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讀后續(xù)寫EnglishContinuationWriting2021年新高考考情分析能基本讀懂故事，對原文本分析不夠具體到位。寫作情節(jié)偏離，邏輯混亂，銜接不恰當(dāng)。寫出的文章句式簡單、描寫生硬。教學(xué)目標(biāo)通過閱讀圈，引導(dǎo)學(xué)生從主題語境，篇章結(jié)構(gòu)，故事情節(jié)詞匯處理等多角度去深度解析文本，幫助學(xué)生理順情節(jié)發(fā)展，抓住人物核心性格，確保學(xué)生續(xù)寫情節(jié)符合邏輯。通過主述位推進(jìn)幫助學(xué)生搭建文章邏輯結(jié)構(gòu)，解決學(xué)生無話可寫的問題。通過提供語料，作文互批表，明確批改潤色要求，反復(fù)練習(xí)，指導(dǎo)學(xué)生寫出更自然合理、銜接得當(dāng)?shù)淖魑?。文本分析part1Brainstorm:Whatimpressyoumostinthevideo?

ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo. 01AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISEThebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.02AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISENext,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.02AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISEThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.03AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISEJennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.03AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISE閱讀小組長DiscussionLeader組織小組討論，并針對閱讀內(nèi)容提問。篇章大師PassagePerson講解閱讀內(nèi)容中有意思、重要或較難的段落。生活實(shí)際聯(lián)結(jié)者Connector將閱讀內(nèi)容與生活實(shí)際相聯(lián)系，分享經(jīng)驗(yàn)。單詞大師WordMaster講解閱讀內(nèi)容中的生詞、重點(diǎn)單詞及詞組。篇章概括者Summarizer用自己的話概括篇章的主要內(nèi)容。文化采集者CultureCollector尋找閱讀內(nèi)容中與自己國家文化相同或不同之處。ReadingCirclesv.（在水或泥里）下沉；

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碗槽sink單詞大師WordMaster單詞大師WordMasterWooddoesnotsinkinthewater.木頭不會沉沒在水里。Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothe

sink.珍娜把燒焦的面包扔進(jìn)水槽。v.射擊，射中；拍攝n.（使朝某方向）沖，奔，

撲，射，飛馳shoot單詞大師WordMaster單詞大師WordMasterThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepot.

杰夫注意到蒸氣從鍋里噴出來。He’dlovetoshoothisfilminCuba.他很樂意在古巴拍攝他的電影。單詞大師WordMasterbefilledwithexcitementgodownthestairsputoutthefire

充滿興奮下樓

滅火；把火撲滅記敘文ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.篇章大師PassagePerson文體一般過去時(shí)第三人稱時(shí)態(tài)人稱AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISE篇章大師PassagePersonThebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture...rang,wentdownthestairsquietly,

o...,broke,addin,found...動作描寫:

篇章大師PassagePersontomakebreakfastforMotheronMother’sDaylovebetweenfamiliesThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.明線:

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篇章大師PassagePersontomakebreakfastforMotheronMother’sDayThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.事件：親情，母愛人與社會閱讀小組長（DiscussionLeader)人物分析情節(jié)發(fā)展主題語境主旨Rereadthestoryandfigureouttheplot.ThetwinsmadebreakfastformomonMother’sDay.(thetwins)excitedThetwinsgotupearlytomakebreakfast.Theporriageboiledover;thebreadturnedblack(thetwins)panickedandworriedDidFathercometohelp?(thetwins)happy?Excited?本文情節(jié)線setting環(huán)境risingaction發(fā)展fallingaction(遭遇挫折）climax高潮人物時(shí)間地點(diǎn)母親節(jié)到了，雙胞胎悄悄起床為母親做早餐。火太大，吐司烤糊了。粥溢出來了、手燙了、吐司再次烤糊了。本文情感線Resolution解決Ending尾聲Thetwinswerefilledwithexcitement...Jennapanicked.Jeffstayedcalm...

