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讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)微技能（二）Howtomaketheactiondescriptionmorevivid？

Tip1:

Addvividverbs（語(yǔ)料庫(kù):句子優(yōu)化表達(dá)）

Tip2:

Addactionchains(動(dòng)作鏈:讓動(dòng)作有過(guò)程)Tip3:

Addactionrange（動(dòng)作面:身體動(dòng)作細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě))

Tip1：Addvividverbs(精致措辭—具體替代籠統(tǒng))“說(shuō)”：whisper/murmur低語(yǔ)，stutter結(jié)巴，declare宣布，promise保證，propose/suggest建議，cryout/shout/scream/yell/exclaim/howl大聲叫喊，roar咆哮，sigh嘆息，add補(bǔ)充說(shuō)“看”：catchaglanceof瞥一眼/stareat/gazeat

凝視/glareat

怒視/glueone’seyesto盯著;sbcan’ttakeone’seyesoff無(wú)法將視線移開(kāi)castameaningful/suspiciouslookatsb意味深長(zhǎng)地/懷疑地看著blink眨眼looksbintheeye直視“走”：walk/stroll散步,tiptoe/creep躡手躡腳地走，slip,stealinto溜走，march齊步走stride/prance闊步走pace踱步limp蹣跚“抓”：seize/grasp/grab/clutch/takeholdof/catchholdof/holdonto“跑”：rush/dash/race猛沖,急速移動(dòng)；fleeaway逃跑“跳”spring/jumptoone’sfeet一躍而起,跳起；risetoone’sfeet站起來(lái)“哭”：weep,sob(啜泣)

“吃”：bite(咬)chew（咀嚼)swallow(吞下)

wolfdown(狼吞虎咽）

例句：1、She

slipped

outofbedand

tiptoed

tothewindow.2、Hejumpedoffthebusand

dashedforward

thenearesthospital.3、Iusedtogetupat6o’clockinthemorning,takea3minuteshower,

wolfdown4、somebreadand

hittheroad

toschool.5、They

strolled

alongtheriverbank,enjoyingtheeveningsun.6、Anoldtramp（流浪漢）limped

alongthestreet,lookingformoneyorcigaretteends.Tip2：Addactionchains（分解—合并_—美化）類(lèi)型1：主語(yǔ)+謂語(yǔ)A,BandC.動(dòng)作鏈一般以三連動(dòng)為主，多個(gè)動(dòng)作一氣呵成，緊湊而有節(jié)奏感，使得描寫(xiě)非常生動(dòng)。[注意]動(dòng)作鏈的三個(gè)或者以上的動(dòng)作，必須在時(shí)態(tài)上保持一致，常常采用A,BandC的格式。我參加頒獎(jiǎng)儀式的上臺(tái)動(dòng)作:面帶微笑—走上舞臺(tái)—驕傲地挺起胸膛Iworeasmileonmyface,strodeontothestageandpuffedoutmychestwithpride.獲獎(jiǎng)后老師對(duì)我的贊揚(yáng)的動(dòng)作：朝我眨眼睛—豎起了大拇指—綻放笑容Iwasgreetedbymyteacher'ssmilingeyes.“Welldone!”heblinkedatme,gavemeathumbsupandbroadenedaradiant（燦爛的）smile.[注意]也可以加上介詞詞組或者副詞對(duì)動(dòng)作進(jìn)行美化：with+情感名詞的搭配：withdelight/excitement/pleasure/happiness/joy/satisfaction/anger/rage/patience/fear/terror/embarrassment/pride/caution/care/patience/certaintywith+身體部位：

withhisbrighteyes/itssharpteeth/hershakyhand/herpalelips…in+名詞：

insurprise/amazement/shock/sorrow傷心inahigh/low/sweet/loud/soft/weakvoice用..的嗓音inatoneofsurprise/curiosity/impatience/regret/mand

用...的語(yǔ)氣副詞

suddenly/immediately/instantly/rapidly/firmly/slowly/angrily/happily/excitedlyWithagiantsmileonherface,shedashedforward,kneltdownandgatheredherdaughterintoherarmstightly.Hepulledmyfacetowardshim

withpatience,wipedmytears,andpattedmyhead

gently.Puttingonmycoat

hurriedly,Igrabbedmyschoolbagandrushedtotheschool

likeanarrow.類(lèi)型2：非謂語(yǔ)doing（表示主動(dòng)，與謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞同時(shí)或幾乎同時(shí)發(fā)生）,主語(yǔ)+謂語(yǔ)and謂語(yǔ).他鼓起勇氣，然后用一塊濕毛巾去捂住自己的嘴和鼻，沖進(jìn)著火的房間。Hegatheredhiscourageandthenusedawettoweltocoverhismouthandnose,dashingintotheburningroom.Gatheringthecourage,hethenusedawettoweltocoverhismouthandnose,dashingintotheburningroom.類(lèi)型3：非謂語(yǔ)done(作為狀語(yǔ)表示被動(dòng)/心理/狀態(tài)）,主語(yǔ)+

