【課件】點(diǎn)線面解析讀后續(xù)寫 課件 2023屆高考英語(yǔ)專題復(fù)習(xí)

“點(diǎn)線面”

讀后續(xù)寫解構(gòu)重塑復(fù)習(xí)：小說(shuō)要素Time:

Place:

Character1+Action:

Character2+Action:

Character3+Action:Character4+Action:Importantobject

建構(gòu)Onabright,warmJulyafternoonOnaroadMacrodeabicycleandmetawolfTwofriends(bicyclists)repairedthebicycle.PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircar.TheystoppedinfrontofMac.PlotThewolf

werecatchingupwithMacandwantedtoattack.SprayPara.1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Step3：緊接著每段的承接動(dòng)作（每段第二句）

Step4：最后就是補(bǔ)充完整(每段中間)

Step2:

再寫兩段之間銜接句（第一段的最后一句）Para.2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.

Step3：緊接著每段的承接動(dòng)作（每段第二句）

Step4：最后就是補(bǔ)充完整(每段中間)

Step1:

先寫結(jié)局和主題句（最后一句）建構(gòu)復(fù)習(xí)：四步定框架P1:

Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.1.延續(xù)動(dòng)作2.轉(zhuǎn)折3.轉(zhuǎn)折的解決辦法4.次要角色參與建構(gòu)復(fù)習(xí)：定框架后補(bǔ)細(xì)節(jié)

第一段Hewantedtogetintothecar.

Thewolfcameagain.Hefiredthesprayatthewolf,again.PaulandBeckyhelpedMacgetintothecar.Thewolfleft.

字

數(shù)詞

匯句

式連接緊密點(diǎn)到鏈Hewantedtogetintothecar.

解構(gòu)下自行車

跑向車

要上車gotoffthebicyclerantothecar

跑

跳

走

描寫

start開始

continue繼續(xù)

jump跳

climb向上爬

run跑

rush沖

dash猛沖

crawl、creep緩慢爬

studge吃力走

stagger搖搖晃晃

stumble跌跌撞撞

sneak偷偷溜走

slide悄悄溜到...

slip悄悄疾行

tiptoe躡手躡腳

hobble蹣跚解構(gòu)

Hewantedtogetintothecar.

解構(gòu)下自行車

跑向車

要上車gotoffthebicyclerantothecarjumpedoffhisbicycledashedtothedoorofthecar點(diǎn)到鏈Hewantedtogetintothecar.Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar.重塑點(diǎn)到鏈

渴望，緊張,害怕類情緒withbutterfliesinone’sstomachbreathedeeplytakeadeepbreathwithanxietybefrightenedtodosthgetintoapanicinpanicwithfrighgtinmyeagernesstodosthgetpanicked,frightenedandnervous重塑Hewantedtogetintothecar.Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar.重塑點(diǎn)到鏈Hewantedtogetintothecar.Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar.Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.重塑點(diǎn)到鏈到面延續(xù)動(dòng)作----轉(zhuǎn)折----應(yīng)對(duì)轉(zhuǎn)折的解決辦法----次要角色參與P1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.

_____?____Thewolfcameagain.Hefiredthesprayatthewolf,again.

PaulandBeckyhelpedMacgetintothecar.Thewolfleft.解構(gòu)重塑點(diǎn)到鏈到面8)soonafter=shortlyafter=afewmuniteslater=abitlater=inawhile=

過(guò)一會(huì)shortlyafterwards不久后onabrightwarmJulyafternoonfromthenon從那時(shí)起解構(gòu)重塑

時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)延續(xù)動(dòng)作----轉(zhuǎn)折----應(yīng)對(duì)轉(zhuǎn)折的解決辦法----次要角色參與P1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.

Atthattime/inaflash,Thewolfcameagain.Hefiredthesprayatthewolf,again.

PaulandBeckyhelpedMacgetintothecar.Thewolfleft.解構(gòu)重塑點(diǎn)到鏈到面wasabouttodowhen正要...這時(shí)thefirst/lasttimewhenever無(wú)論什么時(shí)候解構(gòu)重塑when當(dāng)

as隨著whiledoing當(dāng)beforehecould還沒(méi)能...afterdoing在...后wasdoing...when正在...這時(shí)候...hadjustdone...when剛做完...這時(shí)候...

