專題11高考英語讀后續(xù)寫

讀后續(xù)寫2021年2017年06月浙江英語試卷讀后續(xù)寫（改編）ContinuationWriting

[話題：體育冒險題材：和朋友騎行游玩，野外遇到狼]Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled（騎行）alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man,that’sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac’sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofhearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac’srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac’sbike,tearingopenhistenthag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase（追趕）.

Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoshowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,he’dbeeasycaughtupandthewolf’steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.Atthismoment,PaulandBeekyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn’tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.Paragraph1:

Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim._Paragraph2:

Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived._____________________________一、準確理解材料，理清人物事件

1.淺層信息理解首先要審題：⑴體裁：_______；⑵人稱：_______；⑶主體時態(tài)：______________；⑷5Ws：who（______，_________________________）；when（_______________________________）；where（_____________________）；what（_____________________）；why（_______________）。記敘文第三人稱一般過去時Machisfriendsonabright,warmJulyafternoonfromhishometoAlaskatookatripandadventuredenjoyedthelifeI，thefamily（father，mother，thegirl）2.深層信息理解①理清故事的發(fā)展線索（How）paragraph（段落）及時間線索Behaviors（行為）Topic（段意）Para1（Onabright,warmJulyafternoon）wascycling，stoppedtomakeabicyclerepair，carryon，thoughtfondlyof，showthemthisbeautifulplaceMaehadtotravelalonebecausehisfriendshadstoppedtofixthebicycle.paragraph（段落）及時間線索Behaviors（行為）Topic（段意）Para2，3&4（Then，whenhelookedtotheside，Then）heardquickandloudbreathing，wasn’tadog，catchingupwith，firedthesprayat，enveloped，attacked，tearingopen，

firedat，restartthechase，pedalinghard，wavedandyelled，sawasteepMacwasbeingfollowedbyawolf.Fightingthewolf,hecouldn’tgetawayPara5（Atthismoment，Abitlater）drivingtheircar，spotted，realized，PaulandBeckyshowedupandMacwantedtoberescued.

②判斷細節(jié)描寫類型：心理活動□；動作□√；環(huán)境□；外貌性格□。體現(xiàn)準確詞：___________________________________________；過程：__________________________________________________；修辭：_____________________________；夸張：____________________________________________等，使故事緊張刺激。cycling，stopped，fired，attacked，hit，spottedfell，shaking；fellback，shaking；quicklyrestart；realizedthoughtfondlyofenveloped，tearinginto；waved，yelled③材料的語調：_________________；人物情感和性格：_________________________________________________。

3.整合本篇的情節(jié)和情感線索：__________________________________→_________________________________________→_____________________________→____________________________________________________________________________。peaceful，tensescared，helpful，desperate，hopeful，braveandcalm因為朋友路旁停下修車，Mae只能孤身前行兩次與狼搏擊，小勝，但狼依然緊追不放前有陡坡，后有追狼，Mac無計脫身Paul和Becky出現(xiàn)，Mac獲救與否在此一舉，他的心情應該緊張到了一個極點二、分析續(xù)寫段首，確定續(xù)寫方向

根據(jù)段首句1：汽車突然停在他前面及時間線索詞abruptly，結合文章第五段Atthismoment,PaulandBeekyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska續(xù)寫的伏筆，我們設問：①Whichwordsorphrasescatchyoureyes?(car，stopped)②__________________________________?③____________________________________?④_________________________?⑤________________________?⑥___________________________________________?HowwillPaulandBeckyinthecarreactDidtheygetouttohelporclosethedoorInwhatwaydidtheyofferhelpWasMacrescuedatlastHowdidMacfeel,panic,afraid,braveorexcited根據(jù)段首句2：Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived（幾分鐘后，另外兩個騎自行車的人到了）及時間線索詞Afewminuteslater，結合文章第五段Theydidn’tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad…Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.續(xù)寫的伏筆，我們設問：①Whichwordsorphrasescatchyoureyes?(theothertwocyclistsarrived)②_____________________________________________________________________?③_________________________________?④_________________________________?⑤____________________________________________________________________?Whoarethey,Mac’sfriendsorsomeotherstrangersAftertheirarrival,howdidtheyreactWeretheygratefultothelifesaversHowcouldParagraph2beendedreasonablyandcreatively三、借助文本資源，創(chuàng)設續(xù)寫情節(jié)根據(jù)六要素和自己的想象，借助文本資源，創(chuàng)設續(xù)寫兩段故事的情節(jié)。Paragraph1：[故事開端]汽車突然停在他前面。[發(fā)展]_______________________________→________________________→________________________→________________________。

Mac跳下自行車，沖向車的后門狼的牙齒馬上撕咬他的肉狼不停地咆哮，拍打窗戶Mac上車，關上門Paragraph2：[高潮]_________________________________→_________________________________→___________________________________。[結局]_______________________________________。[感悟]___________________________。另外兩個騎自行車的人也來了得知Mac之事，給了他一個擁抱PaulandBecky開車送他們到阿拉斯加失望的狼最終消失在樹林里經(jīng)歷讓Mac明白了生命的珍貴四、增加細節(jié)描寫，完成讀后續(xù)寫

