虛擬語氣在寫作中的提分技巧作文練習(xí)評(píng)講課件

1、欣賞下列兩個(gè)語段，并指出它們的技巧1. Brief as the passage is, it still arouses my endless imagination to the past time. Were I in the past, I would like that I stayed in Britain in the 19th century, where and when the Revolution of Industry was flourishing. With the inspiring atmosphere of the creative times, I woul

2、d try my utmost to do my favorite scientific experiment, since I have great interest in science. Whats more, the scientific lovers would be invited to join my little club to invent some brand-new inventions and create new designs of our daily lifes products, cooperating to put the theory we learned

3、from books to our practical life. In this way I could get inspiration of wisdom and resourcefulness to bring convenience and improvements to our life. 第1頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。2. Should I be given the opportunities to travel to the past, I would like to go back to Qing Dynasty of early 20th century when China was i

4、n a disaster. Were I back in the late Qing Dynasty, I would make every endeavor to rescue China from the foreign invaders and prevent it from being bullied without resistance. Firstly, I would teach my modern theory and knowledge to the governors, instructing them to fight against the enemies and co

5、nstruct powerful armies. Secondly, all the citizens would be called on to unite together and resist other countries invasion bravely. Whats more, joining some anti-invaders parties would also be my choice. 第2頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。亮點(diǎn)句型寫作指導(dǎo)除了虛擬語氣外，有許多亮點(diǎn)句型可以應(yīng)用到寫作中，增分添彩。第3頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。比喻A is to B what C is to D. Like the su

6、nshine , kindness can help those in trouble.Kindness is like the lighthouse, which can direct the way for those who are in dim situation.第4頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。排比If I could go back to the past and do the above mentioned things, the last thing my grandpa remembered would not be the indifference and the back of his

7、 beloved grandson. If I could travel back through time, the last memory between him and me would not be his closed eyes and the dead look of half-unconscious suffering. Then now, I would not have to live with this unbearable regret and pain for the rest of my life. If only I could! 第5頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。倒裝（贏在寫作

8、P37-38）Simple as the story is , Here goes the saying that _.Only when _ can we _.Only in this way, can weOnly by doing -, can we_.Only after doing sth, can we On the west of the school lies a pond, where many fish are swimming.Under no circumstance should we -類似的用法：Never/ By no means / on no account

9、 / in no way / at no time should I . Hardly/scarcely had I got into the room when it began to rain.( no sooner， than)第6頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。 Had it not been for her sticking to being on time, she wouldnt have earned herself a well-paid job and more importantly built up an image of reliability and integrity. 倒裝 Sh

10、ould I be given the opportunities to travel to the past, I would like to go back to Qing Dynasty of early 20th century when China was in a disaster. Were I back in the late Qing Dynasty, I would make every endeavor to rescue China from the foreign invaders and prevent it from being bullied without r

11、esistance. 第7頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。亮點(diǎn)寫作的注意事項(xiàng)1. 過多的亮點(diǎn)，顯得堆砌對(duì)策：亮點(diǎn)分布，盡量首句2.亮點(diǎn)單一，例如全段排比或比喻對(duì)策：最好總排比-總的結(jié)構(gòu)。照顧段落的完整性。3.華而不實(shí)，不重視內(nèi)容，徒有框架沒有內(nèi)容對(duì)策：先想內(nèi)容，再想修辭手法4. 過多注重運(yùn)用亮點(diǎn)，沒有注意謀篇，顧此失彼對(duì)策：謀好篇，定好每點(diǎn)行數(shù)，才能下筆第8頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。亮點(diǎn)句型寫作訓(xùn)練練習(xí)：1.說明挫折的意義2.你怎樣看待老師對(duì)學(xué)生的影響。3.說說你對(duì)母愛的理解4.談?wù)剾Q心對(duì)人的影響第9頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。使用虛擬語氣寫作的注意事項(xiàng)：1.確定到底要不要“虛”？2.確定到底使用哪個(gè)時(shí)態(tài)的“虛”？3.所謂“一虛到底”，

12、其實(shí)是指在該假設(shè)情境中的虛擬的時(shí)態(tài)的一致性。而非一定是通段都使用虛擬！一切要看情況進(jìn)行選用。第10頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。說說挫折的意義1. Hard and painful as frustration is, it is of significance in our life. As the old saying goes, “storm makes trees take deeper roots”, without frustration, never could we grow up as a strong-willed person. Were we surrounded by over-pr

13、aise and immersed in the pride and happiness, frustration would be a timely alarm, urging us not to stop at the so-called peak and continue your pace of pursuit. Were we confronted with obstacles, frustration could be a philosophers stone（魔法石）, with which we could transform the temporary setbacks to

