高考英語復習讀后續(xù)寫練習：用舊攪拌機制作餅干的溫暖故事+課件

高考英語讀后續(xù)寫語篇練習：用舊攪拌機制作餅干的溫暖故事1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文We’djustdownsizedourhome.AsgratefulasIwastohavearoofoverourheads,Icouldn’thelpbutfeelblue.Ouroldhousewasbeautifulandhuge.Ourcurrenthome?Halfthesizeandcrowded.We’dhadtogiveawayorthrowawayalotofourstuff.Buttherewerestillboxeseverywhere,fromthefamilyroomtothegarage(車庫).Thedayafterthemove,whilethekidswereinschool,Itackledmoreboxes.Bytheafternoon,I’dmaderealprogress.Thefurniturewasunpacked.Thephotoswerehangingonthewalls.Butitjustdidn’tfeellikehome.4續(xù)寫原文MaybeIcouldchangethat.IcheckedthekitchencupboardandsawthatIhadenoughingredientstobakechocolatechipcookies.JustlikemygrandmausedtomakewheneverIneededcheeringup.Wouldn’tthatbeanicesurpriseforthekids?Whentheygothomefromschool,there’dbefreshcookieswaitingforthemonthekitchencounter.Iputonmyapron(圍裙),measuredoutthebrownsugarandbutterandgottowork.Onebyone,Iaddedeggstothemixer(攪拌機).POP!Whatintheworld?Themixerstoppedworking.Mymixerwasbroken.“Really?!”Ifeltlikescreaming.Itwasjustakitchendevice,butitfeltlikethelaststraw.WhatmoredidIhavetogiveup?5續(xù)寫原文Whatwouldmygrandmado?She’dlivedthroughtheGreatDepressionandhadlosteverything.Eveninthefaceofhardship,she’dkeptherfamilytogether.Sheusedwhatevershehadtogetby.Grandmawouldn’tquit.She’dfindanotherway.Inspired,Irantothegarageandsearchedtheremainingboxes.Foundit!IpulledoutGrandma’soldwhitemixer.Theoneshe’dpassedontome.She’dpurchaseditbackinthe50’sanditwasancient.I’dmarkedtheboxitwasinas“easilybroken”,butthemovershadn’tpaidattention.They’ddroppeditanyway.6段首句Paragraph1:Iwonderedifitstillworked.Paragraph2:Twohourslater,thekidsopenedthedoorandsaid,“Mmmm,cookies!”7Part2題目分析8續(xù)寫原文分析9文章講述了作者一家剛搬到較小的房子，環(huán)境擁擠，東西雜亂，作者心情低落。為了給孩子驚喜，作者決定烤巧克力曲奇餅干，卻發(fā)現(xiàn)攪拌機壞了?；貞浧鹉棠淘诶Ь持胁环艞壍木瘢髡哒业侥棠痰呐f攪拌機，故事圍繞能否用舊攪拌機做出餅干展開，體現(xiàn)了對家的情感以及生活中的困難與溫暖。點1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；點2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語；點4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構(gòu)建的重點10續(xù)寫思路分析Paragraph1：Iwonderedifitstillworked.分析：此段可從作者對舊攪拌機的期待與擔憂寫起。先描述作者插上電源時的緊張心情，接著寫舊攪拌機啟動后的狀況，如聲音、攪拌效果等。在攪拌過程中，作者回憶與奶奶有關的美好往事，突出舊攪拌機對作者的特殊意義，為后文做鋪墊。11續(xù)寫思路分析Paragraph2：Twohourslater,thekidsopenedthedoorandsaid,“Mmmm,cookies!”分析：該段著重描寫孩子們看到餅干時的驚喜反應，通過對孩子的表情、動作和語言描寫展現(xiàn)他們的開心。然后描述一家人分享餅干的溫馨場景，最后由餅干和舊攪拌機引發(fā)作者對生活的感悟，點明即使看似破舊的東西也能帶來溫暖與快樂。12Part3范文呈現(xiàn)13范文呈現(xiàn)Paragraph1:Iwonderedifitstillworked.Withasenseofnervousness,Ipluggedintheoldmixer.Tomyrelief,itstartedtowork,thoughwithabitofastrangenoise.Icarefullyaddedtheremainingingredients.Asthemixerblendedthem,IrememberedhowGrandmausedtomakecookieswiththisverymixerwhenIwasakid.Itwasaslowprocess,butIwaspatient.Finally,thedoughwasready,andIstartedtomakethecookieshapes.Paragraph2:Twohourslater,thekidsopenedthedoorandsaid,“Mmmm,cookies!”Theireyeswidenedwithexcitementwhentheysawthecookiesonthecounter.Theyrushedoverandeachtookone.