高三英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫練習(xí)：小黑狗奧尼克斯勇救主人

高考英語讀后續(xù)寫語篇練習(xí)小黑狗奧尼克斯勇救主人1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文Shewastheprettiestlittledogwehadeverseen,andthewholefamilyimmediatelyfellinlovewithher.WenamedherOnyxbecauseofherthick,shinyblackcoat.ShespentherfirstvacationwithuswhenshewasonlytenweeksoldandhadherfirstbathandswimintheSt.LawrenceRiver.Wehadnocluethatthisamazinglittleballoffurwouldendupbeingourhero.Asshegrewolder,Onyxbecamemoreandmoreinvolvedinourfamilyactivities.Onhotsummerdays,Onyxenjoyedfloatingontheriverwithusinherownrubbertube(橡皮圈).Amazinglystandingonthetopofthetube,shesmiledwhileshowingoffherperfectbalance.Restingherfrontlegsandpawsovertheedgeoftherubbertube,shekepthereyesshutasshefloateduntilshe'dhadenoughofthewarmsunonherblackcoat.4續(xù)寫原文Oneday,oureighteen-year-olddaughter,Margie,announcedshewasgoingtoswimacrossthebay.Nooneinthefamilywasfreetogoswimmingwithher.Theunwrittenrule,regardlessofswimmingability,wastohaveacompanioninthewaterwithyou,especiallywhenswimmingthewidthofthebay.Iwasnotagoodswimmer,soIsaidtoMargie,“TakeOnyxwithyou.”Havingheardhername,Onyxwokeupfromanapandwasreadyforaction.Margiesignedthedogtofollowher.Onyxrantothewaternexttoher.Theyenteredthefreezingrivertogetherandswamsidebysideacrossthebay.Iwatchedfromtheriverbankastheyreachedthesandbar(沙洲)onthefarshore.Theyrestedafewminutesbeforedivingintothewaterforthereturntrip.Ifeltuneasyforsomereasonandcontinuedtowatchthepairswimsidebyside.5段首句Paragraph1：SuddenlyIheardMargiecallingout,“Ihaveacram(痙攣)intheleg!”Paragraph2：Seeingthepairapproachingtheriverbank,Ibreathedasighofrelief.6Part2題目分析7續(xù)寫原文分析8一家人收養(yǎng)了一只名為奧尼克斯的漂亮小黑狗，它很快融入家庭活動，常在夏日與家人在河中嬉戲。一天，18歲的女兒瑪吉宣布要獨自游過海灣，因無人陪同，母親讓奧尼克斯隨行?，敿蛫W尼克斯成功游到對岸，休息后返程。然而，在返程途中，瑪吉突發(fā)狀況。點1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；點2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語；點4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構(gòu)建的重點9續(xù)寫思路分析Para1：SuddenlyIheardMargiecallingout,“Ihaveacram(痙攣)intheleg!”突然，我聽到瑪吉大聲呼喊：“我的腿抽筋了！”聲音中滿是焦急與恐懼。奧尼克斯聽到主人的呼救，瞬間警覺起來。它迅速游到瑪吉身邊，用自己的身體緊緊挨著瑪吉，試圖給她提供支撐。奧尼克斯用腦袋輕輕頂了頂瑪吉，似乎在告訴她別害怕。隨后，它用牙齒咬住瑪吉泳衣的一角，調(diào)整好方向，開始朝著河岸奮力游動。盡管水流湍急，奧尼克斯游得十分吃力，但它眼神堅定，絲毫沒有放棄的意思?，敿o緊抓住奧尼克斯的身體，在它的幫助下，暫時緩解了下沉的危險。10續(xù)寫思路分析Para2：Seeingthepairapproachingtheriverbank,Ibreathedasighofrelief.看到它們倆朝著河岸靠近，我松了一口氣。奧尼克斯用盡全身力氣，終于將瑪吉拖到了淺水區(qū)。我急忙跑過去，將瑪吉拉上岸。瑪吉躺在地上，大口喘著粗氣，眼中滿是對奧尼克斯的感激。奧尼克斯也累得趴在一旁，舌頭伸得老長。過了一會兒，瑪吉緩過神來，她一把抱住奧尼克斯，不停地撫摸著它的頭，嘴里說著：“謝謝你，我的小英雄?！睆哪且院?，我們更加珍惜奧尼克斯，它不僅是我們的寵物，更是我們家庭的英雄，它的勇敢和忠誠讓我們深深感動。11Part3范文呈現(xiàn)12范文呈現(xiàn)SuddenlyIheardMargiecallingout,“Ihaveacrampintheleg!”Panicwasevidentinhervoice.Onyx,uponhearinghermaster'scryforhelp,immediatelybecamealert.ItswiftlyswamtoMargie'ssideandpresseditsbodyfirmlyagainsthers,attemptingtooffersupport.OnyxgentlynudgedMargiewithitshead,asiftoconveyreassurance.Then,itgraspedthecornerofMargie'sswimsuitwithitsteeth,adjusteditsdirection,andstartedswimmingvigorouslytowardstheriverbank.Despitethestrongcurrentmakingtheswimstrenuous,Onyx'seyesweredetermined,showingnosignofgivingup.MargieclungtightlytoOnyx'sbody,andwithitsassistance,shemanagedtostayafloatforthemoment.13范文呈現(xiàn)Seeingthepairapproachingtheriverbank,Ibreathedasighofrelief.OnyxexertedallitsstrengthandfinallydraggedMargieintotheshallows.IrushedoverandpulledMargieontotheshore.Margielayontheground,gaspingforbreath,hereyesfilledwithgratitudetowardsOnyx.Onyx,exhausted,collapsedbesideher,itstonguehangingout.Afterawhile,Margieregainedhercomposure.ShehuggedOnyxtightly,strokingitsheadcontinuouslyandsaying,“Thankyou,mylittlehero.”Fromthenon,wecherishedOnyxevenmore.Itwasnotjustapetbutaheroofourfamily.Itscourageandloyaltydeeplytouchedourhearts.14升級版范文呈現(xiàn)Suddenly,acrypiercedtheair:“Ihaveacrampintheleg!”Margie'svoice,lacedwithpanic,sentshockwavesthroughme.Instantly,Onyx,ever-attunedtohermaster'sdistress,sprangintoaction.DartingtowardsMargie,itpresseditsbodyagainsthers,alivingbuoyinthetreacherouswater.Withagentlenudgeofitshead,itseemedtowhisperwordsofcomfort.Then,grippingthecornerofMargie'sswimsuitfirmlybetweenitsteeth,Onyxchartedacoursetowardsthesafetyoftheriverbank.Thecurrent,likeawildbeast,foughtagainstthem,butOnyx,undeterred,poweredthrough,itseyesablazewithdetermination.Margie,herlifenowinOnyx'spaws,clungondesperately,findingsolaceinthedog'sunwaveringstrength.15升級版范文呈現(xiàn)Asthepairnearedtheriverbank,awaveofreliefwashedoverme.Withafinalburstofenergy,OnyxtowedMargieintotheshallows.Isprintedtowardsthem,myheartpounding,andhauledMargieontotheshore.Shelaythere,breathless,hereyesfixedonOnyxinagazeofprofoundgratitude.Onyx,spentfromitsheroicefforts,slumpedbesideher,itstonguelollingout.Momentslater,asMargieregainedhersenses,shewrappedherarmsaroundOnyx,hertouchatestamenttoherlove.“Thankyou,mylittlehero,”shemurmured,hervoicethickwithemotion.Fromthatdayforward,