14、 great opportunities to become strongerIn a word, life is not only about how to live through the storm but also how to dance in the rain.第11頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。說說挫折的意義2. Never can we emphasize the significance of setback too much. Without setback, our life would be a rose lacking fragrance. Without setback, our

15、life would be a voyage lacking direction. It is no exaggeration to say that frustration has sown the seed of maturity and self-development in my inner heart and has made it possible for me to achieve great success.第12頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。老師對(duì)學(xué)生的影響 1. Suppose that teachers were absent in our life, students life wou

16、ld be a picture with intense darkness. Without teachers, the laborious engineers of our soul, students personalities and characters would not be shaped. Without teachers, the ladder with selfless devotion, our heart would not be lifted up by encouragement and grow mature. Without teachers, the spark

17、ling lighthouse in the ocean of knowledge, never could teenagers find access to the successful life in the future. 第13頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。老師對(duì)學(xué)生的影響2. Without the patient and careful teachers, never could students grow from a childish and dependent child into a mature and independent adult. Without the selfless an

18、d affectionate preaching of teachers, never could students step onto a path with a bright and promising future. Without the knowledgeable teachers, never would students master the necessary knowledge and devote them to the construction of a more harmonious society and country.第14頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。母愛的理解1. Witho

19、ut maternal affection, we would change from fragrant flowers into weeds abandoned by others without a shelter and care. Without this ever-lasting emotion, never would we live as full and rich a life as other children surrounded by merriment and happiness. 第15頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。母愛的理解2. Maternal love is like a ci

20、rcle. It has no beginning and no ending. But for motherhood, we would be the little strayed lambs who step on the mistaken track. But for motherhood, never can we be enveloped in warmth and merriment by a patch of sunlight. But for motherhood, we could be overwhelmed by endless darkness and the worl

21、d would fade from colorful and wonderful to dim and cold.第16頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。決心的影響1. Determination is the fuel of ships, without which, never could we arrive at the shore of success. Determination is the walking stick of the climbers, without which, never could we reach the peak of life. Determination is the

22、very condition, without which, never could we get rid of the dark depth of depression. 第17頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。決心的影響2. Without the firm determination, never could individuals grow into strong trees struggling in the wind and rain. Without the steadfast mind, never could teams unite together to create miracle. Wit

23、hout the unswerving resolution, never could countries unite and fight for the flourishing and bright future as well as a harmonious world. 第18頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。第19頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。說說挫折的意義1. Hard and painful as frustration is,（倒裝） it is of significance in our life. As the old saying goes, “storm makes trees take deeper r

24、oots”,（名言） without frustration, never could we grow up as a strong-willed person. （虛擬）Were we surrounded by over-praise and immersed in the pride and happiness, frustration would be a timely alarm, urging us not to stop at the so-called peak and continue your pace of pursuit. Were we confronted with

25、 obstacles, frustration could be a philosophers stone（魔法石）, with which we could transform the temporary setbacks to great opportunities to become stronger.(虛擬+排比+非限制性定從) In a word, life is not only about how to live through the storm but also how to dance in the rain.(總結(jié)部分可以用現(xiàn)在時(shí))第20頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。說說挫折的意義2.

26、Never can we emphasize the significance of setback too much. (倒裝) Without setback, our life would be a rose lacking fragrance. Without setback, our life would be a voyage lacking direction. It is no exaggeration to say that frustration has sown the seed of maturity and self-development in my inner h

27、eart and has made it possible for me to achieve great success.（虛擬反說+比喻+排比）第21頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。老師對(duì)學(xué)生的影響 1. Suppose that teachers were absent in our life, students life would be a picture with intense darkness. Without teachers, the laborious engineers of our soul, students personalities and characters would no

28、t be shaped. Without teachers, the ladder with selfless devotion, our heart would not be lifted up by encouragement and grow mature. Without teachers, the sparkling lighthouse in the ocean of knowledge, never could teenagers find access to the successful life in the future.（虛擬反說+排比） 第22頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。老師對(duì)學(xué)生的

29、影響2. Without the patient and careful teachers, never could students grow from a childish and dependent child into a mature and independent adult. Without the selfless and affectionate preaching of teachers, never could students step onto a path with a bright and promising future. Without the knowled

30、geable teachers, never would students master the necessary knowledge and devote them to the construction of a more harmonious society and country.（虛擬反說+排比）第23頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。母愛的理解1. Without maternal affection, we would change from fragrant flowers into weeds abandoned by others without a shelter and care. Wi

31、thout this ever-lasting emotion, never would we live as full and rich a life as other children surrounded by merriment and happiness. （虛擬反說+排比）第24頁(yè)，共28頁(yè)。母愛的理解2. Maternal love is like a circle. It has no beginning and no ending. （比喻，多一句進(jìn)行補(bǔ)充說明，使得比喻更具體形象）But for motherhood, we would be the little strayed lambs who step on the