高考英語作文2

1、高考英語作文：吸引閱卷老師那些高分詞在高考作文閱卷過程中，老師會對一些“高級”詞匯尤為偏愛。但是，大多數(shù)同學(xué)根本不具備單詞升級意識，一想到“好”，就是“good”；一想到“壞”，就是“bad”；一想到“美麗”就是“beautiful”。當(dāng)老師一天批閱上千份“內(nèi)容相同、語言低齡”的作文時(shí)，她的痛苦感受可想而知。因此，你一定要避免這些“低能詞匯”，讓自己的詞匯升級、升級再升級！那么，什么樣的單詞最能夠吸引閱卷老師的好感？我們在分析大量高分、滿分作文后發(fā)現(xiàn)，能夠吸引閱卷老師好感的單詞滿足四大原則：【原則一：晚詞優(yōu)先】老師偏愛“學(xué)得晚”的單詞，因?yàn)槭褂脤W(xué)得比較晚的單詞，可以體現(xiàn)一個人“學(xué)以致用”的意識

2、。如果一個意思既可以用初中單詞來表達(dá)，又可以用高二、高三單詞來表達(dá)，那盡量選擇高二、高三的單詞，如：（1）Adj.困難的 黯然低分詞：difficult 閃光高分詞：challenging有挑戰(zhàn)性的（2）Adj.重要的 黯然低分詞：important閃光高分詞：vital至關(guān)重要的；essential必不可少的；significant有重要意義的；（3）Adj.美麗的 黯然低分詞：beautiful閃光高分詞：appealing動人的；attractive吸引人的；charming迷人的；fascinating迷人的注：以上五個詞既能修飾人，又能修飾物，非常好用，務(wù)必記熟！【原則二：短語優(yōu)先】

3、在閱卷老師看來，活用短語是一個考生能力的體現(xiàn)。因此，我們可以掌握一些將某些常見單詞轉(zhuǎn)化為短語的用法，如：（4）v.參加 黯然低分詞：join 閃光高分詞：take part in（5）v.使用 黯然低分詞：use 閃光高分詞：make good use of（6）v.拜訪 黯然低分詞：visit 閃光高分詞：pay a visit to（7）最常見的換詞手段：形容詞=of+同根名詞黯然低分詞：閃光高分詞：very important重要的of great importancevery difficult困難的of great difficultyvery beautiful美麗的of grea

4、t beautyvery useful有用的of great usevery helpful有幫助的of great helpvery harmful有害的of great harmvery valuable有價(jià)值的of great valuevery significant至關(guān)重要的of great significancevery necessary必要的of great necessity【原則三：“具體化”單詞優(yōu)先】請先對比以下幾組句子：【例句1】I go to school everyday. 【例句2】I ride to school everyday.在課堂上，筆者經(jīng)常以這兩個句

5、子為例，講解“具體化”的重要性。很多同學(xué)都能感覺到例句2要比例句1好。究其原因，是例句2中的rode比例句1中的went更加具體：went只表達(dá)了“去”的意思，而rode不但表達(dá)出“去”的意思，還能表達(dá)出具體的交通方式。也就是說，例句2表達(dá)的信息量比例句1更加豐富。再如：【例句3】Mr Wang is a good teacher.【例句4】Mr Wang is a kind, patient and knowledgeable teacher.例句3只表達(dá)出Mr Wang是一個“好”老師，而到底“好”在哪些方面，卻沒有具體說清楚；例句4則清楚地告訴讀者，Mr Wang好在三個方面：和藹（ki

6、nd）、耐心（patient）以及知識豐富（knowledgeable）。因此，我們必須學(xué)會換用更為具體的單詞表達(dá)我們的思想，如：（8）adj.學(xué)習(xí) 黯然低分詞：learn閃光高分詞：research研究；pick up偶然學(xué)到，順便學(xué)到，輕松學(xué)到；master掌握（9）n.好老師 黯然低分詞：a good teacher閃光高分詞：a kind, patient and knowledgeable English teacher一個善良、耐心、博學(xué)的老師當(dāng)然，除了替換某些表意抽象的單詞，我們還可以通過增加細(xì)節(jié)成分，使表達(dá)更為具體，如，例句2可以加上同伴、心情等信息，進(jìn)一步改寫成：【例句5】I