將已確定好的六要素加以串聯(lián)，增加細節(jié)描寫，完成續(xù)寫初稿。

第一段：

⑴“快點，上車!”保羅喊道?！癈omeon，___________quickly!”Paul______.⑵麥克毫不猶豫地跳下自行車,麥克沖到汽車的后門。____________________,Mac__________hisbicycle__________tothebackdoorofthecar.getinthecaryelledWithoutanyhesitationjumpedoffanddashed⑶門是鎖著的!Thedoor__________!⑷想到狼血淋淋的嘴巴，麥克嚇得幾乎要死了。WhenMac_________thewolf’sbloodymouth,he______________withhorror.⑸他甚至可以想象狼的牙齒在咬他的肉。Hecouldevenimaginethewolf’steeth__________________.⑹貝基打開了門。Thedoor_____________byBecky.waslockedthoughtofwasnearlydeadtearingintohisfleshwasunlocked⑺那個受了驚嚇的人沖了進去，在狼來襲擊他之前他把門關上。Thefrightenedman______________thedoorjust______thewolfstruckhim.⑻狼非常生氣，不停地咆哮，猛烈地拍打著窗戶。Thewolf_______________itkeptroaringandsmackingthewindowviolently.divedinandshutbeforewassoangrythat⑼失望的狼意識到他所做的一切都是徒勞的，它消失在森林里。Whenthedisappointedwolf________________________wasinvain,it______________thewoods.⑽麥克坐在車里，他的心仍因恐懼而狂跳不止。Macsatinthecar,andhisheart______________________withfear.realizedwhateverhediddisappearedintowasstillbeatingwildly

第二段：

⑾他們震驚地發(fā)現(xiàn)麥克的自行車躺在路上。They__________________Mac’sbicyclelyingontheroad.⑿他的帳篷袋破了，麥克就像一只淹死的老鼠。Histentbag_________andMacwasjust___________________.weretornlikeadrownedmousewereshockedtofind⒀“麥克，到底發(fā)生了什么事?”麥克的朋友們問道。

“Mac,what__________________?”Mac’sfriendsasked.⒁“我差點被狼咬死!”“I_______________byawolf!”⒂他們被告知麥克的驚心動魄的經(jīng)歷。

TheyweretoldaboutMac’s___________________.⒃他們忍不住喊叫起來，給了他一個擁抱。They_________________outand______________.onearthhashappenedwasalmostkilledthrillingexperiencecouldn’thelpcryinggavehimahug⒄在麥克覺得好些了后，他們感謝保羅和貝基。AfterMacfeltbetterafewminuteslater,they_____________PaulandBecky.⒅保羅和貝基擔心前面可能會有更多的潛在危險，于是提出開車送他們去阿拉斯加。Becausetheyareafraidthat________________________________ahead,PaulandBeckyofferedtodrivethemtoAlaska.weregratefultotheremightbemorepotentialdangers⒆這次可怕而又激動人心的經(jīng)歷讓麥克認識到生命的珍貴。ThishorribleandexcitingexperiencemadeMac________________________.五、潤色文字，升級句式

初稿完成后，用過渡詞句、高級詞匯和句式升級，烘托場景，可增加得分點。

①用分詞作伴隨狀語改寫句⑵，用轉折連詞but與句⑶合并。Withoutanyhesitation,Macjumpedoffhisbicycle,_____________________ofthecar,but___________!learnhowpreciouslifeisdashingtothebackdooritwaslocked②用分詞改寫句⑷。

___________thewolf’sbloodymouth,Macwasnearlydeadwithfright.③用分詞作伴隨狀語改寫句⑺，再用and合并句⑹和句⑺。ThedoorwasunlockedbyBecky______thefrightenedmandivedin,_______________________________thewolfstruckonhim.④用倒裝句改寫句⑻。

______________________itkeptroaringandsmackingthewindowviolently.ThinkingofandshuttingthedoorjustbeforeSoangrywasthewolfthat⑤用分詞作時間狀語改寫句⑼

___________wasinvain,___________________disappearedintothewoods.⑥用獨立主格結構改寫句⑿和句⑾合并。

TheywereshockedtofindMac’sbicyclelyingontheroad,_____________andMacjustlikeadrownedmouse.⑦用過去分詞改寫句⒂，再和句⒃合并。

_________aboutMac’sthrillingexperience,_________________________________himahug.ThinkingofthedisappointedwolfhistentbagtornWhentoldtheycouldn’thelpcryingoutandgave⑧用形容詞短語作狀語改寫句⒅。

__________theremightbemorepotentialdangersahead,PaulandBeckyofferedtodrivethemtoAlaska.六、檢查定稿，規(guī)范謄寫

請根據(jù)上述組句和改寫句，添加恰當?shù)倪^渡詞語（justatthatmoment，afterquiteawhile，eventually等），修訂表達成文。AfraidthatParagraph1:

Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.“Comeon，getinthecarquickly!”Paulyelled.①Withoutanyhesitation,Macjumped

offhisbicycle,dashingtothebackdoorofthecar,butitwaslocked!Thinkingofthewolf’sbloodymouth,Macwasnearlydeadwithhorror.Hecouldevenimaginethewolf’steethtearingintohisflesh.②Justatthatmoment,thedoorwasunlockedbyBeckyandthefrightenedmandivedin,shuttingthedoorjustbeforethewolfstruckhim.③Soangrywasthewolfthatitkeptroaringandsmackingthewindowviolently.Afterquiteawhile,④realizingwhateverhedidwasinvain,thedisappointedwolfdisappearedintothewoodseventually.Macsatinthecar,⑤hisheartstillbeatingwildlywithfear