(worried)續(xù)寫部分續(xù)寫部分climax高潮beginiing開端ThetwinsThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.excitedThetwinsHowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.deeploveforMotherconsiderate行為ThetwinsThepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.considerateThetwinsJeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.cooperative行為JennaThistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.helpfulpersistent行為JeffNext,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.calmsensitivehelpful行為生活實(shí)際聯(lián)結(jié)者ConnectorDoyouwanttoprepareagiftforyourmomonthenextMother’sDay?Whatwillyouchoose?篇章概括者Summarizer母親節(jié)要到了，雙胞胎計(jì)劃給母親一個驚喜，做一頓早餐給母親。但做飯時(shí)，烤焦了吐司，粥溢出來了，Jeff手也燙了，把廚房弄得一團(tuán)糟...Mother’sDaywascoming.ThetwinsplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridgeforMotherasasuprise.However,thebreadturnedblack.Theporridgeboiledover.ThehotburnerburnedJeff’shand...寫作構(gòu)架part2平行性延續(xù)性三種敘述模式新高考2021年6月Paragraph2Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Paragraph1Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.01feltunhappyatfirst,thenfeltmoved02helpedthetwinsmakebreakfast03madebreakfastsuccessfullyParagraph1Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.PlotDesignParagraph1Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Thefatherfeltunhappyandaskedthem:“Whathappened?”Thetwinssaidthewholestorytofather.Fatherhuggedthemtightlyandsaid:“Let’smakebreakfasttogether!”Thetwinsfeltveryexcited.Thistime,thetwinsmadeFrenchtoastandchickenporridgequicklyandsafelyundertheirfather’sguidance.Sincethebreakfastwasready,thetwinsdecidedtoletmotherenjoythedeliciousfoodatonce.交叉敘述010203040506Thefatherfeltunhappyandaskedthem:“Whathappened?”Thetwinssaidthewholestorytofather.

Fatherhuggedthemtightlyandsaid:“Let’smakebreakfasttogether!”.Thetwinsfeltveryexcited.

Thistime,thetwinsmadeFrenchtoastandchickenporridgequicklyandsafelyundertheirfather’sguidance.Sincethebreakfastwasready,thetwinsdecidedtoletmotherenjoythedeliciousfoodatonce.Paragraph1Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.新高考2021年6月Paragraph2Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.01saidHappyMother’sDay02feltsurprisedandmoved03enjoyedthefoodtogetherParagraph2Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.04jumpedwithjoyPlotDesignParagraph2Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Theysaid:“HappyMother’sDay!Iloveyou,Mom!”Motherfeltveryhappyandsurprised,andshehuggedthetwinsimmediately.Thetwinswassoexcitedthattheykissedtheirmotheronthecheek.Thenmotherlookedatfatherandthetwinshappily.Fathersuggested:“Haveatry,darling!Theymadeitforyou!”Mothertastedandpraisedthetwins.Thetwinsjumpedwithjoyandafeelingoflovefilledthewholeroom.延續(xù)敘述01020304050607Thetwinswassoexcitedthattheykissedtheirmotheronthecheek.Thenmotherlookedatfatherandthetwinshappily.Mothertastedandpraisedthetwins.

Thetwinsjumpedwithjoyandafeelingoflovefilledthewholeroom.Theysaid:“HappyMother’sDay!Iloveyou,Mom!”Motherfeltveryhappyandsurprised,andshehuggedthetwinsimmediately.

Fathersuggested:“Haveatry,darling!Theymadeitforyou!”潤色批改part3詞匯潤色說

say

以口發(fā)出聲音utter大叫

yell

建議suggest回復(fù)

reply

解釋reply低語whisper補(bǔ)充add同意agree承諾promise喃喃低語mutter一般動詞細(xì)節(jié)動詞詞匯潤色看

look(匆匆)一瞥glance偷窺peek

監(jiān)視monitor瞇眼看squint觀察observe盯著看stare凝視gaze俯瞰overlook一般動詞細(xì)節(jié)動詞詞匯潤色離開、走leave,go

走出walkoutof邁出stepoutof沖出去rushout走來走去walkaround不安地走pacerestlessly一般動詞細(xì)節(jié)動詞詞匯潤色不開心/悲傷(情緒)frownwithdispleasureloseone’sspiritstearspuddingineyesseizedbyaburstofsadness情緒狀態(tài)身體表征詞匯潤色激動/興奮/喜悅/感動(情緒)awideexcitementtookholdofsb.eyestwinkledwithpleasureeyesdancedwithjoyandsweetnesstoucheddeeply/immenselytearsfillingineyes情緒狀態(tài)身體表征詞匯潤色halfsurprised,halfconcernedthetwinswereoverjoyed缺少形容豐富形容詞匯潤色beforehecouldquestionAllofasudden,thetwins’faces...ThemomentMomopenedhereyes...Inthemeanwhile,aplate...Justatthatmoment,thefathercamein...缺少銜接豐富連詞詞匯潤色withtheirheadnoddingfirmlytheyeventuallymadeitExpectantly,thepair...副詞單一狀語多樣狀語詞匯潤色withtheirheadnoddingfirmlywithtwobowlsofporridge介詞短語單一狀語多樣狀語詞匯潤色Spottingthemess...withtheirheadnoddingfirmlyGatheringthem

intoherarms...delightspreadingthroughthehouse.非謂語動詞單一狀語多樣狀語詞匯潤色

Beforehecouldquestionthekids,Jennathrew...ThemomentMomopenedhereyes,thetwinsyelled...狀語從句單一狀語多樣狀語Paragraph1Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.【1】Spottingthemess,Dadfrowned.【2】Beforehecouldquestionthekids,Jennathrewherselfathim,tearspuddinginhereyes,“Dad,wefailedtopreparethegiftforMom!”【3】Halfsurprised,halfconcerned,asenseofresponsibilityofcaringaboutthekidsdrovefathertowipeawayhertears,“Let’sdoittogether.”【4】Allofasudden,thetwins’faceslitupwiththeirheadnoddingfirmly.【5】Thenextmomentwitnessedtheireffortstomakethebreakfastandtheyeventuallymadeit.【6】“TakethesetoMom’sroom.”Daddirected.【7】Expectantly,thepairsteppedoutofthekitchen.多樣狀語非謂語：

SpottingSpottingthemess,Dadfrowned.