“Thesearesogood,Mom!”theyexclaimed.Wesataroundthetable,enjoyingthecookiestogether.Lookingattheoldmixer,Irealizedthatitwasnotjustatool,butalinktomypastandasourceofnewwarmthinournewhome.14范文呈現(xiàn)Paragraph1:Iwonderedifitstillworked.DoubtfilledmymindasIturnedontheoldmixer.Amazingly,ithummedtolife.However,itdidn'tworkassmoothlyasmynewone.Ihadtobeextracareful.Whilemixing,IthoughtofhowGrandmaalwaysmanagedtocreatedeliciousfoodwithlimitedresources.Thisgavemethedeterminationtomakethebestcookies.Afterawhile,Ihadabatchofcookiedoughready.Paragraph2:Twohourslater,thekidsopenedthedoorandsaid,“Mmmm,cookies!”Theirfaceslitupwithjoy.Theycouldn'twaittotastethecookies.Weatethecookiesandtalkedaboutourday.Itwasasimplemoment,butitmadeournewhousefeelmorelikehome.Theoldmixerhadbroughtusclosertogetherandaddedatouchofwarmthtoourlives.15升級版范文呈現(xiàn)Paragraph1:Iwonderedifitstillworked.Withablendofanticipationandtrepidation,IgingerlypluggedinGrandma'sancientmixer.Tomypleasantsurprise,itemittedalow,rumblinghumasitsprangtolife,thoughthesoundwasafarcryfromthesmoothpurrofmodernappliances.Imeasuredandaddedtheremainingingredientswithmeticulouscare,watchingasthebeatersslowlyincorporatedthemintoarich,chocolateydough.AsIdidso,afloodofcherishedmemorieswashedoverme.IrecalledthecountlesstimesI'dwatchedGrandmausethisverymixer,herhandsdeftlyguidingtheprocess,fillingthekitchenwiththewarm,invitingaromaoffreshlybakedcookies.Itwasalabor-intensiveprocess,yetIfoundmyselflostintherhythm,determinedtocreatesomethingspecial.Finally,thedoughwasperfectlymixed,andIbeganshapingthecookies,eachonealittlepieceoflove.Paragraph2:Twohourslater,thekidsopenedthedoorandsaid,“Mmmm,cookies!”Theireyessparkledwithdelight,andtheirfacesbrokeintowidesmilesatthesightofthegolden-browncookiesneatlyarrangedonthecounter.Theyrushedforward,theirexcitementpalpable.“Mom,theselookamazing!”oneofthemexclaimed.Wegatheredaroundthetable,thesweetscentofthecookiesfillingtheair.Aswesavoredeachbite,wesharedstoriesaboutourday,laughterandchatterfillingtheroom.Lookingattheoldmixer,nowstandingquietlyonthecounter,Irealizedthatitwassomuchmorethanamerekitchenappliance.Itwasatangibleconnectiontomypast,asymbolofGrandma'sresilienceandlove,andacatalystthathadtransformedournew,unfamiliarhouseintoawarm,invitinghome.16升級版范文呈現(xiàn)Paragraph1:Iwonderedifitstillworked.AwaveofuncertaintywashedovermeasIpressedthepowerbuttonontheoldwhitemixer.Tomyastonishment,itwhirredintoaction,itsagedpartsprotestingslightlywithafaintrattlingsound.Icautiouslyaddedtheremainingingredients,observingcloselyasthemixerstruggledbutperseveredinblendingthem.MemoriesofGrandma,withherkindsmileandcapablehands,floodedmymind.Shealwaysmadethemostofwhatshehad,andthismixerwasatestamenttoherresourcefulness.Despiteitssluggishness,Iwasfilledwithasenseofpurpose.Ipatientlywaitedforthedoughtocometogether,imaginingthejoyonmykids'faceswhentheywouldtastethecookies.Atlast,thedoughwasready,andIsetaboutshapingthecookieswithcare.Paragraph2:Twohoursl