時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)句子assoonas一..就...

themoment一..就..each/everytime每次it’sthefirst/lasttimewhenever無(wú)論什么時(shí)候notuntilthendidhe直到那時(shí)他才innotimedidhe馬上他就延續(xù)動(dòng)作----轉(zhuǎn)折----應(yīng)對(duì)轉(zhuǎn)折的解決辦法----次要角色參與P1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.

Atthattime,Thewolfcameagain.

ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfcameagain.Hefiredthesprayatthewolf,again.

PaulandBeckyhelpedMacgetintothecar.Thewolfleft.解構(gòu)重塑點(diǎn)到鏈到面延續(xù)動(dòng)作----轉(zhuǎn)折----應(yīng)對(duì)轉(zhuǎn)折的解決辦法----次要角色參與P1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.

Atthattime,Thewolfcameagain.ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfcameagain.ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfhadcaughtupandjumpedtoattack.Hefiredthesprayatthewolf,again.

PaulandBeckyhelpedMacgetintothecar.Thewolfleft.解構(gòu)重塑點(diǎn)到鏈到面延續(xù)動(dòng)作----轉(zhuǎn)折----應(yīng)對(duì)轉(zhuǎn)折的解決辦法----次要角色參與P1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfhadcaughtupandjumpedtoattack.

____?____Hefiredthesprayatthewolf,again.

PaulandBeckyhelpedMacgetintothecar.Thewolfleft.解構(gòu)重塑點(diǎn)到鏈到面

連接副詞

instantly立刻immeditely馬上

suddenly突然

gradually漸漸地eventually最后recently最近actually事實(shí)上obviously顯然

undoubtedly毫無(wú)疑問(wèn)

Lukily真幸運(yùn)

amazingly令人驚喜

fortunately真幸運(yùn)

sadly真遺憾toone’ssurprise

surpringly令人吃驚解構(gòu)重塑

abruptly突然

延續(xù)動(dòng)作----轉(zhuǎn)折----應(yīng)對(duì)轉(zhuǎn)折的解決辦法----次要角色參與P1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfhadcaughtupandjumpedtoattack.Instantly/Immediately/Luckily,Hefiredthesprayatthewolf,again.

PaulandBeckyhelpedMacgetintothecar.Thewolfleft.解構(gòu)重塑點(diǎn)到鏈到面延續(xù)動(dòng)作----轉(zhuǎn)折----應(yīng)對(duì)轉(zhuǎn)折的解決辦法----次要角色參與P1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfhadcaughtupandjumpedtoattack.Instantly/Immediately,Hefiredthesprayatthewolf,again.Luckily,themagicspraysavedMacathirdtime.

PaulandBeckyhelpedMacgetintothecar.Thewolfleft.解構(gòu)重塑點(diǎn)到鏈到面延續(xù)動(dòng)作----轉(zhuǎn)折----應(yīng)對(duì)轉(zhuǎn)折的解決辦法----次要角色參與P1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfhadcaughtupandjumpedtoattack.Luckily,themagicspraysavedMacathirdtime.

Seeingthewolfbackoff,Paulquicklyunlockedthedoor,andthefrightenedmanclimbedintothecarinnotime,shuttingthedoorbehindhimheavily.

soonafter,thewolfranoff.

