2022年6月高考英語浙江卷讀后續(xù)寫試題解析及范文賞析（身殘志堅的男孩）

讀后續(xù)寫真題2022年6月新高考卷:身殘志堅的男孩1試題再現(xiàn)2試題分析3寫作思路4范文賞析目錄CONTENTS2022試題再現(xiàn)歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析01真題再現(xiàn)第二節(jié)(滿分25分)

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路線)throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.

Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!

Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,”heexplaineduncomfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊惱).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.

Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.

Para.1Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.

Para.2IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.2022試題分析歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析02SettingTime----thedayofthebigcross-countryrunPlace----theracespot(aplacewiththick...)Characters:I----aspecialeducationteacherofDavid’sschoolDavid----aten-year-oldboywithabraindisease;unabletowalkorrunlikeotherkids;rockfromsidetosidewhilewalking讀故事Plot&EmotionsThoughunabletowalkorrunlikeotherkids,Davidwastreatedequallyasaregularkidandusuallylivedahappylifeintheschool.Hedecidedtotakepartinthecross-countryrunandpracticedveryhard,nevermissingasinglepractice,thoughhewasalwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheothers.Hewasaskedtodecidebyhimselfwhethertorunornotontherundaybecausethecoachwasafraidhewaslaughedatbythekidsfromotherschools.

Hewasstandingbyhimselfoffthesidebyafencebuthisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsent.HappyDeterminedHesitantDepressed/Lostanddown讀故事Plot&EmotionsAsaspecialeducationteacher,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.IfoundDavidstandingalonebyafence,notwarmingupandwalkingtheroutelikeotherrunnersbeforetherace.Iaskedhiscoachandlearnedthereason.

AftermakingsureDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme.AdmiredSurprisedFrustratedDetemined讀故事原文中哪些句子可用作原文線索？特定的人物在特定的時間和地點做出特定的事情，說特定的話語，有特定的情感，這些特定的因素是有內(nèi)在聯(lián)系的，即有它特定的邏輯關(guān)系。所以在續(xù)故事的細節(jié)時，細節(jié)必須合乎原文中的時間地點等背景信息所設(shè)定的邏輯；也要合乎主要人物的身份邏輯；這也是讀后續(xù)寫內(nèi)容上的協(xié)同發(fā)展。此文中圍繞David是否參加這次越野賽的關(guān)鍵是：他特殊的走路和跑步的姿勢可能會引起不熟悉他的人的嘲笑，會傷害到他，所以教練讓他自己決定。而他平時的慣常做法就是這里的伏筆，可作為原文線索在續(xù)寫中復(fù)現(xiàn)。“我”作為學(xué)校的一個特殊教育老師，又對他的困境和平常的表現(xiàn)很熟悉，還對他的身殘志堅倍感驕傲，所以在比賽中前夕，我才會很關(guān)注他，并能成功鼓勵他勇敢面對挑戰(zhàn)，超越自我。2022寫作思路歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析03兩種構(gòu)思方法“四到一行”“線索呼應(yīng)”看聽想說做找出線索，前后呼應(yīng)“兩法六句”第一步依據(jù)首句，構(gòu)思框架兩段首句定一框，二框二首正能量。(1)讀懂兩段首句第一段首句后的銜接句、第一段尾句、第二段首句后的銜接句。即第二段的尾句——能體現(xiàn)故事圓滿結(jié)局的句子或故事給我們啟示的句子。(2)寫好三個銜接句(3)寫好一個升華句動作描寫增加細節(jié)所見所聞、所說所思所做環(huán)境描寫人物描寫語言描寫心理活動描寫第二步增加細節(jié)，展開續(xù)寫續(xù)故事ThemeConflicts1.最終David參加比賽了嗎？是什么讓他改變了主意？2.比賽過程中，其他學(xué)校的孩子嘲笑David了嗎？為什么有或沒有嘲笑他？讀后續(xù)寫一般都用正能量結(jié)尾。所以其他學(xué)校的孩子們應(yīng)該沒有嘲笑David，反而會很敬佩他，會為他的身殘志堅和不畏困難堅持到最后的精神而鼓掌。-----所以根據(jù)事情的發(fā)展順序和所給的首句，Conflict1就是第一段要解決的內(nèi)容，第二段就解決Conflict2.續(xù)故事Clues----首句線索Para1:Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Para2:IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Why?Whatwashedoingthen?Howwashefeelingthen?WhatdidIdecidetodo?WhatandhowdidIsaytohimthen,makinghimdeterminedtorun?----ImanagedtopersuadeDavidtojoinintherace.----ThoughDavidfinishedtherunlongaftertheotherchildren,hewasadmiredandrespectedbyotherkids.Howdidheperformintherace?WhatdidIfeelwhenseeinghimperformthatway?Whatwastheotherkids’responsetohisperformance?續(xù)故事Clues----原文線索1.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.2.Aftermakingsure...,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.3.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.4.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.5....,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDAvidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.比賽結(jié)束時，受到在場師生的鼓勵和欽佩甚至尊敬，David很可能有這個表情。

可以用來描述David賽跑時的樣子----動作描述

兩個always的部分可以用來描述David在比賽時的結(jié)果：他不可能跑贏別人，但仍堅持跑完全程。這可能是有些同學(xué)容易忽視的地方。此處是我能夠成功鼓勵David參加越野賽跑的基礎(chǔ)。所以續(xù)寫第一段時可以參照此句。這是David最令人敬佩的品質(zhì)，也應(yīng)該是“我”說服他參賽的關(guān)鍵點。2022范文賞析歷年高考英語讀后續(xù)寫真題分析04Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.Seeinghisfacefilledwithanxiety,Ifeltsad,decidingtotalksomethingwithhim.TurningtoDavid,Ismiled,“David,Look,whatawonderfulevent!”“Yeah!”Davidsmiledweakly,bowinghishead.Pattingonhisshoulder,Isaidinasoftvoice,“Iheardyouhadworkedsohardforthisevent.HowIadmireyourstrongdetermination.Whynotgiveitatry?”“Teacher,Iamafraidkidsfromotherschoolswilllaughatme.Ithinkwhatthecoachsaidisright.”murmuredDavid,withglumlooksonhisface.“ButDavid,whatcountsmostistoparticipatetothebestofyourabilityinwhateverwe’redoing.Doyouagree?”Afteratemporaryhesitation,Davidnoddedinagreement,finallydecidingtojoininthecross-countryteam.

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Withablastofthegun,Davidtriedhisbesttoshootfromthestartline,buthefailed.Painfulandabitembarrassedashewas,hestilldraggedhisfeettokeepmovingforward.Thesunwasbeatingdown,thehotweathersuffocating.Afterwhatseemedyears,David,rockinghissmallbodylikeacatonahotbrick,eventuallyfinishedhisrunasthelastone.Whenapproachingthefinishline,heburstintoabigtoothysmileandwavedtomewithexcitement,crying“Imadeit!Imadeit!”Allthekidsincludingthosefromotherschoolserupted