4個以上短文中標出的關鍵詞語；?應用的語法結構和詞匯能滿足任務的要求，雖有一些錯誤,但不影響意義的表達；?應用簡單的語句間的連接成分，使全文內(nèi)容連貫。第三檔（11分?15分），第二檔（6分40分）?與所給短文有一定的關系，與所提供各段落開頭語有一定程度的銜接；?寫出了一些有關內(nèi)容，應用了3個以上短文中標出的關鍵詞語；?語法結構單調(diào)、詞匯項目有限，有些語法結構和詞匯方面的錯誤，影響了意義的表達；?較少使用語句間的連接成分，全文內(nèi)容缺少連貫性。第一檔（1分?5分）?與所給短文和開頭語的銜接較差；?產(chǎn)出內(nèi)容太少，很少使用短文中標出的關鍵詞語;?語法結構單調(diào)、詞匯項目很有限，有較多語法結構和詞匯方面的錯誤，嚴重影響了意義的表達；?缺乏語句間的連接成分，全文內(nèi)容不連貫。續(xù)寫中常出現(xiàn)的問題一、書寫潦草，卷面涂改;二、上下文的連貫性差;三、錯詞錯句多，好詞好句少;四、沒有豐富和生動的細節(jié)推動情節(jié)的發(fā)展;五、與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度差;六、沒有使用5個或5個以上原文中的劃線詞語，沒有劃出所用的劃線詞語。[獲得高分的寫作技巧Tip1:故事要圍繞著主要人物展開。Tip2:詳細刻畫角色及其情感。Tip3:使用恰當?shù)你暯釉~以使故事更有連貫性。Tip4:使用恰當?shù)男揎椩~以使描寫更加生動。Tip5:做到首尾呼應以使故事更加有條理。Tip6:確保第二段和第一段的銜接有邏輯。，示例丿t閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。（2016年10月浙江高考試題）OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,"I'mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp"andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried."Help!"Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling。商落）somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________注意：1.京賣寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.應使用5個以上短文屮標有下劃線的關鍵詞；__3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Character:Setting:Action:Mood:TheunderlinedwordsTom,Janeyellowhouse,stream,lake,helicopter,atadistancewalked,climbedtohergreatjoy*(helicopters)rescued?被救？EndingClimax看見直升飛機confused,tiredquarrel吵架，生氣離開Beginningangry5w構思細讀兩段續(xù)寫的開頭語，理順續(xù)寫段落的邏輯關系；J圍繞劃定的10個關鍵詞，合理創(chuàng)新故事情節(jié)。Para.1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasdark.續(xù)寫部分：簡當時的感受？簡是如何過夜的？簡睡著了嗎？Para.2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.續(xù)寫部分：簡獲救了嗎？誰救了簡？怎么救的？她當時的感受？一、所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右（詞數(shù)少于130的，從總分中減去2分）；二、應使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語，少用1個扣1分，少用2個扣2分，少用3到4個扣3分；三、續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語，少劃1個不扣分，少劃2個到3個扣1分，少劃4個扣2分。第五檔續(xù)寫例文ButnomorehelicopterscamecmditwqsRettingdarkagain.Feelingdisappointed,Janehadtostayaloneforanothernight.Afterwalkingalongdistanceagain,itoccurredtoherthatshehadaboxofmatcheswithher.Shewaswildwithjoyandusedthemtoburnsomebranchessothatshecouldgetsomewarmth.Staringatthejumpingfire,JanethoughtofallthethingsthatsheandTomhadexperiencedtogether.OnlyinthiswaycouldJanefeelbetterandfallasleep.ItwasdcrybreakwhenJcmewokeup.Feelingrefreshed,shecontinuedtowalkalongthestreamtofindthewayout.Atnoon,tohergreatjoy,shefinallycaughtsightofawidewatersurfaceatadistance.Itwasthelake