解構(gòu)重塑點(diǎn)到鏈到面

Hewantedtogetintothecar.Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.Thewolfcameagain.Hefiredthesprayatthewolf,again.ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfhadcaughtupandjumpedtoattack.Luckily,themagicspraysavedMacathirdtime.PaulandBeckyhelpedMacgetintothecar.Thewolfleft.Seeingthewolfbackoff,Paulquicklyunlockedthedoor,andthefrightenedmanclimbedintothecarinnotime,shuttingthedoorbehindhimheavily.soonafter,thewolfranoff.解構(gòu)重塑點(diǎn)到鏈到面

Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfhadcaughtupandjumpedtoattack.Luckily,themagicspraysavedMacathirdtime.Seeingthewolfbackoff,Paulquicklyunlockedthedoor,andthefrightenedmanclimbedintothecarinnotime,shuttingthedoorbehindhimheavily.soonafter,thewolfranoff.點(diǎn)到鏈到面

延續(xù)動(dòng)作對(duì)話次要角色參與結(jié)局和主題句Para.2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Macandthetwomenmetagain.MacsaidImetawolf.Thetwomansaidyouwerelucky.TheythankedandsaidgoodbytoPaulandBecky.Peoplehelpedoneanother.解構(gòu)重塑復(fù)習(xí)：定框架后補(bǔ)細(xì)節(jié)：

第二段動(dòng)作鏈可以和情感，環(huán)境，心理，語(yǔ)言等結(jié)合，形成動(dòng)作面。①Burningwithanger,he

glared

atmewithhisbigfrighteningeyes,

yelling,“You’resuchanidiot.”②Shakingmyheadawkwardly,Isaid,“Icangetlunchsomewhereonmywayback,”notwantingtobotherthewarmed-heartedfamilyanymore.

解構(gòu)重塑點(diǎn)到鏈到面點(diǎn)到鏈到面

動(dòng)作鏈可以和情感，環(huán)境，心理，語(yǔ)言等結(jié)合，形成動(dòng)作面。①Burningwithanger,he

glared

atmewithhisbigfrighteningeyes,

yelling,“You’resuchanidiot.”此處的burningwithanger是情感描寫，glare和yell是動(dòng)作鏈，A+Bing形式，

介詞with短語(yǔ)與動(dòng)詞glare搭配具體生動(dòng)，同時(shí)將動(dòng)作和語(yǔ)言描寫結(jié)合在了一起，形成了飽滿的動(dòng)作面，屬于高分表達(dá)。

解構(gòu)重塑點(diǎn)到鏈到面

動(dòng)作鏈可以和情感，環(huán)境，心理，語(yǔ)言等結(jié)合，形成動(dòng)作面。②Shakingmyheadawkwardly,Isaid,“Icangetlunchsomewhereonmywayback,”notwantingtobotherthewarmed-heartedfamilyanymore.

此處的shake和said是動(dòng)作鏈，Bing+A形式，said后是語(yǔ)言描寫，語(yǔ)言描寫后是心理描寫notwantingtobother，同時(shí)將動(dòng)作鏈和語(yǔ)言和心理描寫結(jié)合在了一起，形成了飽滿的動(dòng)作面，屬于高分表達(dá)。

解構(gòu)重塑點(diǎn)到鏈到面

動(dòng)作鏈可以和情感，環(huán)境，心理，語(yǔ)言等結(jié)合，形成動(dòng)作面。②WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI’dhadlunch.NotuntilthendidIhearmystomachrumbling.Shakingmyheadawkwardly,Isaid,“Icangetlunchsomewhereonmywayback,”notwantingtobotherthewarmed-heartedfamilyanymore.“Waitaminute,sir,”thegirlstammeredinbrokenEnglish,sensingmyembarrassment.Inafewseconds,thegirlturnedup,withapaperbagheldtightlyinherhand.

解構(gòu)重塑點(diǎn)到鏈到面

延續(xù)動(dòng)作對(duì)話次要角色參與結(jié)局和主題句Para.2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Macandthetwomenmetagain.MacsaidImetawolf.Thetwomansaidyouwerelucky.TheythankedandsaidgoodbytoPaulandBecky.Peoplehelpedoneanother.解構(gòu)重塑點(diǎn)到鏈到面

