讀后續(xù)寫+鐵軌邊的救贖：收養(yǎng)小英雄的溫暖旅程 講義 高三下學(xué)期二?？荚囉⒄Z試題

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Beingatraindriver,Imustconcentrateonmydrivingwhenworking.Andonthatparticularday,Iwasgladformyoutstandingattention.Fromadistance,Ispottedasmallfigurelikeathinkidonthetraintracks.Immediately,Irangthealarm,butnoresponse.Observingcarefully,Isawaboylyingonthetracks,unabletoescapefrommytrain,ashisfootwasstuck.IpulledthebrakeswithallmymightassoonasIcould.Luckily,thetrainstoppedafewinchesfromtheboy,whowascryingloudlyinfear.Iapproachedhim,askinghowhefeltandwhetherIcouldgiveahand.Aftergettinghispermission,Icautiouslycheckedhowhisfootwasstuckinthetracks.Andafterafewpulls,

theboy'sfootcameoutfinally.Hugginghimandmakingsureeverythingwasokay,IaskedwhetherIneededtocallhisparents.Tomyastonishment,thechildsaidnothing,justlookingatmewithhistearfuleyes.Consideringitwasdangeroustoleavetheboyalone,Idecidedtotakehimtomyhomeafterwork.Arrivingatmyhome,Iintroducedhimtomywife,Amelia.Shelookedatthechildinsurpriseforawhile,butshecalmeddownquicklyandaskedwhethertheboyrememberedher.Theboynodded.Ameliaexplainedtomethatshehadjustwalkedoutofthesupermarketwithsomebreadandvegetablestheotherday,whenagroupofbadguysblockedherway.Justthen,alittleboyrantowardthemandscreamedtoattractthepolice,whichatlastsavedher.Herestoodthebraveboy.Inthefollowinghours,wechattedwitheachother,andthusweknewthatthekidwasnamedTomandhewasabandonedbyhisparentsandbecameanorphanwhohadbeenaloneonthestreetsforyears.Aswedidn’thaveanychildren,weweredeterminedtoadoptTom.注意：1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。ItoldTomourdecision,waitingforhisanswer.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thenextmorning,weopenedourbedroomdoorandsawTomstandingthere.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________文章大意身為火車司機(jī)的“我”，在工作時(shí)發(fā)現(xiàn)鐵軌上有個(gè)小男孩，他的腳被卡住?！拔摇本o急剎車后救下了他，并將其帶回了家。妻子Amelia認(rèn)出他是曾救過自己的勇敢孩子。交談后得知男孩叫Tom，是被父母遺棄的孤兒，“我們”決定收養(yǎng)他，故事在此處續(xù)寫，展現(xiàn)Tom對“我們”收養(yǎng)決定的反應(yīng)以及之后一家人的生活，突出善良和愛的傳遞能溫暖人心、改變命運(yùn)的主題。故事分析伏筆與回應(yīng)：伏筆：“我”在鐵軌上看到小男孩時(shí)，他的腳被卡住無法逃脫，營造出緊張危險(xiǎn)的氛圍，凸顯情況危急。

回應(yīng)：“我”盡全力剎車并成功救下男孩，為后續(xù)故事發(fā)展奠定基礎(chǔ)，展現(xiàn)“我”的善良和責(zé)任感，引出后續(xù)一系列情節(jié)，如帶他回家、決定收養(yǎng)等，推動(dòng)故事向前發(fā)展。伏筆：Amelia講述被一群壞人攔住時(shí)，小男孩出現(xiàn)并尖叫吸引警察救了她，這一情節(jié)為小男孩的勇敢善良形象做鋪墊，也解釋了為什么Amelia對他有特別的情感。

回應(yīng)：在得知小男孩是孤兒后，“我們”決定收養(yǎng)他，不僅是因?yàn)橥?，更是因?yàn)樗暗纳婆e，使收養(yǎng)行為更加順理成章，也升華了善良有報(bào)的主題，豐富了故事的情感層次。伏筆：小男孩被父母遺棄成為孤兒，在街頭流浪多年，這一背景為他渴望家庭的情感做了鋪墊，也使“我們”的收養(yǎng)決定更具意義。

回應(yīng)：當(dāng)“我們”告知他收養(yǎng)決定時(shí)，他的驚喜和感動(dòng)充分體現(xiàn)了他對家庭的渴望，回應(yīng)了前文的伏筆，展現(xiàn)了親情的珍貴，進(jìn)一步突出了故事溫暖人心的主題。伏筆：“我”發(fā)現(xiàn)小男孩后，不僅救下他，還考慮到他的安全帶他回家，表現(xiàn)出“我”的善良和細(xì)心。

回應(yīng)：這種善良的舉動(dòng)持續(xù)發(fā)展，最終促成了“我們”收養(yǎng)他的決定，也為后續(xù)家庭生活的溫馨和睦埋下伏筆，使故事的情感發(fā)展連貫自然，強(qiáng)化了善良能帶來幸福的主題。伏筆：在得知小男孩的經(jīng)歷和他救過Amelia后，“我們”內(nèi)心已經(jīng)有了收養(yǎng)的想法，這為后文正式做出收養(yǎng)決定做了鋪墊。