7、，together with Tom and Jerry, rode to the Zhongshan park yesterday，feeling rather excited.同樣的，例句4也可以加上一個定語從句，寫出Mr Wang到底擅長哪些事情，如：【例句6】Mr Wang is a kind, patient and knowledgeable teacher who knows how to enlighten us students.可以看到，例句5和例句6兩個句子采用“具體化”的手段，將原本毫無生氣的句子頓時(shí)變得生動形象了。綜上所述，想讓你的表達(dá)“具體化”，一共有兩種常用方法，

8、其一，是換掉某些表意不明確的單詞，換上表意更加明確具體的單詞；其二，是在句中適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)成分?！熬唧w化”的好處，是讓句子的含義更加豐富，讓讀者更容易由句子展開豐富的聯(lián)想，隨著作者一起經(jīng)歷、一起思考、一起感動。在平時(shí)的學(xué)習(xí)、訓(xùn)練中，與其生硬地使用超綱詞匯，不如好好熟悉大綱單詞，用好“具體化”的兩種方法，為你的作文增光添彩。事實(shí)上，“具體化”在漢語寫作中也有同樣的體現(xiàn)。比如，要表達(dá)“惜別”的感情，光說“再見”是不夠的，應(yīng)該像詩人那樣，用具體化的細(xì)節(jié)帶動感情，寫出夢幻般的文字：“讓我與你握別/再輕輕抽出我的手/知道思念從此生根/浮云白日/山川莊嚴(yán)溫柔.”這就是“具體化”的作用，你體會到了嗎？【原則四

9、：大綱詞匯的衍生詞優(yōu)先】在高中英語中，我們已經(jīng)涉及到了詞根詞綴的知識。運(yùn)用這些知識，可以將很多高中詞匯衍生為四六級詞匯甚至托福、雅思詞匯。如果能夠熟練使用一兩個這種詞匯，你的作文肯定“碉堡了”！舉例如下，看看箭頭后面的替換詞都是由哪些單詞變來的？（10）adj.當(dāng)然地 黯然低分詞：certainly閃光高分詞：obviously明顯地；undoubtedly毫無疑問地；evidently顯然地；（11）adj.不開心的 黯然低分詞：sad閃光高分詞：discouraged氣餒的；depressed沮喪的；downhearted垂頭喪氣的；low-spirited意志消沉的；可以看出，這里列舉的

10、“大綱詞匯衍生詞”看上去都相當(dāng)“有水平”，但都是由大綱中的簡單單詞加上某些前綴、后綴變來的，可以說又好記，又好用，你學(xué)會了嗎？只要運(yùn)用以上四種方法，在平時(shí)的學(xué)習(xí)中不斷積累和使用“閃光高分詞”，一定能讓你的作文綻放出最美的光輝！二、合理運(yùn)用介詞或名詞短語、非謂語動詞代替句子，使文字清新簡練 1.介詞短語代替句子1） I was pleased to hear from you and Im writing to tell you something that has taken place in our school.（ 普通） I was pleased to hear from you an

11、d Im writing to tell you something turned out to be.（高級）2）I picked up the case. I shouted at the man loudly. But he didnt hear me and rode away.（普通）After picking up the case , I shouted at The man loudly, but he rode too fast to hear me.（高級）3）Because the weather was good, our journey was comfortable

12、. （一般）Thanks to the good weather, our journey was comfortable. （高級）4） When she heard he had died, she went pale with sorrow. （一般）At the news of his death, she went pale with sorrow. （高級） INCLUDEPICTURE 下載制作/2009年下載/ehappystudy/jpgaokao/lk/qianghua/yy/media_k/1301/kcjy/images1303/sxb130302.gif * MERG

13、EFORMAT 2. 用替代詞代替名詞、句子It showed me that the way of education in Canada is quite different from the way of education of China.（普通）It showed me that the way of education in Canada is quite different from that of China.（高級）3. 用with+ n.+ doing/done/介詞短語 The trees and grass disappeared and the forest bec

14、ame wasteland （普通）With the trees and grass disappearing .the forest became wasteland. （高級）4. 用非謂語動詞代替從句1）But later people wanted to grow crops. They began to destroy the forest （普通）But later in order to grow crops, people began to destroy the forest.（高級）2）When he arrives, please give me an e- mail.（

