續(xù)寫 阿香與婆婆 201712 maggie

ContinuationWriting（讀后續(xù)寫）Maggie

讀后續(xù)寫:提供一篇350詞以內(nèi)的材料，要求考生依據(jù)材料內(nèi)容、所給段落開頭語及所標(biāo)關(guān)鍵詞續(xù)寫一篇150詞左右的短文。（滿分25分）新高考考試說明評分原則本題總分為25分，分5個(gè)檔次給分第五檔

(21-25)與所給短文融洽度高，與所提供各段落開頭語銜接合理。

內(nèi)容豐富，應(yīng)用了5個(gè)以上短文中標(biāo)出的關(guān)鍵詞語。

所使用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯豐富、準(zhǔn)確，可能有些錯(cuò)誤，但完全不影響意義表達(dá)。有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。

高融洽度

tone(情節(jié)基調(diào))

languagecharacteristics(語言特征)

content(內(nèi)容:plotdevelopment--“W&H”)

Step1.Readforbasicinformation

Longlongago,inChina,agirlnamedAXiang

gotmarriedandwenttolivewithherhusbandandmother-in-law(婆婆).Afterashorttime,AXiangfoundthatshecouldn’tgetalongwith

hermother-inlawatall.Theircharacterandlifestylewerecompletelydifferent.Ononehand,AXiangwasoftenangeredbyhermother-in-law.Ontheotherhand,hermother-in-lawfrequentlyblamedher.Dayafterday,theykeptarguingandfighting.AXiang’shusband

gotmoreandmoreunhappy,buthadnothingtodoaboutit.

Finally,AXiangcouldn’tstandhermother-in–lawanddecidedtodosomethingaboutit.Shepaidavisittoherfather’sgoodfriend,MrYan,adoctor.Shetoldhimthesituationatherhome.Sheaskedhimifhecouldgivehersomepoisonsothatshecouldsolvetheproblemonceandforall.MrYanthoughtforamomentandfinallysaid,”hXiang,I’dliketohelpyou,butyoumustobeywhatItellyou.’AXiangnoddedherhead.MrYanwentintohisbackroomandcamebackinseveralminuteswithapackageofherbsinhishands..Step1.ReadforbasicinformationHesaidtoAXiang,“wecan’tuseaquick–actingpoisontokillyourmother-in-law.Thatwillbeverydangerousforus.Soherearesomeherbsthatwillincreasepoisoninherbodylittlebylittle.Everydayyoupreparesomedeliciousmealsandputafewherbsinherbowl.Tomakesurethatnobodysuspectsyouwhenshedies,youmustbeasfriendlytoheraspossible.Don’targuewithherandobey

everywishofher

.”Step1.ReadforbasicinformationDayafterday,AXiangpreparedthemealcarefullyandserveditwiththeherbstohermother-in-law.Toavoideveryone’ssuspicion,shepretendedtobegood

tohermother-in-law.Shedidn’thaveanyargumentinthesixmonthswithhermother-in-law.Sheobeyedeverywishofhermother–in–lawandalwayswasaspatientandkind

aspossible.Step1.Readforbasicinformation

Step1.ReadforbasicinformationAXiang/AXiang’shusband/mother-in-law/MrYancontent(內(nèi)容:plotdevelopment---“W&H”)

Howwillthestorydevelop?Who:What:How: AXiangcouldn’tgetalongwithhermother-in-law.SosheaskedMrYantogivehersomepoisontokillhermother–in-law.Step2.Readfor

plotdevelopmentclues

(情節(jié)發(fā)展線索)Findoutthekeyclues(線索)basedonthebeginnings:Para1:

AXiangfoundthatshecouldn’tgetalongwith

hermother-in-lawatall.hishusbandwasunhappy..Para2:

…shepaidavisitto…….MrYan,adoctor…withapackageofherbspkStep3.Predictpossible

plotdevelopmentInagrouppredicthowthestorywilldevelop:poisonnotpoison？

Languagecharacteristics:Tipsfordrafting

acontinuation(起草續(xù)篇)

simple(簡單)vivid(生動(dòng))Polishandcohere(潤色銜接):discoursemarks(銜接語)Content:

includetheunderlinedwords(≥6)Para.1:

Hermother–in–law‘sattitudetowardsAXiangchanged,too.Para.2:

Oneday,AXiangwenttoseeMrYanandaskedhimforhelpagain. Step4.Draftacontinuation(起草續(xù)篇)FocusontheconnectionofthetwogivensentencesPara.1:

Hermother–in–law‘sattitudetowardsAXiangchanged,too.Para.2:

Oneday,AXiangwenttoseeMrYanandaskedhimforhelpagain. SodoesAXiangchangedhermindtokillhermother-in-law?FocusontheconnectionInPara2,whydidAXiangaskMrYanhelpagain?Howdoeshermother-in-lawtreatAXiangaftershechangeherattitude?DidMrYanhelpAXiang?Paragraph1:Hermother–in–law‘sattitudetowardsAXiangchanged,too..Q1:Howdoeshermother–in-lawchangedherattitudetowardsAXiang?happyQ2:HowwouldAXiang’shusbandfeel?muchkinderandpatient/good/herowndaughterFocusonpara1Paragraph1:Hermother–in–law‘sattitudetowardsAXiangchanged,too.

Theunderlinedkeywords:AXiangAXiang’shusbandmotherinlawgetalongwithMrYanherbspoisonmealseverywishofhergoodpatientandkindaddsomedetailsUseadvancedwords,phrases&sentencesUsetransitionalwords（過渡語）Paragraph2:Oneday,AXiangwenttoseeMrYanandaskedhimforhelpagain. Q1:whydidAXiangaskedMrYanforhelpaggian?ThereisnopoisonatallQ2:HowdidMrYanhelpAXiang?tostoppoisoninghermother-in-lawQ3:whatcanwelearnfromit?LoveFocusonpara2Paragraph2:Theunderlinedkeywords:AXiangAXiang’shusbandmotherinlawgetalongwithMrYanherbspoisonmealseverywishofhergoodpatientandkindaddsomedetailsUseadvancedwords,phrases&sentencesUsetransitionalwords（過渡語）我給你的草藥不是毒藥。他們對你婆婆的身體沒有壞處。TheherbsIgaveyouwerenotpoison.Theydidnoharmtoyourmother-in-law‘shealthatall.SharingyourversionStep