回應(yīng)：“我們”明確告知小男孩收養(yǎng)決定，他的積極回應(yīng)開啟了一家人幸福生活的新篇章，使故事的情節(jié)完整，主題得到深化，體現(xiàn)了愛與善良能創(chuàng)造美好家庭的寓意。續(xù)寫要點(diǎn)：第一段：ItoldTomourdecision,waitingforhisanswer.Tom'seyeswidenedindisbelief,andthenfilledwithtearsofgratitude.Hestammered,"Really?Youwantmetobeyourchild?"Inodded,andAmeliahuggedhimtightly.Tomsobbed,"I'vealwaysdreamedofhavingafamily.Thankyou!"Wespenttherestoftheeveningtalkingaboutourfuturetogether,andTom'sfacewaslitupwithhopeandhappiness.第二段：Thenextmorning,weopenedourbedroomdoorandsawTomstandingthere.Hehadabigsmileonhisfaceandwasholdingaplateoffreshlymadesandwiches."Iwantedtomakebreakfastformynewfamily,"hesaidshyly.Weweredeeplytouchedbyhisthoughtfulness.Fromthatdayon,Tombecameanimportantpartofourlives.Hewasabrightandlovingchild,andourhomewasfilledwithlaughterandwarmth.Weknewthatthiswasthebeginningofabeautifuljourneytogether,andweweregratefulforthechancetogiveTomtheloveandfamilyhedeserved.情感線：起初，“我”看到男孩在鐵軌上時(shí)緊張擔(dān)憂；救下男孩后關(guān)心他的狀況；妻子Amelia看到男孩時(shí)驚訝，后因認(rèn)出他而感慨；得知男孩是孤兒后，“我們”心生憐憫與同情；決定收養(yǎng)他時(shí)充滿慈愛與期待；告知男孩決定后，他驚喜感動(dòng)；第二天早上看到Tom準(zhǔn)備早餐，一家人溫馨幸福，情感變化豐富，突出了善良與愛的力量，使故事溫暖感人。故事線：“我”在鐵軌上發(fā)現(xiàn)被卡住的男孩，緊急剎車救下他。帶男孩回家，妻子Amelia認(rèn)出他是救命恩人。交談中得知男孩是孤兒，“我們”決定收養(yǎng)他。告知男孩收養(yǎng)決定，他欣然接受。第二天早上男孩準(zhǔn)備早餐，一家人溫馨和睦。續(xù)寫部分，一家人開啟幸福生活。主旨升華句：Lovehasthepowertohealthedeepestwoundsandcreateunbreakablebonds.（愛有力量治愈最深的創(chuàng)傷，建立牢不可破的紐帶。）Inthedarkestcornersoflife,asingleactofkindnesscanbethelightthatleadstoanewbeginning.（在生命最黑暗的角落，一個(gè)小小的善舉可以成為通向新起點(diǎn)的光。）Sometimes,themostpreciousgiftscomeintheformofunexpectedencountersandthechoicetoopenourhearts.（有時(shí)，最珍貴的禮物以意想不到的相遇和敞開心扉的選擇的形式出現(xiàn)。）Thekindnessweshowtoothersislikeaseedplantedinthesoiloflife,whichwillgrowintoatreeofloveandshelter.（我們對他人表現(xiàn)出的善良就像播撒在生命土壤中的種子，它將成長為一棵愛與庇護(hù)的樹。）Whenwechooseloveandcompassion,wenotonlychangethelivesofothersbutalsofindthetruemeaningandbeautyofourown.（當(dāng)我們選擇愛與同情時(shí)，我們不僅改變了他人的生活，也找到了自己生活的真正意義和美好。）寫作示范第一篇

ItoldTomourdecision,waitingforhisanswer.Tomstoodthere,stunnedforamoment.Then,ahugesmilespreadacrosshisface,andhelungedforwardtohugusboth."Yes!Iwanttobepartofyourfamilymorethananything,"heexclaimedthroughhistears.Weheldhimclose,feelingasenseofjoyandpurpose.Thatevening,wetalkedaboutourhopesanddreams,andTomsharedhislovefordrawingandhisdesiretogotoschool.Wepromisedtosupporthimineveryway.Thenextmorning,weopenedourbedroomdoorandsawTomstandingthere.Hewasneatlydressed,andhishairwascombed.Inhishands,heheldasmalldrawinghehadmadeforusduringthenight.Itshowedourfamily,holdinghandsandsmiling."Imadethisforyou,"hesaidsoftly.Weweredeeplymovedbyhisgesture.Fromthatdayon,Tomfitintoourlivesseamlessly.Hewasasourceoflaughterandlove,andweweregratefulforthechancetogivehimahome.Weknewthatourliveshadbeenforeverchangedbythisbraveandkind-heartedboy,andwelookedforwardtoafuturefilledwithhappinessandtogetherness.第二篇

ItoldTomourdecision,waitingforhisanswer.Tom'seyeswelledupwithtears,andhenoddedvigorously."I'vealwayswantedafamily.Thankyousomuch,"hewhispered.Wecouldseethereliefandhappinessinhiseyes.Wespenttheeveningmakingplansforhisroomanddiscussinghisfavoritethings.Tomtoldusabouthisadventuresonthestreets,andwelistenedattentively,sharinginhisjoysandsorrows.Thenextmorning,weopenedourbedroomdoorandsawTomstandingthere.Hehadpreparedasimplebreakfastoftoastandjam,withaglassoforangejuice."Iwantedtodosomethingniceformynewparents,"hesaidwithashysmile.Wesatdowntogetherandate,enjoyingthewarmthofthemoment.Asthedayspassed,Tomthrivedinourcare.Hestartedschoolandmadefriendsquickly.Ourhomewasfilledwithhislaughterandthesoundofhisfootsteps.WerealizedthatbyopeningourheartstoTom,wehadreceivedapreciousgiftinreturn.Ourstorywasatestamenttothepowerofloveandkindness,andwehopedtosharethismessagewiththeworld.參考答案ItoldTomourdecision,waitingforhisanswe