讀后續(xù)寫AMother'sDaySurprise課件高三英語一輪復習

AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISE【2021.06新高考一卷】2021年6月全國新高考1卷AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISE

ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.

Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jemafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jefturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.

ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJeftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear！Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右：2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Paragraph1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Paragraph2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Step1.

通讀全文，

理清脈絡1.讀六要素2.讀情節(jié)3.讀情感4.讀故事主題記敘文的六要素：1.Who2.Where3.When4.Whathappened5.Why6.HowWTC原則審題1.Who2.Where3.When4.Whathappened5.Topic/Theme6.Conflict/Problem考試時把WTC的三個板塊梳理清楚，才叫把文章讀透了，盡量將這些細節(jié)融入到續(xù)寫里，這樣才能更好地呼應全文。2.Where3.When1.Who4.WhathappenedinthekitchenAt6:00amThetwinswantedtomakebreakfastformomasaMother'sDaysurpriseupstairs：inthebedroomtwins--Jenna（agirl）&Jeff(aboy),mother,fatherConflict/Problem1.thebreadturnedblack;2.theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire;3.touchedthehotburner.Themeexpressgratitudeandlovetotheirmom

AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISE

ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.2.讀情節(jié)

3.讀情感雙胞胎想到母親節(jié)為媽媽做早餐制造驚喜而興高采烈excited

Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridge

first.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.2.讀情節(jié)

3.讀情感雙胞胎準備早餐，剛開始進展順利confident/happy

ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamess

now.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Then

shecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.2.讀情節(jié)

3.讀情感粥溢，火滅，手傷，面包焦，雙胞胎慌亂disappointed/panicked雙胞胎想到母親節(jié)為媽媽做早餐制造驚喜而興高采烈雙胞胎準備早餐，剛開始進展順利粥溢，火滅，手傷，面包焦，雙胞胎慌亂2.讀情節(jié)

3.讀情感excitedconfident/happydisappointed/panicked“3銜接、2過渡、1主題”來確定寫作框架3銜接是指續(xù)寫第一段首句后的銜接句1，續(xù)寫第二段首句前后的銜接句2和3.2過渡是指續(xù)寫第一段銜接句1和段末銜接句2之間的過渡，以及續(xù)寫第二段銜接句3和文末主題句之間的過渡.1主題是指續(xù)寫第二段文末的主題句.Step2:依據(jù)首句，構思框架Para1：Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.銜接句1Para2：Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.銜接句2銜接句3過渡句1過渡句2主題句續(xù)寫首句

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.情節(jié)設計——ARE原則（Action、Response、Emotion）①father’sresponseandemotion(--)②Howthefatherhelpedthemmakethebreakfast

③Thebreakfastwasready.1.銜接father的回應或反應2.銜接早餐已經(jīng)做好過渡句13.銜接mother的回應或反應①Howtheirmotherreactedtothebreakfastandthemother’semotion②whatthetwinsandfatherdid.圓滿結局（主題句）Para1

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Para2

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Step3:增加細節(jié)，展開續(xù)寫Howfatherreactedtothemessinthekitchenandhowhehelpedthetwinsmakebreakfast.Howtheirmotherreactedtothebreakfastandwhatthetwinsandfatherdid.按“所見、所聞、所說、所思、所感、所做”構想5-8個合理細節(jié)。FatherThetwins1.爸爸了解情況.（所聞）2.爸爸安慰他們。(所做）3.爸爸幫助他們做早餐。（所做）1.在爸爸的指導下，他們成功把早餐做好了。（所做）2.他們迫切的想讓媽媽品嘗。（所感）Howfatherreactedtothemessinthekitchenandhowhehelpedthetwinsmakebreakfast.第一段續(xù)寫細節(jié):1.爸爸看見廚房的臟亂，父親感到驚訝（所見所感）第二段續(xù)寫細節(jié):ThetwinsMother2.媽媽很感動，擁抱他們。（所感/所做）3.媽媽品嘗早餐，表揚他們。（所做）Father1.爸爸假裝驚訝。（所感）1.他們擁抱媽媽并對媽媽說“