謂語(yǔ)

+

無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)句沉浸于快樂(lè)中，我的老師向我揮手并表達(dá)他對(duì)我的真誠(chéng)祝賀，一股幸福的感覺(jué)立刻向我襲來(lái)。Immersedintheenjoyment,hewavedatmeandexpressedhissincerecongratulationsonme,awaveofhappinessimmediatelysweptoverme.類(lèi)型4：非謂語(yǔ)Havingdone（先于主句謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)作發(fā)生）,主語(yǔ)+謂語(yǔ)A.聽(tīng)從了老師的指導(dǎo)之后，我才開(kāi)始用有趣的方式去與熱情的觀眾互動(dòng)。Havingfollowedhisteacher’sinstructions,Ibegantointeractwiththeenthusiasticaudienceinafunnyway.

Tip3：Addactionrange(動(dòng)作表情聲音心理語(yǔ)言環(huán)境多角度攝像)把動(dòng)作和面部表情，聲音,心理，語(yǔ)言,環(huán)境等結(jié)合，形成動(dòng)作面。從整體→局部，從肢體→面部→語(yǔ)言/心理描寫(xiě)，從多個(gè)角度描繪一個(gè)場(chǎng)景。Type1：Done，句子主干，doing受到老師的話鼓勵(lì)，Tom舉起手,低聲說(shuō):”我決定參加.”Encouragedbytheteacher'swords,Tomraisedherhand,whispering/murmuring,“Idecidetoparticipateinit.”被嚇得要死，麥克面色蒼白，像一片樹(shù)葉一樣渾身顫抖。Frightenedtodeath,Macturnedaswhiteasasheet,tremblingalloverlikealeaf.Type2：Doing,句子主干，doing站在草地上，他們拉著手，抬頭看著天空，感受著來(lái)自?xún)?nèi)心的那份寶貴的寧?kù)o。Standingonthegrass,theyheldhandstogetherandlookedupintothesky,feelingthepreciouspeacefromwithin.內(nèi)心充滿憤怒，他用他那恐怖的大眼睛瞪著我，吼道：“你是個(gè)傻子”Burningwithanger,heglaredatmewithhisbigfrighteningeyes,yelling,“You’resuchanidiot.”Type3：With復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)或獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)，句子主干,（doing)手里拿著花,Mindy站在大海旁邊,微笑著低頭看著自己的花,想象著未來(lái)充滿前景的生活.Withabunchofflowersinherhands,Mindystoodbesidetheseaandlookeddownattheflowerswithasmile,imaginingherpromisinglifeinthefuture.我的臉氣紅了，跑上跑下，想要?dú)У袈飞系娜魏螙|西。

Myfaceredwithanger,Iracedupanddown，wantingtodestroyeverythingthatcameinmyway.Practice:1.Ifeltverynervous.當(dāng)站在講臺(tái)上時(shí)我很緊張，喉嚨發(fā)緊，心跳加速，感覺(jué)自己如坐針氈。(sitonpinsandneedles)Whenstandingontheplatform,afloodoftensionwelledupinme,mythroattightenedandmyheartbeatsoviolentlythatIfeltlikesittingonpinsandneedles.2.Fatherfortedhermildly,“It'sOkay!I‘llhelpyou.”爸爸蹲下來(lái)，拍著她的背部，并輕聲向她承諾,“沒(méi)關(guān)系，我會(huì)幫你的”。Fatherkneltdown,pattedheronthebackandpromisedherinamildvoice,“It'sOkay!I‘llhelpyou”3.Mikesaid,“YouarethemostbeautifulgirlI'veeverseen.”直視我的眼睛，Mike輕撫我的頭發(fā)，小聲說(shuō)道：“你是我見(jiàn)過(guò)的最美的女孩”

Lookingstraightintomyeyes,Mikestrokemyhair,whispering,“YouarethemostbeautifulgirlI'veeverseen.”4.Jane一看到Tom,便跑過(guò)去抱住他，淚水沿