15、普通）On arriving/his arrival , please give me an e-mail.（高級）3）She walked out of the lab and many students followed her.（普通）Followed by many students , she walked out of the lab.（高級）4）If the weather permits, Ill come tomorrow.（普通）Ill come tomorrow, weather permitting . （高級）5）He is so kind that he can h

16、elp me.（普通）He is so kind as to help me .（高級）三、改變傳統(tǒng)句型，促成靈活表達(dá)1.改變句子開頭We can learn much by being brought into contact with other minds. （普通）By being brought into contact with other minds we can learn much.（高級）2.改變時(shí)態(tài) The bell is ringing now. （一般） There goes the bell! （高級）3.改變語態(tài)People suggest that the co

17、nference be put off. （一般）It is suggested that the conference be put off. （高級）4.靈活使用強(qiáng)調(diào)句、被動句、倒裝句、感嘆句、特殊句型使用倒裝句By doing this, we will become a harmonious society. （普通）Only in this way can we become a harmonious society . （高級）使用強(qiáng)調(diào)句1）What he said encouraged us.（普通）It was what he said that encouraged us.（

18、高級）2）Regular radio broadcasts began in 1920. （一般） It was not until 1920 that regular radio broadcasts began. （高級） 5.靈活使用各種主從復(fù)合句使用主語從句 1）I happened to have met him. （一般）It happened that I had met him. （高級）2）To his surprise, the little girl knows so many things.（普通）What surprises him is that the littl

19、e girl knows so many things.（高級）使用定語從句1）The girl is spoken highly of. Her composition was well written. （一般）The girl whose composition was well written is spoken highly of. （高級）2）So when wind blows, the sand on the ground flies into the air. It is harmful to the environment and our health. （ 普通）So w

20、hen wind blows, the sand on the ground flies into the air, which is harmful to the environment and our health. （高級）3）There was a thick forest on the hill. A great diversity of animals and birds live there. （普通）There was a thick forest on the hill, where a great diversity of animals and birds live.（高

21、級）使用狀語從句1）I wont believe what he says. （一般）No matter what he says , I wont believe. （高級）2） I picked up the case. I shouted at the man loudly. But he didnt hear me and rode away.（普通） Loudly as I shouted at him after picking it up, the man was riding so far away that he couldnt hear me. （高級）使用并列句 1） I

22、f you go through the gate, youll find the entrance to Bear Country. （一般）Go through the gate , and youll find the entrance to Bear Country. （高級）2） I was walking aimlessly through the street. At that time, I saw a fruit shop. （普通）I was walking aimlessly through the street when I saw a fruit shop.（高級）使

23、用虛擬語氣The ship didnt sink with all on board because there were the efforts of the captain. （一般）But for the efforts of the captain, the ship would have sunk with all on board. （高級）綜合使用Suddenly, I had an idea. I stopped a taxi to catch up with the man. I caught up with him at last.（普通） I was wondering

24、what I should do when an idea suddenly struck me. I stopped a taxi as quickly as I could so as to catch up with the man.（高級）四、有效使用語句間的連接成分，使文章結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，思路清晰，過渡自然Some students think that our school should play music during break time.Music can produce a lively and happy atmosphere. Music provides us with

25、relaxation, which reduces the tiredness. And listening to music also makes us feel comfortable.（ 普通）Some students think that our school should play music during break time. To begin with , music can produce a lively and happy atmosphere. Furthermore , music provides us with relaxation, which reduces

26、 the tiredness. Last but not the least, listening to music also makes us feel comfortable.（高級）五、使用不同結(jié)構(gòu)、不同長度的句子，盡量使句型多樣化，避免單調(diào)乏味的表達(dá)方式There is a new classroom building on one side of the road. There used to be a layground on the other side. But there is a library now. There are all kinds of books, news

27、papers and magazines in the library. There is a new playground in the front of the school. There are a lot of trees in and around our school. （普通）On one side of the road there is a new classroom building. On the other side, where the playground used to be , now stands another new building- our libra

28、ry, in which you can find all kinds of books, newspapers and magazines. The playground is now in the front of the school. We have also have planted a lot of trees in and around the school. （高級）高考寫作中常用的過渡性詞語 1. 表并列補(bǔ)充 what is more, besides, also, as well, moreover, furthermore, in addition, whats wors

29、e, worse still2.表轉(zhuǎn)折 、對比 but, however, yet, instead, on the other hand, on the contrary, although, different from, in contrast to, compared with, despite, in spite of, unlike, years agotoday, the former the latter, thennow, oncenow, on one handon the other hand, someothers.3. 表因果 since, as, because （