延續(xù)動(dòng)作----對(duì)話----次要角色參與----結(jié)局和主題句Para.2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Macgotoutofthecarandhuggedhisfriends.“ItwasreallyanightmareandIthoughtIwasgoingtodie,”saidMacinashakyvoice,tearsgatheringinhiseyes.Forhim,lifecouldneverbemorebeautiful.AftersayinggoodbyetoPaulandBeckywithgratitude,thethreemencontinuedtheirtrip,agreeingnevertoseparateagain.解構(gòu)重塑ThankYou!讀后續(xù)寫第一課2017年6月浙江卷Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled(騎行)alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man,that’sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac’sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofbearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac’srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac’sbike,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase(追趕).Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoslowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,he’dbeeasycaughtupandthewolf’steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.Atthismoment,PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn’tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.Paragraph1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Paragraph2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.復(fù)習(xí)：小說(shuō)要素Time:

Place:

Character1+Action:

Character2+Action:

Character3+Action:Character4+Action:Importantobject

建構(gòu)Onabright,warmJulyafternoonOnaroadMacrodeabicycleandmetawolfTwofriends(bicyclists)repairedthebicycle.PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircar.TheystoppedinfrontofMac.PlotThewolf

werecatchingupwithMacandwantedtoattack.Spray結(jié)構(gòu)：四步定框架Step1:

先寫結(jié)局和主題句（最后一句）Step2:

再寫兩段之間銜接句（第一段的最后一句）Step3：緊接著每段的承接動(dòng)作（每段第二句）

Step4：最后就是補(bǔ)充完整(每段中間)Para.1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

step3:

step2:Para.2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.step3:step1:結(jié)構(gòu)：定框架后補(bǔ)細(xì)節(jié)：第一段

延續(xù)動(dòng)作轉(zhuǎn)折轉(zhuǎn)折的解決辦法次要角色參與Para.1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

step3:

step2:結(jié)構(gòu)：定框架后補(bǔ)細(xì)節(jié)：第二段

延續(xù)動(dòng)作對(duì)話次要角色參與結(jié)局和主題句Para.2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.step3:step1:2017年6月浙江卷騎行遇狼Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled(騎行)alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man,that’sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac’sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofbearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac’srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac’sbike,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase(追趕).Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoslowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,he’dbeeasycaughtupandthewolf’steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.Atthismoment,PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn’tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.應(yīng)使用5個(gè)以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。Paragraph1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Paragraph2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.參考范文1Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Macjumpedoffhisbicycleandrushedtothedoorofthecar.ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfhadcaughtupandjumpedtoattack.Luckily,themagicspraysavedMacathirdtime.Seeingthewolfbackoff,Paulquicklyunlockedthedoor,andthefrightenedmanclimbedintothecarinnotime,shuttingthedoorbehindhimheavily.BeckylookedoutofthebackwindowandsawthewolfstandingoverMac’sbicycleasifitwereakill.Soonafter,theanimalranoff.Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Macgotoutofthecarandhuggedhisfriends.“ItwasreallyanightmareandIthoughtIwasgoingtodie,”saidMacinashakyvoice,tearsgatheringinhiseyes.Forhim,lifecouldneverbemorebeautiful.AftersayinggoodbyetoPaulandBeckywithgratitude,thethreemencontinuedtheirtrip,agreeingnevertoseparateagain.參考范文2Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Maccrashedintothecarwithaloudbang.Asaresult,hefelloffthebicycleandhadhisleftankletwisted.HardlyhadMacstoodupwhenthewolfarrivedandwasabouttolaunchanotherattack.Macwasgoingtodiewhensuddenlythewolfwashitrightontheheadbyapieceofrock.Thewolffellback,howlingwithpain.ItwasPaulwhodidthis.BeckyhelpedMacclimbintothecar,whilePaulkeptshoutingandthrowingstonesatthewolf.Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.TheywereshockedatwhattheysawandjoinedPaul.OneofMac’sfriendspickedoutsomerawmeatandthrewittothewolf.Satisfiedwithwhathegot,thewolfranintothewoods.MacthankedPaulandBecky,“HowgratefulIamthatyoustoppedtosavemeandIoweittoyouthatI’mstillalive.”AsMacgotinjured,thethreemenhadtogiveuptherestoftheirjourneyandreturnedhome.延續(xù)動(dòng)作--轉(zhuǎn)折--解決轉(zhuǎn)