01Paragraph1細(xì)節(jié)動作frown與父親有關(guān)的細(xì)節(jié)動作。細(xì)節(jié)動作threwherselfathim描寫出Jenna對父親的依賴。身體表征tearspuddinginhereyes描寫出Jenna沒有順利做出早餐的傷心。多樣狀語狀語從句：Beforehe...Paragraph1Beforehecouldquestionthekids,Jennathrewherselfathim,tearspuddinginhereyes,“Dad,wefailedtopreparethegiftforMom!”02細(xì)節(jié)動作wipeaway具體動作多樣狀語形容詞：halfsurprised,halfconcernedHalfsurprised,halfconcerned,asenseofresponsibilityofcaringaboutthekidsdrovethefathertowipeawayhertears,“Let’sdoittogether.”

03Paragraph1細(xì)節(jié)動作faceslitup;headnodding具體動作身體表征happy問題解決后雙胞胎高興起來。多樣狀語副詞：firmly介詞短語：withtheirhead...

Allofasudden,thetwins’faceslitupwiththeirheadnoddingfirmly.04Paragraph1多樣狀語副詞：

eventuallyThenextmomentwitnessedtheireffortstomakethebreakfastandtheyeventuallymadeit.05Paragraph1細(xì)節(jié)動作direct體現(xiàn)了父親的指導(dǎo)為下文送飯做鋪墊?！癟akethesetoMom’sroom.”Daddirected.06Paragraph1Expectantly,thepairsteppedoutofthekitchen.07Paragraph1細(xì)節(jié)動作stepout為具體動詞描寫。多樣狀語expectantly描寫出雙胞胎期待的心情。Paragraph2Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.【1】ThemomentMomopenedhereyes,thetwinsyelled,“HappyMother’sDay!”【2】Inthemeanwhile,aplateofFrenchtoastplacedonthetablebesidethebedcaughtMom’sattention.【3】“Mom,haveatry.”Jeffsuggested.【4】Momtriedtoconcealheremotion,buttheglitteringtearsfailedher.【5】Gatheringthemintoherarms,shechoked,“Thankyou,mydarling!”【6】Justatthatmoment,fathercameinwithtwobowlsofporridge,“Nowwecansharethebreakfasttogether!”【7】Thetwinswereoverjoyed,delightspreadingthroughthehouse.細(xì)節(jié)動作openeyes

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yell多樣狀語狀語從句：Themoment...Paragraph2ThemomentMomopenedhereyes,thetwinsyelled,“HappyMother’sDay!”01Paragraph2Inthemeanwhile,aplateofFrenchtoastplacedonthetablebesidethebedcaughtMom’sattention.

02細(xì)節(jié)動作caughtmom’sattention與mother相關(guān)的具體動作多樣狀語后置定語：placedonthetablebesidethebed非謂語：placedonthetableParagraph2“Mom,haveatry.”Jeffsuggested.

03細(xì)節(jié)動作suggest具體動作，描寫出男孩的期待。Paragraph2Momtriedtoconcealheremotion,buttheglitteringtearsfailedher.

04細(xì)節(jié)動作triedtoconceal體現(xiàn)媽媽的感動。多樣狀語形容詞：glittering身體表征gather...intoarms;choke體現(xiàn)出母親內(nèi)心的觸動多樣狀語非謂語動詞：gatheringthemParagraph2Gatheringthemintoherarms,shechoked,“Thankyou,mydarling!”

05細(xì)節(jié)動作gather...intoarms;

choke具體動作多樣狀語介詞短語：withtwobowlsofporridgeParagraph2Justatthatmoment,thefathercameinwithtwobowlsofporridge,“Nowwecansharethebreakfasttogether!”06細(xì)節(jié)動作cameinwithtwobowlsofporridge父親端著粥前來，具體動作多樣狀語形容詞：overjoyed非謂語：spreadingthroughParagraph2Thetwinswereoverjoyed,delightspreadingthroughthehouse.07Spottingthemess,Dadfrowned.Beforehecouldquestionthekids,Jennathrewherselfathim,tearspuddinginhereyes,“Dad,wefailedtopreparethegiftforMom!”0102簡單句非謂語作狀語時(shí)間狀語從句非謂語作狀語Paragraph1復(fù)雜句Halfsurprised,h