30、of）, for, so, thus, therefore, as a result （of）, as a consequence , consequently ， so that4.表?xiàng)l件 if, on condition （that）, as long as, unless, or else5.表順序 above all, first of all, firstly, first, second（ly）, the next, finally, in the end, at last6.表時(shí)間 when, after, before, until, as soon as, later, af

31、terwards, soon, lately, recently, since, from then on, in the meantime, then, suddenly, at the same time, next, early this morning/year/century, now, after, presently, later, somewhat later, finally, at last, all of a sudden7.表同位 in other words, that is to say, that is, namely, to put it another way

32、8.表相似或相同 in the same way, like, similarly,9.表目的 for/with this purpose, for the sake of, in order to, so as to, so that, in order that 10.表過渡 as for, as to, speaking of, considering（鑒于）, with regard to（關(guān)于）, considering（關(guān)于）11.表觀點(diǎn)I think/believe, as far as I know, personally, in ones view, in ones opin

33、ion,12.表進(jìn)行舉例說明for instance, for example, like, such as, take for example,13.表陳述事實(shí)in fact, actually, as a matter of fact, to tell you the truth14.表總結(jié)on the whole, in short, all in all, in a word, in conclusion, in summary, to sum up, all things considered隨堂演練 假如你叫李華，你的家鄉(xiāng)原來有座茂密的森林，但現(xiàn)在已變成了荒漠。請根據(jù)下面幾幅圖的內(nèi)

34、容，向一家英文報(bào)社寫一篇“Protecting The Forest”的短文。注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右；2. 開頭已為你寫好 INCLUDEPICTURE 下載制作/2009年下載/ehappystudy/jpgaokao/lk/qianghua/yy/media_k/1301/kcjy/images1304/jy1304-01.gif * MERGEFORMAT Protecting The ForestMy hometown used to be a beautiful place. 內(nèi)容要點(diǎn):1、家鄉(xiāng)原來青山綠水，很美。 2、人們毀林種莊稼，過度放牧，造成水土流失、土地荒漠化。3、發(fā)表

35、你的看法。分析下面學(xué)生習(xí)作，找出問題，并修改。 （1） Some years ago, my hometown used to be a beautiful place. There is a forest on the hill. Many animals and birds lived there. But later people wanted to plant crops. They began to destroy the forest. They also feeded their crows and sheep on the grass. The trees and grass

36、disappeared. And the forest became wasteland. So when wind blows, the sand on the ground flies into the air. It is harmful to be environment and our health. In our opinion, people should be punished for the bad result. We must ask the public to protect the environment. If every of us take action, we

37、 can live better.【分析】【修改】如何增加文章的亮點(diǎn)一.適當(dāng)?shù)囟嗍褂靡恍┰~組、習(xí)語或高級詞匯代替普通單詞，以增加文采，豐富文章的表現(xiàn)力1. To tell you the truth, I dont really like your new novel.（ 普通）To tell you the truth, I really _your new novel.（高級） 2. A new building is being built in my hometown. （普通）A new building_. （高級）二.合理運(yùn)用介詞或名詞短語、非謂語動詞代替句子，使文字清新簡練1.

38、介詞短語代替句子1） I was pleased to hear from you and Im writing to tell you something that has taken place in our school.（ 普通）I was pleased to hear from you and Im writing to tell you something _.（高級）2）I picked up the case. I shouted at the man loudly. But he didnt hear me and rode away. （普通）_, I shouted a

39、t the man loudly, but he rode too fast to hear me. （高級）2. 用替代詞代替名詞 It showed me that the way of education in Canada is quite different from the way of education of China.（普通）It showed me that the way of education in Canada is quite different from_ of China.（高級）3. 用with+ n.+ doing/done/介詞短語 The trees

40、 and grass disappeared and the forest became wasteland （普通） _, the forest became wasteland. （高級）4. 用非謂語動詞代替從句1） But later people wanted to grow crops. They began to destroy the forest （普通） But later_, people began to destroy the forest.（高級）2）When he arrives, please give me an e- mail.（普通） On_, pleas

41、e give me an e-mail.（高級）3）She walked out of the lab and many students followed her.（普通） _, she walked out of the lab.（高級）4） If the weather permits, Ill come tomorrow.（普通） Ill come tomorrow, _. （高級）5）He is so kind that he can help me.（普通） He is so kind_.（高級）三.改變傳統(tǒng)句型，促成靈活表達(dá)1.改變句子開頭 We can learn much b

42、y being brought into contact with other minds. （普通）_ we can learn much.（高級）2.靈活使用強(qiáng)調(diào)句、被動句、倒裝句、感嘆句和it句型1） What he said encouraged us.（普通） _.（高級）2） By doing this, we will become a harmonious society. （普通） _. （高級）3）People suggest that the conference be put off.（普通） _ （高級）3.靈活使用各種主從復(fù)合句1）So when wind blow

43、s, the sand on the ground flies into the air. It is harmful to the environment and our health. （ 普通） So when wind blows, the sand on the ground flies into the air, _. （高級）2）There was a thick forest on the hill. A great diversity of animals and birds live there. （普通） There was a thick forest on the h

44、ill, _. （高級）3）I was walking aimlessly through the street. At that time, I saw a fruit shop. （普通） I was walking aimlessly through the street _（高級）4）To his surprise, the little girl knows so many things.（普通） _is that the little girl knows so many things.（高級）5） I wont believe what he says. （普通） _, I wo

45、nt believe.（高級）6） I picked up the case. I shouted at the man loudly. But he didnt hear me and rode away. （普通） I shouted at him picking it up, the man was riding so far away . （高級）7）Suddenly, I had an idea. I stopped a taxi to catch up with the man. I caught up with him at last. （普通） I was wondering

46、what I should do . I stopped a taxi so as to catch up with the man.（高級）四.有效使用語句間的連接成分，使文章結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，思路清晰，過渡自然Some students think that our school should play music during break time. Music can produce a lively and happy atmosphere. Music provides us with relaxation, which reduces the tiredness. And listeni

47、ng to music also makes us feel comfortable.（ 普通）Some students think that our school should play music during break time. _, music can produce a lively and happy atmosphere. Furthermore, music provides us with relaxation, which reduces the tiredness._, listening to music also makes us feel comfortabl

48、e. （高級）五.使用不同結(jié)構(gòu)、不同長度的句子，盡量使句型多樣化，避免單調(diào)乏味的表達(dá)方式There is a new classroom building on one side of the road. There used to be a playground on the other side. But there is a library now. There are all kinds of books, newspapers and magazines in the library. There is a new playground in the front of the sch

49、ool. There are a lot of trees in and around our school. （普通）On one side of the road there is a new classroom building. On the other side, _, now stands another new building- our library, _all kinds of books, newspapers and magazines. The playground is now in the front of the school. _a lot of trees

50、in and around the school. （高級）（1）Some years ago, my hometown used to be a beautiful place. There is a forest on the hill. Many animals and birds lived there. But later people wanted to plant crops. They began to destroy the forest. They also feeded their crows and sheep on the grass. The trees and g

51、rass disappeared. And the forest became wasteland. So when wind blows, the sand on the ground flies into the air. It is harmful to be environment and our health. In our opinion, people should be punished for the bad result. We must ask the public to protect the environment. If every of us take actio

52、n, we can live better.【分析】 該篇文章段落清晰,但準(zhǔn)確性較差，主要體現(xiàn)在語法錯誤較多，另外，也缺乏生動性，讀起來毫無生氣。【修改1】 Some years ago, my hometown used to be a beautiful place. There is （was） a forest on the hill. Many （ A variety of/ A great diversity of ） animals and birds lived there. But later people wanted to plant （grow） crops. They

53、 began to destroy the forest. They also feeded （ fed ） their crows （ cattle ） and sheep on the grass. The trees and grass disappeared （gradually）. And theforest became wasteland. So when wind blows, the sand on the ground flies into the air. It is harmful to be environment and our health. In our opi

54、nion, people should be punished for the bad result. We must ask （call on/ appeal to ）the public to protect the environment. If every of （ each of/every one of ）us take （takes） action, we can live better.（ improve our living conditions and live in harmony with society）【分析】該篇語句通順，無語法錯誤,使用了個別短語（A variety of/ a great diversity of, call on/ appeal to 和修飾語（gradually），使文章略顯生動，但文章連貫性、緊湊性較差，缺乏恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞.【修改2】 My hometown used to be a beautiful place. Green trees and grass could be seen all over the hills. Some years later/But later, peop